Run: 2026-02-19-01KHTRMNNDJGGVY8V2CAJ6EFB1

Run Details

Duration:
15.3s
Cost:
$0.000723
Provider:
OpenAI

Model input

System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Literary Fiction genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4413" name="Silas Blackwood" aliases="Silas, Si, the Spymaster" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Mentor"> <eyeColor>hazel</eyeColor> <hair>grey-streaked auburn</hair> <height>6'1"</height> <age>58</age> <beard>neatly trimmed, matching his grey-streaked auburn hair</beard> <limp>slight limp in his left leg from an old knee injury</limp> <signetRing>silver signet ring, always worn on his right hand</signetRing> <description>Silas is a retired intelligence operative turned bar owner. He carries himself with quiet authority.</description> <backstory>Former MI6 field agent who retired after a botched operation in Prague left him with a permanent knee injury. He opened "The Raven's Nest" bar in Soho as a front for his network of contacts.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the literary fiction genre. Two old friends who haven't seen each other in years run into each other unexpectedly at a bar. One of them has changed significantly. Through their conversation and the tension between who they were and who they've become, reveal the weight of time and unspoken regret. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
Aurora Carter sat at the worn oak bar, her elbow resting on the chipped lacquer as she traced the rim of her glass, mind drifting. The faint hum of conversations and muted clink of glasses filled the space, yet her focus blurred, lost somewhere between memory and the present. Out of nowhere, a figure slid into the seat beside her, the scent of old cigars and an unfamiliar sharpness lingering in the air. "Hope I’m not bothering you," a familiar voice drawled, uneven but softened by years. She looked up. For a moment, the sharp blue of her eyes sharpened into something colder, scrutinising. The stranger had aged—lines etched across a face once smooth, hair thinning into streaks of silver, and the confident posture now slightly hunched. But it was the eyes—those unsettling hazel eyes—that caught her, flickering with a mixture of mischief and something else, something darker. She blinked, heartbeat quickening. “Evan?” He chuckled, a rough, almost nervous sound. “Thought I’d find you here.” His gaze roamed the dim interior, subtly shifting, as if trying to read her, to gauge her reaction. She tried to keep her voice steady. “It’s been a while.” He let out a half-smile, leaning back. “Too long. Shame we lost touch.” His fingers drummed against the bar edge, tapping a rhythm she recognised but couldn’t place. Aurora's mind raced back, to the Evan she once knew—the cocky, reckless boy who’d made her laugh in spite of everything, who’d promised he’d always keep her safe. But that boy had vanished; she could see that now, just beneath the surface of this stranger. The quiet malice in his expression, the shadows behind his eyes—things she had never seen before. Time had carved its own stories into him, stories she’d rather forget. She took a slow sip from her glass, sensation prickling her lips. “I had no idea you’d be in town.” He shrugged, a little hesitant. “Nor me yours. London’s a big place, but it always throws surprises.” His lips curled again, more a smirk than a smile. “Guess I looked hard enough.” A pause rippled between them, thick with civility and unspoken histories. She wondered if he felt the same guilt, or if it had long ago warped into something unrecognisable. “Do you still work with the networks?” she asked softly, the words slipping out almost reflexively. He hesitated before replying, “I do what needs doing. You know how it is.” His eyes sharpened, an invisible blade sliding under the surface. “People change, Rory. Things change. You especially.” She winced at the tone, the familiar nickname hanging between them. “You always knew how to push. Thought that was long past.” “Did I?” His gaze flickered away, then back, deliberate. “Or maybe I just know how much you’ve changed. You’re not the same girl I used to know. You’re sharper now. Cooler.” Aurora’s jaw tightened. “Maybe. Or maybe I’ve just learned how not to get burned again.” His smile softened, with a forced warmth that didn’t reach his eyes. “Or maybe you’re hiding something. That scar of yours—left a lasting impression. Like me.” She fingered her left wrist subconsciously, the small crescent-shaped scar a ghost reminder of childhood accidents and reckless days. “It’s nothing. Just a reminder I shouldn’t forget.” Evan’s eyes flicked down, then back. “Yeah. Reminders are useful. They keep us grounded.” He leaned forward, voice lowering. “But I’m not here to dredge up old ghosts. I’ve got my demons, same as you. Maybe more now.” She studied him, the man she once knew and the stranger he’d become. That limping confidence, the subtle edge of menace. The way he spoke, like a ghost from her past, seeping through the cracks of time. “Why are you here?” she asked, voice almost dismissive. “I heard you’re back in town. Figured I’d see if you’d forgotten all about me.” “Hardly,” she retorted, with more bite than intended. He chuckled again, then leaned back on the bar, swirling his drink absentmindedly. “You’ve always been the smart one. I’m not here to cause trouble. Just… curious. About what’s changed—and what hasn’t.” A long silence followed, punctuated only by the low murmur of a nearby conversation and the distant clink of bottles. She reached for her glass, steeling herself. “Serious question: have you changed, Evan? Or is this just another game for you?” He looked at her, eyes shadowed. “I’ve changed. You wouldn’t recognise the man I am now. Got scars—inside and out.” His voice grew rough. “Nothing like the boy who got into trouble for fun. Life’s a game I lost, Rory.” Her stomach lurched. She remembered how reckless he’d been, how his bravado sometimes masked something darker, something unspoken. “Or something you refuse to admit you lost,” she said softly. He shot her a quick glance, a flicker of annoyance—then softened, momentarily vulnerable. “Maybe. But I know one thing: we’re not the same people anymore. Not even close.” His voice turned bitter. “And I wonder if that’s enough to keep us apart, or if it’s just another lie we tell ourselves.” She stared at him. Her mind spun with memories, regrets, the ache of years lost in silence, all tangled in the weight of this moment. She wanted to walk away, disappear into the shadows of Soho where nobody remembered old friends like this. But his eyes flicked to her scar again, and she saw it—the tug of guilt lurking beneath. The girl who’d once believed in promises and innocence now battle-hardened, guarded. She felt her voice tremble slightly, her words raw and honest: “Some things change. Some stay buried.” Evan nodded slowly, a quiet acknowledgment. Then, without warning, he glanced behind her, face tightening. He exhaled sharply. “Someone’s coming.” She turned her head, instinct kicking in, heart pounding. Behind the bar, a figure slipped through the door to the secret room—Silas Blackwood—his long gray hair shadowing his face, a rifle in his grip. Evan’s eyes widened momentarily, and he leaned back as if caught off guard. Aurora’s stomach clenched. That was no casual visit. “Looks like your old boss is still in the business,” Evan muttered, eyes fixed on the door. Her pulse throbbing, she barely managed a whisper, “He’s here for us.” Evan’s face hardened. “Guess our little reunion just got a lot more complicated.” The shadows deepened. Silence was broken only by the muffled voices that grew louder from the back room—uncertain, hurried, desperate. Aurora felt the unmistakable weight of all that had been left unsaid pressing down on her shoulders. And behind her, Silas Blackwood moved with calculated purpose, his presence a whisper of the dark truths waiting just out of reach.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
0.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags16
adverbTagCount4
adverbTags
0"His lips curled again [again]"
1"she asked softly [softly]"
2"His gaze flickered away [away]"
3"she said softly [softly]"
dialogueSentences34
tagDensity0.471
leniency0.941
rawRatio0.25
effectiveRatio0.235
73.33% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1125
totalAiIsmAdverbs6
found
0
adverb"slightly"
count2
1
adverb"softly"
count2
2
adverb"slowly"
count1
3
adverb"sharply"
count1
highlights
0"slightly"
1"softly"
2"slowly"
3"sharply"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (16 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
0"Blackwood"
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
0.00% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1125
totalAiIsms27
found
0
word"traced"
count1
1
word"familiar"
count2
2
word"etched"
count1
3
word"raced"
count1
4
word"unspoken"
count2
5
word"flickered"
count1
6
word"warmth"
count1
7
word"reminder"
count2
8
word"flicked"
count2
9
word"silence"
count3
10
word"stomach"
count2
11
word"lurched"
count1
12
word"flicker"
count1
13
word"weight"
count2
14
word"pounding"
count1
15
word"pulse"
count1
16
word"whisper"
count2
17
word"calculated"
count1
highlights
0"traced"
1"familiar"
2"etched"
3"raced"
4"unspoken"
5"flickered"
6"warmth"
7"reminder"
8"flicked"
9"silence"
10"stomach"
11"lurched"
12"flicker"
13"weight"
14"pounding"
15"pulse"
16"whisper"
17"calculated"
66.67% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches2
maxInWindow2
found
0
label"eyes widened/narrowed"
count1
1
label"weight of words/silence"
count1
highlights
0"eyes widened"
1"the weight of this moment"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences68
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount1
narrationSentences68
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"tried to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences86
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen29
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1109
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions12
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions17
wordCount786
uniqueNames6
maxNameDensity0.76
worstName"Evan"
maxWindowNameDensity2
worstWindowName"Evan"
discoveredNames
Carter1
Aurora5
Evan6
Soho1
Silas2
Blackwood2
persons
0"Carter"
1"Aurora"
2"Evan"
3"Silas"
4"Blackwood"
places
0"Soho"
globalScore1
windowScore1
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences52
glossingSentenceCount1
matches
0"as if trying to read her, to gauge her reaction"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches1
per1kWords0.902
wordCount1109
matches
0"not bothering you,\" a familiar voice drawled, uneven but softened by years"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences86
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs40
mean27.73
std16.24
cv0.586
sampleLengths
073
114
261
35
430
511
628
773
820
932
1029
1116
1231
1322
1431
1515
1626
1727
1838
1937
209
2115
228
2332
2420
2521
2640
2729
2851
2943
3046
316
3214
3334
3421
3517
3612
3713
3837
3922
94.94% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount2
totalSentences68
matches
0"was broken"
1"been left"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs149
matches(empty)
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount10
semicolonCount1
flaggedSentences9
totalSentences86
ratio0.105
matches
0"The stranger had aged—lines etched across a face once smooth, hair thinning into streaks of silver, and the confident posture now slightly hunched."
1"But it was the eyes—those unsettling hazel eyes—that caught her, flickering with a mixture of mischief and something else, something darker."
2"Aurora's mind raced back, to the Evan she once knew—the cocky, reckless boy who’d made her laugh in spite of everything, who’d promised he’d always keep her safe."
3"But that boy had vanished; she could see that now, just beneath the surface of this stranger."
4"The quiet malice in his expression, the shadows behind his eyes—things she had never seen before."
5"He shot her a quick glance, a flicker of annoyance—then softened, momentarily vulnerable."
6"But his eyes flicked to her scar again, and she saw it—the tug of guilt lurking beneath."
7"Behind the bar, a figure slipped through the door to the secret room—Silas Blackwood—his long gray hair shadowing his face, a rifle in his grip."
8"Silence was broken only by the muffled voices that grew louder from the back room—uncertain, hurried, desperate."
84.62% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount799
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount46
adverbRatio0.057571964956195244
lyAdverbCount15
lyAdverbRatio0.01877346683354193
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences86
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences86
mean12.9
std6.72
cv0.521
sampleLengths
025
124
224
314
43
514
623
721
84
91
107
1123
127
134
147
1521
1628
1717
1816
1912
2012
218
225
2322
245
2511
2618
2716
2824
297
3011
3111
329
3322
343
3512
3612
3714
3819
398
406
4113
4219
4313
448
4516
469
4715
488
4913
71.71% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats0
diversityRatio0.43023255813953487
totalSentences86
uniqueOpeners37
49.02% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount1
totalSentences68
matches
0"Then, without warning, he glanced"
ratio0.015
2.35% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount37
totalSentences68
matches
0"She looked up."
1"She blinked, heartbeat quickening."
2"He chuckled, a rough, almost"
3"His gaze roamed the dim"
4"She tried to keep her"
5"He let out a half-smile,"
6"His fingers drummed against the"
7"She took a slow sip"
8"He shrugged, a little hesitant."
9"His lips curled again, more"
10"She wondered if he felt"
11"she asked softly, the words"
12"He hesitated before replying, His"
13"She winced at the tone,"
14"His gaze flickered away, then"
15"His smile softened, with a"
16"She fingered her left wrist"
17"He leaned forward, voice lowering"
18"She studied him, the man"
19"she asked, voice almost dismissive"
ratio0.544
18.82% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount60
totalSentences68
matches
0"Aurora Carter sat at the"
1"The faint hum of conversations"
2"a familiar voice drawled, uneven"
3"She looked up."
4"The stranger had aged—lines etched"
5"She blinked, heartbeat quickening."
6"He chuckled, a rough, almost"
7"His gaze roamed the dim"
8"She tried to keep her"
9"He let out a half-smile,"
10"His fingers drummed against the"
11"Aurora's mind raced back, to"
12"The quiet malice in his"
13"Time had carved its own"
14"She took a slow sip"
15"He shrugged, a little hesitant."
16"His lips curled again, more"
17"A pause rippled between them,"
18"She wondered if he felt"
19"she asked softly, the words"
ratio0.882
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences68
matches(empty)
ratio0
73.73% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences31
technicalSentenceCount3
matches
0"Aurora's mind raced back, to the Evan she once knew—the cocky, reckless boy who’d made her laugh in spite of everything, who’d promised he’d always keep her saf…"
1"The girl who’d once believed in promises and innocence now battle-hardened, guarded."
2"Silence was broken only by the muffled voices that grew louder from the back room—uncertain, hurried, desperate."
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags16
uselessAdditionCount5
matches
0"she asked softly, the words slipping out almost reflexively"
1"He leaned, voice lowering"
2"she asked, voice almost dismissive"
3"She felt, her words raw and honest:"
4"Evan muttered, eyes fixed on the door"
32.35% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags7
fancyCount4
fancyTags
0"a familiar voice drawled (drawl)"
1"He hesitated (hesitate)"
2"she retorted (retort)"
3"Evan muttered (mutter)"
dialogueSentences34
tagDensity0.206
leniency0.412
rawRatio0.571
effectiveRatio0.235
68.9185%