Run: 2026-02-19-01KHTX2PXA51PDPGXPT2S5003G

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Duration:
8.0s
Cost:
$0.000888
Provider:
Mistral

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System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Romance genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4415" name="Lucien Moreau" aliases="Lucien, Luc, the Frenchman" pronouns="he/him" species="Half-Demon" storyRole="Ally"> <eyeColor>heterochromatic — one amber, one black</eyeColor> <hair>slicked-back platinum blond</hair> <height>5'11"</height> <age>32</age> <cane>ivory-handled cane that conceals a thin blade</cane> <dress>tailored charcoal suits</dress> <description>An impeccably dressed fixer and information broker in London's supernatural underworld. He speaks four languages fluently.</description> <backstory>Born in Marseille to a human mother and a demon father from the realm of Avaros.</backstory> </character> <location id="858" name="Eva's Flat" aliases="Eva's place, the flat on Brick Lane" realm="Earth"> <cat>tabby cat named Ptolemy</cat> <security>three deadbolts on the front door</security> <description>A cramped one-bedroom flat above a curry house on Brick Lane, East London. Every surface is covered with books, scrolls, and research notes.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the romance genre. Two people who parted on complicated terms are forced together again when one shows up unannounced at the other's flat. There's history between them — attraction, hurt, and things left unsaid. Write the scene from the moment the door opens. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The door swung open before Rory’s knuckles could rap a second time against the wood. Lucien stood there, one hand braced against the frame, the other gripping his ivory-handled cane like it was the only thing keeping him upright. His heterochromatic eyes—amber and black—locked onto hers with the precision of a sniper’s scope. “You’re late,” he said. Rory’s fingers twitched toward the knife tucked into her boot. “I didn’t know I was expected.” A slow, dangerous smile curled his lips. “Liar.” The scent of bergamot and old books hit her first, thick and familiar, before she even stepped inside. The flat was exactly as she remembered—cluttered, dimly lit, the walls lined with shelves that groaned under the weight of leather-bound tomes and yellowed scrolls. A tabby cat, Ptolemy, slinked between her ankles, tail flicking in silent judgment. Lucien didn’t move. Didn’t invite her in. Just stood there, blocking the doorway like a sentry, his tailored charcoal suit immaculate despite the late hour. The cane tapped once against the hardwood floor. A warning. Rory exhaled through her nose. “You going to let me in, or do I have to pick the lock?” “Depends.” His voice was smooth, but the edge beneath it was razor-sharp. “Are you here to apologize, or to steal something?” She stepped forward, close enough to see the faint scar along his jawline—the one she’d given him three years ago. “Neither.” The air between them crackled, charged with something older than anger. Older than the hurt that had festered between them like an open wound. Lucien’s gaze dropped to her wrist, to the crescent-shaped scar peeking out from beneath her sleeve. His fingers twitched. Then he stepped aside. The flat swallowed her whole. The door clicked shut behind her, the sound too final, too *permanent*. Rory’s boots sank into the threadbare rug as she turned to face him. Lucien leaned against the door, arms crossed, the picture of effortless control. But she knew better. She’d seen the way his knuckles whitened around the cane’s handle. “You look like hell,” she said. “And you look like you’ve been running.” His eyes flicked to the dark smudges under hers, the way her hair clung to her neck with sweat. “From what, I wonder?” Rory ignored the question. “You called me here. Remember?” “Did I?” He pushed off the door, moving with the predatory grace of a man who knew exactly how much space he took up in a room. “Or did you just assume I wanted to see you again?” She didn’t flinch. “You left a message at the bar. *‘Come alone.’* Sound familiar?” Lucien stopped just shy of touching her, close enough that she could feel the heat radiating off him. “And yet, here you are. Alone.” The words hung between them, heavy with implication. Rory’s pulse jumped. She should’ve known better than to come. Should’ve known that Lucien Moreau didn’t do anything without a reason—and that reason was never simple. “Cut the games, Luc.” She reached into her jacket, pulled out the crumpled note she’d found slipped under her door that morning. *“Midnight. Brick Lane. Don’t be late.”* “What’s this about?” He didn’t take the note. Just stared at it like it was a live grenade. “You tell me.” Rory’s patience snapped. “I’m not in the mood for riddles.” “No?” His voice dropped, low and dangerous. “Then why are you here?” Because I couldn’t stay away. The thought hit her like a punch to the gut. She shoved it down, buried it beneath the anger, the frustration, the *need* that had gnawed at her for three damn years. “Because you asked,” she said instead. Lucien’s laugh was a dark, bitter thing. “That’s not an answer.” “It’s the only one you’re getting.” Silence. Thick, suffocating. The kind that pressed against her skin, made her hyper-aware of every inch of space between them. Lucien’s gaze burned into hers, searching, dissecting. She refused to look away. Then, without warning, he reached out. His fingers brushed the scar on her wrist, light as a whisper. Rory’s breath hitched. “You never did tell me how you got this,” he murmured. She jerked her hand back. “And you never told me why you left.” The words hung between them, raw and bleeding. Lucien’s expression darkened, his heterochromatic eyes flashing with something she couldn’t name. For a second, she thought he might actually answer. Might finally give her the truth she’d been chasing for years. Instead, he turned away. “Sit down, *chérie*,” he said, voice carefully neutral. “We have a lot to discuss.” Rory didn’t move. “I’d rather stand.” “Suit yourself.” He crossed to the small kitchenette, poured two glasses of something amber and expensive. The ice clinked against the crystal like a countdown. “But you might want to be sitting when I tell you why I called you here.” She watched him, the way his shoulders tensed beneath the tailored fabric of his suit, the way his fingers tightened around the glass. Lucien Moreau was many things—dangerous, ruthless, infuriating—but he was never *nervous*. Something was wrong. “Spit it out,” she said. He turned, leaned against the counter, and met her gaze head-on. “Evan’s back.” The name hit her like a physical blow. Rory’s stomach dropped, her fingers curling into fists at her sides. “That’s impossible.” “Is it?” Lucien’s voice was soft, almost gentle. “You know better than anyone what he’s capable of.” She did. God, she *did*. Memories flashed behind her eyes—Evan’s hands around her throat, his voice a venomous whisper in her ear. *You’ll never leave me.* The way the police had looked at her when she’d reported the abuse, like she was the one who’d done something wrong. The way Lucien had found her that night, bruised and bleeding, and *promised* her it would never happen again. Her breath came fast, too fast. “You said he was gone. You said—” “I said I’d handle it.” Lucien’s jaw tightened. “I did. But Evan’s not the kind of problem that stays buried.” Rory’s knees nearly gave out. She forced herself to stay upright, to meet his gaze. “What do you want from me?” Lucien set his glass down. “I want you to help me kill him.” The words hung in the air, heavy and final. Rory’s mind raced, her pulse roaring in her ears. This was madness. This was *suicide*. And yet— She thought of Evan’s hands on her. Of the way he’d smiled when he’d broken her wrist. Of the way Lucien had looked at her that night, like she was something precious, something *worth* protecting. She thought of the knife in her boot. “Tell me everything,” she said.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags13
adverbTagCount1
adverbTags
0"she said instead [instead]"
dialogueSentences42
tagDensity0.31
leniency0.619
rawRatio0.077
effectiveRatio0.048
95.54% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1120
totalAiIsmAdverbs1
found
0
adverb"carefully"
count1
highlights
0"carefully"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
24.11% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1120
totalAiIsms17
found
0
word"familiar"
count2
1
word"weight"
count1
2
word"charged"
count1
3
word"effortless"
count1
4
word"flicked"
count1
5
word"could feel"
count1
6
word"implication"
count1
7
word"pulse"
count2
8
word"silence"
count1
9
word"whisper"
count2
10
word"crystal"
count1
11
word"stomach"
count1
12
word"raced"
count1
13
word"roaring"
count1
highlights
0"familiar"
1"weight"
2"charged"
3"effortless"
4"flicked"
5"could feel"
6"implication"
7"pulse"
8"silence"
9"whisper"
10"crystal"
11"stomach"
12"raced"
13"roaring"
66.67% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches2
maxInWindow2
found
0
label"stomach dropped/sank"
count1
1
label"hung in the air"
count1
highlights
0"stomach dropped"
1"hung in the air"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences95
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences95
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences122
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen27
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans11
markdownWords20
totalWords1106
ratio0.018
matches
0"permanent"
1"‘Come alone.’"
2"“Midnight. Brick Lane. Don’t be late.”"
3"need"
4"chérie"
5"nervous"
6"did"
7"You’ll never leave me."
8"promised"
9"suicide"
10"worth"
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions15
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
64.19% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions32
wordCount874
uniqueNames5
maxNameDensity1.72
worstName"Lucien"
maxWindowNameDensity3
worstWindowName"Lucien"
discoveredNames
Rory12
Ptolemy1
Lucien15
Moreau2
Evan2
persons
0"Rory"
1"Ptolemy"
2"Lucien"
3"Moreau"
4"Evan"
places(empty)
globalScore0.642
windowScore0.667
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences58
glossingSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1106
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences122
matches
0"known that Lucien"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs54
mean20.48
std15.33
cv0.748
sampleLengths
053
14
216
38
456
535
619
721
821
943
104
1157
126
1330
149
1538
1614
1724
1834
1931
2018
2110
2212
235
2432
256
2611
276
2832
2921
3011
3113
3240
334
3414
356
3641
3734
383
395
4013
4121
4217
435
4462
4513
4620
4721
4813
4924
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences95
matches(empty)
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs167
matches(empty)
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount9
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences7
totalSentences122
ratio0.057
matches
0"His heterochromatic eyes—amber and black—locked onto hers with the precision of a sniper’s scope."
1"The flat was exactly as she remembered—cluttered, dimly lit, the walls lined with shelves that groaned under the weight of leather-bound tomes and yellowed scrolls."
2"She stepped forward, close enough to see the faint scar along his jawline—the one she’d given him three years ago."
3"Should’ve known that Lucien Moreau didn’t do anything without a reason—and that reason was never simple."
4"Lucien Moreau was many things—dangerous, ruthless, infuriating—but he was never *nervous*."
5"Memories flashed behind her eyes—Evan’s hands around her throat, his voice a venomous whisper in her ear."
6"And yet—"
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount888
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount34
adverbRatio0.038288288288288286
lyAdverbCount8
lyAdverbRatio0.009009009009009009
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences122
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences122
mean9.07
std6.06
cv0.669
sampleLengths
015
124
214
34
410
56
67
71
818
925
1013
113
124
1318
148
152
165
1714
1812
199
2020
211
2211
2313
2416
253
264
275
2812
2913
3012
314
3211
336
3426
354
364
375
3827
3911
403
4111
4218
436
448
453
467
4716
4822
499
61.48% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats5
diversityRatio0.39344262295081966
totalSentences122
uniqueOpeners48
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount5
totalSentences85
matches
0"Just stood there, blocking the"
1"Then he stepped aside."
2"Just stared at it like"
3"Then, without warning, he reached"
4"Instead, he turned away."
ratio0.059
97.65% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount26
totalSentences85
matches
0"His heterochromatic eyes—amber and black—locked"
1"His voice was smooth, but"
2"She stepped forward, close enough"
3"His fingers twitched."
4"She’d seen the way his"
5"His eyes flicked to the"
6"He pushed off the door,"
7"She didn’t flinch."
8"She should’ve known better than"
9"She reached into her jacket,"
10"He didn’t take the note."
11"His voice dropped, low and"
12"She shoved it down, buried"
13"she said instead"
14"She refused to look away."
15"His fingers brushed the scar"
16"She jerked her hand back."
17"he said, voice carefully neutral"
18"He crossed to the small"
19"She watched him, the way"
ratio0.306
42.35% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount71
totalSentences85
matches
0"The door swung open before"
1"Lucien stood there, one hand"
2"His heterochromatic eyes—amber and black—locked"
3"Rory’s fingers twitched toward the"
4"A slow, dangerous smile curled"
5"The scent of bergamot and"
6"The flat was exactly as"
7"A tabby cat, Ptolemy, slinked"
8"Lucien didn’t move."
9"The cane tapped once against"
10"Rory exhaled through her nose."
11"His voice was smooth, but"
12"She stepped forward, close enough"
13"The air between them crackled,"
14"Lucien’s gaze dropped to her"
15"His fingers twitched."
16"The flat swallowed her whole."
17"The door clicked shut behind"
18"Rory’s boots sank into the"
19"Lucien leaned against the door,"
ratio0.835
58.82% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences85
matches
0"Because I couldn’t stay away."
ratio0.012
100.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences35
technicalSentenceCount1
matches
0"The flat was exactly as she remembered—cluttered, dimly lit, the walls lined with shelves that groaned under the weight of leather-bound tomes and yellowed scro…"
86.54% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags13
uselessAdditionCount1
matches
0"he said, voice carefully neutral"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags7
fancyCount1
fancyTags
0"he murmured (murmur)"
dialogueSentences42
tagDensity0.167
leniency0.333
rawRatio0.143
effectiveRatio0.048
86.5778%