Run: 2026-02-19-01KHTRMXRZVWG8QYYE6JDRH0GY

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34.6s
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You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Horror genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the horror genre. A character is alone in a strange, isolated place at night. They came here for a reason, but something feels off from the moment they arrive. The wrongness builds slowly — sounds that shouldn't be there, things that move at the edge of vision, a growing certainty that they are not alone. Build tension through restraint, not through gore. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for the character and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
Aurora stumbled through the underbrush, her breath quickening as twig snaps ricocheted off the silence around her. She had entered The Fae Grove with resolute intent, a search for answers pressing heavily on her heart. The air was thick. Not with the heady scent of wildflowers—no, that was a deception, a tantalising tease that played tricks on the mind. Instead, a sharp tang of something metallic hung in the air, like blood almost, but sweeter and far more sinister. “What the hell was that?” she whispered under her breath, her pulse a dull thump in her ears. At the edge of her vision, shadows flickered, restless and indecipherable. With each hesitant step, she felt the ancient oak standing stones drawing closer, their weathered faces expressionless yet watchful, as if they bore witness to her trespass. A sharp rustling came from behind her, too loud for the night creatures that usually thrived in such a place. The sound wasn’t shy; it drew nearer, a snaking reality that coiled around her anxiety. A quick glance over her shoulder confirmed nothing—only darkness pooling like spilled ink. She gripped the silver chain of her Heartstone Pendant, its warm pulse calming her racing heart. But even the pendant felt uneasy tonight—tonight, it pulsated wildly as if responding to an unseen presence lurking at the periphery. The grove was a pocket of wonders, yet something about it twisted in on itself. Tentative, she moved deeper into its embrace, fighting the instinct to flee. Aurora had seen the changes in her dreams, felt them thrumming through the pendant. A revelation awaited her within the grove. The legends of the Fae called to her, entwining with her fate. But tonight, the shadows seemed hungry, their invisible jaws gaping wide to swallow her whole. “No, stay focused,” she murmured, though doubt crept under her skin like an itch. She recalled the last time she had entered such a world; the horrors still clung like cobwebs in her mind. Yet, tonight was different, or so she hoped. She could do this. Find the truth. Ahead, the grove opened into a clearing, lit with a silvery glow that appeared unnatural. Flowers swayed gently, colours glowing vibrantly, their hues almost electric beneath the moon’s pallid light. Aurora stepped forward, entranced by the spectacle, though wariness still niggled in the corner of her mind. She felt a tug in her chest, a resonant call that drew her in. Could it be the Fae, waiting to welcome her? Or would they conspire to trap her instead? “Rory?” a voice threaded through the stillness, soft yet echoing with weight, pulling against her resolve. “Who’s there?” She spun around, her heart galloping wildly once again. No answer came, just the oppressive silence wrapping tighter around her. Yet the call felt intimate, as if the very air was trying to draw her closer. She shook her head, trying to dispel the gathering shadows. The midnight blooms shifted, petals shimmering against an unseen breeze, but no wind caressed her skin; instead, the world felt thick and electric. As if it was waiting—waiting for her to make a choice. She stepped further into the light. Another sound flickered at the edge of her perception—an insistent whisper, twisting around her thoughts, beckoning, beckoning. The cacophony of leaves, the rustling grass, all thrummed to the same muted pulse, an undertone that felt as though she were entering the heart of the grove itself. Destroying it seemed like a folly, yet preserving it could demand a price. “What do you want from me?” she whispered, a tremor in her voice that betrayed her composure. A soft giggle danced across the air like silk, wrapping around her throat and tightening further. She felt her breath falter under the weight of it, her chest constricting. Suddenly, something darted past, just beyond the periphery of her vision, and she gasped, heart pounding as she strained hungrily to find its maker. “Is anyone there?” But the stillness returned, echoing solemnly, mocking her. She took a step back, teetering on uncertainty. This couldn’t be just a beautiful fantasy; she could feel the tension crawling over her skin, the sinister awareness of something observing her. A shuffling ahead caught her attention—a figure hunched low, just inside the tree line, obscured by shifting leaves. That familiar instinct to flee clashed violently with her need to understand. The allure of the supernatural streamed through her veins, but her instincts cried out to witness the figure, the shadow poised on the brink of her vision. “Show yourself!” she demanded, voice ringing with defiance more than confidence. The figure stepped reluctantly into the silvery glow, a twist of vines and shadows amalgamating into a beautiful, ethereal being. Its features were flawless, skin shimmered like opalescent glass but marred by absence—a hollow gaze that offered no comfort or warmth, only an unsettling chill. “Child of the heart,” it spoke, voice like silver bells, yet layered with unnatural undertones. “You seek that which is lost; you seek that which is hidden.” “Tell me what I need to know.” The urge to venture into its confusing realm hardened her resolve, despite every warning bell clawing at her mind. It chuckled softly, words sibilant and mysterious, “Do you not sense the wrongness that lies beneath the surface? Time drips differently here. All who linger grow heavy with secrets.” “I don’t have time for riddles,” Aurora shot back, pulses of adrenaline coursing through her. “I’m not afraid of your games.” “Are you not? Or is your heart merely a burning ember of curiosity?” With a sudden flash, the grove warped, shadows stretching and contracting around her, creating a labyrinthine corridor of bending trees and singing flowers. In the depths of her peripheral vision, eyes flickered and glowed—a roll of amber orbs watching, waiting. More shadows stirred, each one moving in perfect synchrony, a silent council entwined among the trees. “Leave this place!” Aurora shouted, the fright pumped through her veins, igniting instinct over composure. This wasn’t just a dream now... it was real and becoming fierce. “Such reluctance!” the apparition laughed, the sound splitting the silence, shattering her experience into a million jagged pieces. “Enough!” she commanded, voice trembling just enough to reveal doubt. Something crunched behind her, quick and jagged, and the shadows coalesced, blocking her escape. Her heart raced, pounding like a war drum against resolve that felt increasingly futile. She didn’t want to yield to the fear, never again, but the grove pulsed, swaying as if to mock her. “Come and play,” the entity lured, extending a hand adorned with glistening petals, a siren song woven through the threads of darkness. Aurora took a step back, desperation creeping in as the shadows closed around her, tight and suffocating. This wasn’t what she had come for. The fear she had contained no longer felt distant—it was real, alive, powerful, and looming like a darkness that could swallow her whole. The woods murmured with secrets, beckoning her with half-formed whispers—she could almost hear the soft song of the Fae dancing in the air, yet an impending dread snared her heart, wrenching at the kernel of her resolve. “Tell me what I need!” She cried, unable to suppress the fear clawing at her throat. The shadows lunged forward, and just as the moonlight flickered, illuminating the edges of the grove, something monstrous surged at her from the depths of the night. It wasn’t just a game anymore. This was a test, and the price of success was only beginning to reveal itself...
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
66.67% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags15
adverbTagCount2
adverbTags
0"She spun around [around]"
1"It chuckled softly [softly]"
dialogueSentences19
tagDensity0.789
leniency1
rawRatio0.133
effectiveRatio0.133
76.30% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1266
totalAiIsmAdverbs6
found
0
adverb"gently"
count1
1
adverb"very"
count1
2
adverb"suddenly"
count1
3
adverb"hungrily"
count1
4
adverb"reluctantly"
count1
5
adverb"softly"
count1
highlights
0"gently"
1"very"
2"suddenly"
3"hungrily"
4"reluctantly"
5"softly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
0.00% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1266
totalAiIsms44
found
0
word"silence"
count3
1
word"sinister"
count2
2
word"pulse"
count3
3
word"flickered"
count4
4
word"racing"
count1
5
word"electric"
count2
6
word"echoing"
count2
7
word"weight"
count2
8
word"resolve"
count4
9
word"oppressive"
count1
10
word"whisper"
count1
11
word"cacophony"
count1
12
word"silk"
count1
13
word"pounding"
count2
14
word"could feel"
count1
15
word"tension"
count1
16
word"familiar"
count1
17
word"flawless"
count1
18
word"shimmered"
count1
19
word"warmth"
count1
20
word"chill"
count1
21
word"depths"
count2
22
word"perfect"
count1
23
word"raced"
count1
24
word"pulsed"
count1
25
word"glistening"
count1
26
word"looming"
count1
27
word"dancing"
count1
highlights
0"silence"
1"sinister"
2"pulse"
3"flickered"
4"racing"
5"electric"
6"echoing"
7"weight"
8"resolve"
9"oppressive"
10"whisper"
11"cacophony"
12"silk"
13"pounding"
14"could feel"
15"tension"
16"familiar"
17"flawless"
18"shimmered"
19"warmth"
20"chill"
21"depths"
22"perfect"
23"raced"
24"pulsed"
25"glistening"
26"looming"
27"dancing"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"hung in the air"
count1
highlights
0"hung in the air"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells2
narrationSentences78
matches
0"felt uneasy"
1"felt a tug"
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences78
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences82
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen39
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1255
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions11
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions13
wordCount1149
uniqueNames5
maxNameDensity0.52
worstName"Aurora"
maxWindowNameDensity1.5
worstWindowName"Aurora"
discoveredNames
Fae4
Grove1
Heartstone1
Pendant1
Aurora6
persons
0"Aurora"
places
0"Fae"
1"Grove"
globalScore1
windowScore1
50.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences75
glossingSentenceCount3
matches
0"as if responding to an unseen presence lurking at the periphery"
1"seemed hungry their invisible jaws gaping wide to swallow her whole"
2"appeared unnatural"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1255
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences82
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs32
mean39.22
std19.77
cv0.504
sampleLengths
079
156
285
375
449
578
616
748
840
959
1046
1127
1239
1357
1411
1545
1627
1726
1829
1921
2013
2123
2233
2327
2418
2524
2634
2722
2847
2937
3043
3121
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences78
matches(empty)
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount3
totalVerbs209
matches
0"was trying"
1"was waiting"
2"were entering"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount10
semicolonCount5
flaggedSentences15
totalSentences82
ratio0.183
matches
0"Not with the heady scent of wildflowers—no, that was a deception, a tantalising tease that played tricks on the mind."
1"The sound wasn’t shy; it drew nearer, a snaking reality that coiled around her anxiety."
2"A quick glance over her shoulder confirmed nothing—only darkness pooling like spilled ink."
3"But even the pendant felt uneasy tonight—tonight, it pulsated wildly as if responding to an unseen presence lurking at the periphery."
4"She recalled the last time she had entered such a world; the horrors still clung like cobwebs in her mind."
5"The midnight blooms shifted, petals shimmering against an unseen breeze, but no wind caressed her skin; instead, the world felt thick and electric."
6"As if it was waiting—waiting for her to make a choice."
7"Another sound flickered at the edge of her perception—an insistent whisper, twisting around her thoughts, beckoning, beckoning."
8"This couldn’t be just a beautiful fantasy; she could feel the tension crawling over her skin, the sinister awareness of something observing her."
9"A shuffling ahead caught her attention—a figure hunched low, just inside the tree line, obscured by shifting leaves."
10"Its features were flawless, skin shimmered like opalescent glass but marred by absence—a hollow gaze that offered no comfort or warmth, only an unsettling chill."
11"“You seek that which is lost; you seek that which is hidden.”"
12"In the depths of her peripheral vision, eyes flickered and glowed—a roll of amber orbs watching, waiting."
13"The fear she had contained no longer felt distant—it was real, alive, powerful, and looming like a darkness that could swallow her whole."
14"The woods murmured with secrets, beckoning her with half-formed whispers—she could almost hear the soft song of the Fae dancing in the air, yet an impending dread snared her heart, wrenching at the kernel of her resolve."
91.25% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1160
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount58
adverbRatio0.05
lyAdverbCount17
lyAdverbRatio0.014655172413793103
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences82
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences82
mean15.3
std6.66
cv0.435
sampleLengths
017
118
24
320
420
518
611
727
820
915
1013
1116
1221
1315
1412
1514
167
1712
1815
1914
2020
218
224
233
2415
2515
2617
2714
289
298
3016
3111
3211
3316
3410
3523
3611
376
3817
3929
4013
4117
4216
4313
4424
453
468
478
4823
4918
84.96% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats2
diversityRatio0.524390243902439
totalSentences82
uniqueOpeners43
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount3
totalSentences78
matches
0"Instead, a sharp tang of"
1"Suddenly, something darted past, just"
2"More shadows stirred, each one"
ratio0.038
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount23
totalSentences78
matches
0"She had entered The Fae"
1"she whispered under her breath,"
2"She gripped the silver chain"
3"she murmured, though doubt crept"
4"She recalled the last time"
5"She could do this."
6"She felt a tug in"
7"She spun around, her heart"
8"She shook her head, trying"
9"She stepped further into the"
10"she whispered, a tremor in"
11"She felt her breath falter"
12"She took a step back,"
13"she demanded, voice ringing with"
14"Its features were flawless, skin"
15"it spoke, voice like silver"
16"It chuckled softly, words sibilant"
17"it was real and becoming"
18"she commanded, voice trembling just"
19"Her heart raced, pounding like"
ratio0.295
94.62% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount57
totalSentences78
matches
0"Aurora stumbled through the underbrush,"
1"She had entered The Fae"
2"The air was thick."
3"she whispered under her breath,"
4"A sharp rustling came from"
5"The sound wasn’t shy; it"
6"A quick glance over her"
7"She gripped the silver chain"
8"The grove was a pocket"
9"Aurora had seen the changes"
10"A revelation awaited her within"
11"The legends of the Fae"
12"she murmured, though doubt crept"
13"She recalled the last time"
14"She could do this."
15"Flowers swayed gently, colours glowing"
16"Aurora stepped forward, entranced by"
17"She felt a tug in"
18"a voice threaded through the"
19"She spun around, her heart"
ratio0.731
100.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount2
totalSentences78
matches
0"Yet, tonight was different, or"
1"As if it was waiting—waiting"
ratio0.026
0.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences49
technicalSentenceCount10
matches
0"Not with the heady scent of wildflowers—no, that was a deception, a tantalising tease that played tricks on the mind."
1"With each hesitant step, she felt the ancient oak standing stones drawing closer, their weathered faces expressionless yet watchful, as if they bore witness to …"
2"The sound wasn’t shy; it drew nearer, a snaking reality that coiled around her anxiety."
3"But even the pendant felt uneasy tonight—tonight, it pulsated wildly as if responding to an unseen presence lurking at the periphery."
4"She felt a tug in her chest, a resonant call that drew her in."
5"Another sound flickered at the edge of her perception—an insistent whisper, twisting around her thoughts, beckoning, beckoning."
6"The cacophony of leaves, the rustling grass, all thrummed to the same muted pulse, an undertone that felt as though she were entering the heart of the grove its…"
7"Its features were flawless, skin shimmered like opalescent glass but marred by absence—a hollow gaze that offered no comfort or warmth, only an unsettling chill…"
8"The fear she had contained no longer felt distant—it was real, alive, powerful, and looming like a darkness that could swallow her whole."
9"The woods murmured with secrets, beckoning her with half-formed whispers—she could almost hear the soft song of the Fae dancing in the air, yet an impending dre…"
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags15
uselessAdditionCount6
matches
0"she whispered, her pulse a dull thump in her ears"
1"She spun around, her heart galloping wildly once again"
2"she demanded, voice ringing with defiance more than confidence"
3"Aurora shouted, the fright pumped through her veins, igniting instinct over composure"
4"she commanded, voice trembling just enough to reveal doubt"
5"She cried, unable to suppress the fear clawing at her throat"
0.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags9
fancyCount9
fancyTags
0"she whispered (whisper)"
1"she murmured (murmur)"
2"she whispered (whisper)"
3"she demanded (demand)"
4"it spoke (speak)"
5"It chuckled softly (chuckle)"
6"Aurora shouted (shout)"
7"the apparition laughed (laugh)"
8"She cried (cry)"
dialogueSentences19
tagDensity0.474
leniency0.947
rawRatio1
effectiveRatio0.947
78.7932%