Run: 2026-02-19-01KHTRPKRVZWK48CZ1HS89H15T

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49.4s
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You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Literary Fiction genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4413" name="Silas Blackwood" aliases="Silas, Si, the Spymaster" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Mentor"> <eyeColor>hazel</eyeColor> <hair>grey-streaked auburn</hair> <height>6'1"</height> <age>58</age> <beard>neatly trimmed, matching his grey-streaked auburn hair</beard> <limp>slight limp in his left leg from an old knee injury</limp> <signetRing>silver signet ring, always worn on his right hand</signetRing> <description>Silas is a retired intelligence operative turned bar owner. He carries himself with quiet authority.</description> <backstory>Former MI6 field agent who retired after a botched operation in Prague left him with a permanent knee injury. He opened "The Raven's Nest" bar in Soho as a front for his network of contacts.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the literary fiction genre. Two old friends who haven't seen each other in years run into each other unexpectedly at a bar. One of them has changed significantly. Through their conversation and the tension between who they were and who they've become, reveal the weight of time and unspoken regret. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The copper-bright liquid sloshed against crystal as Silas poured another measure. His movements held the precise economy of someone who'd made the same gesture thousands of times before. "Been a while since anyone ordered the thirty-year Macallan." He set the bottle down with practiced care. "Most who know what it is can't afford it. Most who can afford it don't know what it is." Aurora traced the rim of her glass with her fingertip. The Raven's Nest settled into its usual evening lull, all muted conversations and the soft clink of ice against glass. A couple argued in whispers by the window. A solitary woman typed furiously on her laptop in the corner. The mundane ballet of a Tuesday night. "Some things you don't forget," she said. "Like the time you nicked a bottle of it from your dad's study and we split it behind the cricket pavilion." Silas' hand paused on the bar cloth. "Eva?" "Hello, Si." The recognition hit him like a physical blow. He squinted through the dim light, past the black hair and sharp suit, seeking traces of the wild-haired teenager who'd spent more nights than not sprawled on his sofa, sharing takeaway with his daughter. "Your father know you're in London?" "Which answer would you prefer? The truth, or the one that lets you sleep tonight?" "Christ." He poured himself a measure. "The shop still standing at least?" "Sold it. Three years ago." She knocked back her drink. "After the funeral." Silas' knuckles whitened around his glass. "Why didn't Rachel tell me?" "Because I asked her not to." Aurora, Eva, whoever she was now, pushed her glass forward. "Your daughter's good at keeping secrets. Wonder where she learned that." The old maps on the walls cast mottled shadows across their faces. A group of city boys stumbled in, their laughter too sharp, too practiced. Silas gestured toward the door with two fingers. His bouncer materialized from the shadows, steering them back out with quiet efficiency. "You've changed," he said finally. "Have I? Or did you just never see this version of me coming?" Her smile didn't reach her eyes. "The quiet one. The responsible one. The one who helped Rachel with her homework while you were off playing spymaster." "Eva-" "That's not my name anymore." "Right. Aurora." He tasted the name like a foreign vintage. "Rachel mentioned you were delivering Chinese food." "And you're tending bar. Quite the pair we make." "You know damn well this isn't just a bar." "Like Dad's wasn't just a shop?" She leaned forward. "Tell me something, Si. When you figured out what he was really doing, what his little import-export business really moved through Cardiff, did you report him because of duty? Or because he was competition?" The silence stretched between them like old elastic, worn and ready to snap. Someone fed coins into the jukebox. The opening notes of "London Calling" filtered through the speakers. "Your father was moving weapons to people who used them on civilians." "He was moving weapons to the IRA. To his brothers. His cause." The crystal sang against wood as she set her glass down hard. "You knew what it would do to Rachel, losing her best friend. But you did it anyway." "I did my job." "And I did mine. Inherited a shop full of ghosts and guns. Cleaned up his mess. Paid his debts. Buried him." Her laugh held no humor. "Buried myself too, for a while. Aurora Carter's got a clean record. No connection to Eva O'Reilly or her father's sins. But you knew that already, didn't you? Probably ran my prints the moment I rented the flat upstairs." Silas didn't deny it. "Why come back? Why here?" "Maybe I missed Rachel." She stood, smoothing her jacket. "Maybe I wanted to see if the great Silas Blackwood was still playing both sides of the street. Or maybe," her voice softened, "I just got tired of running from ghosts." She placed a fifty-pound note on the bar. "Keep the change. For old times' sake." "Eva." His voice stopped her halfway to the door. "He asked about you. At the end." She didn't turn around. "No, Si. He didn't. Dad never asked about anything he didn't want to know the answer to." The neon sign caught her profile as she paused. "Just like you." The door closed behind her with a quiet click. Silas stared at the empty glass, at the lipstick mark on its rim. After a moment, he reached under the bar and pulled out a logbook, its pages yellow with age. Inside, pressed between receipts and inventory lists, was a photograph: two teenage girls in school uniforms, arms around each other, laughing at some forgotten joke. He turned it over. On the back, in faded ink: *Rachel and Eva, Spring 2006*. He slipped the photo back into its hiding place and poured himself another drink. Outside, the neon sign flickered, casting shadows that looked almost like wings.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags14
adverbTagCount2
adverbTags
0"She knocked back [back]"
1"he said finally [finally]"
dialogueSentences41
tagDensity0.341
leniency0.683
rawRatio0.143
effectiveRatio0.098
88.00% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount833
totalAiIsmAdverbs2
found
0
adverb"really"
count2
highlights
0"really"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (16 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
0"Blackwood"
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
63.99% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount833
totalAiIsms6
found
0
word"crystal"
count2
1
word"traced"
count1
2
word"solitary"
count1
3
word"silence"
count1
4
word"flickered"
count1
highlights
0"crystal"
1"traced"
2"solitary"
3"silence"
4"flickered"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences42
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences42
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences69
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen39
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans1
markdownWords5
totalWords828
ratio0.006
matches
0"Rachel and Eva, Spring 2006" 1/1/2006, 12:00:00 AM
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions11
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions12
wordCount413
uniqueNames7
maxNameDensity0.97
worstName"Silas"
maxWindowNameDensity1.5
worstWindowName"Silas"
discoveredNames
Silas4
Aurora2
Raven1
Nest1
Tuesday1
Eva2
Spring1
persons
0"Silas"
1"Aurora"
2"Raven"
3"Nest"
4"Eva"
places(empty)
globalScore1
windowScore1
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences31
glossingSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount828
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences69
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs34
mean24.35
std19.03
cv0.781
sampleLengths
028
136
256
328
48
52
642
76
815
912
1013
1111
1227
1346
145
1539
161
175
1817
199
209
2143
2229
2312
2441
254
2665
279
2840
2915
3016
3133
3280
3326
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences42
matches(empty)
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs70
matches(empty)
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences0
totalSentences69
ratio0
matches(empty)
94.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount477
adjectiveStacks1
stackExamples
0"little import-export business"
adverbCount16
adverbRatio0.033542976939203356
lyAdverbCount5
lyAdverbRatio0.010482180293501049
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences69
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences69
mean12
std8.2
cv0.683
sampleLengths
011
117
217
319
410
520
68
711
87
97
1021
117
121
132
148
1534
166
1715
186
196
2010
213
226
235
2416
2511
2612
2713
288
2913
305
3119
3220
331
345
3510
367
379
389
399
4034
4113
426
4310
4412
4524
4617
474
4826
4939
86.47% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats2
diversityRatio0.5362318840579711
totalSentences69
uniqueOpeners37
0.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount0
totalSentences41
matches(empty)
ratio0
44.39% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount18
totalSentences41
matches
0"His movements held the precise"
1"He set the bottle down"
2"He squinted through the dim"
3"He poured himself a measure"
4"She knocked back her drink"
5"His bouncer materialized from the"
6"he said finally"
7"Her smile didn't reach her"
8"He tasted the name like"
9"She leaned forward"
10"Her laugh held no humor"
11"She stood, smoothing her jacket"
12"her voice softened"
13"She placed a fifty-pound note"
14"His voice stopped her halfway"
15"She didn't turn around."
16"He turned it over."
17"He slipped the photo back"
ratio0.439
8.78% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount37
totalSentences41
matches
0"The copper-bright liquid sloshed against"
1"His movements held the precise"
2"He set the bottle down"
3"Aurora traced the rim of"
4"The Raven's Nest settled into"
5"A couple argued in whispers"
6"A solitary woman typed furiously"
7"The mundane ballet of a"
8"The recognition hit him like"
9"He squinted through the dim"
10"He poured himself a measure"
11"She knocked back her drink"
12"Aurora, Eva, whoever she was"
13"The old maps on the"
14"A group of city boys"
15"Silas gestured toward the door"
16"His bouncer materialized from the"
17"he said finally"
18"Her smile didn't reach her"
19"He tasted the name like"
ratio0.902
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences41
matches(empty)
ratio0
53.57% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences16
technicalSentenceCount2
matches
0"His movements held the precise economy of someone who'd made the same gesture thousands of times before."
1"He squinted through the dim light, past the black hair and sharp suit, seeking traces of the wild-haired teenager who'd spent more nights than not sprawled on h…"
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags14
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags3
fancyCount1
fancyTags
0"The crystal sang (sing)"
dialogueSentences41
tagDensity0.073
leniency0.146
rawRatio0.333
effectiveRatio0.049
84.6399%