Run: 2026-02-19-01KHTRK84AX8S0GDT4SDZHG2WN

Run Details

Duration:
14.5s
Cost:
$0.046380
Provider:
OpenAI

Model input

System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Mystery genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4414" name="Eva Kowalski" aliases="Eva, Evie" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Best Friend"> <eyeColor>green</eyeColor> <hair>curly red</hair> <height>5'4"</height> <age>26</age> <glasses>round glasses</glasses> <satchel>worn leather satchel full of books</satchel> <freckles>freckled complexion</freckles> <nervousHabit>tucking hair behind her left ear</nervousHabit> <description>Aurora's childhood friend and an occult researcher.</description> <backstory>Moved to London two years before Aurora and works as a research assistant at the British Museum's restricted archives. She holds a master's degree in Ancient History from Oxford.</backstory> </character> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> <item id="2004" name="Veil Compass" aliases="the Compass, shadow compass" type="Tool" origin="The Veil Market"> <casingMaterial>small brass compass</casingMaterial> <faceMarkings>face etched with protective sigils</faceMarkings> <needle>points toward the nearest supernatural rift or portal</needle> <patina>casing has a patina of verdigris</patina> <creator>crafted by a Shade artisan</creator> <description>A compass attuned to supernatural energy.</description> </item> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the mystery genre. A detective arrives at a crime scene in an unusual location. Something is wrong — the evidence doesn't add up. A colleague is present, offering a different interpretation. Through careful observation and deduction, the detective begins to see what others have missed. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The harsh fluorescent light flickered ahead, shadows dancing eerily along the concrete walls. Detective Harlow Quinn crouched beside the lifeless body sprawled on the cold platform of the abandoned Tube station. Surrounding police tape fluttered silently, barely holding back curious onlookers desperate to catch a glimpse of the gruesome scene. Quinn’s sharp brown eyes scanned the area, her salt-and-pepper hair barely stirring as she moved with military precision. A worn leather watch encircled her left wrist, the only sentimental touch amid her otherwise austere appearance. Eighteen years on the force and a myriad of gruesome scenes had honed her instincts to near perfection. Footsteps echoed behind her, drawing her attention. A petite woman with curly red hair and round glasses approached, her freckled face nervous as she clutched a worn leather satchel to her side. Eva Kowalski, an occult researcher and old friend, hesitated by the yellow tape. "Eva," Quinn's voice was steady, her piercing gaze unwavering. "You shouldn't be here." "I know," Eva replied, tucking a stray curl behind her left ear, her nervous habit. "But when I heard about the Veil Market location... I had to see for myself." Quinn stood, surveying the scene once more. "Tell me what you know." Eva bit her lip. "The Market moved here, beneath Camden, as it does every full moon. But today's been... different. There's a buzz among the vendors. Something isn't right." "Something is definitely wrong," Quinn murmured, shifting her attention back to the victim. It was a young man, mid-20s, dressed in a stylish suit that clashed bizarrely with the grim setting. His face was contorted in pain, fists clenched tight, and around his neck hung a bone token, an entry pass to The Veil Market. Sergeant Finley, a burly man with a perpetually furrowed brow, stepped over, wiping the sweat from his forehead. "Strangest thing, Quinn. No signs of struggle, no visible wounds. It's like he dropped dead on the spot." She nodded, her vision narrowing onto a small brass compass clutched in the man's right hand. It was marked with protective sigils, the casing patinaed with verdigris – a Veil Compass. A tool crafted to locate supernatural rifts. "That's a Veil Compass," Eva whispered, her eyes wide. "He might have been tracking a rift." "But it doesn't explain how he died," Quinn replied, her mind racing. A careful scan of the surroundings revealed faint etchings on the ground, runic symbols nearly obscured by dust and grime. She motioned for Eva to take a closer look. Eva knelt beside the symbols, tracing them gently with her fingers. "These are ancient. Nordic runes, but they've been tampered with. See this?" She pointed to an engraved 'Eiwaz' rune, symbolizing the yew tree and death. "Someone twisted its meaning. With the right incantation, this could trap a person between realms." Quinn’s heartbeat quickened. It made sense, in a twisted way. The evidence didn't align because it was meant to confuse. The Veil Market's complexity of hidden magics and cloaked dealings ran deep. Whoever did this knew they could use the runes to manipulate the area. Finley, his sceptical tone unmistakable, crossed his arms. "You expect me to believe some old symbols did this?" Quinn shot him a steely glance. "Eva’s right. This isn’t a simple mugging or overdose. Someone used ancient magic to ensure he wouldn't escape." "There's more," Eva interjected, her eyes shining with the thrill of discovery. "These alterations, they imply a sacrifice. Whoever did this, they intended to harvest his essence, possibly for an alchemical concoction or to summon something... darker." Suddenly, Eva’s eyes widened, and she rummaged through the worn satchel, pulling out a tattered book. "Look," she urged, flipping to a weathered page covered in more runes. "This matches the layout here, almost perfectly." Quinn examined the patterns, her jaw tightening. "Someone recreated this to the letter. This wasn’t amateur work." Her thoughts raced back to her partner, DS Morris, and the case three years ago that had cost him his life. The unexplained supernatural undertones had always haunted her – and now they were resurfacing. "I need the officer in charge of the Veil Market immediately," Quinn ordered, her gaze fixed on Finley. "And keep the area secure. No one in or out." Finley nodded reluctantly, realising the gravity of Quinn's findings. "I'll get on it." Quinn turned back to Eva. "Can you decipher any more? Anything that tells us who performed the ritual?" Eva's fingers traced the intricate patterns. "It's designed to conceal the caster's identity. But there's one thing... the essence harnessed in this manner would need to be stabilised by someone adept in both alchemy and dark magic." "I know one place where such practices overlap," Quinn said, her mind already assembling the pieces. "A hidden alchemical shop in the Market. They’d know who’s been buying the necessary ingredients." Their hurried footsteps echoed once more as they navigated the winding tunnels of the old Tube station, every turn steeped in centuries-old secrets. They emerged into a hidden corridor, leading to the Veil Market itself. Merchants of all kinds peddled their mystical wares, eyes flicking warily to the two women as they manoeuvred through the throng. Quinn's hand rested instinctively on the grip of her service weapon. Vendors turned their heads, whispers trailing in their wake. "Here," Eva pointed to a narrow archway barely visible between two stalls. The scent of exotic herbs and old leather wafted through. They stepped inside the small shop crammed with alchemical components, jars filled with unidentifiable substances, and ancient tomes. A tall, gaunt man with deep-set eyes looked up from the counter. "Detective Quinn. A pleasure as always," his voice oily with feigned politeness. "Cut the pleasantries," Quinn snapped. "We’re looking for someone who's purchased high-level alchemical ingredients and runic inscriptions recently. Names. Now." The man’s smirk faltered. "Names? Dangerous information in these parts." Quinn’s patience wore thin. "They’ve crossed the line to murder. I won't ask again." Eva stepped forward, sliding a rune-etched coin across the counter. "For your trouble." The man eyed it suspiciously before snatching it up with thin fingers. "There was a man," he said, lowering his voice. "A foreigner, spoke little, but he bought a substantial amount of regio aureum and serpent's essence. Mentioned something about a necessary sacrifice for true power’s unlock." “Description?” Quinn demanded. “Medium height, dark hair, but with a scar—gouge-like—across his left cheek.” Quinn exchanged a look with Eva. "I know who he is.” The gaunt man stepped back into the shadows. "You saw nothing here." Outside, the buzz of the Market seemed louder, the patrons oblivious to the sinister undercurrent beneath their very feet. "We need to go," Quinn said, urgency sharpening her tone. "Now that we have a face, we need evidence to make an arrest – before he strikes again." Eva nodded, her own resolve hardening. "What’s your plan?" Quinn’s eyes darkened with the promise of justice. "Simple. Track him, gather evidence, dismantle his operations. And stop whatever he's planning next." The shadows deepened around them as they navigated their way back through the winding corridors of the abandoned Tube station. The game was afoot, and Quinn was ready to see it through to the bitter end. The next full moon beckoned, and with it, more than just the sinister stirrings of the Veil Market. Stakes were higher than ever, as they doubled down on the supernatural nexus of murder and dark magic tying everything together. There would be no rest tonight.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags15
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences44
tagDensity0.341
leniency0.682
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
76.08% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1254
totalAiIsmAdverbs6
found
0
adverb"gently"
count1
1
adverb"suddenly"
count1
2
adverb"perfectly"
count1
3
adverb"reluctantly"
count1
4
adverb"warily"
count1
5
adverb"very"
count1
highlights
0"gently"
1"suddenly"
2"perfectly"
3"reluctantly"
4"warily"
5"very"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
8.29% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1254
totalAiIsms23
found
0
word"flickered"
count1
1
word"dancing"
count1
2
word"fluttered"
count1
3
word"scanned"
count1
4
word"footsteps"
count2
5
word"echoed"
count2
6
word"unwavering"
count1
7
word"furrowed"
count1
8
word"racing"
count1
9
word"tracing"
count1
10
word"quickened"
count1
11
word"ensure"
count1
12
word"raced"
count1
13
word"traced"
count1
14
word"intricate"
count1
15
word"navigated"
count2
16
word"etched"
count1
17
word"sinister"
count2
18
word"resolve"
count1
highlights
0"flickered"
1"dancing"
2"fluttered"
3"scanned"
4"footsteps"
5"echoed"
6"unwavering"
7"furrowed"
8"racing"
9"tracing"
10"quickened"
11"ensure"
12"raced"
13"traced"
14"intricate"
15"navigated"
16"etched"
17"sinister"
18"resolve"
66.67% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches2
maxInWindow2
found
0
label"eyes widened/narrowed"
count1
1
label"jaw/fists clenched"
count1
highlights
0"eyes widened"
1"fists clenched"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences72
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount1
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences72
filterMatches
0"watch"
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences100
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen31
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1247
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions13
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
22.11% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions57
wordCount821
uniqueNames11
maxNameDensity2.56
worstName"Quinn"
maxWindowNameDensity4
worstWindowName"Quinn"
discoveredNames
Harlow1
Quinn21
Tube3
Kowalski1
Eva14
Veil5
Market5
Finley4
Compass1
Suddenly1
Morris1
persons
0"Harlow"
1"Quinn"
2"Kowalski"
3"Eva"
4"Market"
5"Finley"
6"Compass"
7"Morris"
places
0"Veil"
globalScore0.221
windowScore0.333
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences61
glossingSentenceCount1
matches
0"seemed louder the patrons oblivious to the sinister undercurrent beneath their very feet"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1247
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences100
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs44
mean28.34
std14.46
cv0.51
sampleLengths
050
153
245
313
430
512
629
755
836
938
1016
1141
1251
1345
1418
1524
1637
1735
1817
1935
2028
2113
2218
2337
2431
2556
2620
2740
2824
2920
3010
3114
3213
3347
343
3511
3611
3712
3819
3928
409
4122
4236
4345
95.52% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount2
totalSentences72
matches
0"was contorted"
1"was meant"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount1
totalVerbs139
matches
0"were resurfacing"
85.71% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount2
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences2
totalSentences100
ratio0.02
matches
0"It was marked with protective sigils, the casing patinaed with verdigris – a Veil Compass."
1"The unexplained supernatural undertones had always haunted her – and now they were resurfacing."
97.22% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount600
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount16
adverbRatio0.02666666666666667
lyAdverbCount14
lyAdverbRatio0.023333333333333334
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences100
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences100
mean12.47
std6.27
cv0.503
sampleLengths
013
118
219
318
417
518
67
725
813
99
104
1115
1215
137
145
154
1625
1713
1818
1924
2018
2118
2216
2315
247
259
267
2712
2820
299
3011
3125
3215
333
347
3510
3612
3713
388
3910
406
4118
4212
4325
4416
4512
467
477
4810
4921
74.33% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats4
diversityRatio0.47
totalSentences100
uniqueOpeners47
47.62% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount1
totalSentences70
matches
0"Suddenly, Eva’s eyes widened, and"
ratio0.014
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount14
totalSentences70
matches
0"It was a young man,"
1"His face was contorted in"
2"She nodded, her vision narrowing"
3"It was marked with protective"
4"She motioned for Eva to"
5"She pointed to an engraved"
6"It made sense, in a"
7"she urged, flipping to a"
8"Her thoughts raced back to"
9"Their hurried footsteps echoed once"
10"They emerged into a hidden"
11"They stepped inside the small"
12"his voice oily with feigned"
13"he said, lowering his voice"
ratio0.2
0.00% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount65
totalSentences70
matches
0"The harsh fluorescent light flickered"
1"Detective Harlow Quinn crouched beside"
2"Quinn’s sharp brown eyes scanned"
3"A worn leather watch encircled"
4"Footsteps echoed behind her, drawing"
5"A petite woman with curly"
6"Eva Kowalski, an occult researcher"
7"Quinn's voice was steady, her"
8"Eva replied, tucking a stray"
9"Quinn stood, surveying the scene"
10"Eva bit her lip."
11"Quinn murmured, shifting her attention"
12"It was a young man,"
13"His face was contorted in"
14"Sergeant Finley, a burly man"
15"She nodded, her vision narrowing"
16"It was marked with protective"
17"A tool crafted to locate"
18"Eva whispered, her eyes wide"
19"Quinn replied, her mind racing"
ratio0.929
71.43% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences70
matches
0"Whoever did this knew they"
ratio0.014
100.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences35
technicalSentenceCount1
matches
0"It was a young man, mid-20s, dressed in a stylish suit that clashed bizarrely with the grim setting."
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags15
uselessAdditionCount5
matches
0"Eva whispered, her eyes wide"
1"Quinn replied, her mind racing"
2"Eva interjected, her eyes shining with the thrill of discovery"
3"Quinn said, her mind already assembling the pieces"
4"Quinn said, urgency sharpening her tone"
0.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags12
fancyCount7
fancyTags
0"Quinn murmured (murmur)"
1"Eva whispered (whisper)"
2"Eva interjected (interject)"
3"she urged (urge)"
4"Quinn ordered (order)"
5"Quinn snapped (snap)"
6"Quinn demanded (demand)"
dialogueSentences44
tagDensity0.273
leniency0.545
rawRatio0.583
effectiveRatio0.318
78.1659%