Run: 2026-02-19-01KHTRMB7AJXV2XAFRM7PP6625

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7.4s
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You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Romance genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4415" name="Lucien Moreau" aliases="Lucien, Luc, the Frenchman" pronouns="he/him" species="Half-Demon" storyRole="Ally"> <eyeColor>heterochromatic — one amber, one black</eyeColor> <hair>slicked-back platinum blond</hair> <height>5'11"</height> <age>32</age> <cane>ivory-handled cane that conceals a thin blade</cane> <dress>tailored charcoal suits</dress> <description>An impeccably dressed fixer and information broker in London's supernatural underworld. He speaks four languages fluently.</description> <backstory>Born in Marseille to a human mother and a demon father from the realm of Avaros.</backstory> </character> <location id="858" name="Eva's Flat" aliases="Eva's place, the flat on Brick Lane" realm="Earth"> <cat>tabby cat named Ptolemy</cat> <security>three deadbolts on the front door</security> <description>A cramped one-bedroom flat above a curry house on Brick Lane, East London. Every surface is covered with books, scrolls, and research notes.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the romance genre. Two people who parted on complicated terms are forced together again when one shows up unannounced at the other's flat. There's history between them — attraction, hurt, and things left unsaid. Write the scene from the moment the door opens. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The doorbell chimed, a shrill, unexpected sound that sliced through the quiet hum of Rory's flat. She glanced at her watch, frowning. It was late, too late for unexpected visitors. She set down her book, her heart pounding an uneven rhythm as she made her way to the door. Through the peephole, she saw him—Lucien Moreau, leaning against the frame, his heterochromatic eyes hidden behind dark sunglasses. She took a deep breath, steeling herself, before unlocking the three deadbolts and opening the door. "Lucien," she acknowledged, her voice cool, her arms crossed over her chest. "What brings you to my doorstep at this hour?" He pushed off from the frame, a small smile playing on his lips. "Rory," he greeted, his voice a low rumble. "Still the same, I see. Always straight to the point." She stepped aside, allowing him entry. "Some things never change," she muttered, closing the door behind him. "What do you want, Lucien?" He turned to face her, his gaze sweeping over her, taking in her casual attire—an old band t-shirt and faded jeans. "You look... well," he commented, his voice laced with a hint of surprise. Rory raised an eyebrow. "Is that a compliment, coming from you?" Lucien chuckled, a sound that sent a shiver down her spine. "Take it as you will," he replied, his gaze holding hers. "I've come to offer you a job, Rory." She blinked, taken aback. "A job? With you?" He nodded, his expression serious. "I have a... situation that requires your unique skills. And your discretion." Rory's eyes narrowed. "What kind of situation?" Lucien hesitated, then sighed. "A delicate one. Involving a certain artifact that's gone missing. And a client who's willing to pay a substantial sum for its retrieval." Rory's curiosity was piqued, but she kept her expression neutral. "And why do you need me?" "Because, my dear Rory," he said, his voice dropping to a conspiratorial whisper, "you have a knack for finding things. And people. And you're not afraid to get your hands dirty." Rory considered him for a moment, her mind racing. She hadn't seen Lucien in months, not since their last... encounter. Their last argument. She had walked away from him, from his world of shadows and secrets, determined to start anew. And now, here he was, standing in her flat, offering her a job. "And what's in it for me?" she asked, her voice steady. Lucien's smile was slow, predatory. "Besides the money? A chance to prove yourself. To show me that you're still the woman I knew. The woman I... admired." Rory felt a shiver run through her at the word 'admired'. She knew what he meant. She knew the history between them, the attraction that had simmered beneath the surface, the tension that had always existed, even in the midst of their arguments. She knew that this job, this offer, was more than just a business proposition. "And if I refuse?" she asked, her voice barely above a whisper. Lucien's gaze held hers, intense, unyielding. "Then I walk away. And we never see each other again." Rory felt a pang at the thought. She had missed him, more than she cared to admit. She had missed their banter, their arguments, their shared history. She had missed him. "And if I accept?" she asked, her voice steady. Lucien's smile was slow, triumphant. "Then we work together. Like old times." Rory hesitated, then nodded. "Alright, Lucien. I'm in." Lucien's smile widened, and he held out his hand. "Welcome back, Rory." She took his hand, feeling the familiar spark at his touch. "Don't make me regret this, Lucien," she warned. He squeezed her hand, his gaze serious. "I won't let you down, Rory." As they stood there, their hands still clasped, Rory felt a sense of anticipation, of excitement. She knew she was playing with fire, but she couldn't help it. She had missed this. She had missed him. And she was ready to dive back into his world, ready to face whatever challenges lay ahead. But first, she had some conditions of her own. "I want fifty percent of the fee," she stated, her voice firm. Lucien raised an eyebrow. "Fifty percent?" She nodded. "And I want final say on how we approach this. No more of your half-baked plans." Lucien considered her for a moment, then nodded. "Deal." Rory smiled, feeling a sense of satisfaction. "Good. Now, tell me more about this artifact." Lucien began to explain, his voice low, his gaze intent. Rory listened, her mind already racing with possibilities, with plans. She was back in the game, back in Lucien's world. And she was ready to play. But as she listened to Lucien, she couldn't help but wonder what this job would bring. What challenges they would face. What secrets they would uncover. And what would happen between them, between her and Lucien. She knew one thing for sure—it was going to be an interesting ride. And she was ready to buckle up and enjoy it.
total_cost0.0008058

Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags12
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences31
tagDensity0.387
leniency0.774
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
94.05% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount840
totalAiIsmAdverbs1
found
0
adverb"barely above a whisper"
count1
highlights
0"barely above a whisper"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
4.76% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount840
totalAiIsms16
found
0
word"pounding"
count1
1
word"eyebrow"
count2
2
word"down her spine"
count1
3
word"whisper"
count2
4
word"racing"
count2
5
word"encounter"
count1
6
word"determined"
count1
7
word"tension"
count1
8
word"pang"
count1
9
word"familiar"
count1
10
word"sense of"
count2
11
word"anticipation"
count1
highlights
0"pounding"
1"eyebrow"
2"down her spine"
3"whisper"
4"racing"
5"encounter"
6"determined"
7"tension"
8"pang"
9"familiar"
10"sense of"
11"anticipation"
33.33% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches3
maxInWindow3
found
0
label"eyes widened/narrowed"
count1
1
label"couldn't help but"
count1
2
label"sent a shiver through"
count1
highlights
0"eyes narrowed"
1"couldn't help but wonder"
2"sent a shiver down"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells2
narrationSentences68
matches
0"felt a shiver"
1"a sense of anticipation"
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount1
hedgeCount1
narrationSentences68
filterMatches
0"watch"
hedgeMatches
0"began to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences88
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen31
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords836
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions13
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
33.33% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions26
wordCount604
uniqueNames3
maxNameDensity2.32
worstName"Lucien"
maxWindowNameDensity4
worstWindowName"Lucien"
discoveredNames
Rory11
Lucien14
Moreau1
persons
0"Rory"
1"Lucien"
2"Moreau"
places(empty)
globalScore0.341
windowScore0.333
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences46
glossingSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount836
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences88
matches
0"knew that this"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs34
mean24.59
std17.74
cv0.722
sampleLengths
083
121
231
322
434
511
630
78
817
97
1027
1116
1231
1353
1411
1527
1657
1712
1817
1931
209
2112
228
2312
2419
2513
2653
2721
286
2918
309
3115
3236
3359
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount1
totalSentences68
matches
0"was piqued"
93.33% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount2
totalVerbs125
matches
0"was, standing"
1"was playing"
45.45% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount3
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences3
totalSentences88
ratio0.034
matches
0"Through the peephole, she saw him—Lucien Moreau, leaning against the frame, his heterochromatic eyes hidden behind dark sunglasses."
1"He turned to face her, his gaze sweeping over her, taking in her casual attire—an old band t-shirt and faded jeans."
2"She knew one thing for sure—it was going to be an interesting ride."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount344
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount4
adverbRatio0.011627906976744186
lyAdverbCount0
lyAdverbRatio0
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences88
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences88
mean9.5
std5.66
cv0.596
sampleLengths
016
16
28
319
418
516
612
79
813
98
1010
116
1211
135
1421
1513
164
177
1811
1911
208
214
224
235
2412
253
264
274
2823
2910
306
3131
329
3310
341
353
3617
3713
3811
395
4022
4111
425
4327
4414
4512
466
4711
487
4910
45.83% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats8
diversityRatio0.32954545454545453
totalSentences88
uniqueOpeners29
0.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount0
totalSentences65
matches(empty)
ratio0
4.62% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount35
totalSentences65
matches
0"She glanced at her watch,"
1"It was late, too late"
2"She set down her book,"
3"She took a deep breath,"
4"she acknowledged, her voice cool,"
5"He pushed off from the"
6"he greeted, his voice a"
7"She stepped aside, allowing him"
8"she muttered, closing the door"
9"He turned to face her,"
10"he commented, his voice laced"
11"he replied, his gaze holding"
12"She blinked, taken aback."
13"He nodded, his expression serious."
14"he said, his voice dropping"
15"She hadn't seen Lucien in"
16"Their last argument."
17"She had walked away from"
18"she asked, her voice steady"
19"She knew what he meant."
ratio0.538
44.62% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount54
totalSentences65
matches
0"The doorbell chimed, a shrill,"
1"She glanced at her watch,"
2"It was late, too late"
3"She set down her book,"
4"She took a deep breath,"
5"she acknowledged, her voice cool,"
6"He pushed off from the"
7"he greeted, his voice a"
8"She stepped aside, allowing him"
9"she muttered, closing the door"
10"He turned to face her,"
11"he commented, his voice laced"
12"Rory raised an eyebrow."
13"Lucien chuckled, a sound that"
14"he replied, his gaze holding"
15"She blinked, taken aback."
16"He nodded, his expression serious."
17"Rory's eyes narrowed."
18"Lucien hesitated, then sighed."
19"Rory's curiosity was piqued, but"
ratio0.831
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences65
matches(empty)
ratio0
87.91% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences26
technicalSentenceCount2
matches
0"The doorbell chimed, a shrill, unexpected sound that sliced through the quiet hum of Rory's flat."
1"Lucien chuckled, a sound that sent a shiver down her spine."
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags12
uselessAdditionCount6
matches
0"he greeted, his voice a low rumble"
1"he said, his voice dropping to a conspiratorial whisper,"
2"she asked, her voice steady"
3"she asked, her voice barely above a whisper"
4"she asked, her voice steady"
5"she stated, her voice firm"
0.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags10
fancyCount5
fancyTags
0"she acknowledged (acknowledge)"
1"she muttered (mutter)"
2"he commented (comment)"
3"she warned (warn)"
4"she stated (state)"
dialogueSentences31
tagDensity0.323
leniency0.645
rawRatio0.5
effectiveRatio0.323
69.5747%