Run: 2026-02-19-01KHTRNJE8PSGK3299WDBN9HY7

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34.0s
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You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Literary Fiction genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4413" name="Silas Blackwood" aliases="Silas, Si, the Spymaster" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Mentor"> <eyeColor>hazel</eyeColor> <hair>grey-streaked auburn</hair> <height>6'1"</height> <age>58</age> <beard>neatly trimmed, matching his grey-streaked auburn hair</beard> <limp>slight limp in his left leg from an old knee injury</limp> <signetRing>silver signet ring, always worn on his right hand</signetRing> <description>Silas is a retired intelligence operative turned bar owner. He carries himself with quiet authority.</description> <backstory>Former MI6 field agent who retired after a botched operation in Prague left him with a permanent knee injury. He opened "The Raven's Nest" bar in Soho as a front for his network of contacts.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the literary fiction genre. Two old friends who haven't seen each other in years run into each other unexpectedly at a bar. One of them has changed significantly. Through their conversation and the tension between who they were and who they've become, reveal the weight of time and unspoken regret. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

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The glass slipped from her fingers before she could catch it, shattering against the sticky floorboards. A sharp sting bit into her palm—blood welled in the crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist, the one she’d earned at eight years old when she’d tried to climb the garden wall after the neighbour’s cat. The same scar Evan had once traced with his thumb, whispering, *You’ll always carry me with you, won’t you?* Rory didn’t look down. She kept her eyes on the man across the bar, the one who hadn’t aged a day in the way that mattered—same auburn hair, same hazel eyes that missed nothing, same silver signet ring glinting under the dim lights of *The Raven’s Nest*. Silas Blackwood. Si. The man who’d taught her how to pick a lock with a bobby pin and a prayer, who’d slipped her fifty quid on her eighteenth birthday with the words, *For emergencies. Or bad decisions. Whichever comes first.* He hadn’t moved. Just stood there, one hand resting on the back of a barstool, the other wrapped around a glass of something amber and expensive. The years had carved lines into his face, deepened the grey at his temples, but his posture was the same—shoulders squared, weight balanced on the balls of his feet, like he was always half a second away from action. “You’re bleeding,” he said. “So are you.” She nodded at his left leg, the one that carried the limp from Prague. “Still hurts when it rains?” A ghost of a smile. “Only when I lie about it.” The bar hummed around them—low chatter, the clink of glasses, the occasional burst of laughter from a group of suits in the corner. None of it touched the space between them. Rory wiped her palm on her jeans, leaving a dark smear. “What are you doing here? Thought you’d be in some safe house by now, counting your war medals.” “Retired.” Silas lifted his glass, took a slow sip. “Mostly.” “Right. And I’m the Queen of Sheba.” “You always did have a flair for the dramatic.” His gaze flicked to her wrist, to the fresh blood welling in the old scar. “That’s new.” She curled her fingers into a fist. “Accidents happen.” “Not to you.” He set his glass down. “You used to dodge bullets like they were raindrops.” “People change.” “Do they?” He leaned forward, just slightly. “Or do they just get better at hiding?” The air between them thickened, charged with all the things they weren’t saying. The last time they’d seen each other, she’d been twenty-one, wild-eyed and full of fire, standing on the platform at Paddington Station with a duffel bag and a one-way ticket to nowhere. He’d been there, of course. Silas was always there when it mattered. He’d pressed an envelope into her hand—*For when you need to disappear*—and told her, *Don’t let the bastards win.* She’d let him down anyway. Rory exhaled through her nose, sharp and controlled. “You going to tell me why you’re really here, or are we just going to stand around bleeding on your nice floor?” Silas studied her for a long moment, then reached into his jacket. For a heartbeat, she thought he was going for a gun. Old habits. Instead, he pulled out a folded piece of paper and slid it across the bar. “Eva’s looking for you.” The name hit like a punch to the gut. Eva. Her childhood friend, the one who’d pulled her out of Cardiff after Evan’s fists had started leaving bruises in the shape of his rings. The one who’d held her hair back when the nightmares got too loud. The one she’d ghosted three years ago when the guilt of dragging her into her mess had become too heavy to carry. Rory didn’t touch the paper. “She’s got a funny way of showing it.” “She’s tried calling. Texting. Even sent a carrier pigeon, though I think that was more of a joke.” “She always did have a flair for the dramatic.” Silas didn’t smile. “She’s worried.” “She shouldn’t be.” “That’s not how worry works, Rory.” The use of her name—her real name, not the one she’d been using like a shield—made her flinch. She reached for the paper, unfolded it. Eva’s handwriting, looping and familiar: *I know you don’t want to see me. But I need to. Please.* “She’s in London,” Silas said. “Staying at the Savoy. Room 412.” Rory crumpled the note in her fist. “You always did have a soft spot for strays.” “And you always did have a knack for running.” He tilted his head, studying her. “What happened to Laila?” The name was a blade between her ribs. Laila. The alias she’d taken when she’d fled to Paris, then Berlin, then back to London under a different name, a different face. Laila had been bold. Laila hadn’t flinched at shadows. Laila had been free. Rory had left her in a hostel in Prague, curled up on a thin mattress with a bottle of cheap vodka and a one-way ticket to oblivion. “She grew up,” Rory said. Silas exhaled, slow and measured. “Bullshit.” “Excuse me?” “You heard me.” He leaned in, voice dropping. “Laila didn’t grow up. She got scared. And now you’re hiding behind *Aurora* like it’s some kind of armour.” Rory’s pulse spiked. “You don’t know what you’re talking about.” “Don’t I?” His eyes darkened. “I know you. Better than you think. And I know when someone’s running from more than just their past.” The words hung between them, heavy and unavoidable. Rory wanted to argue, to throw something, to storm out and disappear into the London night like she had a hundred times before. But Silas had always seen through her. Always. She swallowed. “What do you want from me?” “Not a damn thing.” He straightened, adjusted his signet ring. “But Eva does. And whether you like it or not, you owe her that much.” Rory’s fingers tightened around the crumpled note. The blood from her wrist had dried, sticky against her skin. “And if I say no?” Silas didn’t answer. He didn’t have to. The silence between them was answer enough. Outside, a siren wailed, distant and fading. Rory looked toward the door, then back at Silas. His expression was unreadable, but his eyes were sharp, assessing. Waiting. She exhaled, long and slow. “Room 412, you said?” A nod. “She’ll be there until midnight.” Rory pocketed the note. “You always did know how to pick your moments.” “And you always did know how to make things difficult.” He raised his glass in a mock toast. “Try not to break anything on your way out.” She almost smiled. Almost. Instead, she turned toward the door, her boots sticking slightly to the floor. The neon sign of *The Raven’s Nest* flickered as she pushed it open, casting a green glow over the pavement. Behind her, Silas didn’t move. Didn’t call out. Just watched. And for the first time in years, Rory didn’t run.
total_cost0.018238

Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags13
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences46
tagDensity0.283
leniency0.565
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
87.27% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1178
totalAiIsmAdverbs3
found
0
adverb"slightly"
count2
1
adverb"really"
count1
highlights
0"slightly"
1"really"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (16 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
0"Blackwood"
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
53.31% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1178
totalAiIsms11
found
0
word"traced"
count1
1
word"glinting"
count1
2
word"weight"
count1
3
word"flicked"
count1
4
word"charged"
count1
5
word"familiar"
count1
6
word"measured"
count1
7
word"pulse"
count1
8
word"silence"
count1
9
word"unreadable"
count1
10
word"flickered"
count1
highlights
0"traced"
1"glinting"
2"weight"
3"flicked"
4"charged"
5"familiar"
6"measured"
7"pulse"
8"silence"
9"unreadable"
10"flickered"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences89
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount1
hedgeCount1
narrationSentences89
filterMatches
0"know"
hedgeMatches
0"tried to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences122
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen44
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans8
markdownWords47
totalWords1167
ratio0.04
matches
0"You’ll always carry me with you, won’t you?"
1"The Raven’s Nest"
2"For emergencies. Or bad decisions. Whichever comes first."
3"For when you need to disappear"
4"Don’t let the bastards win."
5"I know you don’t want to see me. But I need to. Please."
6"Aurora"
7"The Raven’s Nest"
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions13
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
50.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions42
wordCount861
uniqueNames13
maxNameDensity1.51
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity3.5
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
Evan2
Rory13
Raven2
Blackwood1
Prague2
Paddington1
Station1
Cardiff1
Silas11
Paris1
Berlin1
London2
Laila4
persons
0"Evan"
1"Rory"
2"Raven"
3"Blackwood"
4"Silas"
5"Laila"
places
0"Prague"
1"Paddington"
2"Cardiff"
3"Paris"
4"Berlin"
5"London"
globalScore0.745
windowScore0.5
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences48
glossingSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1167
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences122
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs50
mean23.34
std21.1
cv0.904
sampleLengths
071
187
265
34
422
511
660
710
87
926
109
1117
122
1315
1476
155
1630
1744
1869
1913
2018
219
225
233
246
2543
2611
2716
2819
2944
3027
315
326
332
3427
3510
3624
3739
388
3925
4023
4114
4227
439
447
4513
4627
4737
4810
4910
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences89
matches(empty)
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount2
totalVerbs150
matches
0"weren’t saying"
1"was going"
2.34% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount8
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences6
totalSentences122
ratio0.049
matches
0"A sharp sting bit into her palm—blood welled in the crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist, the one she’d earned at eight years old when she’d tried to climb the garden wall after the neighbour’s cat."
1"She kept her eyes on the man across the bar, the one who hadn’t aged a day in the way that mattered—same auburn hair, same hazel eyes that missed nothing, same silver signet ring glinting under the dim lights of *The Raven’s Nest*."
2"The years had carved lines into his face, deepened the grey at his temples, but his posture was the same—shoulders squared, weight balanced on the balls of his feet, like he was always half a second away from action."
3"The bar hummed around them—low chatter, the clink of glasses, the occasional burst of laughter from a group of suits in the corner."
4"He’d pressed an envelope into her hand—*For when you need to disappear*—and told her, *Don’t let the bastards win.*"
5"The use of her name—her real name, not the one she’d been using like a shield—made her flinch."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount872
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount31
adverbRatio0.03555045871559633
lyAdverbCount2
lyAdverbRatio0.0022935779816513763
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences122
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences122
mean9.57
std8.46
cv0.885
sampleLengths
016
136
219
34
443
52
61
731
83
93
103
1123
1239
134
1417
155
165
176
1823
198
2011
2118
229
231
247
2524
262
277
282
298
309
312
327
338
3413
3532
365
377
3819
395
408
4122
4212
4311
442
4515
464
479
481
4924
58.47% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats7
diversityRatio0.38524590163934425
totalSentences122
uniqueOpeners47
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount3
totalSentences74
matches
0"Just stood there, one hand"
1"Instead, he pulled out a"
2"Instead, she turned toward the"
ratio0.041
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount21
totalSentences74
matches
0"She kept her eyes on"
1"He hadn’t moved."
2"She nodded at his left"
3"His gaze flicked to her"
4"She curled her fingers into"
5"He set his glass down"
6"He leaned forward, just slightly"
7"He’d been there, of course."
8"He’d pressed an envelope into"
9"She’d let him down anyway."
10"Her childhood friend, the one"
11"She reached for the paper,"
12"He tilted his head, studying"
13"He leaned in, voice dropping"
14"His eyes darkened"
15"He straightened, adjusted his signet"
16"He didn’t have to."
17"His expression was unreadable, but"
18"She exhaled, long and slow."
19"He raised his glass in"
ratio0.284
34.32% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount63
totalSentences74
matches
0"The glass slipped from her"
1"A sharp sting bit into"
2"The same scar Evan had"
3"Rory didn’t look down."
4"She kept her eyes on"
5"The man who’d taught her"
6"Whichever comes first.*"
7"He hadn’t moved."
8"The years had carved lines"
9"She nodded at his left"
10"A ghost of a smile."
11"The bar hummed around them—low"
12"None of it touched the"
13"Rory wiped her palm on"
14"Silas lifted his glass, took"
15"His gaze flicked to her"
16"She curled her fingers into"
17"He set his glass down"
18"He leaned forward, just slightly"
19"The air between them thickened,"
ratio0.851
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences74
matches(empty)
ratio0
100.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences28
technicalSentenceCount1
matches
0"She kept her eyes on the man across the bar, the one who hadn’t aged a day in the way that mattered—same auburn hair, same hazel eyes that missed nothing, same …"
86.54% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags13
uselessAdditionCount1
matches
0"He leaned in, voice dropping"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags3
fancyCount0
fancyTags(empty)
dialogueSentences46
tagDensity0.065
leniency0.13
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
85.7417%