Run: 2026-02-19-01KHTRN2XTYKQ3SGJTW7TP9C8W

Run Details

Duration:
13.5s
Cost:
$0.000700
Provider:
OpenAI

Model input

System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Mystery genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4414" name="Eva Kowalski" aliases="Eva, Evie" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Best Friend"> <eyeColor>green</eyeColor> <hair>curly red</hair> <height>5'4"</height> <age>26</age> <glasses>round glasses</glasses> <satchel>worn leather satchel full of books</satchel> <freckles>freckled complexion</freckles> <nervousHabit>tucking hair behind her left ear</nervousHabit> <description>Aurora's childhood friend and an occult researcher.</description> <backstory>Moved to London two years before Aurora and works as a research assistant at the British Museum's restricted archives. She holds a master's degree in Ancient History from Oxford.</backstory> </character> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> <item id="2004" name="Veil Compass" aliases="the Compass, shadow compass" type="Tool" origin="The Veil Market"> <casingMaterial>small brass compass</casingMaterial> <faceMarkings>face etched with protective sigils</faceMarkings> <needle>points toward the nearest supernatural rift or portal</needle> <patina>casing has a patina of verdigris</patina> <creator>crafted by a Shade artisan</creator> <description>A compass attuned to supernatural energy.</description> </item> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the mystery genre. A detective arrives at a crime scene in an unusual location. Something is wrong — the evidence doesn't add up. A colleague is present, offering a different interpretation. Through careful observation and deduction, the detective begins to see what others have missed. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
She pounded her fist into the narrow alley’s damp brick wall, voice hoarse with irritation. "Are you telling me there's no sign of him? No footprints, no blood? Absolutely nothing?" She spun around, eyes sharp and searching in the flickering orange haze of a battered streetlamp. My colleague, Detective Blake Moran, leaned casually against the graffiti-splattered bin, hands in his pockets. His slim figure looked oddly serene amid the chaos as he shrugged. "That's what the scene suggests. No signs of struggle, no disturbance outside the usual street grime." Harlow Quinn studied the area anew. The alley stretched just wider than her arm span, a crooked slit between two derelict warehouses. She fingered her leather watch, feeling its worn surface. The faint glow from the streetlamp flickered erratically, casting lengthy shadows that danced over the uneven pavement. Trash bags spilled over with broken glass, torn cardboard, remnants of a city that refused to sleep. The faint scent of rotten fruit mixed with damp concrete. Nothing about this looked like a typical violent escape. No contorted body. No blood spatter. But her instincts prickled—she didn't believe this was an ordinary disappearance. "Where's the victim’s blood?" she demanded, glancing at the narrow, uneven alley. "Or any sign he was dragged or cowered here?" Moran finally pushed off and twitched his brow. "No obvious signs. But look closer." His voice was quiet but insistent. He reached down, plucking at something just beyond her line of sight near a corner. The surface of the pavement was uneven, but a thin line of dust had gathered in the small groove. She crouched. The dust wasn't consistent throughout—some patches thicker than others, almost deliberate in pattern. Her eyes narrowed. "What am I missing?" He pointed subtly, fingers brushing the edge of a small, crumpled scrap of paper on the ground. She snatched it up, unfolding the yellowed, damp note. The handwriting was hurried, scrawled in a looping script. "Come where shadows breathe," it read. "The Veil waits." She whistled softly, grimace twisting her lips. "A message. For who? Or for me?" Moran shrugged. "Could be a joke. Or a warning." She shot him a look. "This makes no sense. Disappearances without blood, no signs of a struggle—yet someone left this cryptic note right here? Someone’s playing games." She circled the alley, scanning, ears pricked for any hint of sound beyond the distant hum of London night. The flickering lamp cast a dim glow over the cracked pavement. She caught a faint flicker—a slight shimmer from under a discarded tarp draped over a pile of debris. "Hold up." She knelt, fingers brushing the rough canvas aside. Beneath, a small brass object gleamed—an ornate compass with etchings of protective sigils around its face. Her eyes darted to Moran. "What do you make of this?" He stepped closer, frowning. "Looks like some kind of talisman or tool. The Veil Market's not short of enchanted odds and ends, but rare to find one left behind as evidence." She carefully picked it up, inspecting its smooth brass casing, noting the face etched with ancient symbols. The needle spun uncertainly, trembling but never quite settling. She checked the casing more closely, noticing a verdigris patina, as if it had been buried in the city’s dirt or subjected to some supernatural influence. "Seems like a supernatural tracking device," she murmured. "Points toward rifts or portals. Whoever made this knew their way around the occult." Moran’s expression darkened. "You think someone’s using enchanted objects to hide him?" She nodded. "Or to lure us. Carefully, she tucked the compass into her coat pocket. The note, still clutched loosely in her hand, felt heavy with secrets. "We need to find out what’s really going on here." As they turned to leave, a sudden roar echoled down the alley—a deep, guttural sound like a beast awakening from slumber. Quinn froze, every nerve on alert. "Did you hear that?" she asked sharply. Moran’s eyes darted to the shadows. "Sounded like... I don’t know. Something alive." The noise rolled again, this time unmuffled, vibrating the air with primal fury. Her instincts screamed escape, but her mind sharpens every moment. Something unnatural was stirring. Suddenly, from behind a leaning stack of crates, a figure lunged—a blur of tattered black cloak, sharp eyes, and tense muscle. The figure’s hand shot out, clutching a small, glowing object. "Freeze!" Quinn barked, raising her weapon. Her finger twitched, but her eyes flicked to the figure’s face—an older man, wild-haired, trembling, clutching what looked like an ancient crystal pulse in his palm. "Don’t!" he hissed, voice ragged. "You don’t understand—and you won’t believe what’s fucking coming." She hesitated. The man’s eyes burned with quiet terror, and her training kicked in. Yet, something told her he was more than a loose cannon—he knew what he was talking about. “The Rifts—they’re opening everywhere,” he continued, voice cracking. “And someone wants to keep us blind. I’ve got to warn you.” Moran stepped closer, cautious. "What are you talking about? Who are you? What’s the crystal for?" The man’s fingers tightened on the glowing shard. "It’s a key. To the Veil—what’s hidden behind it. Someone’s trying to tear it down. And all your patrols, your rules—they’re no good now." Quinn stared at him, her brow furrowed. The pieces didn’t add up. The note, the compass, the inexplicable silence—nothing clicked until she glanced at the trembling crystal. She edged forward, voice low. “You’re saying there’s a breach—something supernatural, and it’s linked to this place?” He hesitated an instant before nodding. Then, with trembling hands, he pressed the crystal to her palm. "Find Balor," he rasped. "He’s the only one who can close it." The sharp roar sounded again, closer, more ferocious. Quinn’s stomach clenched. Shadows twisted as the alley’s darkness thickened, like the city itself was breathing in anticipation. The man vanished behind a heap of trash. Quinn and Moran moved instinctively, guns raised. A sudden gust of cold wind swept through, carrying a faint, sulphurous smell. From behind the crates, a shadow loomed—massive, shifting, and alive. Her fingers curled around the compass as the creature’s low growl vibrated through her bones. Somewhere, a door to what she didn’t understand was already opening. And she had a fragment of a puzzle, incomplete but dangerous, firmly pressed into her hand.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
70.97% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags15
adverbTagCount2
adverbTags
0"She spun around [around]"
1"she asked sharply [sharply]"
dialogueSentences31
tagDensity0.484
leniency0.968
rawRatio0.133
effectiveRatio0.129
67.20% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1067
totalAiIsmAdverbs7
found
0
adverb"softly"
count1
1
adverb"carefully"
count2
2
adverb"loosely"
count1
3
adverb"really"
count1
4
adverb"sharply"
count1
5
adverb"suddenly"
count1
highlights
0"softly"
1"carefully"
2"loosely"
3"really"
4"sharply"
5"suddenly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
15.65% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1067
totalAiIsms18
found
0
word"absolutely"
count1
1
word"flickered"
count1
2
word"scanning"
count1
3
word"flicker"
count1
4
word"etched"
count1
5
word"flicked"
count1
6
word"crystal"
count4
7
word"pulse"
count1
8
word"furrowed"
count1
9
word"silence"
count1
10
word"stomach"
count1
11
word"anticipation"
count1
12
word"loomed"
count1
13
word"vibrated"
count1
14
word"firmly"
count1
highlights
0"absolutely"
1"flickered"
2"scanning"
3"flicker"
4"etched"
5"flicked"
6"crystal"
7"pulse"
8"furrowed"
9"silence"
10"stomach"
11"anticipation"
12"loomed"
13"vibrated"
14"firmly"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"eyes widened/narrowed"
count1
highlights
0"eyes narrowed"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells1
narrationSentences69
matches
0"g in anticipation"
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount1
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences69
filterMatches
0"watch"
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences80
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen42
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1049
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions15
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
99.94% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions18
wordCount799
uniqueNames6
maxNameDensity1
worstName"Moran"
maxWindowNameDensity2
worstWindowName"Moran"
discoveredNames
Detective1
Blake1
Moran8
Quinn6
London1
Veil1
persons
0"Detective"
1"Blake"
2"Moran"
3"Quinn"
places
0"London"
1"Veil"
globalScore0.999
windowScore1
41.30% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences46
glossingSentenceCount2
matches
0"looked like a typical violent escape"
1"looked like an ancient crystal pulse in h"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches1
per1kWords0.953
wordCount1049
matches
0"not short of enchanted odds and ends, but rare to find one left behind as evidence"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences80
matches(empty)
96.41% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs37
mean28.35
std13.82
cv0.487
sampleLengths
046
143
265
336
421
554
622
735
89
914
109
1127
1248
1337
1431
1552
1622
1712
1837
1927
207
2113
2227
2331
2432
2514
2631
2720
2816
2932
3027
3117
3217
3312
3426
3538
3642
90.01% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount3
totalSentences69
matches
0"was hurried"
1"been buried"
2"hidden"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount2
totalVerbs158
matches
0"was talking"
1"was breathing"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount12
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences12
totalSentences80
ratio0.15
matches
0"But her instincts prickled—she didn't believe this was an ordinary disappearance."
1"The dust wasn't consistent throughout—some patches thicker than others, almost deliberate in pattern."
2"She caught a faint flicker—a slight shimmer from under a discarded tarp draped over a pile of debris."
3"Beneath, a small brass object gleamed—an ornate compass with etchings of protective sigils around its face."
4"As they turned to leave, a sudden roar echoled down the alley—a deep, guttural sound like a beast awakening from slumber. Quinn froze, every nerve on alert."
5"Suddenly, from behind a leaning stack of crates, a figure lunged—a blur of tattered black cloak, sharp eyes, and tense muscle. The figure’s hand shot out, clutching a small, glowing object."
6"\"Freeze!\" Quinn barked, raising her weapon. Her finger twitched, but her eyes flicked to the figure’s face—an older man, wild-haired, trembling, clutching what looked like an ancient crystal pulse in his palm."
7"She hesitated. The man’s eyes burned with quiet terror, and her training kicked in. Yet, something told her he was more than a loose cannon—he knew what he was talking about."
8"To the Veil—what’s hidden behind it."
9"And all your patrols, your rules—they’re no good now.\""
10"Quinn stared at him, her brow furrowed. The pieces didn’t add up. The note, the compass, the inexplicable silence—nothing clicked until she glanced at the trembling crystal."
11"The man vanished behind a heap of trash. Quinn and Moran moved instinctively, guns raised. A sudden gust of cold wind swept through, carrying a faint, sulphurous smell. From behind the crates, a shadow loomed—massive, shifting, and alive."
93.20% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount516
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount24
adverbRatio0.046511627906976744
lyAdverbCount11
lyAdverbRatio0.02131782945736434
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences80
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences80
mean13.11
std9.34
cv0.713
sampleLengths
015
131
215
312
416
56
616
79
817
917
1010
119
123
133
1411
1512
169
178
1812
1915
2019
212
2213
233
244
2517
269
279
286
293
307
317
322
337
345
3522
3619
3711
3818
3910
4016
415
426
434
4427
4517
469
4726
488
4914
80.83% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats2
diversityRatio0.5
totalSentences80
uniqueOpeners40
53.76% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount1
totalSentences62
matches
0"Suddenly, from behind a leaning"
ratio0.016
32.90% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount29
totalSentences62
matches
0"She pounded her fist into"
1"She spun around, eyes sharp"
2"My colleague, Detective Blake Moran,"
3"His slim figure looked oddly"
4"She fingered her leather watch,"
5"she demanded, glancing at the"
6"His voice was quiet but"
7"He reached down, plucking at"
8"Her eyes narrowed."
9"He pointed subtly, fingers brushing"
10"She snatched it up, unfolding"
11"She whistled softly, grimace twisting"
12"She shot him a look."
13"She circled the alley, scanning,"
14"She caught a faint flicker—a"
15"She knelt, fingers brushing the"
16"Her eyes darted to Moran."
17"He stepped closer, frowning."
18"She carefully picked it up,"
19"She checked the casing more"
ratio0.468
48.71% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount51
totalSentences62
matches
0"She pounded her fist into"
1"She spun around, eyes sharp"
2"My colleague, Detective Blake Moran,"
3"His slim figure looked oddly"
4"Harlow Quinn studied the area"
5"The alley stretched just wider"
6"She fingered her leather watch,"
7"The faint glow from the"
8"Trash bags spilled over with"
9"The faint scent of rotten"
10"Nothing about this looked like"
11"she demanded, glancing at the"
12"Moran finally pushed off and"
13"His voice was quiet but"
14"He reached down, plucking at"
15"The surface of the pavement"
16"The dust wasn't consistent throughout—some"
17"Her eyes narrowed."
18"He pointed subtly, fingers brushing"
19"She snatched it up, unfolding"
ratio0.823
80.65% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences62
matches
0"To the Veil—what’s hidden behind"
ratio0.016
89.95% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences27
technicalSentenceCount2
matches
0"The faint glow from the streetlamp flickered erratically, casting lengthy shadows that danced over the uneven pavement."
1"She checked the casing more closely, noticing a verdigris patina, as if it had been buried in the city’s dirt or subjected to some supernatural influence."
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags11
uselessAdditionCount3
matches
0"She knelt, fingers brushing the rough canvas aside"
1"he hissed, voice ragged"
2"he continued, voice cracking"
0.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags6
fancyCount5
fancyTags
0"she demanded (demand)"
1"she murmured (murmur)"
2"Quinn barked (bark)"
3"he hissed (hiss)"
4"he continued (continue)"
dialogueSentences31
tagDensity0.194
leniency0.387
rawRatio0.833
effectiveRatio0.323
75.3828%