Run: 2026-02-19-01KHTRP1FK5QKCHFW8W2XSX4MR

Run Details

Duration:
1m 16s
Cost:
$0.036356
Provider:
OpenAI

Model input

System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Literary Fiction genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4413" name="Silas Blackwood" aliases="Silas, Si, the Spymaster" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Mentor"> <eyeColor>hazel</eyeColor> <hair>grey-streaked auburn</hair> <height>6'1"</height> <age>58</age> <beard>neatly trimmed, matching his grey-streaked auburn hair</beard> <limp>slight limp in his left leg from an old knee injury</limp> <signetRing>silver signet ring, always worn on his right hand</signetRing> <description>Silas is a retired intelligence operative turned bar owner. He carries himself with quiet authority.</description> <backstory>Former MI6 field agent who retired after a botched operation in Prague left him with a permanent knee injury. He opened "The Raven's Nest" bar in Soho as a front for his network of contacts.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the literary fiction genre. Two old friends who haven't seen each other in years run into each other unexpectedly at a bar. One of them has changed significantly. Through their conversation and the tension between who they were and who they've become, reveal the weight of time and unspoken regret. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
He set the gin bottle down. The bell above the door chimed. Charlie Bennett’s silhouette filled the Nest’s green neon glow. Silas’s gaze flicked to the maps lining the walls and the black-and-white photographs he’d pinned there. This was home. Yet nothing about tonight felt right. Charlie slumped onto a stool near the far end of the bar. Leather groaned under his weight. “Rye?” Silas asked, sliding a tumbler toward him. The amber liquid slithered over chipped ice. Charlie watched it, unblinking. “How long?” Silas said. Charlie drew in a breath, slow and deliberate. “Twelve years.” Silas’s fingers tightened around his signet ring. He swallowed. “Prague was twelve years ago.” Charlie’s gaze drifted to a dusty photo of Silas and two others in front of a crumbling chapel. The old safe house. He tapped the glass. “Did you ever explain what went wrong?” Silas’s left leg shifted. The limp, a souvenir from that night, spoke more truth than words. “They moved the target.” He kept his voice steady. “Not my call.” Charlie nodded. His jaw clenched so hard the knuckles whitened. “You let them.” Silas met his old friend’s hazel eyes. He’d known that edge for years. Only now it carried something darker. “No,” Silas said. “I survived.” Charlie reached beneath the bar, as if seeking a hiding place for guilt. “I tried to reach you after. Called HQ, wrote letters.” He exhaled. “You disappeared.” Silas didn’t answer. He wiped a glass with a rough linen cloth, scraping dust from the rim. Behind the counter, Aurora Carter paused mid-swipe. Her bright blue eyes flicked between the two men. Straight shoulder-length black hair fell forward as she leaned. The small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist caught the neon light. She didn’t recognise this new arrival, but she knew the way Silas’s posture stiffened. Charlie pulled at a loose thread on his cuff. A steel brace glinted beneath his sleeve. “IRA shrapnel,” he muttered. Silas’s hand hovered over a decanter. “You’re not… yourself.” He said it low, almost to the bottles. Charlie let out a humourless laugh. “Neither are you. Running a public bar.” Silas set the decanter down with a muted thud. “The Raven’s Nest is more than a bar.” Charlie’s brow rose. “I know what it is. I helped set it up.” Silas froze. “You?” Charlie leaned forward. “Never thanked you.” Silas studied his friend’s lean cheekbones, the hollow beneath his eyes. He remembered Charlie with easy laughter, a riot of fiery hair and reckless charm. “I didn’t expect to see you here,” Silas said. Charlie shrugged one narrow shoulder. “London’s small. Secrets smaller.” His voice grew rough. “I came for help.” Silas’s lips parted, but no words followed. “I need access to the back room.” Silas’s heart stuttered. The hidden chamber, through the bookshelf, had hosted deals that never saw daylight. He gestured at the ornate woodwork lining the wall. “That’s for my network only.” Charlie’s eyes narrowed. “I need what’s in the safe.” Silas straightened. “Name it.” Charlie cleared his throat, voice low. “File on Marisol Vega.” Silas’s throat seized. The name echoed through his bones. Agent Vega—shipped out after Prague, never surfaced. “I thought MI6 buried that.” Charlie tapped the glass. “Not everyone.” Silas leaned in. Water beaded at his temple. He flicked his signet ring. The bar’s green glow cast his silver crest into sharp relief. “You’re hunting ghosts.” Charlie’s lips twitched. “They’re hunting me.” A silence settled, heavy as spilled whiskey. Aurora retreated behind a rack of glasses, polishing a tumbler so fiercely the glass threatened to crack. Silas didn’t spare her a glance. He hadn’t invited this confrontation in his own home. Charlie’s gaze roamed the bar, pausing on the framed maps of old Eastern Bloc safe houses. “Thought you’d have retired for good,” he said. Silas’s laugh was brittle. “Prague retired me.” Charlie blinked at the limp in Silas’s step. “That still aches.” Silas’s eyes flickered. “Every day.” Charlie reached across the bar, fingers brushing Silas’s hand. “You should have pushed harder. Told them the target wasn’t worth the cost.” Silas pulled away. “And what then? Tried to court-martial the entire service? Lost more men to politics?” Charlie’s silence filled the space between them. He tapped the bar twice. “They slipped Vega into the ground in Bavaria. No record. No ceremony.” Silas’s hand drifted to a photograph of a young woman in a field of snow—Vega, laughing before it all went wrong. “She deserved better.” Charlie drummed his fingers. “I have proof.” Silas leaned back, voice flat. “Show me.” Charlie reached into his jacket, extracted a manila envelope. He slid it across the polished wood. The bar’s surface reflected the envelope’s yellowed stain. Silas stared. He felt the old adrenaline coil. “Where did you get that?” he said. Charlie watched him. “Dublin. A contact at the archives.” Silas lifted the envelope, breathing shallow. He could smell paper, ink, something metallic beneath, like blood. A sharp click rattled the bookshelves behind him. Silas spun. The row of leather-bound volumes shivered. One spine bowed outward. A faint line of light appeared behind the books. Charlie’s jaw snapped shut. He met Silas’s eye. Silas tightened his hold on the envelope. The nerve endings in his left hand flared. Behind them, Aurora froze mid-polish. Her blue eyes widened. She rubbed the crescent scar on her wrist. The bookshelf creaked, section by section, until the hidden door yawned open. A sliver of corridor revealed scuffed stone walls and a bare bulb swinging in a draft. Silas didn’t hesitate. He drew back, hand resting on the hilt of a dagger tucked beneath the counter. Charlie jumped from his stool, knocking the whisky to the floor. The glass shattered, amber droplets hissing on the wood. “Shit.” Charlie reached for Silas’s arm. Silas ignored him, narrowing his gaze into the newly exposed passage. “We’re not alone,” he said. Charlie’s breath caught. A footstep echoed from the dark beyond the door. Then another. Silas lifted the envelope, fanning it open with his thumb. The thin paper crackled. A metallic click rang out behind him—locks sliding into place. The bar lights dimmed for a heartbeat as power shifted. Silas and Charlie stared at each other, hearts pounding. Then the corridor’s bulb flared, and a figure stepped into the bar’s glow.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags13
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences45
tagDensity0.289
leniency0.578
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
100.00% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1059
totalAiIsmAdverbs0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (16 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
0"Blackwood"
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
38.62% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1059
totalAiIsms13
found
0
word"flicked"
count3
1
word"weight"
count1
2
word"jaw clenched"
count1
3
word"charm"
count1
4
word"echoed"
count2
5
word"silence"
count2
6
word"flickered"
count1
7
word"shattered"
count1
8
word"pounding"
count1
highlights
0"flicked"
1"weight"
2"jaw clenched"
3"charm"
4"echoed"
5"silence"
6"flickered"
7"shattered"
8"pounding"
33.33% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches3
maxInWindow3
found
0
label"eyes widened/narrowed"
count2
1
label"jaw/fists clenched"
count1
highlights
0"eyes narrowed"
1"eyes widened"
2"jaw clenched"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences122
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences122
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences154
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen22
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1048
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions14
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
0.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions78
wordCount844
uniqueNames10
maxNameDensity4.5
worstName"Silas"
maxWindowNameDensity6.5
worstWindowName"Silas"
discoveredNames
Bennett1
Nest1
Charlie29
Silas38
Aurora3
Carter1
Vega2
Prague1
Eastern1
Bloc1
persons
0"Bennett"
1"Nest"
2"Charlie"
3"Silas"
4"Aurora"
5"Carter"
6"Vega"
places
0"Prague"
globalScore0
windowScore0
79.58% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences71
glossingSentenceCount2
matches
0"as if seeking a hiding place for guilt"
1"appeared behind the books"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1048
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences154
matches
0"known that edge"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs91
mean11.52
std8.67
cv0.753
sampleLengths
046
117
28
311
44
58
62
79
85
926
107
1116
1212
1310
143
1519
165
1713
1814
1917
2051
2116
224
236
2411
256
267
279
288
2913
303
316
3225
339
3417
357
367
3725
385
399
404
416
424
4316
445
456
4624
473
486
497
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences122
matches(empty)
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs168
matches(empty)
87.20% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount3
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences3
totalSentences154
ratio0.019
matches
0"Agent Vega—shipped out after Prague, never surfaced."
1"Silas’s hand drifted to a photograph of a young woman in a field of snow—Vega, laughing before it all went wrong."
2"A metallic click rang out behind him—locks sliding into place."
94.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount854
adjectiveStacks1
stackExamples
0"small crescent-shaped scar"
adverbCount18
adverbRatio0.02107728337236534
lyAdverbCount3
lyAdverbRatio0.00351288056206089
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences154
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences154
mean6.81
std3.93
cv0.577
sampleLengths
06
16
29
316
43
56
612
75
88
97
104
114
128
132
147
152
165
1718
184
194
207
214
2212
239
243
252
268
273
287
296
306
313
322
3313
3412
352
363
3714
387
399
409
4112
4214
439
447
454
466
4711
486
497
50.00% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats0
diversityRatio0.2857142857142857
totalSentences154
uniqueOpeners44
62.31% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount2
totalSentences107
matches
0"Only now it carried something"
1"Then the corridor’s bulb flared,"
ratio0.019
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount22
totalSentences107
matches
0"He set the gin bottle"
1"He tapped the glass."
2"He kept his voice steady"
3"His jaw clenched so hard"
4"He’d known that edge for"
5"He wiped a glass with"
6"Her bright blue eyes flicked"
7"She didn’t recognise this new"
8"He said it low, almost"
9"He remembered Charlie with easy"
10"His voice grew rough"
11"He gestured at the ornate"
12"He flicked his signet ring."
13"He hadn’t invited this confrontation"
14"He tapped the bar twice."
15"He slid it across the"
16"He felt the old adrenaline"
17"He could smell paper, ink,"
18"He met Silas’s eye."
19"Her blue eyes widened."
ratio0.206
0.00% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount100
totalSentences107
matches
0"He set the gin bottle"
1"The bell above the door"
2"Charlie Bennett’s silhouette filled the"
3"Silas’s gaze flicked to the"
4"This was home."
5"Charlie slumped onto a stool"
6"Leather groaned under his weight."
7"Silas asked, sliding a tumbler"
8"The amber liquid slithered over"
9"Charlie watched it, unblinking."
10"Charlie drew in a breath,"
11"Silas’s fingers tightened around his"
12"Charlie’s gaze drifted to a"
13"The old safe house."
14"He tapped the glass."
15"Silas’s left leg shifted."
16"The limp, a souvenir from"
17"He kept his voice steady"
18"His jaw clenched so hard"
19"Silas met his old friend’s"
ratio0.935
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences107
matches(empty)
ratio0
100.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences26
technicalSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags13
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags9
fancyCount1
fancyTags
0"he muttered (mutter)"
dialogueSentences45
tagDensity0.2
leniency0.4
rawRatio0.111
effectiveRatio0.044
81.5012%