Run: 2026-02-19-01KHTRM0AQTQA788JZJXMWVDSB

Run Details

Model:
o4 Mini
Duration:
31.6s
Cost:
$0.016605
Provider:
OpenAI

Model input

System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Literary Fiction genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4413" name="Silas Blackwood" aliases="Silas, Si, the Spymaster" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Mentor"> <eyeColor>hazel</eyeColor> <hair>grey-streaked auburn</hair> <height>6'1"</height> <age>58</age> <beard>neatly trimmed, matching his grey-streaked auburn hair</beard> <limp>slight limp in his left leg from an old knee injury</limp> <signetRing>silver signet ring, always worn on his right hand</signetRing> <description>Silas is a retired intelligence operative turned bar owner. He carries himself with quiet authority.</description> <backstory>Former MI6 field agent who retired after a botched operation in Prague left him with a permanent knee injury. He opened "The Raven's Nest" bar in Soho as a front for his network of contacts.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the literary fiction genre. Two old friends who haven't seen each other in years run into each other unexpectedly at a bar. One of them has changed significantly. Through their conversation and the tension between who they were and who they've become, reveal the weight of time and unspoken regret. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
She froze mid-step, a half-full glass in her hand trembling. The neon green sign above the door spat its last flicker before plunging The Raven’s Nest into gloom. Footfalls paused. Voices hushed. Then a single voice cut through the dark. “Aurora?” She blinked, the familiar rasp arresting her heart. Silas Blackwood stood behind the bar, sleeves rolled, hands poised on the polished wood. His hazel eyes flickered with recognition, and she saw the grey in his hair deepen, noticed the slight limp that sent the barstool tilting beneath him. “Si.” Her voice cracked. She almost dropped the glass. “You—” He caught it with one hand. The liquid sloshed but didn’t spill. He kept that steady calm, decades of fieldcraft lacing every movement. “You’ve come back,” he said. She stared at his lined face, the neat beard a shade darker than she remembered. “I—felt like it was time.” A pause so thick they might slice it. From somewhere beyond the bar’s low hum, glasses clinked. Someone laughed. Ordinary life spilled around their frozen moment. “It’s been—what? Five years?” Silas asked, carefully pouring her a fresh drink from a bottle at his elbow. “Four.” She accepted the glass. Warm whisky burned her palm. She flexed her fingers around the tumbler, drew strength from its weight. “Almost five.” He set a fresh one before himself, uncorked it. “Where have you been hiding?” “Anywhere but here.” She glanced around. The walls were still lined with maps and black-and-white photographs. Shadows scuttled across them like guilty memories. “Eva said you might still be tending bar.” Silas let the cork thud onto the counter. “I prefer it to paperwork.” She swallowed. The liquid scorched her throat. “You look…” She searched for something kinder than ‘worn’. “Different.” “I keep moving.” He traced the rim with a fingertip. “Helps with the limp.” She touched her wrist, felt the crescent-shaped scar. Strange, how scars tether you to what you ran from. She’d fled an abusive ex, fled Cardiff, pursued a law degree she never finished, and now she delivered dim sum. Life’s trajectory—random, jagged. “You changed too,” she said, trying for casual. Silas leaned in. The green neon illuminated the silver signet ring on his right hand. He never took that off. “How so?” “Hair.” She flicked a strand back. “Mannerisms. You sound … older.” He studied the ring. “Might be the company I keep.” She stared at him, hungry for a confession that wouldn’t come. “You always did keep secrets.” He tapped the ring. “And you always asked too many questions.” Her lips twitched. “Better than not asking at all.” He swirled the whisky. “Ask away.” A laugh—hard, hollow—escaped her. “Why’d you retire after Prague? You said it was one mission.” He froze. The smile faltered. For a moment, the bar vanished, and she saw the sprawl of cobblestones in Prague, heard gunfire echo. The limp had its story. “I got something I couldn’t shake,” he said. “Like a shadow.” She nodded. Shadows followed her too. Memories of him coaching her through mock trials, telling her that words mattered more than fists. She’d taken that to heart once. “I left law school,” she said. “Couldn’t face the courtroom.” She tapped the bar. “Too many arguments without winners.” Silas drank. The amber light stained his face. “You delivered for Golden Empress instead.” “Part-time.” She laughed again. “Endless noodles. Aluminium containers.” He studied her bright blue eyes. “You’ve changed.” She stiffened. “Have I? Or just… survived?” He put down the glass. “You used to shine.” She winced, as if struck. “I still do. Just in places you don’t visit anymore.” His eyes flicked to the back bookshelf, where the grain of oak betrayed a hidden door. He stiffened. “Can we stick to the past?” She met his gaze, unblinking. “We’re in the past.” Silas swallowed. “One thing at a time.” A lull. The bar’s jukebox hummed, a faint blues riff. They both listened, as if it might fill the space between them. She traced the bar’s scratches with her fingertip. “Why now?” he said. She stared at her whisky, at the light refracting through it. “I heard something,” she said softly. “About the Prague files.” Silas’s jaw tightened. “Those are—classified.” “So I was told.” She tapped her scar. “But they mention a Carter.” The word hung. He glanced at her—her name, Carter, conjured ghosts. Her father, an Irish barrister, had once spoken of Silas’s integrity. She’d carried that belief with her—until it broke. He swallowed. “Not your business.” She lifted her chin. “Everything that happened there is my business.” Silas turned away, polishing a glass. “You don’t want to reopen that.” She stood. Glass rattled against the wood. “I have to.” His head snapped back. “Why?” She met his gaze squarely. “Because someone’s been asking questions about a girl who disappeared in Prague. And her file points to you.” He set the glass down so hard it cracked the counter’s polish. “That was a different vortex,” he said, voice low. “Nothing to do with you.” She swallowed, steadying herself. “I’ve been off the grid,” she said. “But I found a name. Vandermeer.” Silas’s fingers went white around the glassware. “You shouldn’t have done that.” “Oh, but I did.” His eyes darkened. “Aurora, I tried to protect you.” She laughed, cruel. “By hiding? By lying?” He glared. “By keeping you out of it.” She leaned over the bar, close enough to smell the old tobacco beneath his skin. “Protective mentor. A cliché.” Silas’s hand hovered over the bookshelf. “This isn’t the place.” She straightened. “It is. You owe me the truth.” He drew a breath. The limp made him wince. “Prague was a botch,” he said. “We lost a team. One went missing. You’re asking about her.” “Yes.” Her voice barely rose. “I am.” He closed his eyes, as if exorcising ghosts. When he opened them, a decision lay in their depths. “Meet me in the back room.” She hesitated. “You mean through the bookshelf?” He nodded. “Give me a minute.” She watched him lift a battered tome, push, and pass through the hidden door. A heartbeat later, the shelf slid shut. The bar fell silent as if holding its breath. She set her glass aside and waited. Each second stretched. The lamplight flickered. Then the shelf swung back wide. Silas stood in the doorway, shoulders squared as if preparing for battle. He motioned her forward. She crossed the threshold. Inside, the secret room smelled of old leather, ink, and secrets. A single bare bulb cast harsh light on a small table piled with files. He retrieved one marked PRAGUE-XI, slid it to her. She opened it, eyes skimming: photographs, witness statements, faint stains she recognised as blood. Vandermeer’s name glowed in red ink—an alias. She flipped pages until one caught her breath: a Polaroid of Silas, younger, smiles fast-fading, standing over a blurred figure. Silas watched her face. “That’s Hannelore.” “She vanished.” Her fingers trembled. “And you concealed her.” He leaned in. “She volunteered for an off-books assignment. Not my call.” “Then whose?” She slammed the file shut. “They framed you.” He winced. “They framed me.” She swallowed. “So I’m not chasing ghosts.” His shoulders slumped. “You might be.” A sudden scrape of shoe on wood. The door rattled. They both snapped toward the entrance. On the other side of the shelf, the bar’s murmur had died. Silence pressed in. He whispered, “We’re not alone.” Footsteps. Slow. Deliberate. They came closer, turned the shelf knob. Aurora’s heart hammered. Silas’s hand hovered over the files. He slid one into his coat. Then he straightened. “Time’s up.” He stepped forward. The shelf swung open as one figure filled the doorway: a man in a long coat, face lost in shadow. He stopped, saw them, and raised one hand. Aurora’s breath stalled. Silas lifted his chin. “You came.” The man unhooked a knife from his belt. The blade caught the light. Silence cracked. She dropped to the floor. Heart racing. The file fell, pages splaying like a dying bird. He advanced. Silas reached inside his coat. Her pulse roared in her ears. Then everything went black as the man lunged into the secret room.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags23
adverbTagCount3
adverbTags
0"She glanced around [around]"
1"She laughed again [again]"
2"she said softly [softly]"
dialogueSentences84
tagDensity0.274
leniency0.548
rawRatio0.13
effectiveRatio0.071
92.74% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1377
totalAiIsmAdverbs2
found
0
adverb"carefully"
count1
1
adverb"softly"
count1
highlights
0"carefully"
1"softly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (16 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
0"Blackwood"
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
34.64% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1377
totalAiIsms18
found
0
word"flicker"
count1
1
word"gloom"
count1
2
word"familiar"
count1
3
word"flickered"
count2
4
word"weight"
count1
5
word"traced"
count2
6
word"flicked"
count2
7
word"echo"
count1
8
word"depths"
count1
9
word"trembled"
count1
10
word"silence"
count2
11
word"footsteps"
count1
12
word"racing"
count1
13
word"pulse"
count1
highlights
0"flicker"
1"gloom"
2"familiar"
3"flickered"
4"weight"
5"traced"
6"flicked"
7"echo"
8"depths"
9"trembled"
10"silence"
11"footsteps"
12"racing"
13"pulse"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences160
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences160
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences220
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen26
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1361
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions22
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
65.17% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions27
wordCount1002
uniqueNames11
maxNameDensity1.7
worstName"Silas"
maxWindowNameDensity3
worstWindowName"Silas"
discoveredNames
Raven1
Nest1
Blackwood1
Warm1
Cardiff1
Silas17
Prague1
Carter1
Irish1
Polaroid1
Footsteps1
persons
0"Raven"
1"Blackwood"
2"Silas"
3"Carter"
places
0"Cardiff"
1"Prague"
globalScore0.652
windowScore0.667
78.57% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences70
glossingSentenceCount2
matches
0"as if holding its breath"
1"as if preparing for battle"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1361
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences220
matches
0"carried that belief"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs88
mean15.47
std10.31
cv0.667
sampleLengths
040
11
248
310
423
55
620
726
818
924
1014
1131
1213
1317
1414
1541
168
1722
1811
1910
2016
2111
229
236
2415
2528
2611
2728
2819
2914
308
318
327
339
3415
3524
369
377
3830
394
4021
415
4213
4330
445
4511
4612
4710
485
4923
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences160
matches(empty)
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs217
matches(empty)
77.92% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount6
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences5
totalSentences220
ratio0.023
matches
0"Life’s trajectory—random, jagged."
1"A laugh—hard, hollow—escaped her."
2"He glanced at her—her name, Carter, conjured ghosts."
3"She’d carried that belief with her—until it broke."
4"Vandermeer’s name glowed in red ink—an alias."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount433
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount14
adverbRatio0.03233256351039261
lyAdverbCount1
lyAdverbRatio0.0023094688221709007
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences220
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences220
mean6.19
std4.19
cv0.677
sampleLengths
010
118
22
32
48
51
68
714
826
94
105
111
126
136
1411
155
1615
175
188
199
202
217
2218
235
245
2512
262
279
285
296
3010
317
328
338
345
352
365
379
381
3910
404
418
4210
4320
443
458
463
4712
485
492
58.64% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats1
diversityRatio0.35454545454545455
totalSentences220
uniqueOpeners78
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount4
totalSentences128
matches
0"Then a single voice cut"
1"Then the shelf swung back"
2"Then he straightened."
3"Then everything went black as"
ratio0.031
1.25% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount70
totalSentences128
matches
0"She froze mid-step, a half-full"
1"She blinked, the familiar rasp"
2"His hazel eyes flickered with"
3"Her voice cracked"
4"She almost dropped the glass."
5"He caught it with one"
6"He kept that steady calm,"
7"She stared at his lined"
8"She accepted the glass"
9"She flexed her fingers around"
10"He set a fresh one"
11"She glanced around"
12"She searched for something kinder"
13"He traced the rim with"
14"She touched her wrist, felt"
15"She’d fled an abusive ex,"
16"she said, trying for casual"
17"He never took that off."
18"She flicked a strand back"
19"He studied the ring."
ratio0.547
10.78% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount115
totalSentences128
matches
0"She froze mid-step, a half-full"
1"The neon green sign above"
2"She blinked, the familiar rasp"
3"Silas Blackwood stood behind the"
4"His hazel eyes flickered with"
5"Her voice cracked"
6"She almost dropped the glass."
7"He caught it with one"
8"The liquid sloshed but didn’t"
9"He kept that steady calm,"
10"She stared at his lined"
11"A pause so thick they"
12"Silas asked, carefully pouring her"
13"She accepted the glass"
14"She flexed her fingers around"
15"He set a fresh one"
16"She glanced around"
17"The walls were still lined"
18"Shadows scuttled across them like"
19"Silas let the cork thud"
ratio0.898
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences128
matches(empty)
ratio0
100.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences31
technicalSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags23
uselessAdditionCount1
matches
0"he said, voice low"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags12
fancyCount2
fancyTags
0"She laughed again (laugh)"
1"He whispered (whisper)"
dialogueSentences84
tagDensity0.143
leniency0.286
rawRatio0.167
effectiveRatio0.048
83.9903%