Run: 2026-02-19-01KHTRRWQ2KZRD1HX90EGMZTTH

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Duration:
28.0s
Cost:
$0.016888

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System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Literary Fiction genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4413" name="Silas Blackwood" aliases="Silas, Si, the Spymaster" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Mentor"> <eyeColor>hazel</eyeColor> <hair>grey-streaked auburn</hair> <height>6'1"</height> <age>58</age> <beard>neatly trimmed, matching his grey-streaked auburn hair</beard> <limp>slight limp in his left leg from an old knee injury</limp> <signetRing>silver signet ring, always worn on his right hand</signetRing> <description>Silas is a retired intelligence operative turned bar owner. He carries himself with quiet authority.</description> <backstory>Former MI6 field agent who retired after a botched operation in Prague left him with a permanent knee injury. He opened "The Raven's Nest" bar in Soho as a front for his network of contacts.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the literary fiction genre. Two old friends who haven't seen each other in years run into each other unexpectedly at a bar. One of them has changed significantly. Through their conversation and the tension between who they were and who they've become, reveal the weight of time and unspoken regret. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The glass slipped from her fingers before she could catch it, whiskey sloshing over the bar’s dark wood like a confession. The ice cubes clinked against the brass rail, a sound too loud in the sudden hush. "Rory?" She turned. The voice was deeper than she remembered, rougher, like gravel underfoot. Silas stood there, his signet ring glinting under the dim lights of The Raven’s Nest, the same way it had a decade ago when he’d pressed it into her palm and told her to run. "Christ," he said. His eyes flicked over her—black hair shorter now, the crescent scar on her wrist more pronounced, the way she held herself like a wire pulled too tight. "You look like hell." She laughed, sharp and sudden. "And you look like you’ve been sleeping in a suit." He hadn’t changed, not really. The same auburn streaked with grey, the same slight limp in his left leg, the same way he carried himself like a man who’d seen too much and decided to keep the rest to himself. But his face was lined in ways she didn’t remember, the skin around his eyes creased like paper left too long in the rain. Silas gestured to the stool beside her. "Mind if I join you?" She shrugged, but her fingers tightened around her glass. "It’s your bar." He slid onto the stool, the leather creaking under his weight. The bartender—a new face, young, with a tattoo of a raven peeking out from under his sleeve—poured him two fingers of something amber without being asked. Silas took the glass, swirled it once, then set it down untouched. "You’re not drinking?" she asked. "Not tonight." His fingers tapped against the bar, restless. "Been cutting back." She raised an eyebrow. "Since when?" "Since I realised I was drinking to forget, not to remember." The words hung between them, heavy. Rory took a sip of her whiskey, the burn familiar, comforting. "And what is it you’re trying to remember?" Silas didn’t answer right away. Instead, he reached into his pocket and pulled out a folded piece of paper, sliding it across the bar toward her. She unfolded it. A newspaper clipping, yellowed at the edges. A photo of a younger her, her arm linked with Eva’s, both of them grinning like they’d just won the lottery. The headline read: *Local Students Awarded Prestigious Scholarship to Cambridge*. She exhaled through her nose. "You kept this?" "Of course I kept it." His voice was low, almost accusatory. "You were supposed to go to Cambridge. You were supposed to change the world." "And you were supposed to be retired." She folded the clipping back up, pushed it toward him. "People change." "Some more than others." She bristled. "What’s that supposed to mean?" Silas finally picked up his glass, took a slow sip. "It means I remember the girl who used to argue with me for hours about justice and truth. The girl who wanted to be a barrister like her father, not a delivery girl for some takeaway joint." Rory’s jaw clenched. "Things happen." "Like what? Like Evan?" The name hit her like a punch. She looked away, her gaze landing on the neon green sign above the door, the way it flickered slightly, like it was struggling to stay lit. "That’s none of your business." "Like hell it isn’t." Silas leaned forward, his voice dropping. "I was the one who told you to leave. I was the one who gave you the money, the contacts, the—" "The way out," she finished for him, her voice bitter. "Yeah. I remember." "And now you’re back in London, working for Yu-Fei, living above my bar like some kind of—" "Like some kind of what?" She turned to face him, her bright blue eyes flashing. "A stray? A charity case? Is that what you were going to say?" Silas didn’t flinch. "I was going to say like someone who’s running from something." She laughed, but there was no humour in it. "Aren’t we all?" For a moment, neither of them spoke. The hum of the bar filled the silence—glasses clinking, the low murmur of conversation, the occasional burst of laughter from a group in the corner. Rory traced the rim of her glass with her finger, the condensation cool against her skin. "You ever think about how things could’ve been different?" Silas asked quietly. She looked at him, really looked at him. The lines on his face, the way his hazel eyes had lost some of their sharpness, the way he held himself like a man who’d spent too long carrying the weight of the world. "All the time," she admitted. "But then I remember that if things had been different, I wouldn’t be here. And for all its flaws, this is the first place that’s ever felt like home." Silas studied her for a long moment, then nodded, almost to himself. "You always did have a way with words." She smirked. "Comes with the territory. You don’t grow up with a barrister father and a teacher mother without learning how to argue." "Or how to run," he said softly. She didn’t answer. Instead, she drained the rest of her whiskey in one go, the burn sharp and final. "I should go. Early shift tomorrow." Silas didn’t try to stop her. He just watched as she stood, as she pulled on her jacket, as she hesitated for just a second before turning toward the door. "Rory." She paused, her back to him. "For what it’s worth," he said, "I’m glad you’re back." She didn’t look at him. "Don’t be. I’m not the same girl you remember." "I know," he said. "But maybe that’s not such a bad thing." She walked out without another word, the door swinging shut behind her with a finality that echoed in the empty space between them. Silas picked up his glass, took a long sip, then set it down with a sigh. The bartender glanced at him, then at the door, then back at Silas. "Everything alright, boss?" Silas didn’t answer. Instead, he reached into his pocket and pulled out his phone, dialling a number he knew by heart. It rang once, twice. "Eva," he said when she picked up. "We need to talk."
total_cost0.016888

Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags13
adverbTagCount2
adverbTags
0"Silas asked quietly [quietly]"
1"he said softly [softly]"
dialogueSentences47
tagDensity0.277
leniency0.553
rawRatio0.154
effectiveRatio0.085
80.95% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1050
totalAiIsmAdverbs4
found
0
adverb"really"
count2
1
adverb"slightly"
count1
2
adverb"softly"
count1
highlights
0"really"
1"slightly"
2"softly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (16 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
0"Blackwood"
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
42.86% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1050
totalAiIsms12
found
0
word"glinting"
count1
1
word"flicked"
count1
2
word"weight"
count2
3
word"eyebrow"
count1
4
word"familiar"
count1
5
word"comforting"
count1
6
word"jaw clenched"
count1
7
word"flickered"
count1
8
word"silence"
count1
9
word"traced"
count1
10
word"echoed"
count1
highlights
0"glinting"
1"flicked"
2"weight"
3"eyebrow"
4"familiar"
5"comforting"
6"jaw clenched"
7"flickered"
8"silence"
9"traced"
10"echoed"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"jaw/fists clenched"
count1
highlights
0"jaw clenched"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences65
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount1
narrationSentences65
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"try to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences98
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen37
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans1
markdownWords7
totalWords1045
ratio0.007
matches
0"Local Students Awarded Prestigious Scholarship to Cambridge"
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions16
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
58.19% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions23
wordCount708
uniqueNames9
maxNameDensity1.84
worstName"Silas"
maxWindowNameDensity3
worstWindowName"Silas"
discoveredNames
Raven1
Nest1
Eva1
Students1
Awarded1
Prestigious1
Scholarship1
Silas13
Rory3
persons
0"Raven"
1"Eva"
2"Silas"
3"Rory"
places(empty)
globalScore0.582
windowScore0.667
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences43
glossingSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1045
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences98
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs46
mean22.72
std18.42
cv0.811
sampleLengths
037
11
248
334
415
564
612
712
849
95
1012
116
1211
1325
1467
158
1625
1719
184
197
2047
215
224
2338
2431
2513
2617
2728
2814
2912
3048
3112
3276
3320
3423
357
3625
3731
386
3910
4014
4112
4252
433
4425
4511
94.47% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount2
totalSentences65
matches
0"was lined"
1"being asked"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount1
totalVerbs130
matches
0"was struggling"
55.39% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount4
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences3
totalSentences98
ratio0.031
matches
0"His eyes flicked over her—black hair shorter now, the crescent scar on her wrist more pronounced, the way she held herself like a wire pulled too tight."
1"The bartender—a new face, young, with a tattoo of a raven peeking out from under his sleeve—poured him two fingers of something amber without being asked."
2"The hum of the bar filled the silence—glasses clinking, the low murmur of conversation, the occasional burst of laughter from a group in the corner."
89.53% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount712
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount37
adverbRatio0.05196629213483146
lyAdverbCount6
lyAdverbRatio0.008426966292134831
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences98
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences98
mean10.66
std8.58
cv0.805
sampleLengths
021
116
21
32
411
535
63
727
84
95
1010
115
1235
1324
147
155
169
173
1811
1926
2012
215
229
233
244
252
2611
276
2811
298
305
3121
323
337
3421
3510
365
373
3811
3914
4017
412
424
432
445
4510
4637
473
482
494
56.46% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats3
diversityRatio0.35714285714285715
totalSentences98
uniqueOpeners35
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount3
totalSentences57
matches
0"Instead, he reached into his"
1"Instead, she drained the rest"
2"Instead, he reached into his"
ratio0.053
51.58% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount24
totalSentences57
matches
0"His eyes flicked over her—black"
1"She laughed, sharp and sudden."
2"He hadn’t changed, not really."
3"She shrugged, but her fingers"
4"He slid onto the stool,"
5"His fingers tapped against the"
6"She raised an eyebrow."
7"She unfolded it."
8"She exhaled through her nose."
9"His voice was low, almost"
10"She folded the clipping back"
11"She looked away, her gaze"
12"she finished for him, her"
13"She turned to face him,"
14"She laughed, but there was"
15"She looked at him, really"
16"he said softly"
17"She didn’t answer."
18"He just watched as she"
19"She paused, her back to"
ratio0.421
3.86% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount52
totalSentences57
matches
0"The glass slipped from her"
1"The ice cubes clinked against"
2"The voice was deeper than"
3"Silas stood there, his signet"
4"His eyes flicked over her—black"
5"She laughed, sharp and sudden."
6"He hadn’t changed, not really."
7"The same auburn streaked with"
8"Silas gestured to the stool"
9"She shrugged, but her fingers"
10"He slid onto the stool,"
11"The bartender—a new face, young,"
12"Silas took the glass, swirled"
13"His fingers tapped against the"
14"She raised an eyebrow."
15"The words hung between them,"
16"Rory took a sip of"
17"Silas didn’t answer right away."
18"She unfolded it."
19"A newspaper clipping, yellowed at"
ratio0.912
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences57
matches(empty)
ratio0
32.97% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences26
technicalSentenceCount4
matches
0"The same auburn streaked with grey, the same slight limp in his left leg, the same way he carried himself like a man who’d seen too much and decided to keep the…"
1"She looked away, her gaze landing on the neon green sign above the door, the way it flickered slightly, like it was struggling to stay lit."
2"The lines on his face, the way his hazel eyes had lost some of their sharpness, the way he held himself like a man who’d spent too long carrying the weight of t…"
3"She walked out without another word, the door swinging shut behind her with a finality that echoed in the empty space between them."
9.62% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags13
uselessAdditionCount3
matches
0"His fingers tapped, restless"
1"Silas leaned, his voice dropping"
2"she finished, her voice bitter"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags8
fancyCount1
fancyTags
0"she admitted (admit)"
dialogueSentences47
tagDensity0.17
leniency0.34
rawRatio0.125
effectiveRatio0.043
79.1958%