Run: 2026-02-19-01KHTX310M2A33DJFH9FC8FVJ9

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You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Literary Fiction genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4413" name="Silas Blackwood" aliases="Silas, Si, the Spymaster" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Mentor"> <eyeColor>hazel</eyeColor> <hair>grey-streaked auburn</hair> <height>6'1"</height> <age>58</age> <beard>neatly trimmed, matching his grey-streaked auburn hair</beard> <limp>slight limp in his left leg from an old knee injury</limp> <signetRing>silver signet ring, always worn on his right hand</signetRing> <description>Silas is a retired intelligence operative turned bar owner. He carries himself with quiet authority.</description> <backstory>Former MI6 field agent who retired after a botched operation in Prague left him with a permanent knee injury. He opened "The Raven's Nest" bar in Soho as a front for his network of contacts.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the literary fiction genre. Two old friends who haven't seen each other in years run into each other unexpectedly at a bar. One of them has changed significantly. Through their conversation and the tension between who they were and who they've become, reveal the weight of time and unspoken regret. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The glass slid across the bar with practiced ease, catching the green neon glow from the window. Aurora wiped the counter, not because it needed it, but because her hands needed something to do. Tuesday nights at The Raven's Nest crawled by slower than most. "Last call's in twenty, Rory." She didn't look up. "I'm not behind the bar, Si. I'm just keeping you company." Silas chuckled, the sound roughened by decades of secrets and cheap whisky. He leaned against the back shelf, that silver signet ring catching the light as he polished a glass he already polishised. The maps on the walls seemed to breathe in the dimness, old roads to places that no longer existed on any modern atlas. The door opened. Closed. The lock clicked. But the footsteps stopped halfway. Aurora felt it before she saw him. That prickle at the back of her neck, that old instinct she'd developed living with her father's temper and then Evan's fists. She turned. The man standing by the entrance wore a suit that cost more than her rent. His hair was slicked back, prematurely grey at the temples in a way that looked intentional, cultivated. He held a leather briefcase like a shield. Her heart stopped. No. That wasn't possible. "Carter?" The name hit her like cold water. Nobody called her Carter except— "Thomas?" Her voice came out wrong, too thin. "Thomas Whitmore?" He laughed. That same laugh, just deeper now, edged with something she couldn't name. "In the flesh." He stepped closer, and she caught the scent of expensive cologne, something with sandalwood and ambition. "Christ, Rory. It's been—" "Eight years." "Has it?" He settled onto a bar stool, setting the briefcase beside him with a soft thump. "Sounds about right." She should move. Should pour him a drink, ask what he was doing here, perform the motions of a bartender. Instead, she just stared. Thomas Whitmore had been her best friend at Cardiff. The only person who saw her with Evan and didn't look away. He'd driven her to the hospital that night she couldn't hide the bruises anymore, sat in the waiting room while they stitched her eyebrow, and then he'd driven her to Eva's flat and helped her pack a bag. Then she'd run to London, and she'd never looked back. "You look—" She stopped. "Different?" He smiled, but it didn't reach his eyes. "You were going to say different." "I was going to say like a wanker, actually." His laugh was genuine that time. "Fair." He gestured around the bar. "This yours?" "God, no. I just live above it." She finally moved, reaching for a glass. "Whisky?" "Please." She poured him the good stuff, the bottles Silas kept hidden behind the counter. When she slid it across, their fingers brushed, and she noticed he flinched. Not from cold. From memory. "How did you find me?" "I didn't." He took a long sip. "I'm in London for work. Thought I'd grab a drink, see what Soho's got these days." He looked around, at the maps and the photographs, the low ceiling and the green glow. "Funny thing, London. You walk into any random bar, and somehow you end up exactly where you need to be." "That's not funny. That's coincidence." "Is there a difference?" She didn't answer. Instead, she poured herself the same whisky, neat, and drank half of it in one go. "You're not drinking on the job?" "I'm not working." She gestured at Silas, who had retreated to the back room, leaving them alone with the ghosts. "That's my landlord. Retired spook. Very discreet." "Spies." Thomas nodded slowly. "Sounds about right." They sat in silence. The clock behind the bar ticked. Somewhere above them, a pipe creaked—her flat, her tiny kitchen, her makeshift home that she'd built from scratch after arriving with nothing but a bag and a broken spirit. "Eva kept in touch with me," he said eventually. "For a while." "I know. She told me." "She did?" Something flickered across his face. Surprise, maybe. Or hope. "She said you were doing well. Bigshot consultant. Lots of money. Very important." Aurora smiled, but it felt brittle. "Congratulations." "It's not—" He stopped. Took another drink. "It's not what you think." "What do I think?" "That I left you there. That I moved on. Got comfortable." He met her eyes, and for a moment he was twenty again, terrified in that hospital waiting room, asking her if she wanted him to call the police. "I looked for you. After you left. For months." "I know." "Eva wouldn't tell me where you were." "I asked her not to." The silence stretched. The neon sign buzzed, a insect-like hum that had become white noise years ago. "Why?" His voice cracked on the word. "Rory, I—we were friends. Best friends. And you just vanished. Like I was nobody." She felt the old scar on her wrist itch. The crescent shape, faded now, from when she'd fallen off her bike at seven. A different life. A different her. "You were everybody," she said quietly. "That was the problem." He stared at her. The suit, the briefcase, the expensive cologne—they all seemed to deflate, leaving just Thomas. Just the boy who'd held her hair back when she was sick, who'd cried at her mother's funeral, who'd tried to fight Evan in a car park behind the Student's Union and ended up with a broken nose for his trouble. "I didn't want you to see me like this." "Like what?" He leaned forward. "Like what, Rory?" "Like someone who needed saving." She lifted her glass, watched the amber liquid catch the light. "I needed to be no one for a while. Someone who could just... exist. Without anyone watching. Without anyone waiting for me to fall apart." "I wasn't waiting for you to fall apart." "You were. Everyone was. Even me." She set the glass down. "Especially me." Thomas was quiet for a long moment. Then he reached into his jacket and pulled out a business card. Plain white. Just a name, a phone number, an email address. "I kept it," he said. "All these years. The hospital's number, in case you ever needed..." He trailed off. "Stupid, right? You probably don't even remember." Aurora took the card. The paper was soft, worn, like he'd been holding it for years. She flipped it over. On the back, in handwriting she recognized from a thousand borrowed lecture notes, was a single word. *Always.* "I remember," she said. The clock struck midnight. Somewhere in Soho, a siren wailed, distant and fading. Silas emerged from the back room, glancing at them with those hazel eyes that had seen too much to be surprised by anything. "Everything all right here?" Aurora looked at Thomas. He looked back. "We're getting there," she said.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
38.71% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags24
adverbTagCount5
adverbTags
0"He gestured around [around]"
1"He looked around [around]"
2"Thomas nodded slowly [slowly]"
3"he said eventually [eventually]"
4"she said quietly [quietly]"
dialogueSentences62
tagDensity0.387
leniency0.774
rawRatio0.208
effectiveRatio0.161
86.84% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1140
totalAiIsmAdverbs3
found
0
adverb"very"
count2
1
adverb"slowly"
count1
highlights
0"very"
1"slowly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (16 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
0"Blackwood"
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
69.30% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1140
totalAiIsms7
found
0
word"practiced ease"
count1
1
word"footsteps"
count1
2
word"eyebrow"
count1
3
word"silence"
count2
4
word"flickered"
count1
5
word"comfortable"
count1
highlights
0"practiced ease"
1"footsteps"
2"eyebrow"
3"silence"
4"flickered"
5"comfortable"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences92
matches(empty)
96.27% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount3
narrationSentences92
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
1"tried to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences129
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen41
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans1
markdownWords1
totalWords1138
ratio0.001
matches
0"Always."
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions14
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions29
wordCount815
uniqueNames16
maxNameDensity0.61
worstName"Thomas"
maxWindowNameDensity1.5
worstWindowName"Thomas"
discoveredNames
Raven1
Nest1
Evan3
Carter1
Whitmore1
Cardiff1
Eva1
London1
Silas4
Thomas5
Surprise1
Took1
Student1
Union1
Aurora5
Soho1
persons
0"Nest"
1"Evan"
2"Carter"
3"Whitmore"
4"Eva"
5"Silas"
6"Thomas"
7"Student"
8"Aurora"
places
0"Raven"
1"Cardiff"
2"London"
3"Soho"
globalScore1
windowScore1
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences47
glossingSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1138
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences129
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs64
mean17.78
std16.21
cv0.912
sampleLengths
045
15
215
356
47
55
631
740
83
94
101
1112
1210
1337
142
1520
1624
1759
1810
194
2015
219
2214
2315
241
2532
265
2759
285
294
3019
316
3227
337
3439
3512
365
3711
3820
3912
404
4148
422
437
445
4517
4621
4729
4810
4959
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount1
totalSentences92
matches
0"was slicked"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount1
totalVerbs150
matches
0"was doing"
76.41% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount3
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences3
totalSentences129
ratio0.023
matches
0"Nobody called her Carter except—"
1"Somewhere above them, a pipe creaked—her flat, her tiny kitchen, her makeshift home that she'd built from scratch after arriving with nothing but a bag and a broken spirit."
2"The suit, the briefcase, the expensive cologne—they all seemed to deflate, leaving just Thomas."
97.52% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount817
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount35
adverbRatio0.042839657282741736
lyAdverbCount6
lyAdverbRatio0.0073439412484700125
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences129
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences129
mean8.82
std7.93
cv0.899
sampleLengths
017
117
211
35
44
511
612
721
823
93
101
113
125
137
1422
152
1615
1717
188
193
201
213
221
237
245
258
262
272
2812
2919
304
312
3217
333
343
3517
364
379
3812
3938
4010
414
429
436
449
456
466
472
4814
491
73.13% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats9
diversityRatio0.4806201550387597
totalSentences129
uniqueOpeners62
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount8
totalSentences78
matches
0"Instead, she just stared."
1"Then she'd run to London,"
2"Instead, she poured herself the"
3"Somewhere above them, a pipe"
4"Just the boy who'd held"
5"Then he reached into his"
6"Just a name, a phone"
7"Somewhere in Soho, a siren"
ratio0.103
55.90% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount32
totalSentences78
matches
0"She didn't look up."
1"He leaned against the back"
2"His hair was slicked back,"
3"He held a leather briefcase"
4"Her heart stopped."
5"Her voice came out wrong,"
6"He stepped closer, and she"
7"He settled onto a bar"
8"She should move."
9"He'd driven her to the"
10"He smiled, but it didn't"
11"His laugh was genuine that"
12"He gestured around the bar"
13"She finally moved, reaching for"
14"She poured him the good"
15"He took a long sip"
16"He looked around, at the"
17"She didn't answer."
18"She gestured at Silas, who"
19"They sat in silence."
ratio0.41
49.74% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount64
totalSentences78
matches
0"The glass slid across the"
1"Aurora wiped the counter, not"
2"Tuesday nights at The Raven's"
3"She didn't look up."
4"Silas chuckled, the sound roughened"
5"He leaned against the back"
6"The maps on the walls"
7"The door opened."
8"The lock clicked."
9"Aurora felt it before she"
10"That prickle at the back"
11"The man standing by the"
12"His hair was slicked back,"
13"He held a leather briefcase"
14"Her heart stopped."
15"That wasn't possible."
16"The name hit her like"
17"Nobody called her Carter except—"
18"Her voice came out wrong,"
19"That same laugh, just deeper"
ratio0.821
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences78
matches(empty)
ratio0
60.44% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences26
technicalSentenceCount3
matches
0"His hair was slicked back, prematurely grey at the temples in a way that looked intentional, cultivated."
1"The neon sign buzzed, a insect-like hum that had become white noise years ago."
2"Just the boy who'd held her hair back when she was sick, who'd cried at her mother's funeral, who'd tried to fight Evan in a car park behind the Student's Union…"
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags24
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags5
fancyCount0
fancyTags(empty)
dialogueSentences62
tagDensity0.081
leniency0.161
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
86.8086%