Run: 2026-02-19-01KHTX36SCB337JPSZZ13YAXX6

Run Details

Duration:
36.1s
Cost:
$0.000000
Provider:
Arcee AI

Model input

System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Horror genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the horror genre. A character is alone in a strange, isolated place at night. They came here for a reason, but something feels off from the moment they arrive. The wrongness builds slowly — sounds that shouldn't be there, things that move at the edge of vision, a growing certainty that they are not alone. Build tension through restraint, not through gore. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for the character and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The iron gate groaned as I pushed it open, the sound echoing through the cemetery like a wounded animal. Moonlight sliced through the yew trees, casting long shadows across weathered headstones that leaned at precarious angles. I'd been here before, but never at night. Never alone. My boots crunched on gravel as I made my way toward the older section, where the Victorian monuments rose like broken teeth from the earth. The Heartstone pendant hung heavy against my chest, pulsing with a warmth that shouldn't exist in the October chill. It had led me here, to this forgotten corner of Highgate where the ivy choked everything and the air tasted of copper and rot. *Something's watching.* I stopped, scanning the darkness between the mausoleums. Nothing moved. Nothing should move. But the feeling persisted, crawling up my spine like cold fingers. The pendant flared suddenly, burning hot against my skin. I hissed, fumbling with the clasp. It wouldn't come off. The chain had tightened, biting into my neck as I stumbled forward, drawn toward a particular grave—an ornate angel statue with moss-eaten wings, its face turned toward the ground as if in eternal mourning. "Bloody hell," I muttered, tugging at the pendant. The chain loosened, but the heat remained, focused on the grave before me. The name had been worn away by time, but something about the angel's posture seemed wrong. Its hands, usually folded in prayer, clutched at something in its stone lap. A shadow detached itself from behind a neighboring crypt. I froze, heart hammering against my ribs. Not a shadow—a figure, tall and thin, moving with deliberate slowness toward the angel. Moonlight caught the glint of something metallic in its hand. "Hello?" My voice cracked. "Who's there?" The figure paused, head tilting at an impossible angle. I caught a glimpse of pale skin, too smooth, too white. No eyes, just hollow sockets that seemed to drink the light. The pendant burned hotter, searing my flesh. I cried out, stumbling backward. The figure took another step forward, movements jerky, unnatural. Like a puppet with strings pulled by an unseen hand. "Stay back!" I grabbed the nearest headstone, using it to steady myself. My fingers brushed cold marble, tracing the name of someone long dead. *Eliza Thorne, 1843-1889.* The dates meant nothing. Only the present mattered now. The figure raised its hand, revealing what it held—a small, rusted key. It pointed at the angel with one skeletal finger, then at me. The message was clear: *Come closer.* I shook my head, backing away. The pendant's heat intensified, becoming unbearable. I clawed at it, desperate to remove the burning stone, but the chain tightened again, pulling me forward despite my resistance. "No," I whispered, but my feet moved of their own accord, carrying me toward the angel. The figure melted back into the shadows, leaving me alone with the stone guardian and the key it now offered. My fingers closed around the rusted metal. It was cold, so cold it burned. I looked up at the angel's face, now visible in the moonlight. Its eyes, once smooth stone, had become hollow pits that seemed to see everything and nothing. The ground beneath my feet shifted. I stumbled, catching myself against the angel's pedestal. The key slipped from my grasp, clattering to the ground. As I bent to retrieve it, I saw them—roots, thick and black, snaking through the soil like veins. They pulsed with the same rhythm as the pendant, connecting everything in this forsaken place. A sound came from behind me. Not footsteps, but something worse. The wet, dragging noise of something heavy being pulled across the earth. I turned slowly, dreading what I might see. The figure had returned, but it was no longer alone. Behind it, emerging from the shadows between the graves, came more shapes. Dozens of them, all pale and thin, all moving with that same jerky, puppet-like motion. They carried tools—shovels, picks, something that glinted like surgical instruments in the moonlight. The pendant flared once more, blinding in its intensity. When the spots cleared from my vision, I saw what the angel had been holding all along. Not folded hands, but a stone book, its pages etched with symbols that matched those on the pendant. The figures formed a circle around me, their hollow eyes fixed on the book. The first figure stepped forward again, extending a hand not for the key, but for the pendant. Its mouth opened, revealing not teeth but writhing roots that pulsed with dark energy. "Take it," I whispered, ripping the pendant from my neck. The chain snapped easily now, falling away like dead skin. I threw the burning stone at the figure's feet. It didn't move. The pendant lay in the dirt, pulsing slower now, dimmer. The figures remained still, waiting. For what, I didn't know. But I wasn't going to find out. I turned and ran, not caring about the noise I made, not caring about anything except putting distance between myself and the things in the graveyard. Behind me, the dragging sound grew louder, accompanied by the wet, tearing noise of roots being pulled from the earth. The gate was closer now, just ahead. I could see the street beyond, the warm glow of streetlights promising safety, normalcy. I reached for the iron bars, my fingers closing around cold metal— —and felt something else. Something warm and wet, pulsing against my palm like a second heartbeat. I looked down. Roots. Growing through the gate, wrapping around the bars, reaching for me with blind, insistent hunger. The dragging sound was right behind me now. I didn't turn. I couldn't. My legs gave way, and I sank to my knees, watching as the roots continued their slow, inevitable advance. The first figure appeared at my side, its hollow eyes reflecting the moonlight like dark mirrors. It reached for me with one pale hand, and this time, I didn't resist. The last thing I saw before the darkness took me was the angel statue, its stone wings now spread wide, its face turned toward the sky in what might have been ecstasy or agony. The book in its lap had opened, and the symbols on its pages glowed with the same crimson light as the pendant. Then the roots closed around me, and I became part of the pattern. Part of the story that had been written in this place long before I was born. The gate creaked shut behind me, and the cemetery fell silent once more.
created_at"2026-02-19T12:13:16.979Z" 2/19/2026, 12:13:16 PM
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags5
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences6
tagDensity0.833
leniency1
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
90.86% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1094
totalAiIsmAdverbs2
found
0
adverb"suddenly"
count1
1
adverb"slowly"
count1
highlights
0"suddenly"
1"slowly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
22.30% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1094
totalAiIsms17
found
0
word"echoing"
count1
1
word"warmth"
count1
2
word"chill"
count1
3
word"scanning"
count1
4
word"grave"
count2
5
word"glint"
count1
6
word"searing"
count1
7
word"marble"
count1
8
word"tracing"
count1
9
word"pulsed"
count2
10
word"footsteps"
count1
11
word"intensity"
count1
12
word"etched"
count1
13
word"normalcy"
count1
14
word"the last thing"
count1
highlights
0"echoing"
1"warmth"
2"chill"
3"scanning"
4"grave"
5"glint"
6"searing"
7"marble"
8"tracing"
9"pulsed"
10"footsteps"
11"intensity"
12"etched"
13"normalcy"
14"the last thing"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences96
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount2
narrationSentences96
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences97
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen36
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans3
markdownWords7
totalWords1088
ratio0.006
matches
0"Something's watching."
1"Eliza Thorne, 1843-1889."
2"Come closer."
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions3
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions5
wordCount1078
uniqueNames5
maxNameDensity0.09
worstName"Victorian"
maxWindowNameDensity0
worstWindowName(null)
discoveredNames
Victorian1
Heartstone1
October1
Highgate1
Thorne1
persons
0"Thorne"
places(empty)
globalScore1
windowScore1
55.06% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences79
glossingSentenceCount3
matches
0"seemed wrong"
1"sockets that seemed to drink the light"
2"pits that seemed to see everything and nothing"
0.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches4
per1kWords3.676
wordCount1088
matches
0"Not footsteps, but something worse"
1"Not folded hands, but a stone book, its pages etched with symbols"
2"not for the key, but for the pendant"
3"not teeth but writhing roots"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences97
matches(empty)
87.90% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs32
mean34
std15.56
cv0.458
sampleLengths
046
168
22
324
453
550
640
76
831
931
1036
1130
1233
1336
1442
1557
1631
1750
1844
1945
2029
2130
2246
2333
2416
253
2616
2732
2830
2956
3029
3113
90.64% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount4
totalSentences96
matches
0"been worn"
1"being pulled"
2"being pulled"
3"been written"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs188
matches(empty)
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount7
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences7
totalSentences97
ratio0.072
matches
0"The chain had tightened, biting into my neck as I stumbled forward, drawn toward a particular grave—an ornate angel statue with moss-eaten wings, its face turned toward the ground as if in eternal mourning."
1"Not a shadow—a figure, tall and thin, moving with deliberate slowness toward the angel."
2"The figure raised its hand, revealing what it held—a small, rusted key."
3"As I bent to retrieve it, I saw them—roots, thick and black, snaking through the soil like veins."
4"They carried tools—shovels, picks, something that glinted like surgical instruments in the moonlight."
5"I reached for the iron bars, my fingers closing around cold metal—"
6"—and felt something else."
94.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1084
adjectiveStacks1
stackExamples
0"was right behind me"
adverbCount32
adverbRatio0.02952029520295203
lyAdverbCount5
lyAdverbRatio0.004612546125461255
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences97
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences97
mean11.22
std6.51
cv0.58
sampleLengths
019
117
28
32
425
519
624
72
88
92
103
1111
129
136
144
1534
168
1713
1816
1913
209
217
2214
2310
244
252
269
2711
2811
297
305
319
3210
3312
3412
357
365
3712
3812
396
406
416
4221
4316
4420
457
467
4712
4816
496
47.77% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats7
diversityRatio0.32989690721649484
totalSentences97
uniqueOpeners32
73.26% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount2
totalSentences91
matches
0"Only the present mattered now."
1"Then the roots closed around"
ratio0.022
57.36% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount37
totalSentences91
matches
0"I'd been here before, but"
1"My boots crunched on gravel"
2"It had led me here,"
3"I stopped, scanning the darkness"
4"I hissed, fumbling with the"
5"It wouldn't come off."
6"I muttered, tugging at the"
7"Its hands, usually folded in"
8"I froze, heart hammering against"
9"My voice cracked"
10"I caught a glimpse of"
11"I cried out, stumbling backward."
12"I grabbed the nearest headstone,"
13"My fingers brushed cold marble,"
14"It pointed at the angel"
15"I shook my head, backing"
16"I clawed at it, desperate"
17"I whispered, but my feet"
18"My fingers closed around the"
19"It was cold, so cold"
ratio0.407
47.91% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount75
totalSentences91
matches
0"The iron gate groaned as"
1"Moonlight sliced through the yew"
2"I'd been here before, but"
3"My boots crunched on gravel"
4"The Heartstone pendant hung heavy"
5"It had led me here,"
6"I stopped, scanning the darkness"
7"Nothing should move."
8"The pendant flared suddenly, burning"
9"I hissed, fumbling with the"
10"It wouldn't come off."
11"The chain had tightened, biting"
12"I muttered, tugging at the"
13"The chain loosened, but the"
14"The name had been worn"
15"Its hands, usually folded in"
16"A shadow detached itself from"
17"I froze, heart hammering against"
18"Moonlight caught the glint of"
19"My voice cracked"
ratio0.824
54.95% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences91
matches
0"—and felt something else."
ratio0.011
100.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences51
technicalSentenceCount3
matches
0"The Heartstone pendant hung heavy against my chest, pulsing with a warmth that shouldn't exist in the October chill."
1"The chain had tightened, biting into my neck as I stumbled forward, drawn toward a particular grave—an ornate angel statue with moss-eaten wings, its face turne…"
2"They carried tools—shovels, picks, something that glinted like surgical instruments in the moonlight."
25.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags5
uselessAdditionCount1
matches
0"I whispered, but my feet moved of their own accord, carrying me toward the angel"
0.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags3
fancyCount3
fancyTags
0"I muttered (mutter)"
1"I whispered (whisper)"
2"I whispered (whisper)"
dialogueSentences6
tagDensity0.5
leniency1
rawRatio1
effectiveRatio1
74.9006%