Run: 2026-02-19-01KHTRPNBAQ1Z3P4Q7DMQ74A4F

Run Details

Model:
o4 Mini
Duration:
27.4s
Cost:
$0.013551
Provider:
OpenAI

Model input

System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Romance genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4415" name="Lucien Moreau" aliases="Lucien, Luc, the Frenchman" pronouns="he/him" species="Half-Demon" storyRole="Ally"> <eyeColor>heterochromatic — one amber, one black</eyeColor> <hair>slicked-back platinum blond</hair> <height>5'11"</height> <age>32</age> <cane>ivory-handled cane that conceals a thin blade</cane> <dress>tailored charcoal suits</dress> <description>An impeccably dressed fixer and information broker in London's supernatural underworld. He speaks four languages fluently.</description> <backstory>Born in Marseille to a human mother and a demon father from the realm of Avaros.</backstory> </character> <location id="858" name="Eva's Flat" aliases="Eva's place, the flat on Brick Lane" realm="Earth"> <cat>tabby cat named Ptolemy</cat> <security>three deadbolts on the front door</security> <description>A cramped one-bedroom flat above a curry house on Brick Lane, East London. Every surface is covered with books, scrolls, and research notes.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the romance genre. Two people who parted on complicated terms are forced together again when one shows up unannounced at the other's flat. There's history between them — attraction, hurt, and things left unsaid. Write the scene from the moment the door opens. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The bolt shot back before Aurora Carter registered what she’d done. Lucien Moreau filled the narrow doorway, his tailored charcoal suit dusted with London rain, ivory-caned hand tapping impatiently against the jamb. His heterochromatic gaze—amber and black—rested on her. She froze, keys still clinking in her fist. Every rational thought stalled. “Aurora,” he said, voice low, cultured French lilt smoothing the tension. “May I come in?” Her stomach clenched. She stepped aside. The door swung fully open and rainwater dripped from his coat onto the threadbare mat. He crossed the threshold with unhurried precision, scent of cedarwood and old paper drifting after him. Rory closed the door quietly behind him, her heart pounding a staccato. He glanced at the three deadbolts—each unfastened—at Eva’s place. The research flat above the curry house felt cramped tonight, shelves sagging under occult tomes and legal textbooks jostled against manuscripts. Ptolemy, Eva’s tabby cat, padded away from Lucien’s boots, tail high. “You look well,” she said, voice brittle. She dropped the keys onto a stack of parchment. He offered a single nod. His black eye flicked to the crescent scar at her wrist. She felt it prickle with shame, recalling how he’d traced that mark the first time they’d met at a clandestine auction in Shoreditch. “You haven’t changed,” she said. “Still charming.” He tapped the cane atop the desk, sending a pile of legal briefs skidding. Papers fluttered to the floor. She reached to catch one. A fragment of his ledger: Avaros exchange rates, demon markets. A surge of anger flared. “Mind your cane,” she snapped, standing. “This is Eva’s domain. Not your negotiation table.” “My apologies.” He extracted a silk handkerchief, dabbed at a polished handle. “I do not intend to ruin her work.” She squeezed her eyes shut. “Why are you here, Lucien? You left without a word.” He stepped forward, shoulders squared beneath that immaculate jacket. “I sent a letter.” “You didn’t.” She crossed her arms, feet planted on the tattered rug. “Not one word.” His amber eye darkened. “Circumstances changed.” Silence pressed between them. She inhaled the faint curry aroma rising from below, mingling with old paper and candlewax. He cleared his throat. “They know I met you.” Rage and something deeper twisted through her. “They? Who?” “Avaros enforcers.” His voice dropped to a whisper. “They crossed realms after me.” She pictured blood-drenched London back alleys, shadowy figures ripping souls from corpses. The last message he’d sent: a splintered ivory claw on her doorstep. “What do they want?” “Vengeance, or my skull.” He leaned on the cane, gaze flicking to the barred window. “I require sanctuary.” Her pulse thundered. Logic warred with instinct. She’d left him to fend for himself. “You made your choices.” “Choices we both made.” His amber eye glimmered with hurt. “I swore to protect you.” She laughed, a harsh, brittle sound. “You swore nothing to me.” He straightened. “Rory, please.” She turned away, spat out words. “You lied.” He closed the gap, tall frame casting a long shadow. “I never lied about what I am.” She glared at his pale cheek. “Demons kill. You hide blades in canes.” Her voice cracked. “Don’t pretend you’re innocent.” He winced as if struck, fingers curling around the cane’s shaft. He exhaled. “I kept my promise not to involve you. That was my mistake.” She whirled. “Your mistake?” She stormed past the desk, books rattling. “You brought hell to my door.” He followed, cane tapping on wood. “Let me make amends.” Her shoulders trembled. She backed into the cramped kitchen doorway. The kettle boiled on the stove, steam hissing. Ptolemy wove around her ankles. “We’re out of milk,” she muttered, forcing calm. “Let me see you safe, then I’ll consider your apology.” He inclined his head. “I will not betray your trust again.” She halted at the counter, raised a chipped mug. Hands shaking, she filled it with water and teabags. Then she waited. When he didn’t move, she cleared her throat. “Sit.” She pointed to a rickety chair. “Eva’s out researching—won’t be back for hours. Make yourself useful.” Lucien sank into the chair without touching the mug. His gaze followed her every move, as though memorising the line of her jaw, the way her black hair fell to her shoulders. He watched her pour hot water with a surgeon’s attention to precision. “Sugar?” she asked over her shoulder. “No.” The single word felt weighted. He stared at the steam curling between them. She placed the mug before him on the scarred table. “Drink it. You must be freezing.” He wrapped slender fingers around the cup. Heat seeped through porcelain. The corner of his mouth quirked, an expression older than amusement. “Thank you, Aurora.” She inhaled and exhaled. His use of her full name pierced deeper than any blade. “Out with it.” He lifted the tea to his lips, paused. “I need your help to cross back.” Silence. She fought the swell of hurt. “I don’t have a portal.” “I know someone who does.” His gaze flicked to the window, where dusk bled into the gutters of Brick Lane. “But they demand an artefact. Something in your care.” Her breath caught. “You mean Eva’s archives.” “Specifically that grimoire bound in bloodwood. You know the one.” She shook her head. “Not touching that. Too dangerous.” He set the mug down, porcelain clinking. His amber eye softened. “I would not ask if it were not urgent.” She stared at the dented tin canister holding tea. Thoughts raced: betray her friend, save the man she once loved...or watch him die at demon hands. Her fingers itched by the door, ready to bolt. “Why should I trust you again?” He placed the cane across his lap. “Because if I die here, you’ll live under their watch. They’ll hunt everyone who sheltered me.” She swallowed. The truth in his words stung. “I hate that you drag me into this.” “I hate it too.” He traced a crack in the table with a fingertip. “But I’m damned to it. I never wanted this life.” His black eye glimmered with a confession he wouldn’t speak aloud. “Except the nights I spent with you.” Her chest tightened. Memories crashed: his lips against her neck in a dimly lit club, his warm breath whispering secrets in French, how safe she’d felt until the dawn revealed his darkness. She lifted her chin. “That was a mistake.” He closed his eyes, voice low. “All the best things feel like mistakes.” She hid her hand behind her back. The scar on her wrist throbbed. “I can’t—” A sudden crash rattled the front door. They both jolted. Ptolemy hissed and darted under the table. Lucien’s cane slid from his lap, clattering across the floor. Aurora yanked the mug down, tea sloshing. Hot liquid stained the table’s edge. “They’re here,” he said, voice calm as a blade’s edge. She didn’t hesitate. She yanked the chair aside, grabbed his cane, then grabbed his arm. “Where to?” He rose, grabbing her wrist to steady her. His scarred fingertips brushed hers, sending a jolt up her arm. He didn’t let go. “Out the back. Through the service alley. Move.” She tossed the cane to him and sprinted for the narrow kitchen door. Lucien followed, cane in hand, watching every corner. She kicked open the back door into the alley, bricks slick with rain. Corrugated iron roofs loomed above. Smells of curry and sewage hung thick. He paused, eyes closed for a fraction. Then he swept the cane’s blade from its handle, ivory gleaming. “Stay close.” She nodded, breath ragged. Heart pounded so loudly she feared they’d hear it. A guttural voice snarled from the front. Heavy footsteps charged through the flat. Dry scrape of metal. Lucien caught her elbow and dragged her behind a stack of crates. “Remember three rules.” Her brow furrowed. “For surviving a demon hunt?” He offered a tight smile. “Don’t run straight. Don’t look back. Don’t stop until we’re safe.” She swallowed. “Got it.” Behind them, the door tore open. Screech of wood on hinges. Ragged claws or something worse? He pressed his lips to her ear. “Trust me.” She drew in a breath, matching his. And then he bolted into the darkness, pulling her with him as the demon-summoned storm swallowed their ragged retreat.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags19
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences70
tagDensity0.271
leniency0.543
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
100.00% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1390
totalAiIsmAdverbs0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
0.00% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1390
totalAiIsms28
found
0
word"lilt"
count1
1
word"tension"
count1
2
word"stomach"
count1
3
word"pounding"
count1
4
word"flicked"
count2
5
word"traced"
count2
6
word"clandestine"
count1
7
word"fluttered"
count1
8
word"silk"
count1
9
word"silence"
count2
10
word"whisper"
count1
11
word"sanctuary"
count1
12
word"pulse"
count1
13
word"thundered"
count1
14
word"long shadow"
count1
15
word"trembled"
count1
16
word"porcelain"
count2
17
word"raced"
count1
18
word"throbbed"
count1
19
word"loomed"
count1
20
word"gleaming"
count1
21
word"footsteps"
count1
22
word"charged"
count1
23
word"furrowed"
count1
highlights
0"lilt"
1"tension"
2"stomach"
3"pounding"
4"flicked"
5"traced"
6"clandestine"
7"fluttered"
8"silk"
9"silence"
10"whisper"
11"sanctuary"
12"pulse"
13"thundered"
14"long shadow"
15"trembled"
16"porcelain"
17"raced"
18"throbbed"
19"loomed"
20"gleaming"
21"footsteps"
22"charged"
23"furrowed"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells2
narrationSentences133
matches
0"e with shame"
1"A surge of anger"
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences133
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences184
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen29
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1382
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions15
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions23
wordCount1037
uniqueNames12
maxNameDensity0.58
worstName"Lucien"
maxWindowNameDensity1.5
worstWindowName"Lucien"
discoveredNames
Aurora2
Carter1
Moreau1
London2
French2
Eva2
Lucien6
Shoreditch1
Avaros1
Brick1
Lane1
Ptolemy3
persons
0"Aurora"
1"Carter"
2"Moreau"
3"Eva"
4"Lucien"
5"Ptolemy"
places
0"London"
1"French"
2"Shoreditch"
3"Brick"
4"Lane"
globalScore1
windowScore1
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences86
glossingSentenceCount1
matches
0"as though memorising the line of her jaw, the way her black hair fell to her shoulders"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1382
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences184
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs69
mean20.03
std11.6
cv0.579
sampleLengths
039
112
215
349
441
516
646
739
814
920
1015
1113
1215
136
1423
155
169
1713
1828
1918
2018
2115
2211
234
248
2517
2620
2725
2817
2910
3023
3118
3211
3329
3417
3544
366
3714
3816
3925
4018
4115
4212
4329
447
4510
469
4720
4841
4923
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences133
matches(empty)
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs213
matches(empty)
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount4
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences2
totalSentences184
ratio0.011
matches
0"His heterochromatic gaze—amber and black—rested on her."
1"He glanced at the three deadbolts—each unfastened—at Eva’s place."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1044
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount19
adverbRatio0.018199233716475097
lyAdverbCount5
lyAdverbRatio0.004789272030651341
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences184
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences184
mean7.51
std4.64
cv0.617
sampleLengths
011
121
27
38
44
511
64
73
83
915
1016
1112
129
1321
1411
157
169
175
1811
1923
205
212
2214
235
245
2510
265
276
288
2912
308
315
3210
339
344
3512
363
374
382
394
4015
414
425
437
442
458
465
4712
4812
494
60.69% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats5
diversityRatio0.3804347826086957
totalSentences184
uniqueOpeners70
52.91% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount2
totalSentences126
matches
0"Then she waited."
1"Then he swept the cane’s"
ratio0.016
0.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount81
totalSentences126
matches
0"His heterochromatic gaze—amber and black—rested"
1"She froze, keys still clinking"
2"he said, voice low, cultured"
3"Her stomach clenched."
4"She stepped aside."
5"He crossed the threshold with"
6"He glanced at the three"
7"she said, voice brittle"
8"She dropped the keys onto"
9"He offered a single nod."
10"His black eye flicked to"
11"She felt it prickle with"
12"He tapped the cane atop"
13"She reached to catch one."
14"she snapped, standing"
15"He extracted a silk handkerchief,"
16"She squeezed her eyes shut."
17"He stepped forward, shoulders squared"
18"She crossed her arms, feet"
19"His amber eye darkened."
ratio0.643
11.59% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount113
totalSentences126
matches
0"The bolt shot back before"
1"Lucien Moreau filled the narrow"
2"His heterochromatic gaze—amber and black—rested"
3"She froze, keys still clinking"
4"Every rational thought stalled."
5"he said, voice low, cultured"
6"Her stomach clenched."
7"She stepped aside."
8"The door swung fully open"
9"He crossed the threshold with"
10"Rory closed the door quietly"
11"He glanced at the three"
12"The research flat above the"
13"Ptolemy, Eva’s tabby cat, padded"
14"she said, voice brittle"
15"She dropped the keys onto"
16"He offered a single nod."
17"His black eye flicked to"
18"She felt it prickle with"
19"He tapped the cane atop"
ratio0.897
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences126
matches(empty)
ratio0
98.21% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences32
technicalSentenceCount2
matches
0"He winced as if struck, fingers curling around the cane’s shaft."
1"His gaze followed her every move, as though memorising the line of her jaw, the way her black hair fell to her shoulders."
19.74% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags19
uselessAdditionCount4
matches
0"he said, voice low, cultured French lilt smoothing the tension"
1"He leaned, gaze flicking to the barred window"
2"She stormed, books rattling"
3"he said, voice calm as a blade’s edge"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags7
fancyCount2
fancyTags
0"she snapped (snap)"
1"she muttered (mutter)"
dialogueSentences70
tagDensity0.1
leniency0.2
rawRatio0.286
effectiveRatio0.057
81.4379%