Run: 2026-02-19-01KHTRN0XGH135V92N9G7M80MJ

Run Details

Model:
GPT-4.1
Duration:
1m 7s
Cost:
$0.015584
Provider:
OpenAI

Model input

System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Literary Fiction genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4413" name="Silas Blackwood" aliases="Silas, Si, the Spymaster" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Mentor"> <eyeColor>hazel</eyeColor> <hair>grey-streaked auburn</hair> <height>6'1"</height> <age>58</age> <beard>neatly trimmed, matching his grey-streaked auburn hair</beard> <limp>slight limp in his left leg from an old knee injury</limp> <signetRing>silver signet ring, always worn on his right hand</signetRing> <description>Silas is a retired intelligence operative turned bar owner. He carries himself with quiet authority.</description> <backstory>Former MI6 field agent who retired after a botched operation in Prague left him with a permanent knee injury. He opened "The Raven's Nest" bar in Soho as a front for his network of contacts.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the literary fiction genre. Two old friends who haven't seen each other in years run into each other unexpectedly at a bar. One of them has changed significantly. Through their conversation and the tension between who they were and who they've become, reveal the weight of time and unspoken regret. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
“Oi, watch it—” The spill of beer stung as it soaked my jeans. Glass rattled against tile, then a hand, wreathed in silver rings, gripped my wrist. “Rory Carter. Well.” I yanked my arm free and backed into the edge of the bar. Faces blurred in soft neon, laughter colliding with the low grind of old Bowie on the jukebox. The man in front of me leaned heavy on a twisted cane, eyes squinting beneath the kind of fringe that would haunt you for days. He looked like he’d stepped from some colder, sharper decade. No. Not a stranger. “Silas? You look—” Alive. Older. Thinner. “Like hell, probably.” A crooked smile hollowed his cheeks. “I own the place now.” I stared at the signet ring etched with a tattered raven, caught the way his left leg dragged behind him when he stepped sideways. Silk waistcoat, second-hand but perfectly pressed. A myth shot through with old pain, haunting this bar. “You survived Prague, then.” His jaw twitched. “Rumour travels. Have a drink.” “No need. I just—dropped off the order for Yu-Fei. Thirty dumplings upstairs. Couldn’t risk cooling the wrappers.” “And your tip?” “Yu-Fei gives free spring rolls. I can’t eat them all.” He barked a laugh, too sharp for comfort. “I remember when free lunch was a pint and a day off school. Sit.” I obeyed because some habits die harder than love. He called over his shoulder. “Two whiskeys, neat. Maggie!” The youngest barmaid eyed me, then him. “Thought you didn’t drink, Mr. Blackwood.” “Tonight’s a reunion.” He watched her pour, then redirected his gaze to me. “You’re thinner.” “You’re slower.” He let that settle. Air thick with dust and spent joy. “You left London fast.” “You taught me to run.” His lips pursed at the memory, as if chasing the last smoke from an old cigarette. Maggie set tumblers between us, and for a beat we sat like that—old train tracks crossed again, knowing one might derail. “It’s quieter than I remember,” I said, keeping my hands folded. If he noticed the crescent scar flashing at my wrist, he said nothing. “Changed crowd. Students, mostly.” I took a sip. Not fancy whisky, but honest. Something warm for old wounds. “Eva mentioned you owned the lease here. Never added the rest.” “Eva’s mouth gets ahead of her brain.” He paused, then tapped his cane to the sticky floor. “You’re not here for drinks. Night deliveries in Soho. Post-law degree. How’s that working?” “Not at all.” He didn’t smile, but his chest eased. “You look like your father, these days. The jaw. That same glower when cornered.” I wanted to quip, bite back. Instead, I let the silence breathe a bit. Because that was how Silas worked: lay the snare, wait for the next move. He spoke first. “I saw Evan. About a year ago. Leicester Square. Didn’t recognise him at first—put on weight, lost something behind the eyes.” “He always was a bad actor.” I stared into the amber liquid. “You didn’t say anything.” “Didn’t need to. Thought you’d outgrown all that.” We sat, old ghosts threading round us, sucking the smoke out of the air. I hesitated at that last sliver of myself—the me that’d once scraped blood off knuckles after playground fights, the me he’d told: don’t run headlong without an exit. He gestured at the scar. “Still get yourself in trouble?” “Only when it pays.” His snort was brittle. “You broke into Miss Archer’s office at sixteen and stole my keys.” “You never changed the lock.” “Neither did you.” Maybe that was the truest thing said all night. He let the silence build, gaze flicking to the old maps stitched across the walls, London sprawling in all its patchwork secrets. “Funny. You walked out after the funeral, never wrote. Not a word through all of it. I half-thought you copped it somewhere in the North.” “I did.” The truth surfaced, trembling. “People don’t like letting go. Cleaner to vanish.” “Cleaner for whom?” I stared at the old photographs—faces posed with hands folded too tightly, decades layered in shadows. “Eva said you kept tabs.” “I kept watch. Not the same.” I gripped the tumbler. “Don’t. That’s worse.” He straightened, pain hugging one shoulder. “Your mother came by last month. Asked after you.” I set my glass down with a dull crack. “Why’d you lie to her?” He inhaled, slow. “Because she still remembers you as ten. And you needed the distance.” Time thickened between us. I traced the condensation on my glass. He reached for his cane and did not move. “You ran to London to disappear. I ran to Soho to fade. Funny how neither of us managed.” “Maybe neither of us were built for starting over.” He grinned, crooked and sharp-veined with sadness. “Some of us got left behind by the restart button.” He refilled his glass, hands shaking only slightly. “Why here, Silas? Why hide so obvious?” He watched me, razor calm. “Because I choose who to see. Who to let see the real me. Out there—I’m a rumour. Here, I pay the bills. Sometimes that’s enough.” His gaze sharpened. “You met anyone else from the old days?” “Ran into Tomas at the Sainsbury’s. He sells insurance. Looks like he gave up on the gym.” A laugh from Silas—almost fond. “We all gave up something.” I shifted. “What did you give up?” He holstered the answer in a swallow, then leaned close. “Trust. That’s what London took.” A judder rose at my throat—memory or tears, I couldn’t say. “You still see the old ghosts?” I asked. He gestured to the faces in frames: post-war, pre-despair, boys grinning in a blurry Soho street. “Only in mirrors, these days.” We didn’t speak for a while. The room folded in, pulses of music thumping bones more than ears. He broke the dam. “I might need help, Rory.” My pulse stumbled. Years ago, that voice meant: Run, don’t look back. But he looked tired, one edge dulled too far. “You know you only have to ask.” He squeezed the cane. “I’ll show you something.” He limped toward the rear bookshelf, the one heavy with hardbacked lies. I followed, pulse skittering, beer still cooling on my thighs. He pressed two worn spines together. The shelf shifted, swinging wide. Behind it—a narrow door, backlit by a harsh blue glow. “Ever seen a real ghost?” he asked, voice stripped of irony. I might have laughed, once. Now, I stepped through the gap after him, sweat prickling my skin as the wall sealed itself behind my back. The blue light sharpened to a shape. Maggie stood inside, hand clamped to another man’s collar, blood smearing her knuckles. His eyes rolled, lips frothing. Silas inhaled, pain laid bare in every line of his ruined face. “Meet the reason you’re here, Rory. And the truth I never wanted to tell.”
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags9
adverbTagCount1
adverbTags
0"He paused then [then]"
dialogueSentences61
tagDensity0.148
leniency0.295
rawRatio0.111
effectiveRatio0.033
87.07% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1160
totalAiIsmAdverbs3
found
0
adverb"perfectly"
count1
1
adverb"tightly"
count1
2
adverb"slightly"
count1
highlights
0"perfectly"
1"tightly"
2"slightly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (16 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
0"Blackwood"
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
65.52% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1160
totalAiIsms8
found
0
word"etched"
count1
1
word"silk"
count1
2
word"silence"
count2
3
word"weight"
count1
4
word"traced"
count1
5
word"pulse"
count2
highlights
0"etched"
1"silk"
2"silence"
3"weight"
4"traced"
5"pulse"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells1
narrationSentences81
matches
0"d with sadness"
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences81
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences132
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen29
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1145
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions12
unquotedAttributions1
matches
0"If he noticed the crescent scar flashing at my wrist, he said nothing."
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions8
wordCount690
uniqueNames6
maxNameDensity0.43
worstName"Silas"
maxWindowNameDensity1
worstWindowName"Silas"
discoveredNames
Bowie1
Older1
Silas3
London1
Soho1
Run1
persons
0"Silas"
1"Run"
places
0"London"
1"Soho"
globalScore1
windowScore1
53.85% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences52
glossingSentenceCount2
matches
0"looked like he’d stepped from some colder"
1"as if chasing the last smoke from an old cigarette"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches1
per1kWords0.873
wordCount1145
matches
0"Not fancy whisky, but honest"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences132
matches
0"let that settle"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs83
mean13.8
std10.23
cv0.742
sampleLengths
03
124
23
365
44
56
614
740
84
98
1017
113
1210
1322
149
159
1613
1715
182
1911
204
215
2216
2321
2424
254
2614
2711
2831
293
3021
3128
3224
3316
348
3542
3610
374
3816
395
403
419
4222
4325
4414
453
4616
475
486
497
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences81
matches(empty)
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs138
matches(empty)
12.99% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount6
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences6
totalSentences132
ratio0.045
matches
0"Maggie set tumblers between us, and for a beat we sat like that—old train tracks crossed again, knowing one might derail."
1"I hesitated at that last sliver of myself—the me that’d once scraped blood off knuckles after playground fights, the me he’d told: don’t run headlong without an exit."
2"I stared at the old photographs—faces posed with hands folded too tightly, decades layered in shadows."
3"A laugh from Silas—almost fond."
4"A judder rose at my throat—memory or tears, I couldn’t say."
5"Behind it—a narrow door, backlit by a harsh blue glow."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount699
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount23
adverbRatio0.032904148783977114
lyAdverbCount4
lyAdverbRatio0.005722460658082976
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences132
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences132
mean8.67
std5.75
cv0.663
sampleLengths
03
110
214
33
413
517
625
710
81
93
104
111
121
139
145
1524
166
1710
184
193
205
2117
223
2310
248
2514
269
275
284
297
306
3113
322
332
344
357
364
375
3816
3921
4011
4113
424
434
445
455
4611
4717
4814
493
64.65% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats8
diversityRatio0.42424242424242425
totalSentences132
uniqueOpeners56
88.89% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount2
totalSentences75
matches
0"Instead, I let the silence"
1"Maybe that was the truest"
ratio0.027
0.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount45
totalSentences75
matches
0"I yanked my arm free"
1"He looked like he’d stepped"
2"I stared at the signet"
3"His jaw twitched."
4"He barked a laugh, too"
5"I obeyed because some habits"
6"He called over his shoulder."
7"He watched her pour, then"
8"He let that settle."
9"His lips pursed at the"
10"I said, keeping my hands"
11"I took a sip."
12"He paused, then tapped his"
13"He didn’t smile, but his"
14"I wanted to quip, bite"
15"He spoke first."
16"I stared into the amber"
17"We sat, old ghosts threading"
18"I hesitated at that last"
19"He gestured at the scar."
ratio0.6
26.67% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount65
totalSentences75
matches
0"The spill of beer stung"
1"Glass rattled against tile, then"
2"I yanked my arm free"
3"Faces blurred in soft neon,"
4"The man in front of"
5"He looked like he’d stepped"
6"A crooked smile hollowed his"
7"I stared at the signet"
8"Silk waistcoat, second-hand but perfectly"
9"A myth shot through with"
10"His jaw twitched."
11"He barked a laugh, too"
12"I obeyed because some habits"
13"He called over his shoulder."
14"The youngest barmaid eyed me,"
15"He watched her pour, then"
16"He let that settle."
17"His lips pursed at the"
18"Maggie set tumblers between us,"
19"I said, keeping my hands"
ratio0.867
100.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount3
totalSentences75
matches
0"If he noticed the crescent"
1"Because that was how Silas"
2"Now, I stepped through the"
ratio0.04
100.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences25
technicalSentenceCount1
matches
0"His lips pursed at the memory, as if chasing the last smoke from an old cigarette."
13.89% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags9
uselessAdditionCount2
matches
0"The truth surfaced, trembling"
1"he asked, voice stripped of irony"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags3
fancyCount0
fancyTags(empty)
dialogueSentences61
tagDensity0.049
leniency0.098
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
83.7837%