Run: 2026-02-19-01KHTX3VK900N362F3WHS22B66

Run Details

Duration:
1m 11s
Cost:
$0.003520
Provider:
OpenAI

Model input

System
You are an expert fiction writer. Always keep the following rules in mind: - Write in past tense and use General English spelling, grammar, and colloquialisms/slang. - Write in active voice - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. - Avoid adverbs and cliches and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Convey events and story through dialogue. - Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. - Skip "he/she said said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech - Avoid mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or add unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Reduce indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" When writing text: - NEVER conclude the scene on your own, follow the beat instructions very closely. - NEVER end with foreshadowing. - NEVER write further than what I prompt you with. - AVOID imagining possible endings, NEVER deviate from the instructions. - STOP EARLY if the continuation contains what was required in the instructions. You do not need to fill out the full amount of words possible.
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4413" name="Silas Blackwood" aliases="Silas, Si, the Spymaster" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Mentor"> <eyeColor>hazel</eyeColor> <hair>grey-streaked auburn</hair> <height>6'1"</height> <age>58</age> <beard>neatly trimmed, matching his grey-streaked auburn hair</beard> <limp>slight limp in his left leg from an old knee injury</limp> <signetRing>silver signet ring, always worn on his right hand</signetRing> <description>Silas is a retired intelligence operative turned bar owner. He carries himself with quiet authority.</description> <backstory>Former MI6 field agent who retired after a botched operation in Prague left him with a permanent knee injury. He opened "The Raven's Nest" bar in Soho as a front for his network of contacts.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> </codex> Continue the story using the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the literary fiction genre. Two old friends who haven't seen each other in years run into each other unexpectedly at a bar. One of them has changed significantly. Through their conversation and the tension between who they were and who they've become, reveal the weight of time and unspoken regret. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The Raven's Nest wore rain like a second coat, the Soho street slick with pale lamplight and a scent of distant thunder. A green neon sign flickered above the door, as if the building itself were blinking at the weather outside. Inside, the room hummed with a low-level music of chatter, glasses clinking, and the soft scrape of stools along the floor. Maps and black-and-white photos crowded the walls, charting some forgotten empire of people and shadows. A shelf at the back leaned just enough to conceal a room behind it, a secret kept by books and breathing space. Rory stepped in, coat collar turned up, the weight of a delivery bag snug under her arm. She scanned the room with the calm coolness that had become second nature, the way she scanned everything now—not looking for trouble, but sure to recognise it when it loomed. Her eyes caught the green glow first, then the silhouette by the bar that hadn’t shifted in years as far as she could tell. Silas Blackwood sat where he always sat, a quiet statue in a life he’d learned to wear, the Sign of the Spymaster almost visible in the way he carried himself, even after all the years and all the bars. The door gave a soft sigh as it closed behind her, rain ticking the glass like a thousand patient questions. The barman looked up for a split second, then went back to polishing a glass with a rhythm that seemed to mark time in a different metronome. Silas didn’t rise. He watched, a half-smirk tugging at the corners of his mouth, the way a hunter might study a target that refused to be hurried. Rory moved closer, the click of her boot heels against the wooden floor cutting through the murmur of voices. She paused, hands steady, the corner of her mouth lifting in a hesitation that wasn’t a smile so much as a sign she’d beaten back a memory and found it still waiting. Rory: Silas. Silas: Rory. Rory: It’s been a while. Silas: Too long. You still owe me a drink for all the times I bought you air and grinned about nothing. Rory: You never bought air, you bought secrets. And I paid with what I had left. Silas did not move. He lifted the hood of his story with a careful, almost affectionate patience. His eyes flicked to the crescent scar on the back of her left wrist, a tiny moon cradling old weather. Silas: You’ve learned to mask it well. Like you’ve learned to live with the clock ticking in your chest. Rory shrugged, a small, controlled movement that looked practiced, not weary. She set the bag down, not releasing it from her grip but making it sit between them as if it might become a shield. Rory: I’m still Rory, still the kid who ran across a rooftop to dodge the sirens. But the room changes you, Silas. It does things you don’t notice until you wake up wearing someone else’s coat. Silas touched the edge of the bar, a steady gesture that never spoke aloud but always said something. He looked at the signet ring on his right hand, the silver gleam catching in the dim light, then back to Rory. Silas: The nest keeps its own time. It’s clockwork, not poetry. You grew up in it, or you learned to pretend you did. Rory: You talk like you retired to teach, not to hide. But I know what hides. I know what follows. A pause filled the space between a drink and a breath. The room’s murmur shifted like a tide. Rory: I’ve carried a name that doesn’t stay the same out there. I’ve used Laila, and Malphora, and sometimes Aurora in letters no one should read aloud. You remember why I learned to vanish, don’t you? Silas’s mouth curled a fraction higher, not a laugh, more a memory waking up. His eyes softened, then sharpened. Silas: I remember teaching you to listen, not just to the words but to what people decided to leave unsaid. The back room is for that kind of listening. Not for the tourists. Rory’s fingers found the scar on her wrist and traced it, a habit that looked both bold and brittle in the same breath. Rory: I didn’t come here for secrets tonight. I came for a face I used to trust with the truth. And maybe a warning. Silas leaned back, his chair creaking with the weight of old gravity. He studied her with that slow, measuring glance he always used when someone came bearing a story heavier than their pockets. Silas: What truth are you afraid will walk out of here when the door opens? Rory: The same truth that keeps us from ever being entirely strangers again. Time did what time does. It gave me space to grow into something I didn’t want to become. And it gave you... what? A bell you can’t unring? Silas’s gaze flicked toward the secret shelf that hid the back room. The memory of whispered plans and coded conversations flickered behind his eyes for a moment, then retreated. Silas: I became quieter. And stronger in ways that don’t need to show. The Nest is just a stage; the people in it are the audience and the chorus. Rory: And you’re still the same old chorus leader, aren’t you? You still know the lines to every scene, even when the script changes. Silas: The script changes all the time. You know that. Rory: I know you know. I know you know I know. She glanced at the shelf, then at him, and there was a hunger in her eyes to lay things out that mattered more than the weather outside. She wasn’t seeking permission to open old wounds; she wanted to measure how much they still fit together after all the years. Rory: I’ve learned to move with the world I’m handed. The delivery routes, the late trains, the nights you think you’ll sleep but never do. It makes you sharper, or it makes you cold. Either way, it creates a distance that hides what you wanted to say. Silas’s expression softened, the lines around his mouth easing into something almost tender, a rarity in a man who measured risks as if they were only the air between his teeth. Silas: What did you want to say tonight, Rory? That you’re still running? Or that you’ve found something you won’t drop even when it hurts? Rory’s breath hitched, a tiny tremor she fought to keep out of her voice. She didn’t want to lay everything bare in a place built on the quiet choreography of lies and alliances. Yet the words pressed forward anyway, stubborn as rain. Rory: I wanted to tell you I’m not running away anymore. Not from what happened, not from who I am now. I’ve learned to carry the weight, to use it. I’ve learned who I can be in the shadow of what you taught me. Silas’s gaze sharpened, as if he could pierce through the fabric of her confession and locate the thread that mattered most. Silas: Then tell me what you’ve chosen to carry, and tell me what you’re afraid to drop. Rory: The scar isn’t the only thing that stays with you. It’s the memory of what forced me to hold my breath for years. The memory of what I did to survive a man who thought he owned my name. I wanted to tell you I did what was necessary and I still hate that I did it. Her throat bobbed, and she pressed her lips together to control the tremor in her voice. The beer beneath the glass touched the rim with a soft clink. Rory: I’m not the girl you met back then. Not in the rooms where we talked about the future like it meant something, not when the future wasn’t safe to hope for. I am Laila when the door’s closed and the world can see me, Malphora when the world thinks I’m not paying attention. Aurora when I walk through the morning and pretend the past doesn’t hit me in the gut with every soft rain. Silas watched her, not with admiration but with a careful attention that had kept more people alive than most would admit. He did not interrupt. He did not offer platitudes. He offered a look, a pause, a possibility. Silas: Names become weapons. You learned that in your hands. But a weapon is only useful if you know who you’re aiming at. Who are you aiming at now? Rory’s eyes flashed, a bright blue storm behind them, and she let her guard drop just enough to reveal a flicker of something more vulnerable than she intended. Rory: I’m aiming at myself. I’m aiming at the fear that if I stop moving, I’ll collapse into the memory of what I left behind. I’m aiming at the danger that comes with not speaking the truth I’ve been carrying for years. Silas’s mouth curved again, softer this time, as if he understood what she meant but chosen not to press. He set his glass down, the contact of glass against wood a small, honest sound in the otherwise hushed room. Silas: The Nest doesn’t save people. It reads them, and it helps you decide whether you want to carry on or disappear for good. If you’re trying to decide something, you’re already closer to a decision than most. Rory swung the bag slightly, the strap slipping under her fingers. The gesture was casual, but it carried the weight of a decision that felt surgical in its precision. Rory: I came here because I thought you’d look through me and see the answer already written. And maybe you did, but you didn’t tell me what you saw. Silas: I saw a girl who learned to keep secrets because she learned to survive. I saw a woman who hasn’t forgotten the lessons but is trying not to let them define every breath. And I saw someone who still believes in something beyond staying alive: a chance to pick up what you’ve broken and keep going. Rory’s laugh was almost a real laugh, the sound rough and honest, and not a defense mechanism for once. Rory: You always did have a way of turning a confession into a charge to act. Silas: If you want a charge, you’ll get one. If you want a plan, you’ll have to tell me what you’re willing to risk. The air shifted. The topic drifted toward the back room, not as a secret itself but as a symbol—the place where talk turned to action, where the decisions refused to stay in the daylight. Rory: There’s something I need to do that I can’t do anywhere else. Not here, not in the open. It requires more than courage. It requires trust that I can still earn, and a promise that I won’t waste what you’ve taught me. Silas: If you’re asking for a doorway, you’ll find one the moment you stop looking at walls and start listening to the room. Rory: Listening isn’t enough when the room is listening to you for your next step. She took a breath that looked almost like a sigh, but the sound held a strange steadiness. Rory: Tonight I came with a message, and I’m leaving with one more: don’t ask me to undo what’s been done, don’t pretend you forgot it either. I’m not running from you or from me. I’m choosing a path that doesn’t pretend there’s no danger in it. Silas nodded, slow and approving, as if he’d expected this exact turn of events from the moment she stepped inside. He pushed himself forward, the movement controlled, the knee giving a familiar little hitch. Silas: Then you know where the room is if you need it. You know who answers your questions and who doesn’t. You know what I’d tell you if you asked for it, and you know the price of asking. Rory stood straighter, shoulders pulled back into a silhouette of someone who had learned to give a little less away. The moment between them shifted from the weight of what had happened to the weight of what was still possible, and the difference felt like a fracture line in the air. Rory: I know. And I know you’ll tell me what I should be careful not to forget, but I’ll be careful with it anyway. The room is there if I need it. Silas: Then take what you came for, and go when you’re ready. The door won’t wait. A pause. The bar’s murmur swelled and receded like a tide that only briefly came ashore. Rory: I came with something to give you as well. A signal, a reminder that I’m not the girl you trained to fear the night—though I still fear the night sometimes. It’s a note, not a confession. She reached into the bag and drew out a folded sheet of paper, the edges worn at the fold lines, the ink slightly smudged as if someone had held it in a rainstorm or a long, patient night. She slid it across the bar until it halted in front of Silas, the page catching a pale gleam from the neon. Rory: Read this when you’re alone. If you see danger in it, you’ll know what I’ve chosen to do with what you gave me. If you don’t, you’ll still know I’m not the person who used to hide behind a name. Silas did not touch it right away. He studied her, that quiet man of measured speech and careful moves, and a silent question hung between them: what would it mean to trust again after all the ways they’d learned to be careful? Silas: I’ll read it, Rory. And when I do, I’ll remember the girl who walked into Prague with nothing but fear in her eyes and a plan in her pocket. And I’ll decide what that means for where you go next. Rory’s eyes flicked to the hidden bookshelf, to the space behind it that breathed with the memory of conversations in whispers. She thought of Eva's advice—the friend who’d urged her to leave a life that had become a cage—and of the night she chose to step toward London rather than stay with what hurt her. She thought of the small crescent scar on her wrist, a living reminder that time does not erase the marks it leaves. Rory: You’ve always had a way of letting people choose their own endings. Even when endings had a way of finding you first. Silas’s voice softened further, a thread of something almost tender again. Silas: And you’ve always had the stubborn will to write a new ending, even if the margins were already stained with the past. Rory paused, the moment thick enough to taste. She looked at the paper again, then tucked it away, not destroying it but deciding to keep it for the moment, like a weapon she had to learn to sheath. Rory: I don’t know how this ends. I just know I’m not pretending anymore. Not about what I am, not about what I owe. Silas tapped the bar, a quiet rhythm that felt like a distant drumbeat from another life. Silas: Then you’ll know when to come back, and you’ll know what to bring with you the next time you knock on this door. If you come back, you’ll have a decision that won’t pretend to be easy. Rory: I’ll come back when I can talk as clearly as I can fight. If you’re still here, if this bar is still standing, I’ll walk in and we’ll talk as equals, not as a mentor and pupil. Silas: And if you don’t come back? Rory met his gaze, steady as a line drawn in rain. Rory: Then you’ll know I carried your lessons somewhere they could survive the weather. You’ll know I didn’t forget what you taught me, even if I chose a different road to honour it. Silas’s mouth settled into a quiet, almost invisible smile, a rarity that said more than the loudest compliment could. He tilted his head just enough to acknowledge the weight of her choices without rushing her toward any conclusion. Silas: Then go. If the rain’s finished with your coat, you’ll still need your feet to reach the next room you choose to enter. Rory nodded once, crisp and clean, a decision made in the space between two breaths rather than a grand statement. She stepped back from the bar, the bag quiet against her hip, the secret note still tucked in her pocket like a quiet axis around which her life would rotate for a while longer. Rory: I’ll see you. Silas: Not if you don’t come back, not if you don’t answer the door. She turned, and the weight of years pressed down in that single motion—the way the scar on her wrist bent toward the light, the way her hair caught the glow, the way her eyes held a future that hadn’t been promised to her by anyone but herself. Rory: Then I’ll come back. When the room’s still listening. She moved toward the dim hall where the back room waited behind a bookshelf, the air growing cooler as if the space itself expected her to step through. She did not look back. Silas watched her go, the quiet of the Nest wrapping around him like a cloak. He touched the silver signet ring on his right hand, a small, steady reminder of every operation saved and every mistake that nearly cost him everything. The room’s sounds gathered again—the clink of a glass, a distant shout of laughter, the rain’s soft tapping on the window—until silence settled once more, thick enough to hear a heartbeat. The door sighed as Rory vanished behind it, and for a breath there, it seemed the whole city held still, as if listening for something both knew and refused to name. The night pressed in, and the Nest kept its own time, patient and inscrutable, while two old friends stood at the edge of a memory, measuring how much of it they could carry forward without breaking. The green glow pulsed once, twice, and went quiet. The room exhaled. A soft, final click sounded from the shelf as the door to the back room settled, and Silas looked at the space where the conversation would have happened if it needed to. It didn’t. Not yet. He turned back to the bar, the note in Rory’s pocket warm with the weight of intention, and waited for the rain to tell him what to do next. The door closed softly behind him, and the Nest breathed again.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags0
95.24% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount3150
totalAiIsmAdverbs3
found
0
adverb"slightly"
count2
1
adverb"softly"
count1
highlights
0"slightly"
1"softly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (16 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
0"Blackwood"
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
55.56% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount3150
totalAiIsms28
found
0
word"flickered"
count2
1
word"weight"
count8
2
word"scanned"
count2
3
word"loomed"
count1
4
word"flicked"
count3
5
word"traced"
count1
6
word"coded"
count1
7
word"measured"
count2
8
word"flicker"
count1
9
word"carried the weight"
count1
10
word"familiar"
count1
11
word"reminder"
count3
12
word"silence"
count1
13
word"pulsed"
count1
highlights
0"flickered"
1"weight"
2"scanned"
3"loomed"
4"flicked"
5"traced"
6"coded"
7"measured"
8"flicker"
9"carried the weight"
10"familiar"
11"reminder"
12"silence"
13"pulsed"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences216
matches(empty)
3.97% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount18
hedgeCount3
narrationSentences216
filterMatches
0"know"
1"know know"
2"know know know"
3"think"
4"decide"
5"see"
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
1"happened to"
2"tend to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences216
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen48
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords3138
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions19
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
33.33% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions131
wordCount3138
uniqueNames19
maxNameDensity1.56
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity4
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
Raven1
Nest6
Soho1
Blackwood1
Sign1
Spymaster1
Silas44
Rory49
You14
Laila2
Malphora2
Aurora2
Names1
Listening1
Tonight1
Read1
Prague1
Eva1
London1
persons
0"Raven"
1"Nest"
2"Blackwood"
3"Sign"
4"Silas"
5"Rory"
6"You"
7"Laila"
8"Names"
9"Eva"
places
0"Soho"
1"Prague"
2"London"
globalScore0.719
windowScore0.333
93.82% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences178
glossingSentenceCount4
matches
0"rhythm that seemed to mark time in a different metronome"
1"felt like a fracture line in the air"
2"felt like a distant drumbeat from anoth"
3"as if listening for something both knew and refused to name"
0.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches7
per1kWords2.231
wordCount3138
matches
0"not looking for trouble, but sure to recognise it"
1"not releasing it from her grip but making it sit between them as if it might become a shield"
2"not just to the words but to what people decided to leave unsaid"
3"not with admiration but with a careful attention"
4"not as a secret itself but as a symbol"
5"not to forget, but I’ll be careful with it anyway"
6"not destroying it but deciding to keep it for the moment, like a weapon she had to"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences216
matches
0"do that I"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs93
mean33.74
std20.22
cv0.599
sampleLengths
099
1110
274
351
42
52
65
721
816
937
1019
1135
1236
1340
1423
1520
1618
1736
1819
1933
2023
2124
2233
2315
2441
2529
2629
2724
2810
2911
3049
3147
3231
3325
3442
3544
3621
3717
3858
3928
4075
4138
4229
4328
4442
4539
4638
4729
4829
4957
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount2
totalSentences216
matches
0"been"
1"been promised"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount2
totalVerbs604
matches
0"were blinking"
1"wasn’t seeking"
37.04% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount8
semicolonCount2
flaggedSentences8
totalSentences216
ratio0.037
matches
0"She scanned the room with the calm coolness that had become second nature, the way she scanned everything now—not looking for trouble, but sure to recognise it when it loomed."
1"The Nest is just a stage; the people in it are the audience and the chorus."
2"She wasn’t seeking permission to open old wounds; she wanted to measure how much they still fit together after all the years."
3"The topic drifted toward the back room, not as a secret itself but as a symbol—the place where talk turned to action, where the decisions refused to stay in the daylight."
4"A signal, a reminder that I’m not the girl you trained to fear the night—though I still fear the night sometimes."
5"She thought of Eva's advice—the friend who’d urged her to leave a life that had become a cage—and of the night she chose to step toward London rather than stay with what hurt her."
6"She turned, and the weight of years pressed down in that single motion—the way the scar on her wrist bent toward the light, the way her hair caught the glow, the way her eyes held a future that hadn’t been promised to her by anyone but herself."
7"The room’s sounds gathered again—the clink of a glass, a distant shout of laughter, the rain’s soft tapping on the window—until silence settled once more, thick enough to hear a heartbeat."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount3150
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount109
adverbRatio0.0346031746031746
lyAdverbCount11
lyAdverbRatio0.003492063492063492
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences216
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences216
mean14.53
std8.65
cv0.595
sampleLengths
022
119
221
315
422
517
630
724
839
920
1027
113
1224
1319
1432
152
162
175
183
1918
208
218
224
2313
2420
257
2612
2711
2824
2916
306
3114
3218
3322
347
354
3612
3711
385
394
4011
417
4212
4315
449
4514
465
4720
489
494
37.50% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats27
diversityRatio0.12962962962962962
totalSentences216
uniqueOpeners28
0.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount0
totalSentences210
matches(empty)
ratio0
96.19% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount65
totalSentences210
matches
0"She scanned the room with"
1"Her eyes caught the green"
2"He watched, a half-smirk tugging"
3"She paused, hands steady, the"
4"You still owe me a"
5"He lifted the hood of"
6"His eyes flicked to the"
7"She set the bag down,"
8"It does things you don’t"
9"He looked at the signet"
10"It’s clockwork, not poetry."
11"You grew up in it,"
12"I know what follows."
13"I’ve used Laila, and Malphora,"
14"You remember why I learned"
15"His eyes softened, then sharpened."
16"I came for a face"
17"He studied her with that"
18"It gave me space to"
19"You still know the lines"
ratio0.31
100.00% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount128
totalSentences210
matches
0"The Raven's Nest wore rain"
1"A green neon sign flickered"
2"Maps and black-and-white photos crowded"
3"A shelf at the back"
4"Rory stepped in, coat collar"
5"She scanned the room with"
6"Her eyes caught the green"
7"Silas Blackwood sat where he"
8"The door gave a soft"
9"The barman looked up for"
10"Silas didn’t rise."
11"He watched, a half-smirk tugging"
12"Rory moved closer, the click"
13"She paused, hands steady, the"
14"You still owe me a"
15"Silas did not move."
16"He lifted the hood of"
17"His eyes flicked to the"
18"Rory shrugged, a small, controlled"
19"She set the bag down,"
ratio0.61
100.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount9
totalSentences210
matches
0"Either way, it creates a"
1"If you’re trying to decide"
2"If you want a plan,"
3"If you see danger in"
4"If you don’t, you’ll still"
5"Even when endings had a"
6"If you come back, you’ll"
7"If you’re still here, if"
8"If the rain’s finished with"
ratio0.043
83.74% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences145
technicalSentenceCount12
matches
0"A green neon sign flickered above the door, as if the building itself were blinking at the weather outside."
1"She scanned the room with the calm coolness that had become second nature, the way she scanned everything now—not looking for trouble, but sure to recognise it …"
2"The barman looked up for a split second, then went back to polishing a glass with a rhythm that seemed to mark time in a different metronome."
3"He watched, a half-smirk tugging at the corners of his mouth, the way a hunter might study a target that refused to be hurried."
4"Rory shrugged, a small, controlled movement that looked practiced, not weary."
5"Silas watched her, not with admiration but with a careful attention that had kept more people alive than most would admit."
6"Silas nodded, slow and approving, as if he’d expected this exact turn of events from the moment she stepped inside."
7"Rory stood straighter, shoulders pulled back into a silhouette of someone who had learned to give a little less away."
8"Rory’s eyes flicked to the hidden bookshelf, to the space behind it that breathed with the memory of conversations in whispers."
9"Silas’s mouth settled into a quiet, almost invisible smile, a rarity that said more than the loudest compliment could."
10"She moved toward the dim hall where the back room waited behind a bookshelf, the air growing cooler as if the space itself expected her to step through."
11"The door sighed as Rory vanished behind it, and for a breath there, it seemed the whole city held still, as if listening for something both knew and refused to …"
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags0
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags0
81.2129%