Run: 2026-02-19-01KHTRNFD66NSGBPHM8QP4PAA7

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Duration:
31.1s
Cost:
$0.001980
Provider:
Hyperbolic

Model input

System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Horror genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the horror genre. A character is alone in a strange, isolated place at night. They came here for a reason, but something feels off from the moment they arrive. The wrongness builds slowly — sounds that shouldn't be there, things that move at the edge of vision, a growing certainty that they are not alone. Build tension through restraint, not through gore. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for the character and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
Rory stepped out of the taxi and onto the deserted road, the crunch of gravel beneath her feet echoing through the stillness. The driver, a gruff Londoner, eyed her in the rearview mirror. "You sure you want to get out here, love?" he asked, his tone laced with doubt. The darkness of Richmond Park seemed to swallow her whole, a living, breathing entity that stirred at her presence. She surveyed the area, the faint moonlight casting an eerie glow on the landscape. Ancient oak standing stones loomed like sentinels, marking the boundary of the Fae Grove. "Fifteen quid," the driver said, his voice cutting through the night air. Rory handed over the cash, the transaction performed with a quiet efficiency that didn't match the unease growing inside her. The taxi drove off, leaving her alone in the darkness. As the sound of the engine faded, Rory took a deep breath. She had come to the Fae Grove seeking answers – about the mysterious pendant given to her, about the strange occurrences in her life, about the whispers in her mind that seemed to be growing louder by the day. According to the books and research she had devoured, the Fae realm was a place of great power, and the Heartstone Pendant was the key to unlocking it. But now, standing at the threshold of this mystical place, she couldn't shake off the feeling that something was off. A rustling in the bushes nearby made her spin around, her heart jittering in her chest. She strained her eyes to see into the darkness, but there was nothing. The trees creaked, and leaves whispered to each other, a soothing melody that only seemed to heighten her anxiety. Rory felt a chill run down her spine as the air seemed to thicken around her, heavy with an unseen presence. She fidgeted with the pendant, the silver chain glinting in the moonlight as she slipped it over her head. The stone pulsed, warmth emanating from it, but it brought little comfort. She took her first step into the Grove, the silence swallowing her like a shroud. Her feet seemed to make no sound on the earth, as if the very ground was absorbing the noise. The quiet grew around her, a living thing that pressed in on her from all sides. With each step, the feeling of being watched intensified. Rory slowed her pace, scanning the shadows. The trees seemed to lean in, their branches tangling above her like skeletal fingers. Her breath quickened, her ears straining to catch any sound that didn't belong. She stopped at the center of the clearing, her eyes narrowing as she took in the pulsing wildflowers that bloomed year-round in this mystical place. It was almost too perfect, too tidy. A primeval fear stirred in her chest, warning her that something was waiting, watching, and she was just a token in its game. Suddenly, a whisper seemed to graze her ear, a soft, gentle voice that whispered a single word: "Welcome." Rory spun around, but the voice was gone, lost in the rustling of the leaves. Her skin crawled as she felt eyes upon her, boring into her soul. The pendant's pulse quickened, as if it sensed her fear. In a flash of comprehension, she understood why she was here. The pendant was just the beginning, a catalyst for forces that lurked beyond the veil of reality. And she had walked right into its web, like a moth to flame. The realization sent her pulsing fear into overdrive, and her body took over, responding with an instinctive will to survive. Rory turned to run, but her feet felt rooted to the spot, as if some unseen force had claimed her. The whisper seemed to echo in her mind once more: "Welcome."
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags4
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences4
tagDensity1
leniency1
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
84.20% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount633
totalAiIsmAdverbs2
found
0
adverb"very"
count1
1
adverb"suddenly"
count1
highlights
0"very"
1"suddenly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
0.00% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount633
totalAiIsms17
found
0
word"echoing"
count1
1
word"loomed"
count1
2
word"sentinels"
count1
3
word"chill"
count1
4
word"down her spine"
count1
5
word"glinting"
count1
6
word"pulsed"
count1
7
word"warmth"
count1
8
word"silence"
count1
9
word"scanning"
count1
10
word"quickened"
count2
11
word"perfect"
count1
12
word"whisper"
count2
13
word"pulse"
count1
14
word"echo"
count1
highlights
0"echoing"
1"loomed"
2"sentinels"
3"chill"
4"down her spine"
5"glinting"
6"pulsed"
7"warmth"
8"silence"
9"scanning"
10"quickened"
11"perfect"
12"whisper"
13"pulse"
14"echo"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells1
narrationSentences38
matches
0"felt a chill"
0.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount8
narrationSentences38
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences38
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen38
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords633
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions3
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
93.55% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions18
wordCount620
uniqueNames8
maxNameDensity1.13
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity1.5
worstWindowName"Fae"
discoveredNames
Londoner1
Richmond1
Park1
Fae3
Grove3
Rory7
Heartstone1
Pendant1
persons
0"Londoner"
1"Rory"
2"Pendant"
places
0"Richmond"
1"Park"
2"Fae"
3"Grove"
globalScore0.935
windowScore1
84.21% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences38
glossingSentenceCount1
matches
0"mind that seemed to be growing louder by the day"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount633
matches(empty)
78.95% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences38
matches
0"feeling that something"
49.54% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs9
mean70.33
std22.74
cv0.323
sampleLengths
049
147
242
399
4100
559
689
756
892
96.03% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount1
totalSentences38
matches
0"was gone"
86.04% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount2
totalVerbs117
matches
0"was absorbing"
1"was waiting"
67.67% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount1
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences1
totalSentences38
ratio0.026
matches
0"She had come to the Fae Grove seeking answers – about the mysterious pendant given to her, about the strange occurrences in her life, about the whispers in her mind that seemed to be growing louder by the day."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount620
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount16
adverbRatio0.025806451612903226
lyAdverbCount2
lyAdverbRatio0.0032258064516129032
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences38
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences38
mean16.66
std6.67
cv0.401
sampleLengths
022
111
216
319
414
514
612
720
810
912
1039
1128
1220
1316
1413
1519
1621
1719
1812
1915
2019
2116
229
237
2414
2513
2625
277
2823
2933
3013
3110
3211
3317
3413
3520
3620
3711
70.18% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats0
diversityRatio0.42105263157894735
totalSentences38
uniqueOpeners16
87.72% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount1
totalSentences38
matches
0"Suddenly, a whisper seemed to"
ratio0.026
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount11
totalSentences38
matches
0"he asked, his tone laced"
1"She surveyed the area, the"
2"She had come to the"
3"She strained her eyes to"
4"She fidgeted with the pendant,"
5"She took her first step"
6"Her feet seemed to make"
7"Her breath quickened, her ears"
8"She stopped at the center"
9"It was almost too perfect,"
10"Her skin crawled as she"
ratio0.289
65.26% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount30
totalSentences38
matches
0"Rory stepped out of the"
1"The driver, a gruff Londoner,"
2"he asked, his tone laced"
3"The darkness of Richmond Park"
4"She surveyed the area, the"
5"the driver said, his voice"
6"Rory handed over the cash,"
7"The taxi drove off, leaving"
8"She had come to the"
9"A rustling in the bushes"
10"She strained her eyes to"
11"The trees creaked, and leaves"
12"Rory felt a chill run"
13"She fidgeted with the pendant,"
14"The stone pulsed, warmth emanating"
15"She took her first step"
16"Her feet seemed to make"
17"The quiet grew around her,"
18"Rory slowed her pace, scanning"
19"The trees seemed to lean"
ratio0.789
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences38
matches(empty)
ratio0
0.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences31
technicalSentenceCount7
matches
0"The darkness of Richmond Park seemed to swallow her whole, a living, breathing entity that stirred at her presence."
1"Rory handed over the cash, the transaction performed with a quiet efficiency that didn't match the unease growing inside her."
2"She had come to the Fae Grove seeking answers – about the mysterious pendant given to her, about the strange occurrences in her life, about the whispers in her …"
3"A rustling in the bushes nearby made her spin around, her heart jittering in her chest."
4"She stopped at the center of the clearing, her eyes narrowing as she took in the pulsing wildflowers that bloomed year-round in this mystical place."
5"A primeval fear stirred in her chest, warning her that something was waiting, watching, and she was just a token in its game."
6"The pendant's pulse quickened, as if it sensed her fear."
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags4
uselessAdditionCount1
matches
0"the driver said, his voice cutting through the night air"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags2
fancyCount0
fancyTags(empty)
dialogueSentences4
tagDensity0.5
leniency1
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
75.4448%