Run: 2026-02-19-01KHTRNFN3JYZQS5BT1SCZCCQT

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Duration:
46.5s
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System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Romance genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4415" name="Lucien Moreau" aliases="Lucien, Luc, the Frenchman" pronouns="he/him" species="Half-Demon" storyRole="Ally"> <eyeColor>heterochromatic — one amber, one black</eyeColor> <hair>slicked-back platinum blond</hair> <height>5'11"</height> <age>32</age> <cane>ivory-handled cane that conceals a thin blade</cane> <dress>tailored charcoal suits</dress> <description>An impeccably dressed fixer and information broker in London's supernatural underworld. He speaks four languages fluently.</description> <backstory>Born in Marseille to a human mother and a demon father from the realm of Avaros.</backstory> </character> <location id="858" name="Eva's Flat" aliases="Eva's place, the flat on Brick Lane" realm="Earth"> <cat>tabby cat named Ptolemy</cat> <security>three deadbolts on the front door</security> <description>A cramped one-bedroom flat above a curry house on Brick Lane, East London. Every surface is covered with books, scrolls, and research notes.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the romance genre. Two people who parted on complicated terms are forced together again when one shows up unannounced at the other's flat. There's history between them — attraction, hurt, and things left unsaid. Write the scene from the moment the door opens. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The door swung open with a reluctant creak, and her heart skipped like a child running away from home. Aurora stood in the cramped entry of Eva's flat, the mess of books and scrolls providing a chaotic backdrop. Ptolemy, the tabby cat, sauntered past her legs, weaving in and out with an uncaring disinterest. The aroma of curry wafted through the air, its spices tangling with the tension coiling in her gut. Lucien Moreau leaned against the doorframe, his tailored charcoal suit clinging to his form like a second skin. The slicked-back platinum blond hair caught a slant of the fading light, framing his face in an almost angelic glow that starkly contrasted the hellish reputation he carried in London's supernatural underbelly. His heterochromatic eyes—one an unnerving amber and the other a soulless black—remained fixed on hers, as if gauging whether she’d slam the door in his impeccably polished face. “What are you doing here?” she snapped, her voice sharper than she intended. The words felt like blades in the air, cutting through the awkward silence that hung between them. “Is that any way to greet an old friend?” A smirk tugged at the corner of his mouth. He had always enjoyed poking at her temper, a sport he apparently had not outgrown. “Friend?” She arched an eyebrow, crossing her arms defiantly. “You might want to check the dictionary on that one.” “Touché.” He straightened, pushing off the door, and his expression grew serious. “I came to discuss something important.” “Important? Or just convenient?” she shot back, still lingering in the doorway, unwilling to let him cross the threshold into her sanctuary. “Do you truly believe I’d come here for no reason? Considering our... history?” He took a step closer, the distance closing with an intensity that sent a flicker of heat through her. “It’s not a social call, Aurora.” Rory swallowed, a sharpness lingering in her throat. The past hung in the air like smoke from a extinguished flame, bittersweet and invisible but omnipresent. She dared to meet his gaze, the memory of darker days surfacing unbidden—his laughter echoing in her mind, the passion they shared, and the heartbreak that had split them apart. “Then spare me the theatrics,” she replied, trying to maintain the steely edge to her voice. “Whatever you have to say, do it—and make it quick.” “Do you really think you want that?” he countered, his brows furrowing as he looked at her, searching for something deeper beneath her bravado. Accepting the challenge, Rory inhaled, and stood a fraction taller. “I don’t want your riddles, Lucien. Just spit it out already.” She gestured wildly, frustration boiling beneath her skin. The burgeoning silence felt thick, a spider’s web woven delicately between them. Lucien stepped fully into the cramped living space, his posture still relaxed but his gaze locked on hers. He seemed to weigh her words—even the unguarded ones—and the moment stretched with the tension of unaddressed feelings. “You need to know that I’m being followed,” he said, his casual tone fracturing under the seriousness of the statement. “I thought of you... or rather, I thought of calling you before anyone else.” Her heart clattered in her chest, anxiety tinged with something darker—dread. “That isn’t exactly the kind of news that requires a personal visit.” “I needed to see you.” His tone shifted, dropping any pretense. “I know we haven’t exactly parted as friends.” “I’m not your safety net,” she replied, bitterness dripping from each word. “You made your choices.” “And I regret them. But I’m not here to dwell on the past, I’m here for you, for us. If you’ll even have me.” His jaw tightened, the vulnerability in his expression a rarity, almost foreign. A shard of guilt twisted in her chest. “What do you want me to say?” she asked, the walls threatening to tumble down as the flood of emotions swelled within her. “Just listen.” He stepped closer, his voice dropping to the velvety depth she remembered. “Some very dangerous people want something from me, and I’m not sure how much longer I can protect you from them.” “Protect me? Don’t be ridiculous.” The fire in her veins burned hotter; the idea sent a chill through her. “If they’re after you, then I’m already in the crosshairs. I’m just a delivery girl now.” He frowned, shaking his head slowly. “You’re so much more than that, Aurora. If you would only allow yourself to remember…” “Forget it.” She waved him off, the hurt spilling into her voice despite her best efforts. “You don’t get to come back into my life when it suits you. Not now. Not ever.” “This isn’t about me, it’s about you!” He stepped between her and the door, blocking her escape. “You deserve to know what you’re throwing away.” “It’s not throwing away if I’ve rebuilt something that was broken!” she spat, and an ache bloomed in her throat. Lucien had always been so good at peeling back all her protective layers. “You’re not worth the risk, and you never have been.” “Is that so? Or are you clinging to those walls you built around yourself—afraid to let go?” The accusation incited a firestorm of emotions—resentment, fear, but beneath it all, an undeniable spark of the attraction she’d fought to suppress. “None of this matters if you’re in danger.” She avoided his gaze, focusing hard on the grimy wall where piles of half-read books leaned precariously against each other. “What do you expect me to do? Kiss you and act like nothing has changed?” “The kiss was never the problem, Aurora.” He shifted, his posture relaxing ever so slightly, but the intensity remained simmering in those heterochromatic pools. “It was everything else. The ghosts of our past.” As words hung silently between them like unwelcome guests, she felt that familiar pull—an aching desire to give in, to succumb to the past, intermixed with a reminder of the pain that had severed them apart. “It’s different now.” His voice was soft, tinged with a hint of desperation. “I know that. But what if we placed all those shadows on the table? We could fight them together.” “Together?” she repeated, the word bitter on her tongue. “Is that what you really want? Us, side by side? When we couldn’t even stay in the same room three years ago without tearing each other apart?” His face hardened for a moment before he closed the space between them, invading her personal bubble in a way that made her entire body pulse with warmth. “There’s danger, Rory. And it’s not just me; it’s threatening everything you’ve built since I left. You need to decide if you’re ready to face it.” “I already have enough to deal with,” she said, voice cracking, tears stinging her eyes against her will. “My life isn’t about you anymore. You’re not going to waltz back in and—” “I may not have a right to demand anything from you, but I won't let you walk away when I know you care.” He lowered his voice, now ghosting her ear. “You know this is bigger than just us.” Rory shivered at the intimacy, her heart racing. The last remnants of anger faded in the heat of his closeness. She searched his face for any sign of deception, but found only sincerity marred by desperation. The rush of old memories collided with her better judgement. “I won’t be a pawn in your game.” “Then let me show you what you mean to me.” He stepped back slightly, a teasing grin breaking through the tension. “Or are you angry because I’m in trouble and need your help?” Before she could form a retort, the door burst open again, rattling in its frame. An unfamiliar figure stood framed by the doorway, a menacing presence that eclipsed the sunlight. “Lucien,” the new arrival snarled, the threat palpable as a blade against skin. The shadows shifted in the room, colliding with the warmth they had just ignited, as Rory’s world tilted precariously on its axis. Her heart pounded wildly, fear crashing in like a fierce tide as she felt the full weight of unmade choices pressing down upon her with unmerciful force. “Get behind me,” Lucien said sharply, his body instinctively placing itself between her and the danger now standing before them. She barely had time to react, adrenaline kicking in like a switch flipped. Everything around them shrank to that one point—the door that had just opened, the figure standing there, the past they hadn’t resolved, and the dangerous future that loomed ahead. The game had begun anew.
total_cost0.00147004

Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
88.89% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags27
adverbTagCount3
adverbTags
0"She gestured wildly [wildly]"
1"He stepped back [back]"
2"Lucien said sharply [sharply]"
dialogueSentences52
tagDensity0.519
leniency1
rawRatio0.111
effectiveRatio0.111
72.34% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1446
totalAiIsmAdverbs8
found
0
adverb"truly"
count1
1
adverb"really"
count2
2
adverb"very"
count1
3
adverb"slowly"
count1
4
adverb"ever so slightly"
count1
5
adverb"slightly"
count1
6
adverb"sharply"
count1
highlights
0"truly"
1"really"
2"very"
3"slowly"
4"ever so slightly"
5"slightly"
6"sharply"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
0.00% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1446
totalAiIsms29
found
0
word"chaotic"
count1
1
word"tension"
count3
2
word"silence"
count2
3
word"eyebrow"
count1
4
word"sanctuary"
count1
5
word"intensity"
count2
6
word"flicker"
count1
7
word"echoing"
count1
8
word"furrowing"
count1
9
word"tinged"
count2
10
word"chill"
count1
11
word"simmering"
count1
12
word"familiar"
count1
13
word"desire"
count1
14
word"reminder"
count1
15
word"pulse"
count1
16
word"warmth"
count2
17
word"racing"
count1
18
word"pawn"
count1
19
word"palpable"
count1
20
word"weight"
count1
21
word"resolved"
count1
22
word"loomed"
count1
highlights
0"chaotic"
1"tension"
2"silence"
3"eyebrow"
4"sanctuary"
5"intensity"
6"flicker"
7"echoing"
8"furrowing"
9"tinged"
10"chill"
11"simmering"
12"familiar"
13"desire"
14"reminder"
15"pulse"
16"warmth"
17"racing"
18"pawn"
19"palpable"
20"weight"
21"resolved"
22"loomed"
66.67% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches2
maxInWindow2
found
0
label"hung in the air"
count1
1
label"sent a shiver through"
count1
highlights
0"hung in the air"
1"sent a chill through"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells1
narrationSentences62
matches
0"e with warmth"
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount1
narrationSentences62
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences86
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen37
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1433
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions15
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions12
wordCount926
uniqueNames6
maxNameDensity0.43
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity1
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
Eva1
Moreau1
London1
Rory4
Accepting1
Lucien4
persons
0"Eva"
1"Moreau"
2"Rory"
3"Lucien"
places
0"London"
globalScore1
windowScore1
27.05% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences61
glossingSentenceCount3
matches
0"as if gauging whether she’d slam the door in his impeccably polished face"
1"felt like blades in the air, cutting th"
2"er, a sport he apparently had not outgrown"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1433
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences86
matches(empty)
86.45% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs44
mean32.57
std14.74
cv0.453
sampleLengths
072
178
230
333
419
518
622
738
855
926
1024
1129
1248
1334
1423
1519
1616
1744
1823
1935
2035
2121
2233
2325
2443
2517
2622
2743
2833
2936
3032
3136
3254
3332
3439
3546
368
3733
3830
3913
4049
4120
4242
435
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences62
matches(empty)
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs170
matches(empty)
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount9
semicolonCount2
flaggedSentences9
totalSentences86
ratio0.105
matches
0"His heterochromatic eyes—one an unnerving amber and the other a soulless black—remained fixed on hers, as if gauging whether she’d slam the door in his impeccably polished face."
1"She dared to meet his gaze, the memory of darker days surfacing unbidden—his laughter echoing in her mind, the passion they shared, and the heartbreak that had split them apart."
2"He seemed to weigh her words—even the unguarded ones—and the moment stretched with the tension of unaddressed feelings."
3"Her heart clattered in her chest, anxiety tinged with something darker—dread."
4"“Protect me? Don’t be ridiculous.” The fire in her veins burned hotter; the idea sent a chill through her."
5"The accusation incited a firestorm of emotions—resentment, fear, but beneath it all, an undeniable spark of the attraction she’d fought to suppress."
6"As words hung silently between them like unwelcome guests, she felt that familiar pull—an aching desire to give in, to succumb to the past, intermixed with a reminder of the pain that had severed them apart."
7"“There’s danger, Rory. And it’s not just me; it’s threatening everything you’ve built since I left. You need to decide if you’re ready to face it.”"
8"Everything around them shrank to that one point—the door that had just opened, the figure standing there, the past they hadn’t resolved, and the dangerous future that loomed ahead."
95.59% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount937
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount41
adverbRatio0.04375667022411953
lyAdverbCount20
lyAdverbRatio0.021344717182497332
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences86
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences86
mean16.66
std7.35
cv0.441
sampleLengths
019
119
216
318
418
532
628
713
817
918
1015
119
1210
1312
146
1522
1632
176
188
1917
2030
2116
2210
2324
2410
2519
2612
2718
2818
2920
3014
3111
3212
3311
348
3512
364
3736
388
3923
4014
4121
4219
4316
446
4515
4616
4717
4817
498
75.19% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats2
diversityRatio0.46511627906976744
totalSentences86
uniqueOpeners40
0.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount0
totalSentences62
matches(empty)
ratio0
0.65% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount34
totalSentences62
matches
0"His heterochromatic eyes—one an unnerving"
1"she snapped, her voice sharper"
2"He had always enjoyed poking"
3"She arched an eyebrow, crossing"
4"He straightened, pushing off the"
5"she shot back, still lingering"
6"He took a step closer,"
7"She dared to meet his"
8"she replied, trying to maintain"
9"he countered, his brows furrowing"
10"She gestured wildly, frustration boiling"
11"He seemed to weigh her"
12"he said, his casual tone"
13"Her heart clattered in her"
14"His tone shifted, dropping any"
15"she replied, bitterness dripping from"
16"His jaw tightened, the vulnerability"
17"she asked, the walls threatening"
18"He stepped closer, his voice"
19"He frowned, shaking his head"
ratio0.548
0.00% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount59
totalSentences62
matches
0"The door swung open with"
1"Aurora stood in the cramped"
2"Ptolemy, the tabby cat, sauntered"
3"The aroma of curry wafted"
4"Lucien Moreau leaned against the"
5"The slicked-back platinum blond hair"
6"His heterochromatic eyes—one an unnerving"
7"she snapped, her voice sharper"
8"The words felt like blades"
9"A smirk tugged at the"
10"He had always enjoyed poking"
11"She arched an eyebrow, crossing"
12"He straightened, pushing off the"
13"she shot back, still lingering"
14"He took a step closer,"
15"Rory swallowed, a sharpness lingering"
16"The past hung in the"
17"She dared to meet his"
18"she replied, trying to maintain"
19"he countered, his brows furrowing"
ratio0.952
80.65% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences62
matches
0"Before she could form a"
ratio0.016
0.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences29
technicalSentenceCount6
matches
0"The aroma of curry wafted through the air, its spices tangling with the tension coiling in her gut."
1"His heterochromatic eyes—one an unnerving amber and the other a soulless black—remained fixed on hers, as if gauging whether she’d slam the door in his impeccab…"
2"She dared to meet his gaze, the memory of darker days surfacing unbidden—his laughter echoing in her mind, the passion they shared, and the heartbreak that had …"
3"As words hung silently between them like unwelcome guests, she felt that familiar pull—an aching desire to give in, to succumb to the past, intermixed with a re…"
4"His face hardened for a moment before he closed the space between them, invading her personal bubble in a way that made her entire body pulse with warmth."
5"Everything around them shrank to that one point—the door that had just opened, the figure standing there, the past they hadn’t resolved, and the dangerous futur…"
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags27
uselessAdditionCount9
matches
0"she snapped, her voice sharper than she intended"
1"she replied, trying to maintain the steely edge to her voice"
2"he said, his casual tone fracturing under the seriousness of the statement"
3"she replied, bitterness dripping from each word"
4"He stepped, his voice dropping to the velvety depth she remembered"
5"She waved, the hurt spilling into her voice despite her best efforts"
6"she spat, and an ache bloomed in her throat"
7"she said, voice cracking, tears stinging her eyes against her will"
8"He stepped back, a teasing grin breaking through the tension"
73.08% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags10
fancyCount4
fancyTags
0"she snapped (snap)"
1"she spat (spit)"
2"she repeated (repeat)"
3"the new arrival snarled (snarl)"
dialogueSentences52
tagDensity0.192
leniency0.385
rawRatio0.4
effectiveRatio0.154
68.8848%