Run: 2026-02-19-01KHTRNNH47F8X0EGGX297JSV2

Run Details

Duration:
27.5s
Cost:
$0.019435
Provider:
OpenAI

Model input

System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Horror genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the horror genre. A character is alone in a strange, isolated place at night. They came here for a reason, but something feels off from the moment they arrive. The wrongness builds slowly — sounds that shouldn't be there, things that move at the edge of vision, a growing certainty that they are not alone. Build tension through restraint, not through gore. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for the character and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
She plunged into the clearing before she could rethink her decision. Aurora Carter’s breath shivered in the silence. The silver chain of the Heartstone Pendant rubbed against her fingers as it pulsed warm, a faint inner glow carving her shadow into the undergrowth. Something low in her chest hummed—a warning or invitation she couldn’t yet name. She stepped past an oak standing stone carved with runes only half-remembered from her research. A handful of wildflowers brushed her boot—petals too vivid, too perfect in the half-light. Time felt stretched, like taffy: every heartbeat echoed. Aurora forced herself to move. She’d come for proof—a Hel portal, or whatever lay beyond the veil between Earth and the Fae realm. Yu-Fei Cheung’s Golden Empress deliveries could wait. Eva would kill her for going alone, but Rory never did anything the easy way. She advanced along a narrow trail wound by roots and moss. The glow from the pendant danced on damp earth. Every footstep snapped a twig or set a leaf trembling. She froze at a whisper of movement at the edge of her vision. A slender shape slipped behind a tree. Too tall to be a fox, too lithe for an owl. The hush settled again. Aurora swallowed. She raised the pendant higher. Its glow deepened, pulsing like a heartbeat. She stepped forward, each pace measured. A breeze stirred the leaves behind her. It wasn’t wind. It carried a voice so faint she could doubt its existence. “Rory…” Her blood turned ice. She spun, torchlight painting twisted trunks around her. Nothing moved. Her own footfall sounded thunderous. She told herself names carried on midnight air often belonged to echoes: stray squirrels, drunken passers-by. But her pulse drummed warnings she could not ignore. She followed the curve of a moss-draped wall of oaks forming a natural amphitheatre. The wildflowers here grew thicker—clusters of bluebells and foxgloves glowing faintly against darkness. Their scent—cloying, almost sweet—made her head swim. “Rory…” Again, distant. Closer now. A syllable pulled at her mind like a hook. She froze, chest tightening. She hacked out a breath and whispered, “Who’s there?” No answer. Only the pulse in her palm. She shifted, trying to retrace her steps. The oaks behind her seemed rearranged—an impossible geometry. The path she’d used melted into shadows. The clearing’s edge flickered like a mirage. She spun a full circle. Moonlight slivered through branches, revealing standing stones at odd distances. She remembered only three. Now there were five. Aurora’s heart kicked against her ribs. She pressed the pendant to her lips. Warmth spread through her arm, radiating comfort, but also urgency. She swallowed memories of Cardiff, of boring Pre-Law lectures she never finished, of Evan’s hands around her wrist. Here, at least, danger came with no promises. She exhaled and stepped toward a gap between two oaks. The air shimmered. Her torch wavered, and for a heartbeat the clearing dissolved—roots and wildflowers blending into silvery mist. The mist snapped back, and something moved in its wake: a shadow pooling beneath the stones. Longer than any fox, it stretched sinewy limbs across the moss. Aurora’s torch beam found two pinpricks of light just above the ground—eyes or reflections. Whatever it was, it watched her. She swallowed again. “Show yourself.” It didn’t move. The eyes glowed. Then blinked out. She advanced, boots sinking into loam. A sudden chorus of whispers rose around her, tangled voices no louder than a breath. We belong. You trespass. Stay. She shook her head, dislodging a cobweb of stolen doubt. She held the pendant out, its crimson heart shining weakly. “Guide me.” The glow flared. The whispers halted. In that instant, she saw the portal: a swirl of darkness between two stones ahead. A wound in the night. Not open yet—its edges rippled like oil on water. She reached for it. A steel-cold wind ripped through the clearing. The mist swept past her and coalesced into a shape—tall, impossibly slender, limbs knotted like twisted branches. Its face remained shadowed, but she felt its gaze. She stilled. Fingers curled around the pendant, and the creature froze too. Then it snarled—a sound half-bird, half-woman. Bark rasped. Leaves shook loose. The portal jerked, as though something on the other side fought to break free. Aurora clenched her jaw. She’d come for this. She’d risked everything. She lurched forward but tripped on a rotted root. The pendant flew from her hand, landing with a thud and rolling to the creature’s feet. It lunged for the Heartstone. Aurora scrambled upright. She flung herself between pendant and shadow. Torch skidded across the grass and clattered into the portal, illuminating its black maw. A cold tingle raced up her arm. “No.” She snatched the pendant. As her skin met silver chain and crimson gem, warmth bloomed through her. She pressed it against the edge of the portal. The darkness recoiled. The beast shrieked, a crack that split tree limbs. It flailed against invisible bonds, smoke curling from its wrists as if the shadow burned. The trees shuttered in retreat, leaves twisting away like frightened birds. Aurora forced her foot against the nearest standing stone. She levered the Heartstone into the portal’s edge. The ground throbbed. The clearing tilted, time bending. She caught a glimpse of a world behind the portal—a ruined palace of blackened marble, sky choked with curling smoke. Then the pendant pulsed violently. White-hot. Aurora nearly dropped it. Pain stabbed through her chest. The portal shuddered, then imploded inward, sucking shadow and flame into a pinpoint before snapping closed with a crack like a gunshot. Silence struck so hard Aurora reeled. The creature had vanished. Only the oaks remained, each one looking ordinary, mortal—except for the wildflowers, still blooming too bright. Aurora staggered back. Her lungs burned. She clutched the pendant, its glow waning. The clearing exhaled, returning to its serene mask. She sank to her knees, head pounding, as footsteps skidded behind her. She spun—torchlight swept empty air. Then the stones shifted. The runes glowed violet for a heartbeat. One monolith slid aside, revealing a passage carved under roots, yawning into darkness. Aurora’s blood froze. She’d sealed a portal. She should leave. She murmured, “I need to go.” No answer but the soft snap of tendrils creeping across stone. She stood, pressing the pendant to her throat. Its warmth pulsed steadily now, almost reassuring. She stepped toward the new opening. Every instinct screamed to run back across the park, to press her back against Silas’s bar door and light every lamp in London. But Eva had warned her: “If you find it, don’t let it find you.” She exhaled. She crossed the threshold. Roots curled around her ankles, slick and oozing, tugging at her boots. She wrenched free, torch bobbing. The darkness ahead breathed. The shape of a hallway appeared—walls carved with faces writhing in silent screams. The air tasted of ash. Aurora lifted the pendant. Its glow flooded the corridor. Faces stopped moving. The hallway stretched further than sense allowed. Her mind screamed that no human path should be this long. She heard rumbling behind: the clearing’s stones returning to their places. The creature would come through. A sharp clack behind her. She whipped around. The entrance had vanished. Only a wall of gnarled roots sealed her inside. Aurora swallowed past a lump in her throat. Back was gone. Ahead lay nightmare. She advanced, pendant guiding her through the silent gallery. Faces on the walls watched her, mouths fading open and shut. The Earth trembled beneath her boots, a slow heartbeat synchronising with her own. She reached a door of blackened wood carved with a single rune glowing crimson—the same shape as her scarred wrist’s crescent. Aurora pressed her palm to the rune. The door swung inward on ancient hinges with a tortured groan. Perfect moonlight flooded a circular chamber. At its centre, a shallow pool mirrored the sky, stars shimmering in still water. The pendant pulsed so fiercely it nearly blinded her. Aurora stepped forward, drawn. She knelt at the pool’s edge. She peered in. Her reflection stared back—hair tangled, eyes wide. And behind her, carved in shadow at the chamber’s rim, the creature crouched, its grin too wide, a blossom of white teeth. She spun, pendant raised like a weapon. The creature’s head tilted, mirroring her motion. “No,” she whispered. It answered by stepping into the moonlight, its limbs shifting impossibly. The pendant flared. A scream ripped from Aurora’s lips as the light swallowed chamber and creature alike. Darkness snapped back with a final crack. Silence. Aurora knelt alone by the empty pool, the pendant warm against her palm, its glow fading to a slow, uncertain beat. She rose, trembling. The door behind her creaked closed. Her shadow fluttered against the root-wrought wall. Then a single footstep echoed. She spun. Nothing. A whisper curled at her ear. “Welcome home, Rory.”
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags4
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences10
tagDensity0.4
leniency0.8
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
100.00% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1502
totalAiIsmAdverbs0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
0.00% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1502
totalAiIsms34
found
0
word"silence"
count3
1
word"pulsed"
count4
2
word"perfect"
count2
3
word"echoed"
count2
4
word"whisper"
count2
5
word"measured"
count1
6
word"footfall"
count1
7
word"echoes"
count1
8
word"pulse"
count2
9
word"flickered"
count1
10
word"warmth"
count3
11
word"shimmered"
count1
12
word"wavered"
count1
13
word"sinewy"
count1
14
word"lurched"
count1
15
word"maw"
count1
16
word"raced"
count1
17
word"throbbed"
count1
18
word"marble"
count1
19
word"pounding"
count1
20
word"footsteps"
count1
21
word"trembled"
count1
22
word"fluttered"
count1
highlights
0"silence"
1"pulsed"
2"perfect"
3"echoed"
4"whisper"
5"measured"
6"footfall"
7"echoes"
8"pulse"
9"flickered"
10"warmth"
11"shimmered"
12"wavered"
13"sinewy"
14"lurched"
15"maw"
16"raced"
17"throbbed"
18"marble"
19"pounding"
20"footsteps"
21"trembled"
22"fluttered"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"clenched jaw/fists"
count1
highlights
0"clenched her jaw"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences187
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences187
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences193
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen25
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1474
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions6
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
83.33% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions38
wordCount1448
uniqueNames17
maxNameDensity1.24
worstName"Aurora"
maxWindowNameDensity2.5
worstWindowName"Aurora"
discoveredNames
Carter1
Heartstone3
Pendant1
Hel1
Earth2
Fae1
Cheung1
Golden1
Empress1
Rory1
Cardiff1
Pre-Law1
Evan1
Aurora18
Silas1
London1
Eva2
persons
0"Carter"
1"Pendant"
2"Earth"
3"Cheung"
4"Rory"
5"Evan"
6"Aurora"
7"Silas"
8"Eva"
places
0"Cardiff"
1"London"
globalScore0.878
windowScore0.833
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences111
glossingSentenceCount1
matches
0"seemed rearranged an impossible geometry"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches1
per1kWords0.678
wordCount1474
matches
0"No answer but"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences193
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs71
mean20.76
std13.35
cv0.643
sampleLengths
011
145
237
345
461
524
621
71
819
925
1034
111
1226
138
1429
1523
1623
1726
1829
1927
2020
215
229
2321
245
2522
2635
274
2833
2912
3025
3136
325
3331
341
3526
3638
3745
3837
3926
4021
4117
4224
4316
4411
4544
4614
476
4839
4919
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount1
totalSentences187
matches
0"was gone"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs284
matches(empty)
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount18
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences17
totalSentences193
ratio0.088
matches
0"Something low in her chest hummed—a warning or invitation she couldn’t yet name."
1"A handful of wildflowers brushed her boot—petals too vivid, too perfect in the half-light."
2"She’d come for proof—a Hel portal, or whatever lay beyond the veil between Earth and the Fae realm."
3"The wildflowers here grew thicker—clusters of bluebells and foxgloves glowing faintly against darkness."
4"Their scent—cloying, almost sweet—made her head swim."
5"The oaks behind her seemed rearranged—an impossible geometry."
6"Her torch wavered, and for a heartbeat the clearing dissolved—roots and wildflowers blending into silvery mist."
7"Aurora’s torch beam found two pinpricks of light just above the ground—eyes or reflections."
8"Not open yet—its edges rippled like oil on water."
9"The mist swept past her and coalesced into a shape—tall, impossibly slender, limbs knotted like twisted branches."
10"Then it snarled—a sound half-bird, half-woman."
11"She caught a glimpse of a world behind the portal—a ruined palace of blackened marble, sky choked with curling smoke."
12"Only the oaks remained, each one looking ordinary, mortal—except for the wildflowers, still blooming too bright."
13"She spun—torchlight swept empty air."
14"The shape of a hallway appeared—walls carved with faces writhing in silent screams."
15"She reached a door of blackened wood carved with a single rune glowing crimson—the same shape as her scarred wrist’s crescent."
16"Her reflection stared back—hair tangled, eyes wide."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1477
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount58
adverbRatio0.03926878808395396
lyAdverbCount14
lyAdverbRatio0.009478672985781991
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences193
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences193
mean7.64
std5
cv0.654
sampleLengths
011
17
225
313
415
514
68
75
818
97
1015
1111
129
1310
1413
157
1611
174
182
195
207
216
227
233
2411
251
264
278
282
295
3016
319
3214
3313
347
351
362
372
389
394
409
412
426
437
448
457
467
475
4810
494
41.19% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats17
diversityRatio0.27461139896373055
totalSentences193
uniqueOpeners53
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount9
totalSentences170
matches
0"Too tall to be a"
1"Only the pulse in her"
2"Then blinked out."
3"Then it snarled—a sound half-bird,"
4"Then the pendant pulsed violently."
5"Only the oaks remained, each"
6"Then the stones shifted."
7"Only a wall of gnarled"
8"Then a single footstep echoed."
ratio0.053
64.71% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount66
totalSentences170
matches
0"She plunged into the clearing"
1"She stepped past an oak"
2"She’d come for proof—a Hel"
3"She advanced along a narrow"
4"She froze at a whisper"
5"She raised the pendant higher."
6"Its glow deepened, pulsing like"
7"She stepped forward, each pace"
8"It wasn’t wind."
9"It carried a voice so"
10"Her blood turned ice."
11"She spun, torchlight painting twisted"
12"Her own footfall sounded thunderous."
13"She told herself names carried"
14"She followed the curve of"
15"Their scent—cloying, almost sweet—made her"
16"She froze, chest tightening."
17"She hacked out a breath"
18"She shifted, trying to retrace"
19"She spun a full circle."
ratio0.388
24.71% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount148
totalSentences170
matches
0"She plunged into the clearing"
1"Aurora Carter’s breath shivered in"
2"The silver chain of the"
3"Something low in her chest"
4"She stepped past an oak"
5"A handful of wildflowers brushed"
6"Time felt stretched, like taffy:"
7"Aurora forced herself to move."
8"She’d come for proof—a Hel"
9"Yu-Fei Cheung’s Golden Empress deliveries"
10"Eva would kill her for"
11"She advanced along a narrow"
12"The glow from the pendant"
13"Every footstep snapped a twig"
14"She froze at a whisper"
15"A slender shape slipped behind"
16"The hush settled again."
17"She raised the pendant higher."
18"Its glow deepened, pulsing like"
19"She stepped forward, each pace"
ratio0.871
29.41% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences170
matches
0"Now there were five."
ratio0.006
91.84% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences56
technicalSentenceCount4
matches
0"The pendant flew from her hand, landing with a thud and rolling to the creature’s feet."
1"It flailed against invisible bonds, smoke curling from its wrists as if the shadow burned."
2"She heard rumbling behind: the clearing’s stones returning to their places."
3"It answered by stepping into the moonlight, its limbs shifting impossibly."
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags4
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
0.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags3
fancyCount3
fancyTags
0"She hacked (hack)"
1"She murmured (murmur)"
2"she whispered (whisper)"
dialogueSentences10
tagDensity0.3
leniency0.6
rawRatio1
effectiveRatio0.6
81.1728%