Run: 2026-02-19-01KHTX33ZEARH45ZT2VQMHVSBA

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Duration:
8.1s
Cost:
$0.000870
Provider:
Mistral

Model input

System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Romance genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4415" name="Lucien Moreau" aliases="Lucien, Luc, the Frenchman" pronouns="he/him" species="Half-Demon" storyRole="Ally"> <eyeColor>heterochromatic — one amber, one black</eyeColor> <hair>slicked-back platinum blond</hair> <height>5'11"</height> <age>32</age> <cane>ivory-handled cane that conceals a thin blade</cane> <dress>tailored charcoal suits</dress> <description>An impeccably dressed fixer and information broker in London's supernatural underworld. He speaks four languages fluently.</description> <backstory>Born in Marseille to a human mother and a demon father from the realm of Avaros.</backstory> </character> <location id="858" name="Eva's Flat" aliases="Eva's place, the flat on Brick Lane" realm="Earth"> <cat>tabby cat named Ptolemy</cat> <security>three deadbolts on the front door</security> <description>A cramped one-bedroom flat above a curry house on Brick Lane, East London. Every surface is covered with books, scrolls, and research notes.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the romance genre. Two people who parted on complicated terms are forced together again when one shows up unannounced at the other's flat. There's history between them — attraction, hurt, and things left unsaid. Write the scene from the moment the door opens. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The door swung open before Rory’s knuckles could rap a second time against the wood. Lucien stood there, one hand braced against the frame, the other gripping his ivory-handled cane like it was the only thing keeping him upright. His heterochromatic eyes—amber and black—locked onto hers with the precision of a sniper’s scope. “You,” he said, voice rough as gravel underfoot. The scent of bergamot and something darker, something like burnt sugar, rolled out from the flat behind him. Rory’s fingers twitched toward the crescent scar on her wrist, an old habit when nerves got the better of her. “Me,” she agreed, because what else was there to say? Lucien didn’t move. Didn’t blink. Just stood there, tailored charcoal suit clinging to his frame like a second skin, his platinum hair slicked back so severely it looked painted on. The flat behind him was a mess—books splayed open on the floor, a half-empty glass of something amber and dangerous perched precariously on the arm of a leather chair. A tabby cat, Ptolemy, slinked past his ankles, tail flicking with disdain. “You’re not supposed to be here,” he said finally, but there was no heat in it. Just exhaustion. The kind that settled into bones and refused to leave. Rory exhaled through her nose, sharp and controlled. “Funny. I was about to say the same thing.” A muscle feathered in Lucien’s jaw. “Eva’s flat. Not yours.” “Eva’s *dead*,” Rory snapped before she could stop herself. The words hung between them, ugly and raw. She hadn’t meant to say it like that. Hadn’t meant to say it at all. Lucien’s grip on the cane tightened. The blade inside, thin as a razor, whispered against its sheath. “I know.” Silence. The kind that pressed down like a weight, thick with everything unsaid. Rory could hear the hum of the fridge in Eva’s kitchen, the distant wail of a siren outside, the way Lucien’s breath hitched just slightly when she stepped forward. “Let me in, Luc,” she said, softer now. “We both know you’re not going to slam the door in my face.” His laugh was a dry, humorless thing. “Don’t bet on it.” But he stepped back. The flat smelled like Eva—old paper and chamomile tea, the faintest hint of the curry house below. Rory’s chest ached. She hadn’t been back since the funeral. Hadn’t let herself. Lucien shut the door behind her with a quiet click. The deadbolts slid home, one after the other. Three of them. Like that would keep the past out. “You look like hell,” he said, because of course he did. Rory shot him a look. “You should see yourself.” He did look like hell. Dark circles smudged beneath his eyes, his usually immaculate suit rumpled at the cuffs. The amber eye was bloodshot. The black one—well, the black one had always been a little too knowing, a little too sharp. Like it saw straight through her. “What do you want, *Laila*?” he asked, and the way he said her old alias—her *Evan* alias—made her skin prickle. Rory crossed her arms. “I want to know why you’re squatting in Eva’s flat.” Lucien leaned against the door, cane tapping idly against the floor. “I’m not squatting. I’m *house-sitting*.” “Bullshit.” “Fine.” He pushed off the door, moved toward the kitchen with the kind of fluid grace that made her stomach clench. “I’m hiding.” Rory followed. The kitchen was small, cluttered. A half-empty bottle of whiskey sat on the counter, next to a stack of unopened letters. She recognized Eva’s handwriting on the top one. “From who?” she asked. Lucien poured two fingers of whiskey into a chipped mug. Didn’t offer her any. “The usual suspects. The Council. A few *interested parties* who think I’ve got something they want.” Rory’s fingers curled into her palms. “And do you?” He took a slow sip, eyes never leaving hers. “Wouldn’t you like to know.” She should’ve left it alone. Should’ve turned around and walked out the door, gone back to her life, her flat above Silas’ bar, her deliveries for Yu-Fei. But Eva’s ghost was in every corner of this place, in the way the light slanted through the curtains, in the way the floorboards creaked underfoot. “What do *you* want, Luc?” she asked instead. He set the mug down. The clink of ceramic against countertop was too loud in the quiet. “I want you to leave.” Rory laughed. It came out sharp, bitter. “No, you don’t.” Lucien’s gaze darkened. “Don’t tell me what I want.” “Then stop lying to yourself.” He moved fast. One second he was across the room, the next he was in her space, close enough that she could see the flecks of gold in his amber eye, close enough that she could feel the heat rolling off him. His cane clattered to the floor. “You don’t get to do this,” he said, voice low. “You don’t get to waltz back into my life like nothing happened.” Rory didn’t flinch. Didn’t back down. “I’m not waltzing. I’m standing right here.” His breath hitched. She could see the pulse jumping in his throat, could see the way his fingers twitched like he wanted to reach for her. Like he wanted to push her away. “You left,” he said, and the words were raw. “You *ran*.” “I had to.” “Bullshit.” She should’ve lied. Should’ve told him it was complicated, that she’d had her reasons, that she was sorry. But the truth was a live wire between them, sparking, dangerous. “I was scared,” she admitted. Lucien stilled. The air between them went electric. “Of what?” he asked, voice barely above a whisper. Rory swallowed. “Of you.” Something flickered in his eyes. Something like pain. Something like hope. Then the front door burst open. The sound of splintering wood filled the flat. Rory spun, heart hammering, as three figures stepped inside—tall, broad-shouldered, their faces obscured by ski masks. The largest one held a gun, the barrel glinting under the overhead light. “Well, well,” the man said, voice a gravelly purr. “If it isn’t the infamous Lucien Moreau. And his *friend*.” Lucien’s hand shot out, grabbed Rory’s wrist. His fingers were ice-cold. “Run,” he said. But it was too late. The gun cocked.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags17
adverbTagCount2
adverbTags
0"he said finally [finally]"
1"she asked instead [instead]"
dialogueSentences40
tagDensity0.425
leniency0.85
rawRatio0.118
effectiveRatio0.1
90.50% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1053
totalAiIsmAdverbs2
found
0
adverb"slightly"
count1
1
adverb"barely above a whisper"
count1
highlights
0"slightly"
1"barely above a whisper"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
57.26% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1053
totalAiIsms9
found
0
word"silence"
count1
1
word"weight"
count1
2
word"stomach"
count1
3
word"could feel"
count1
4
word"pulse"
count1
5
word"electric"
count1
6
word"whisper"
count1
7
word"flickered"
count1
8
word"glinting"
count1
highlights
0"silence"
1"weight"
2"stomach"
3"could feel"
4"pulse"
5"electric"
6"whisper"
7"flickered"
8"glinting"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences97
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences97
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences121
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen39
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans8
markdownWords9
totalWords1039
ratio0.009
matches
0"dead"
1"Laila"
2"Evan"
3"house-sitting"
4"interested parties"
5"you"
6"ran"
7"friend"
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions22
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
61.97% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions37
wordCount852
uniqueNames6
maxNameDensity1.76
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity2.5
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
Rory15
Lucien11
Ptolemy1
Eva4
Didn3
Like3
persons
0"Rory"
1"Lucien"
2"Ptolemy"
3"Eva"
4"Like"
places(empty)
globalScore0.62
windowScore0.833
63.79% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences58
glossingSentenceCount2
matches
0"something like burnt sugar, rolled out from"
1"smelled like Eva—old paper and chamomile t"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches1
per1kWords0.962
wordCount1039
matches
0"not supposed to be here,” he said finally, but there was no heat in it"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences121
matches
0"complicated, that she’d"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs54
mean19.24
std15.86
cv0.824
sampleLengths
053
18
248
371
428
517
610
732
819
942
1021
1111
124
1330
1428
1511
169
1747
1820
1914
2016
211
2223
2331
244
2530
269
2714
2853
298
3022
3110
329
335
3448
3522
3613
3733
3811
393
401
4129
425
438
449
454
4611
476
4837
4919
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount1
totalSentences97
matches
0"was complicated"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs162
matches(empty)
1.18% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount8
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences6
totalSentences121
ratio0.05
matches
0"His heterochromatic eyes—amber and black—locked onto hers with the precision of a sniper’s scope."
1"The flat behind him was a mess—books splayed open on the floor, a half-empty glass of something amber and dangerous perched precariously on the arm of a leather chair."
2"The flat smelled like Eva—old paper and chamomile tea, the faintest hint of the curry house below."
3"The black one—well, the black one had always been a little too knowing, a little too sharp."
4"“What do you want, *Laila*?” he asked, and the way he said her old alias—her *Evan* alias—made her skin prickle."
5"Rory spun, heart hammering, as three figures stepped inside—tall, broad-shouldered, their faces obscured by ski masks."
97.02% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount622
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount27
adverbRatio0.04340836012861737
lyAdverbCount8
lyAdverbRatio0.012861736334405145
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences121
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences121
mean8.59
std6.83
cv0.795
sampleLengths
015
124
214
38
418
520
610
73
82
925
1029
1112
1216
132
1410
158
169
176
184
199
208
218
227
236
2411
252
261
2712
2829
298
3013
317
324
334
3417
353
367
373
3810
398
403
417
4211
435
444
455
4614
475
4817
496
48.76% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats6
diversityRatio0.32231404958677684
totalSentences121
uniqueOpeners39
76.63% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount2
totalSentences87
matches
0"Just stood there, tailored charcoal"
1"Then the front door burst"
ratio0.023
95.86% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount27
totalSentences87
matches
0"His heterochromatic eyes—amber and black—locked"
1"he said, voice rough as"
2"she agreed, because what else"
3"he said finally, but there"
4"She hadn’t meant to say"
5"she said, softer now"
6"His laugh was a dry,"
7"She hadn’t been back since"
8"he said, because of course"
9"He did look like hell."
10"he asked, and the way"
11"He pushed off the door,"
12"She recognized Eva’s handwriting on"
13"He took a slow sip,"
14"She should’ve left it alone."
15"she asked instead"
16"He set the mug down."
17"It came out sharp, bitter."
18"He moved fast."
19"His cane clattered to the"
ratio0.31
57.70% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount70
totalSentences87
matches
0"The door swung open before"
1"Lucien stood there, one hand"
2"His heterochromatic eyes—amber and black—locked"
3"he said, voice rough as"
4"The scent of bergamot and"
5"Rory’s fingers twitched toward the"
6"she agreed, because what else"
7"Lucien didn’t move."
8"The flat behind him was"
9"A tabby cat, Ptolemy, slinked"
10"he said finally, but there"
11"The kind that settled into"
12"Rory exhaled through her nose,"
13"A muscle feathered in Lucien’s"
14"Rory snapped before she could"
15"The words hung between them,"
16"She hadn’t meant to say"
17"Lucien’s grip on the cane"
18"The blade inside, thin as"
19"The kind that pressed down"
ratio0.805
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences87
matches(empty)
ratio0
100.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences27
technicalSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
7.35% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags17
uselessAdditionCount4
matches
0"he said, voice rough as gravel underfoot"
1"he said, voice low"
2"he said, and the words were raw"
3"he asked, voice barely above a whisper"
75.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags15
fancyCount3
fancyTags
0"she agreed (agree)"
1"Rory snapped (snap)"
2"she admitted (admit)"
dialogueSentences40
tagDensity0.375
leniency0.75
rawRatio0.2
effectiveRatio0.15
81.1012%