Run: 2026-02-19-01KHTRMDKWA3X0NXJP4M92210Y

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Duration:
33.9s
Cost:
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Model input

System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Mystery genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4414" name="Eva Kowalski" aliases="Eva, Evie" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Best Friend"> <eyeColor>green</eyeColor> <hair>curly red</hair> <height>5'4"</height> <age>26</age> <glasses>round glasses</glasses> <satchel>worn leather satchel full of books</satchel> <freckles>freckled complexion</freckles> <nervousHabit>tucking hair behind her left ear</nervousHabit> <description>Aurora's childhood friend and an occult researcher.</description> <backstory>Moved to London two years before Aurora and works as a research assistant at the British Museum's restricted archives. She holds a master's degree in Ancient History from Oxford.</backstory> </character> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> <item id="2004" name="Veil Compass" aliases="the Compass, shadow compass" type="Tool" origin="The Veil Market"> <casingMaterial>small brass compass</casingMaterial> <faceMarkings>face etched with protective sigils</faceMarkings> <needle>points toward the nearest supernatural rift or portal</needle> <patina>casing has a patina of verdigris</patina> <creator>crafted by a Shade artisan</creator> <description>A compass attuned to supernatural energy.</description> </item> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the mystery genre. A detective arrives at a crime scene in an unusual location. Something is wrong — the evidence doesn't add up. A colleague is present, offering a different interpretation. Through careful observation and deduction, the detective begins to see what others have missed. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
“Get back!” Harlow barked, shoving a uniformed officer aside as she stepped into the dimly lit chamber. The air was thick with the scent of damp earth and something else—something metallic. She squinted against the flickering light of a single bulb hanging from the ceiling, illuminating the scene like a spotlight on a stage. The abandoned Tube station beneath Camden had become a makeshift crime scene, the remnants of a recent struggle scattered across the cracked tiles. A body lay sprawled near the edge of the platform, limbs twisted at unnatural angles. Harlow’s stomach churned as she approached, her worn leather watch creaking against her wrist. “Detective Quinn,” a voice called from behind her. It was Davies, her partner in the field, though they had drifted into a tenuous alliance since the loss of DS Morris. He stood with his hands shoved deep into his pockets, his brow furrowed. “You should see this.” She turned, her sharp jawline set in determination. “What have you got?” “Looks like a mugging gone wrong,” he said, gesturing to the body. “Wallet’s missing, and there’s a bloody knife over there.” He pointed to a glint of steel half-buried in the grime. “Or it’s staged,” Harlow countered, kneeling beside the victim. The man was in his thirties, dressed in a tattered leather jacket that had seen better days. “No signs of a struggle. No defensive wounds. This wasn’t a random attack.” Davies frowned, stepping closer. “What do you mean? The knife—” “Is too clean,” she interrupted, her eyes narrowing as she examined the blade. “Look at the way it’s positioned. It’s almost like it was placed there deliberately. And the blood—” She leaned in, inhaling the metallic tang. “It’s fresh, but the body’s cold. This wasn’t a spontaneous act of violence.” “Maybe he was killed elsewhere and dumped here,” Davies suggested, but Harlow shook her head, her instincts prickling. “Not likely. The blood spatter is minimal, and the angle suggests he was attacked from behind. Whoever did this wanted it to look like a mugging, but they were careful.” She stood, scanning the area. “We need to look for anything out of place.” Davies shifted uneasily, glancing around the chamber. “You think it’s connected to the Market?” Harlow’s heart raced at the mention of the Veil Market, the hidden supernatural black market that had been the subject of her investigation for months. “Could be. But we need to find evidence first. Something that ties this to the clique.” As she moved further into the station, the shadows seemed to shift, whispering secrets she couldn’t quite grasp. The walls were plastered with faded posters, remnants of a time when the station had been alive with commuters. Now, it felt like a tomb, the silence heavy and oppressive. “Over here,” Davies called, crouching near a pile of debris. Harlow joined him, her eyes narrowing at the sight of a small brass compass, its casing tarnished with verdigris. “Where did you find this?” she asked, picking it up. The needle twitched erratically, as if sensing something beyond the mundane. “Just lying there,” he replied, his voice tinged with uncertainty. “Thought it might be important.” “It is,” Harlow said, her pulse quickening. “This is a Veil Compass. It points to supernatural rifts or portals.” She turned it over in her hand, the protective sigils etched into the face catching the light. “Whoever did this might have ties to the Market.” “Or they could just be a collector,” Davies said, but Harlow could see the doubt in his eyes. “Collectors don’t leave bodies behind,” she snapped, frustration bubbling beneath the surface. “We need to think bigger. This isn’t just a murder; it’s a message.” “Message?” he echoed, his brow furrowing. “From who?” “From whoever’s pulling the strings in the Market,” she replied, her mind racing. “They’re sending a warning. We need to find out who this man was.” “Right.” Davies straightened, glancing back at the body. “I’ll call it in. Get forensics down here.” “Do it,” Harlow said, her gaze lingering on the compass. “And check the victim’s ID. I want to know if he’s connected to any known players in the Market.” As Davies moved away, Harlow knelt again, her fingers brushing against the ground. The tiles were slick with something dark, and she could feel the weight of the moment pressing down on her. She closed her eyes, focusing on the energy in the room, the echoes of what had transpired. A flicker of movement caught her attention, and she opened her eyes, scanning the shadows. Something shifted at the edge of her vision, a figure lurking just beyond the light. Harlow’s instincts kicked in, and she rose, her heart pounding. “Davies!” she called, but he was too far away, absorbed in his phone call. The figure slipped further into the darkness, and Harlow took off after them, her boots pounding against the tiles. She rounded a corner, the narrow passageway leading deeper into the bowels of the station. The air grew colder, and the shadows thickened, wrapping around her like a shroud. “Stop!” she shouted, but the figure darted away, disappearing into the gloom. Harlow pushed herself harder, adrenaline surging through her veins. She could hear the echo of footsteps ahead, the sound of someone trying to escape. She rounded another corner, and the figure stumbled, nearly losing their footing. Harlow seized the moment, lunging forward and grabbing the back of their jacket. They spun around, and she found herself face to face with a young woman, her freckled complexion pale and wide-eyed. “Who are you?” Harlow demanded, her grip tightening. “What are you doing here?” “I—I was just passing through!” the woman stammered, her round glasses slipping down her nose. “I didn’t mean to intrude!” “Passing through?” Harlow’s voice dripped with skepticism. “In a crime scene? You expect me to believe that?” “I swear! I’m just looking for something!” The woman’s voice trembled, and Harlow could see the fear in her eyes. “I didn’t know—” “Looking for what?” Harlow pressed, her instincts screaming that this was no coincidence. “An artifact,” the woman blurted, her hands trembling. “I’m a researcher. I thought I could find it here.” “Researcher?” Harlow’s mind raced. “What kind of artifact?” “Something connected to the Veil Market,” the woman said, her voice barely above a whisper. “I’m Eva. I work at the British Museum. I was following a lead.” Harlow’s heart raced. “Eva Kowalski?” The woman nodded, her eyes darting nervously. “You know me?” “Let’s just say I’ve heard your name,” Harlow replied, her grip loosening slightly. “But you need to tell me everything. Now.” Before Eva could respond, a loud crash echoed through the station, followed by the sound of footsteps pounding against the tiles. Harlow’s instincts kicked in again, and she turned, her heart racing. “Davies!” she shouted, but the chaos had already begun. The shadows shifted, and a group of figures emerged, their faces obscured by hoods. Harlow’s blood ran cold as she recognised the telltale signs of the clique she had been investigating. “Get down!” she yelled, shoving Eva aside as the first figure lunged forward, a knife glinting in the dim light. Harlow barely had time to react, adrenaline surging through her as she prepared for the fight of her life.
total_cost0.00134138

Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags33
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences58
tagDensity0.569
leniency1
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
83.55% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1216
totalAiIsmAdverbs4
found
0
adverb"deliberately"
count1
1
adverb"barely above a whisper"
count1
2
adverb"nervously"
count1
3
adverb"slightly"
count1
highlights
0"deliberately"
1"barely above a whisper"
2"nervously"
3"slightly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
0.00% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1216
totalAiIsms33
found
0
word"stomach"
count1
1
word"churned"
count1
2
word"furrowed"
count1
3
word"glint"
count1
4
word"scanning"
count2
5
word"raced"
count3
6
word"silence"
count1
7
word"oppressive"
count1
8
word"tinged"
count1
9
word"pulse"
count1
10
word"etched"
count1
11
word"echoed"
count2
12
word"furrowing"
count1
13
word"racing"
count2
14
word"could feel"
count1
15
word"weight"
count1
16
word"echoes"
count1
17
word"flicker"
count1
18
word"pounding"
count3
19
word"gloom"
count1
20
word"echo"
count1
21
word"footsteps"
count2
22
word"trembled"
count1
23
word"whisper"
count1
24
word"glinting"
count1
highlights
0"stomach"
1"churned"
2"furrowed"
3"glint"
4"scanning"
5"raced"
6"silence"
7"oppressive"
8"tinged"
9"pulse"
10"etched"
11"echoed"
12"furrowing"
13"racing"
14"could feel"
15"weight"
16"echoes"
17"flicker"
18"pounding"
19"gloom"
20"echo"
21"footsteps"
22"trembled"
23"whisper"
24"glinting"
33.33% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches4
maxInWindow3
found
0
label"blood ran cold"
count1
1
label"stomach dropped/sank"
count1
2
label"air was thick with"
count1
3
label"weight of words/silence"
count1
highlights
0"blood ran cold"
1"stomach churned"
2"The air was thick with"
3"the weight of the moment"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells1
narrationSentences71
matches
0"t in determination"
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount1
hedgeCount1
narrationSentences71
filterMatches
0"watch"
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences96
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen35
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1213
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions25
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
0.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions39
wordCount840
uniqueNames8
maxNameDensity2.86
worstName"Harlow"
maxWindowNameDensity5.5
worstWindowName"Harlow"
discoveredNames
Tube1
Camden1
Davies8
Morris1
Harlow24
Veil1
Market1
Eva2
persons
0"Camden"
1"Davies"
2"Morris"
3"Harlow"
4"Eva"
places(empty)
globalScore0.071
windowScore0
27.05% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences61
glossingSentenceCount3
matches
0"quite grasp"
1"felt like a tomb, the silence heavy and"
2"as if sensing something beyond the mundane"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1213
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences96
matches
0"screaming that this"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs45
mean26.96
std14.32
cv0.531
sampleLengths
054
152
247
312
432
539
610
750
818
944
1014
1141
1248
1329
1421
1515
1645
1718
1825
198
2026
2116
2229
2350
2440
2514
2648
2736
2845
2913
3020
3117
3223
3313
3418
358
3628
375
3810
3921
4032
419
4231
4320
4419
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount1
totalSentences71
matches
0"were plastered"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs177
matches(empty)
83.33% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount1
semicolonCount1
flaggedSentences2
totalSentences96
ratio0.021
matches
0"The air was thick with the scent of damp earth and something else—something metallic."
1"“We need to think bigger. This isn’t just a murder; it’s a message.”"
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount843
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount26
adverbRatio0.03084223013048636
lyAdverbCount8
lyAdverbRatio0.009489916963226572
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences96
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences96
mean12.64
std6.2
cv0.491
sampleLengths
017
114
223
323
415
514
68
722
813
94
108
114
1212
1320
149
1517
1613
174
186
1913
2024
2113
2218
2335
249
257
267
2725
2816
2918
3019
3111
3210
3319
3410
3511
3610
375
387
3929
409
4118
4212
4313
446
452
4613
4713
488
498
80.90% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats4
diversityRatio0.5104166666666666
totalSentences96
uniqueOpeners49
0.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount0
totalSentences71
matches(empty)
ratio0
84.79% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount24
totalSentences71
matches
0"She squinted against the flickering"
1"It was Davies, her partner"
2"He stood with his hands"
3"She turned, her sharp jawline"
4"he said, gesturing to the"
5"He pointed to a glint"
6"she interrupted, her eyes narrowing"
7"She leaned in, inhaling the"
8"She stood, scanning the area"
9"she asked, picking it up"
10"he replied, his voice tinged"
11"She turned it over in"
12"she snapped, frustration bubbling beneath"
13"he echoed, his brow furrowing"
14"she replied, her mind racing"
15"She closed her eyes, focusing"
16"she called, but he was"
17"She rounded a corner, the"
18"she shouted, but the figure"
19"She could hear the echo"
ratio0.338
0.00% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount67
totalSentences71
matches
0"Harlow barked, shoving a uniformed"
1"The air was thick with"
2"She squinted against the flickering"
3"The abandoned Tube station beneath"
4"A body lay sprawled near"
5"Harlow’s stomach churned as she"
6"a voice called from behind"
7"It was Davies, her partner"
8"He stood with his hands"
9"She turned, her sharp jawline"
10"he said, gesturing to the"
11"He pointed to a glint"
12"Harlow countered, kneeling beside the"
13"The man was in his"
14"Davies frowned, stepping closer."
15"she interrupted, her eyes narrowing"
16"She leaned in, inhaling the"
17"Davies suggested, but Harlow shook"
18"She stood, scanning the area"
19"Davies shifted uneasily, glancing around"
ratio0.944
100.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount2
totalSentences71
matches
0"Now, it felt like a"
1"Before Eva could respond, a"
ratio0.028
75.89% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences32
technicalSentenceCount3
matches
0"Harlow’s heart raced at the mention of the Veil Market, the hidden supernatural black market that had been the subject of her investigation for months."
1"Harlow joined him, her eyes narrowing at the sight of a small brass compass, its casing tarnished with verdigris."
2"The needle twitched erratically, as if sensing something beyond the mundane."
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags33
uselessAdditionCount12
matches
0"she interrupted, her eyes narrowing as she examined the blade"
1"Harlow said, her pulse quickening"
2"she snapped, frustration bubbling beneath the surface"
3"he echoed, his brow furrowing"
4"she replied, her mind racing"
5"Harlow said, her gaze lingering on the compass"
6"she shouted, but the figure darted away, disappearing into the gloom"
7"Harlow demanded, her grip tightening"
8"the woman stammered, her round glasses slipping down her nose"
9"the woman blurted, her hands trembling"
10"the woman said, her voice barely above a whisper"
11"Harlow replied, her grip loosening slightly"
0.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags23
fancyCount11
fancyTags
0"Harlow barked (bark)"
1"she interrupted (interrupt)"
2"Davies suggested (suggest)"
3"she snapped (snap)"
4"she shouted (shout)"
5"Harlow demanded (demand)"
6"the woman stammered (stammer)"
7"Harlow pressed (press)"
8"the woman blurted (blurt)"
9"she shouted (shout)"
10"she yelled (yell)"
dialogueSentences58
tagDensity0.397
leniency0.793
rawRatio0.478
effectiveRatio0.379
72.2951%