Run: 2026-02-19-01KHTX1T9ZGFMA36DA8J2BK5GC

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Duration:
22.5s
Cost:
$0.012878
Provider:
Amazon Bedrock

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System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Literary Fiction genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4413" name="Silas Blackwood" aliases="Silas, Si, the Spymaster" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Mentor"> <eyeColor>hazel</eyeColor> <hair>grey-streaked auburn</hair> <height>6'1"</height> <age>58</age> <beard>neatly trimmed, matching his grey-streaked auburn hair</beard> <limp>slight limp in his left leg from an old knee injury</limp> <signetRing>silver signet ring, always worn on his right hand</signetRing> <description>Silas is a retired intelligence operative turned bar owner. He carries himself with quiet authority.</description> <backstory>Former MI6 field agent who retired after a botched operation in Prague left him with a permanent knee injury. He opened "The Raven's Nest" bar in Soho as a front for his network of contacts.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the literary fiction genre. Two old friends who haven't seen each other in years run into each other unexpectedly at a bar. One of them has changed significantly. Through their conversation and the tension between who they were and who they've become, reveal the weight of time and unspoken regret. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The knife missed by a breath. Aurora stared at the splintered wood where the blade had buried itself between her fingers. A heartbeat behind, the crack of the throw echoed across the bar. "Still flinch, I see." She didn’t turn. Took a slow sip of her gin and tonic, let the ice clink as she set the glass down. The garnish—a limp slice of lemon—floated like a drowned warning. "You always did have terrible timing, Tommy." The man at the other end of the bar wiped his hands on a bloodstained rag. Lean now, skin stretched tight over sharp bones. One sleeve of his jacket hung empty, pinned up just above the elbow. The other hand, gloved in black leather, tapped a rhythm against the bar—three beats, pause, two. Their old signal. From when they were kids stealing cigarettes behind the shops in Roath. From before everything burned. "Lost the arm in Belgrade," he said. "Not the timing. That’s precise." Aurora pulled the knife free, turned it point-down on the counter. The steel was custom—no maker’s mark, no logo. Only a tiny serpent etched into the handle. Malphora’s mark. She hadn’t used it in years. Not since Cardiff. Not since *him*. Silas stood in the doorway to the back room, leaning on his cane. The bookshelf behind him had swung open, revealing the dim outline of the hidden chamber. Maps glowed faintly within, lit by a single green desk lamp. He didn’t speak. Just watched. "Thought you were dead," Aurora said. "Thought you were smarter than running deliveries for a Chinatown noodle bar." Tommy’s voice was sand and smoke. "What happened to law school? To the brilliant little barrister’s daughter?" She flexed her left wrist, the crescent scar pressing against the edge of the knife handle. "Brilliance doesn’t stop a man from breaking your ribs when you ask for the rent receipt." A beat. Tommy’s remaining eye—clouded on the outer edge, like old milk—flickered. "Evan." "Just Evan now," she said. "No last names. Makes it easier to forget." "Didn’t take you for someone who forgets." "I remember everything. The way he used to pour tea. The exact shade of red in that rug when I bled on it. The way he said, *You’ll never leave me, Rory. You’re mine.*" She paused. "I remember. I just don’t let it paralyze me." Tommy snorted. "Paralyze." He held up the stump of his left arm. "Try losing half your nerves and still keeping a steady hand. Now *that’s* paralysis." "You still throwing knives?" "When necessary." He tilted his head toward the back room. "He still running ops from the bar?" "Only ones he won’t get prosecuted for." "Silas always did have a soft spot for broken kids with sharp edges." Tommy’s gaze landed on her again. "You used to cry over stray cats. Now you carry a blade with a serpent on it." "I stopped crying," she said, "when I realized no one was listening." Silence stretched, thick and sour. The bar’s record player had stopped. No music. Just the hum of the fridge and the distant wail of a siren three streets over. Tommy reached into his jacket with his right hand, moved slow, deliberate. Aurora tensed. But it was only a photograph. He slid it across the bar. A woman. Blonde. Mid-thirties. Laugh lines around her eyes. Standing in front of a school gate, holding a child’s hand. The kid had dark hair. Pale skin. "Sarah," he said. "My wife." Aurora stared. “You got married.” “Three years. She teaches music. At a primary in Bristol. Kid’s name’s Leo. He’s six. Doesn’t know about the arm. Thinks I’m a magician who lost a bet.” A ghost of a smile. “He’s got your laugh.” Her breath caught. Not from sentiment. From the photo’s edges. Slightly charred. Water-stained. Folded too many times. Carried for a reason. “Where is she?” “Safe.” “That’s not an answer.” Tommy’s jaw tightened. “Not *here*. Not with you.” She laughed, short and sharp. “Because I’m dangerous?” “Because you’re *alive*," he said. "And everyone who stays near you long enough seems to end up dead." The words landed like brick. Aurora didn’t move. But the knife trembled in her hand. "Last time I saw you," Tommy said, voice low, "you were hiding in a warehouse with a broken wrist and a bottle of bleach because you thought he’d followed you to London. Now you’re cool as stone, playing spy games in a dive bar with a man who used to fake his own death three times in one year." "Silas is the only reason I’m not in a grave," she said. "Or a basement." "And what’s he turning you into?" She looked at Silas. He hadn’t moved. But his right hand had tightened around the signet ring. A flicker. A warning. "A survivor," she said. Tommy shook his head. "You used to hum when you cooked. Remember? That terrible Adele song. Couldn’t hit the notes, but you’d belt it anyway. You used to paint your nails every Sunday. Bright colours. Turquoise. Cherry red. Never boring." He tapped the photo. "Now you wear black like a uniform. Your hair’s shorter. Your eyes are dead." "Survival isn’t colourful," she said. “It’s not living either.” She stood, slow. The knife slipped into the inner pocket of her jacket. “You came here for something. Not a nostalgia tour. So say it.” Tommy exhaled. “They found Sarah’s school on a list.” “What list?” “Names. Addresses. A pattern. Five cities. Seven schools. All staffed by women with children under ten. All former MI6 assets’ spouses.” He looked at Silas. “Your ex-network’s got a leak. And someone’s cleaning house.” Silas stepped forward. “You came to *her* with this?” “I came to *you*,” Tommy said. “But she was the first one I saw. And if they’re hunting families, then she’s already on the radar. Whether she likes it or not.” Aurora felt the scar on her wrist pulse. Not pain. Memory. “Evan’s dead,” she said. Tommy didn’t blink. “I wasn’t talking about him.” The doorbell jingled. A delivery rider—teenage boy, hoodie pulled low—ducked in, holding a grease-stained bag. “Yu-Fei Cheung. One beef chow mein, extra spice.” Aurora didn’t move. The boy looked around. “Uh. You Rory?” She stepped forward, took the bag. Paid him in cash. Closed her fist around a note tucked beneath the coins. Felt the weight of it. The handwriting. Tommy saw it. His one good eye darkened. “Still taking orders?” he said. She tore the note in half without reading it. Let the pieces fall like ash. “Still delivering,” she said. "But not what you think." And then the lights went out. Not the bar. Not the whole street. Just the Raven’s Nest. Darkness swallowed the photographs, the maps, Silas’s face, the knife scar on Tommy’s jawline. From outside, three sharp knocks at the front door. Then four. A code. Old. Forgotten. Aurora reached for the knife. Silas said one word— “Run.”
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags18
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences60
tagDensity0.3
leniency0.6
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
95.72% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1169
totalAiIsmAdverbs1
found
0
adverb"slightly"
count1
highlights
0"slightly"
80.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (16 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
0"Blackwood"
found
0"Sarah"
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
61.51% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1169
totalAiIsms9
found
0
word"echoed"
count1
1
word"etched"
count1
2
word"flickered"
count1
3
word"silence"
count1
4
word"trembled"
count1
5
word"grave"
count1
6
word"flicker"
count1
7
word"pulse"
count1
8
word"weight"
count1
highlights
0"echoed"
1"etched"
2"flickered"
3"silence"
4"trembled"
5"grave"
6"flicker"
7"pulse"
8"weight"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences118
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences118
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences156
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen59
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans7
markdownWords13
totalWords1157
ratio0.011
matches
0"him"
1"You’ll never leave me, Rory. You’re mine."
2"that’s"
3"here"
4"alive"
5"her"
6"you"
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions19
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
48.12% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions33
wordCount638
uniqueNames8
maxNameDensity2.04
worstName"Tommy"
maxWindowNameDensity3.5
worstWindowName"Tommy"
discoveredNames
Roath1
Aurora9
Cardiff1
Tommy13
Silence1
Silas6
Raven1
Nest1
persons
0"Aurora"
1"Tommy"
2"Silence"
3"Silas"
4"Raven"
places
0"Roath"
1"Cardiff"
globalScore0.481
windowScore0.5
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences41
glossingSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1157
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences156
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs74
mean15.64
std15.12
cv0.967
sampleLengths
06
127
24
332
47
572
612
741
844
96
1029
1132
1212
131
1413
157
1645
1726
184
1917
207
2136
2212
2329
2426
2527
265
275
2837
2921
303
311
324
338
348
3518
365
3710
3859
3915
406
4121
424
4358
445
454
4625
479
482
4934
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences118
matches(empty)
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs123
matches(empty)
32.97% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount9
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences6
totalSentences156
ratio0.038
matches
0"The garnish—a limp slice of lemon—floated like a drowned warning."
1"The other hand, gloved in black leather, tapped a rhythm against the bar—three beats, pause, two."
2"The steel was custom—no maker’s mark, no logo."
3"Tommy’s remaining eye—clouded on the outer edge, like old milk—flickered."
4"A delivery rider—teenage boy, hoodie pulled low—ducked in, holding a grease-stained bag."
5"Silas said one word—"
94.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount650
adjectiveStacks1
stackExamples
0"tight over sharp bones."
adverbCount18
adverbRatio0.027692307692307693
lyAdverbCount4
lyAdverbRatio0.006153846153846154
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences156
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences156
mean7.42
std7.58
cv1.022
sampleLengths
06
115
212
34
43
519
610
77
816
98
1013
1116
123
1312
144
157
165
1711
188
198
202
216
223
233
2413
2515
2611
273
282
296
3018
3111
3216
3316
342
3510
361
375
388
397
4036
419
422
4310
4414
454
4610
477
487
4919
70.73% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats8
diversityRatio0.4551282051282051
totalSentences156
uniqueOpeners71
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount3
totalSentences81
matches
0"Only a tiny serpent etched"
1"Just the hum of the"
2"Just the Raven’s Nest."
ratio0.037
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount18
totalSentences81
matches
0"She didn’t turn."
1"Their old signal."
2"She hadn’t used it in"
3"He didn’t speak."
4"She flexed her left wrist,"
5"He held up the stump"
6"He tilted his head toward"
7"He slid it across the"
8"Her breath caught."
9"She laughed, short and sharp."
10"She looked at Silas."
11"He hadn’t moved."
12"He tapped the photo"
13"She stood, slow."
14"He looked at Silas"
15"She stepped forward, took the"
16"His one good eye darkened."
17"She tore the note in"
ratio0.222
100.00% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount54
totalSentences81
matches
0"The knife missed by a"
1"Aurora stared at the splintered"
2"A heartbeat behind, the crack"
3"She didn’t turn."
4"The garnish—a limp slice of"
5"The man at the other"
6"The other hand, gloved in"
7"Their old signal."
8"Aurora pulled the knife free,"
9"The steel was custom—no maker’s"
10"She hadn’t used it in"
11"Silas stood in the doorway"
12"The bookshelf behind him had"
13"Maps glowed faintly within, lit"
14"He didn’t speak."
15"Tommy’s voice was sand and"
16"She flexed her left wrist,"
17"Tommy’s remaining eye—clouded on the"
18"He held up the stump"
19"He tilted his head toward"
ratio0.667
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences81
matches(empty)
ratio0
100.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences22
technicalSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
97.22% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags18
uselessAdditionCount1
matches
0"Tommy said, voice low,"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags12
fancyCount0
fancyTags(empty)
dialogueSentences60
tagDensity0.2
leniency0.4
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
89.3421%