Run: 2026-02-19-01KHTRP19CF1059X36A94RY1F4

Run Details

Duration:
3m 35s
Cost:
$0.002564
Provider:
Novita

Model input

System
You are an expert fiction writer. Always keep the following rules in mind: - Write in past tense and use General English spelling, grammar, and colloquialisms/slang. - Write in active voice - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. - Avoid adverbs and cliches and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Convey events and story through dialogue. - Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. - Skip "he/she said said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech - Avoid mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or add unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Reduce indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" When writing text: - NEVER conclude the scene on your own, follow the beat instructions very closely. - NEVER end with foreshadowing. - NEVER write further than what I prompt you with. - AVOID imagining possible endings, NEVER deviate from the instructions. - STOP EARLY if the continuation contains what was required in the instructions. You do not need to fill out the full amount of words possible.
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4418" name="Nyx" aliases="Nyx, the Shadow, Nightwhisper" pronouns="they/them" species="Shade" storyRole="Wild Card"> <eyeColor>faintly glowing violet</eyeColor> <height>approximately 6'2" in solid form</height> <age>ageless</age> <form>humanoid silhouette of living shadow, can shift between solid and incorporeal</form> <voice>sounds like a whisper carried on the wind</voice> <description>A being of living shadow, existing between the mortal plane and the spaces between realms.</description> <backstory>Nyx was once a human sorcerer named Aldric who became trapped between realms during a failed summoning ritual in 1643. They now exist as a Shade, bound to the mortal plane but able to slip between shadows.</backstory> </character> <character id="4424" name="Isolde Varga" aliases="Isolde, the Seer" pronouns="she/her" species="Half-Fae" storyRole="Oracle"> <eyeColor>pale lavender</eyeColor> <hair>silver, reaching her waist</hair> <height>5'5"</height> <age>300 years old</age> <appearance>ethereal, ageless</appearance> <speech>speaks in riddles</speech> <footprints>leaves no footprints when she walks</footprints> <compulsion>cannot lie (Fae compulsion) but can mislead</compulsion> <description>A Half-Fae seer exiled from the Fae Courts for sharing visions with mortals.</description> <backstory>She now lives in a hidden grove in Richmond Park, offering cryptic prophecies to those who seek her out.</backstory> </character> <location id="853" name="Dymas (Gluttony)" aliases="Dymas, gluttony, Dymasian" realm="Hel" sin="Gluttony"> <ruler>Prince Belphegor</ruler> <skyColor>warm amber</skyColor> <description>A place of excess and indulgence. Sprawling vineyards, orchards, and gardens provide exotic ingredients for master chefs — often helbound souls contracted from Earth. Grand feasts and culinary competitions are common.</description> </location> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> <item id="2006" name="Fae-Forged Blade" aliases="the Fae blade, Isolde's gift" type="Weapon" origin="The Fae Courts"> <material>moonsilver</material> <shape>slender, leaf-shaped dagger</shape> <temperature>always cold to the touch</temperature> <glow>faintly luminescent in moonlight</glow> <power>can cut through magical wards; particularly effective against demons</power> <givenTo>given to Aurora by Isolde as a gift</givenTo> <description>A weapon of the Fae Courts, rare and highly coveted.</description> </item> <lore id="7001" name="The Veil" aliases="the Veil, the Barrier, the Boundary" category="Cosmology"> <solsticeEffect>weakens during the winter solstice, strengthens during the summer solstice</solsticeEffect> <appearance>faint shimmering distortion visible only to those with supernatural sight</appearance> <monitoring>rift points (tears in the Veil) are monitored by the Wardens</monitoring> <description>The Veil is the metaphysical barrier separating Earth from Hel and the Fae Realms.</description> </lore> </codex> Continue the story using the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the fantasy genre. A small group enters an ancient, otherworldly place for the first time. The environment is alien and wondrous. Describe their exploration — what they see, hear, and feel as they move deeper. Include moments of discovery, unease, and wonder. Let the world-building emerge through the characters' experience rather than exposition. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters, setting, and lore. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The stone archway swallowed them whole. One moment Rory stood in the cool, damp air of the Fae grove, her lungs filled with the scent of petrichor and blooming nightshade. The next, the world shifted, dissolved, and reformed around them in a wash of warm, honeyed light. She stumbled forward and found solid ground that was too springy, like walking on dense moss. The air hit her first. Thick and humid, it carried a heavy perfume of ripening fruit, baking bread, and something spicy-sweet she couldn’t name. It tasted rich on her tongue, almost cloying. “By the shifting shadows,” Nyx whispered beside her, their voice a soft rustle at her ear. Their shadow-form seemed thinner here, more diffuse against the brilliant backdrop. “This is Dymas.” Isolde stepped through last, her silver hair cascading like a waterfall of mercury as she moved. Her lavender eyes took in the vista with a knowing, saddened look. “The realm of unsated appetites,” she murmured. “Tread lightly. Even the air here hungers.” Rory looked. They stood on a gentle rise overlooking a valley of impossible bounty. The sky was a perpetual, warm amber, lit by no sun she could see. It cast soft, golden light over rolling hills carpeted in dense, verdant grass. But it was wrong. The grass was too emerald-green, too uniform, like a painting. Vineyards sprawled in geometric perfection, heavy with clusters of grapes that glinted like polished amethysts and rubies. Orchards of trees bore fruits of shapes and colors that defied earthly logic: spiral-twisted peaches the size of her head, apples with swirling, candied skins, pears that seemed to drip with liquid gold. A gentle, constant breeze carried the mingled scents, and with it, distant sounds. The clink of glass. Laughter. The low murmur of a crowd. Music, strange and lilting, woven from pipes and strings she couldn’t identify. It was a festival sound, but it felt layered, repetitive. An echo of a celebration that never ended. “This way,” Isolde said, her voice cutting through the sensory overload. She pointed a slender finger down a cobbled path that wound between two rows of those impossible fruit trees. The cobbles were polished, warm underfoot. They felt smooth, worn down by countless feet. As they descended, the details became sharper, more unsettling. The butterflies flitting between the oversized blossoms had four wings and iridescent patterns that changed as they moved. A small stream bubbled alongside the path, its water clear and sparkling, but when Rory peered closer, she saw it wasn’t water at all. It flowed with a pale, silky liquid that smelled of cream and honey. “Don’t touch it,” Isolde warned, her gaze fixed ahead. “What is it?” Rory asked, her own voice sounding small in the vast, humming quiet. “The essence of indulgence. To drink is to forget why you came. To bathe is to sleep for a century, dreaming of feasts.” Rory pulled her hand back, her heart thumping a quick rhythm against her ribs. The pendant at her neck gave a soft, answering pulse of warmth. A reminder of why they were here. They rounded a bend, and the valley opened up. Below, nestled beside a wide, placid lake of that same creamy liquid, sprawled a city. It was built from what looked like caramel-colored stone and polished wood, its architecture all curves and arches, domes and spires. Pennants of silk fluttered from every rooftop. Canopies of embroidered fabric shaded bustling market squares they could see even from this distance. “A city of feasts,” Nyx observed, their form coalescing into a more solid silhouette as they stopped beside Rory. “Look at the people.” Rory squinted. The streets teemed with figures. Some looked human, or close to it, dressed in lavish robes and gowns of vibrant colors. Others were… not. She saw a being with skin the texture of bark, carrying a tray of steaming, fragrant rolls. A woman with hair of cascading vines offered goblets from a floating tray. Many of the denizens moved with a languid, contented slowness, their faces flushed and smiling. But here and there, Rory caught glimpses of others with hollow eyes, moving with frantic purpose, their hands stained and their fine clothes smudged. Servants. The helbound. A massive structure dominated the city’s center: a palace of gleaming white stone, its many towers shaped like inverted wine glasses and overflowing cornucopias. “Prince Belphegor’s demesne,” Isolde said, her voice flat. “The Heartstone will guide you from here. My presence within those walls would be… unwise. The Fae and the Princes of Hel have an understanding. I dare not break it.” Rory glanced at her. “You’re leaving us?” “I will wait at the gate. The path back is the same as the path forward. But you must go on alone. You and your shadow.” Nyx shifted, a ripple of darkness. “We’ve come this far.” Rory nodded, feeling the weight of the Fae-forged blade at her hip, a comforting, alien cold against her thigh. She touched the Heartstone pendant. Its crimson gem glowed with a steady, slow pulse, like a sleeping heartbeat. It pulled her gaze toward the leftmost edge of the city, toward a district of smaller, tightly packed buildings near the lakefront. “That way,” she said, more to convince herself. They left Isolde standing like a silver sentinel on the path and descended into the outskirts of the city. The air grew thicker, sweeter. The sounds resolved into individual conversations, the sizzle of food on grills, the clatter of pottery. The streets were paved with intricate mosaics depicting fruits, wines, and fantastical banquets. Every doorway led to a tavern, a bakery, a confectionery, or a restaurant. Steam billowed from vents, carrying mouthwatering aromas that made Rory’s stomach growl despite her apprehension. A baker with flour-dusted arms and a permanent smile offered them a warm, flaky pastry dusted with jewel-colored sugar. “First taste is free, travelers!” he chimed, his eyes too bright. Nyx flowed between Rory and the offering, a wall of cool darkness. “We decline.” The baker’s smile didn’t falter, but his eyes dimmed slightly. “As you wish. The feast is always open.” They moved on, Rory hyper-aware of the stares. The denizens of Dymas watched them with a mixture of curiosity and a deep, unsettling hunger. It wasn’t a predatory hunger. It was the look of someone who wanted to share their obsession, to pull them into the endless celebration. The pendant’s pulse grew stronger, warmer, leading them down a narrower alley. The grandeur faded here. The buildings were plain, made of the same warm stone but worn smooth. The scents changed, too—less of sugar and spice, more of yeast, fermentation, and the earthy smell of grain. And beneath it, a faint, sour tang Rory recognized from the industrial part of London: the smell of a brewery. At the alley’s end stood a low, wide building with a sloping roof. Smoke, real and grey, chugged from a stone chimney. The sign above the heavy wooden door was simple, carved with a single image: a stylized, foaming tankard. The Heartstone burned against her skin, a sudden, sharp heat. “Here,” Rory breathed. The door was unguarded. She pushed it open, the heavy oak swinging inward silently. Inside, the air was cooler, dryer, thick with the smell of hops and malt and the deep, resonant hum of machinery. Vast copper vats towered toward a high ceiling crisscrossed with wooden beams and iron pipes. A catwalk ran along the upper perimeter. The floor was spotless stone, worn slick in paths between the brewing tanks. It was a temple of production, of endless making. And at the far end, her back to them, stood a figure stirring a steaming cauldron with a long wooden paddle. The woman was humanoid, but her arms were corded with muscle, her simple tunic stained with various liquids. Her hair was the color of wheat, tied back in a messy braid. She moved with a weary, practiced rhythm. Rory took a step, her boot scuffing the stone. The woman stopped stirring. She didn’t turn around. “You’re not from the kitchens,” she said, her voice rough, tired. “No one comes here but the carters for the barrels.” “We’re looking for someone,” Rory said, her voice echoing in the vast, humming space. The woman sighed, a sound of profound exhaustion. She set the paddle down on the cauldron’s rim and finally turned. Her face was handsome, lined with strain. Her eyes, a faded blue, held none of the glazed delight of the citizens outside. They were clear, and sharp, and utterly, humanly sad. “No one here is worth finding,” she said, her gaze drifting past Rory to Nyx’s shadowy form. A flicker of something—recognition, perhaps—passed through her eyes, but it was gone quickly, buried under the weariness. “This is a place for the lost. For those bound to feed the hunger that can never be filled.” Rory’s hand closed around the warm pendant. “What’s your name?” The woman gave a hollow, mirthless laugh. It echoed off the copper vats. “Names are for the free. Here, I am the Brewer. That’s all.” She looked at Rory, really looked at her, for the first time. Her eyes narrowed, tracing the line of her jaw, the shape of her eyes. A tremor went through her sturdy frame. “But you… you look like him. You have his eyes.” Rory’s breath caught. “Who?” Before the woman could answer, a door slammed open further down the brewery hall. Booted footsteps rang on the stone. A man’s voice, nasally and officious, called out, “Brewer! The prince’s evening batch is behind schedule! Explain this!” The Brewer—the woman—flashed Rory a look of pure, desperate warning. “Go,” she hissed. “Now. Before they see you.” She turned back to her cauldron, her shoulders slumping into the familiar posture of servitude. “Coming, Master Cellarer!” Rory hesitated, her mind racing. The pendant was a coal against her chest. Nyx’s hand, a whisper of cool darkness, closed around her upper arm. “We must retreat,” they breathed into her ear. “This is not the place for answers.” She let Nyx pull her back toward the alley door, her eyes locked on the weary, powerful back of the woman who might have known her father. The humid, perfumed air of Dymas hit her like a wall as they slipped back outside, the door to the brewery swinging shut behind them, cutting off the sight of the vats and the woman and the looming, unanswered question hanging thick in the hoppy air.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags17
adverbTagCount1
adverbTags
0"She turned back [back]"
dialogueSentences35
tagDensity0.486
leniency0.971
rawRatio0.059
effectiveRatio0.057
82.96% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1761
totalAiIsmAdverbs6
found
0
adverb"lightly"
count1
1
adverb"tightly"
count1
2
adverb"slightly"
count1
3
adverb"utterly"
count1
4
adverb"quickly"
count1
5
adverb"really"
count1
highlights
0"lightly"
1"tightly"
2"slightly"
3"utterly"
4"quickly"
5"really"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
14.82% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1761
totalAiIsms30
found
0
word"cascading"
count2
1
word"echo"
count1
2
word"pulse"
count3
3
word"warmth"
count1
4
word"reminder"
count1
5
word"silk"
count1
6
word"fluttered"
count1
7
word"structure"
count1
8
word"gleaming"
count1
9
word"weight"
count1
10
word"comforting"
count1
11
word"sentinel"
count1
12
word"resolved"
count1
13
word"intricate"
count1
14
word"stomach"
count1
15
word"apprehension"
count1
16
word"echoing"
count1
17
word"profound"
count1
18
word"flicker"
count1
19
word"echoed"
count1
20
word"tracing"
count1
21
word"sturdy"
count1
22
word"footsteps"
count1
23
word"familiar"
count1
24
word"racing"
count1
25
word"whisper"
count1
26
word"looming"
count1
highlights
0"cascading"
1"echo"
2"pulse"
3"warmth"
4"reminder"
5"silk"
6"fluttered"
7"structure"
8"gleaming"
9"weight"
10"comforting"
11"sentinel"
12"resolved"
13"intricate"
14"stomach"
15"apprehension"
16"echoing"
17"profound"
18"flicker"
19"echoed"
20"tracing"
21"sturdy"
22"footsteps"
23"familiar"
24"racing"
25"whisper"
26"looming"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"eyes widened/narrowed"
count1
highlights
0"eyes narrowed"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences132
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount1
narrationSentences132
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences149
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen46
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1748
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions16
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
50.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions44
wordCount1507
uniqueNames9
maxNameDensity1.53
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity3.5
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
Rory23
Fae2
Fae-forged1
Heartstone2
Isolde5
Nyx7
Dymas2
London1
Brewer1
persons
0"Rory"
1"Heartstone"
2"Isolde"
3"Nyx"
4"Dymas"
places
0"Fae"
1"London"
globalScore0.737
windowScore0.5
79.25% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences106
glossingSentenceCount3
matches
0"seemed thinner here, more diffuse against the brilliant backdrop"
1"pears that seemed to drip with liquid gold"
2"looked like caramel-colored stone and pol"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches1
per1kWords0.572
wordCount1748
matches
0"No one comes here but"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences149
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs50
mean34.96
std23.84
cv0.682
sampleLengths
063
132
230
342
4105
554
644
764
89
915
1023
1133
1267
1323
1498
1524
1638
177
1826
1910
2059
218
2240
2360
2411
2514
2618
2748
2867
2940
3010
313
3214
3356
3430
3538
369
3729
3814
3920
4031
4153
4210
4368
444
4538
4636
4725
4815
4973
94.63% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount4
totalSentences132
matches
0"was built"
1"were paved"
2"were corded"
3"was gone"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs244
matches(empty)
85.33% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount5
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences3
totalSentences149
ratio0.02
matches
0"The scents changed, too—less of sugar and spice, more of yeast, fermentation, and the earthy smell of grain."
1"A flicker of something—recognition, perhaps—passed through her eyes, but it was gone quickly, buried under the weariness."
2"The Brewer—the woman—flashed Rory a look of pure, desperate warning."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1520
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount37
adverbRatio0.024342105263157894
lyAdverbCount10
lyAdverbRatio0.006578947368421052
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences149
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences149
mean11.73
std7.19
cv0.613
sampleLengths
06
124
217
316
45
519
68
716
811
93
1016
1112
127
137
142
1512
1614
1713
184
1910
2017
2133
2213
234
241
256
2612
2710
288
2911
3019
316
328
339
3418
3524
3613
379
3815
3923
4014
4112
427
439
4415
4521
467
4715
4819
494
57.27% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats8
diversityRatio0.37583892617449666
totalSentences149
uniqueOpeners56
0.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount0
totalSentences122
matches(empty)
ratio0
92.13% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount39
totalSentences122
matches
0"She stumbled forward and found"
1"It tasted rich on her"
2"Their shadow-form seemed thinner here,"
3"Her lavender eyes took in"
4"They stood on a gentle"
5"It cast soft, golden light"
6"It was a festival sound,"
7"She pointed a slender finger"
8"They felt smooth, worn down"
9"It flowed with a pale,"
10"They rounded a bend, and"
11"It was built from what"
12"She saw a being with"
13"She touched the Heartstone pendant."
14"Its crimson gem glowed with"
15"It pulled her gaze toward"
16"she said, more to convince"
17"They left Isolde standing like"
18"he chimed, his eyes too"
19"They moved on, Rory hyper-aware"
ratio0.32
21.48% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount107
totalSentences122
matches
0"The stone archway swallowed them"
1"The next, the world shifted,"
2"She stumbled forward and found"
3"The air hit her first."
4"It tasted rich on her"
5"Nyx whispered beside her, their"
6"Their shadow-form seemed thinner here,"
7"Isolde stepped through last, her"
8"Her lavender eyes took in"
9"They stood on a gentle"
10"The sky was a perpetual,"
11"It cast soft, golden light"
12"The grass was too emerald-green,"
13"Vineyards sprawled in geometric perfection,"
14"Orchards of trees bore fruits"
15"A gentle, constant breeze carried"
16"The clink of glass."
17"The low murmur of a"
18"Music, strange and lilting, woven"
19"It was a festival sound,"
ratio0.877
40.98% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences122
matches
0"Before the woman could answer,"
ratio0.008
78.89% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences67
technicalSentenceCount6
matches
0"She stumbled forward and found solid ground that was too springy, like walking on dense moss."
1"Vineyards sprawled in geometric perfection, heavy with clusters of grapes that glinted like polished amethysts and rubies."
2"Orchards of trees bore fruits of shapes and colors that defied earthly logic: spiral-twisted peaches the size of her head, apples with swirling, candied skins, …"
3"The butterflies flitting between the oversized blossoms had four wings and iridescent patterns that changed as they moved."
4"Steam billowed from vents, carrying mouthwatering aromas that made Rory’s stomach growl despite her apprehension."
5"She let Nyx pull her back toward the alley door, her eyes locked on the weary, powerful back of the woman who might have known her father."
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags17
uselessAdditionCount9
matches
0"Nyx whispered, their voice a soft rustle at her ear"
1"Isolde said, her voice cutting through the sensory overload"
2"Rory asked, her own voice sounding small in the vast, humming quiet"
3"Isolde said, her voice flat"
4"he chimed, his eyes too bright"
5"she said, her voice rough, tired"
6"Rory said, her voice echoing in the vast, humming space"
7"she said, her gaze drifting past Rory to Nyx’s shadowy form"
8"She turned back, her shoulders slumping into the familiar posture of servitude"
0.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags15
fancyCount8
fancyTags
0"Nyx whispered (whisper)"
1"she murmured (murmur)"
2"Isolde warned (warn)"
3"Nyx observed (observe)"
4"he chimed (chime)"
5"Rory breathed (breathe)"
6"she hissed (hiss)"
7"they breathed (breathe)"
dialogueSentences35
tagDensity0.429
leniency0.857
rawRatio0.533
effectiveRatio0.457
76.5915%