Run: 2026-02-19-01KHTX4CYEXBP5FN264VDSHXZ0

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You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Romance genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4415" name="Lucien Moreau" aliases="Lucien, Luc, the Frenchman" pronouns="he/him" species="Half-Demon" storyRole="Ally"> <eyeColor>heterochromatic — one amber, one black</eyeColor> <hair>slicked-back platinum blond</hair> <height>5'11"</height> <age>32</age> <cane>ivory-handled cane that conceals a thin blade</cane> <dress>tailored charcoal suits</dress> <description>An impeccably dressed fixer and information broker in London's supernatural underworld. He speaks four languages fluently.</description> <backstory>Born in Marseille to a human mother and a demon father from the realm of Avaros.</backstory> </character> <location id="858" name="Eva's Flat" aliases="Eva's place, the flat on Brick Lane" realm="Earth"> <cat>tabby cat named Ptolemy</cat> <security>three deadbolts on the front door</security> <description>A cramped one-bedroom flat above a curry house on Brick Lane, East London. Every surface is covered with books, scrolls, and research notes.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the romance genre. Two people who parted on complicated terms are forced together again when one shows up unannounced at the other's flat. There's history between them — attraction, hurt, and things left unsaid. Write the scene from the moment the door opens. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The knock came at half past midnight, three sharp raps that rattled the cheap composite door in its frame. Rory set down Ptolemy's evening medication, the little tabby watching her with that particular feline judgment cats reserve for interruptions to their routine. She wasn't expecting anyone. Eva was away at a conference in Manchester, and everyone who mattered knew not to show up unannounced. The chain slid back. The deadbolt turned. The second deadbolt. Three locks. Always three locks. The habit had become second nature after Evan. The door swung inward, and the familiar scent of cologne hit her first. Something dark and expensive, sandalwood and smoke, with a hint of something else underneath that had never quite made sense to her human nose. She'd once asked him about it, back when they were still speaking. He'd said it was incense from Marseille. She hadn't believed him then. She didn't now. Lucien Moreau stood in the hallway, looking exactly as he always did—impeccable, put together, like he'd stepped out of a tailor's window display rather than the London night. His platinum hair was slicked back in its usual precise style. The ivory-handled cane rested against his shoulder, that hidden blade no doubt polished and ready. Charcoal suit, no tie, the top button of his shirt undone. Casual for him. Intentional, then. The heterochromatic eyes found her in the dim light of the hallway. Amber and black, like two different suns. "Rory." Her stomach performed a small, unwelcome flip. She kept her face neutral. "It's Aurora, actually. When I'm not answering to delivery instructions." A flicker of something crossed his features. Pain, maybe. Or recognition. Hard to tell with Lucien; he'd always been better at masks than most. "Aurora, then." He said her full name like it meant something. Like it cost something. "May I come in?" She should say no. Every rational part of her brain screamed no. The last time they'd spoken, three months ago in the back office of Golden Empress, she'd told him she never wanted to see him again. He'd accepted that with that terrible, quiet dignity he carried like a weapon. Hadn't argued. Hadn't pleaded. Just nodded once and let her walk out. That silence had been worse than any argument. "The flat's a mess." The words left her mouth before she'd approved them. "I've seen worse. In Marseille. In the circles I run in." A ghost of a smile. "You'd be amazed what's considered acceptable living conditions in certain demon districts." There it was. The half-confession, tossed out like a coin into a fountain. He never talked about the other half of himself, not really. The demon part. The part that made his eyes do that thing, the part that made certain things about him impossible to ignore—his strength, his speed, the way he'd once caught her wrist when she'd stumbled on a case and his grip had been warm in a way that felt like burning. She stepped aside. Lucien entered, cane clicking against the worn hardwood. He surveyed the room with those mismatched eyes—the books stacked on every surface, the scrolls unrolled on the coffee table, the string lights Eva insisted on hanging despite the fire hazard. Ptolemy appeared from somewhere, tail held high, and wound between Lucien's legs with the shameless betrayal cats reserve for people who aren't their owners. "He remembers me." Lucien crouched, and the suit jacket pulled taut across his shoulders. The man dressed like death but melted for tabbies. It was obscene, really. "Ptolemy remembers everyone who feeds him treats when I'm not looking." "Guilty." He scratched behind the cat's ears. "Your friend has good taste in cats." "Eva's not my friend. She's my person." Rory leaned against the kitchen counter, arms crossed. She wasn't going to make this easy. Couldn't. "Why are you here, Lucien?" He stood, brushing cat hair from his trousers with practiced efficiency. The cane came to rest against a stack of journals, within easy reach. "I heard about the Ashworth job." The name landed like a stone in water. Thomas Ashworth. Missing person case, three weeks ago. Rich family, powerful connections, ugly secrets. She'd found him holed up in a warehouse in Docklands, half-mad with whatever they'd given him. The case had ended with a payout that covered six months' rent and enough trauma to last a lifetime. "I handled it." "You almost died handling it." "I didn't almost—" "Three broken ribs. Concussion. Dislocated shoulder." His voice remained level, but something shifted beneath the calm. "I have sources at the hospital. I have sources everywhere. You know this." She did know this. It was one of the things that had drawn her to him initially, and one of the things that had terrified her in the end. Nothing stayed hidden from Lucien Moreau. Everything had a price, and everything could be uncovered. "I'm fine." "You're not fine." He took a step closer. The room suddenly felt smaller. "You're stubborn and you're reckless and you take cases that no sane person would touch because you can't stop yourself from helping people, and I—" He stopped. The silence stretched. "And you what?" His jaw tightened. "I worry." The word hung between them, inadequate and enormous. In the three months since they'd spoken, Rory had replayed their last conversation a hundred times. The way he'd looked at her when she'd said she couldn't do this anymore—the impossible weight of keeping someone at arm's length when every instinct screamed to pull them closer. The way she'd seen something in him that terrified her more than any demon, any monster, any case. "You don't get to worry." Her voice came out rougher than she intended. "You made that choice. When you didn't stop me from leaving. When you didn't—" "Tell me to stay?" His laugh was bitter, soft. "What would you have done if I had?" "Said no, probably." "But you would have thought about it." She wouldn't admit he was right. Instead, she looked at the stacks of research notes, the case files spread across the table, the evidence of a life she'd built to keep herself too busy to think about him. "It's late." "I know." "You should go." "I know that too." But neither of them moved. Ptolemy meowed, demanding attention that neither was giving him. The string lights flickered once, twice, then steadied. "There's a case." Lucien spoke quietly. "Brixton. A girl, nineteen. Missing for two weeks. Family's been to the police, to three private investigators, to a priest. Nothing." "Why are you telling me this?" "Because I thought you might want to know that she's not missing. She's been taken. By something from Avaros." Avaros. His father's realm. The place demons came from, the place that existed in the spaces between worlds, the place Rory had only ever heard about in whispered warnings. "You know who took her?" "I know who deals in that particular trade." His eyes met hers. "And I know who can help me stop them." "Us." "I wasn't planning on doing this alone." The offer sat between them, loaded with implications. Working together again. Spending time in close proximity again. All the things she'd tried to escape, all the reasons she'd pushed him away. She should say no. The smart thing, the safe thing, the thing that would protect whatever fragile equilibrium she'd built in the months since she'd walked out of his office. Instead, she said: "When do we start?" His smile was small, almost broken. "Tomorrow. I'll send a car." "A car." "A very inconspicuous one. I know how you feel about the motorcycle." "That thing is a death trap." "Fine. A death trap with an excellent engine." She almost smiled. Caught herself. "I'll need the files. Everything you have on the buyer, the seller, the transport routes. All of it." "Tomorrow. At your flat?" She hesitated. Her place above Silas' bar meant privacy, meant fewer questions. But Eva's flat meant distance from him, meant she could maintain the illusion that this was professional only. "My place," she said. "Eight o'clock." Lucien nodded. He picked up his cane, tipped an imaginary hat. "Aurora." "Lucien." He paused at the door, hand on the frame. The look he gave her held everything they weren't saying—the three months of silence, the weight of every moment they'd shared, the ache of something unfinished. "I'm glad you're alive." The door clicked shut behind him. Rory stood in the middle of the cluttered flat, Ptolemy winding around her ankles, and tried to remember how to breathe properly. Tomorrow they'd hunt demons together. Tonight she'd lie awake and wonder why some choices were so hard to make when the answer was so obvious. She'd tell herself it was just the case. She'd almost believe it.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags13
adverbTagCount1
adverbTags
0"Lucien spoke quietly [quietly]"
dialogueSentences56
tagDensity0.232
leniency0.464
rawRatio0.077
effectiveRatio0.036
86.39% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1470
totalAiIsmAdverbs4
found
0
adverb"really"
count2
1
adverb"suddenly"
count1
2
adverb"very"
count1
highlights
0"really"
1"suddenly"
2"very"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
69.39% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1470
totalAiIsms9
found
0
word"familiar"
count1
1
word"stomach"
count1
2
word"flicker"
count1
3
word"silence"
count3
4
word"weight"
count2
5
word"flickered"
count1
highlights
0"familiar"
1"stomach"
2"flicker"
3"silence"
4"weight"
5"flickered"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"weight of words/silence"
count1
highlights
0"the weight of every moment"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells1
narrationSentences116
matches
0"was bitter"
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount2
narrationSentences116
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"tried to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences158
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen50
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1462
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions21
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions32
wordCount1097
uniqueNames15
maxNameDensity0.73
worstName"Lucien"
maxWindowNameDensity1.5
worstWindowName"Lucien"
discoveredNames
Ptolemy4
Manchester1
Evan1
Marseille1
Moreau2
London1
Lucien8
Like1
Golden1
Empress1
Eva3
Rory5
Ashworth1
Docklands1
Avaros1
persons
0"Ptolemy"
1"Evan"
2"Moreau"
3"Lucien"
4"Like"
5"Eva"
6"Rory"
7"Ashworth"
places
0"Manchester"
1"Marseille"
2"London"
3"Docklands"
globalScore1
windowScore1
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences69
glossingSentenceCount1
matches
0"felt like burning"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1462
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences158
matches
0"do that thing"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs75
mean19.49
std19.24
cv0.987
sampleLengths
019
145
210
313
464
570
619
71
812
910
1024
1119
1262
138
1413
1528
1676
173
1863
1927
2011
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2228
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253
265
273
2829
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302
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325
333
345
3572
3627
3717
383
397
4038
412
422
433
444
4522
4627
476
4819
4929
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount1
totalSentences116
matches
0"was slicked"
98.99% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount3
totalVerbs198
matches
0"wasn't expecting"
1"was giving"
2"weren't saying"
34.36% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount5
semicolonCount1
flaggedSentences6
totalSentences158
ratio0.038
matches
0"Lucien Moreau stood in the hallway, looking exactly as he always did—impeccable, put together, like he'd stepped out of a tailor's window display rather than the London night."
1"Hard to tell with Lucien; he'd always been better at masks than most."
2"The part that made his eyes do that thing, the part that made certain things about him impossible to ignore—his strength, his speed, the way he'd once caught her wrist when she'd stumbled on a case and his grip had been warm in a way that felt like burning."
3"He surveyed the room with those mismatched eyes—the books stacked on every surface, the scrolls unrolled on the coffee table, the string lights Eva insisted on hanging despite the fire hazard."
4"The way he'd looked at her when she'd said she couldn't do this anymore—the impossible weight of keeping someone at arm's length when every instinct screamed to pull them closer."
5"The look he gave her held everything they weren't saying—the three months of silence, the weight of every moment they'd shared, the ache of something unfinished."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount823
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount30
adverbRatio0.03645200486026731
lyAdverbCount5
lyAdverbRatio0.006075334143377886
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences158
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences158
mean9.25
std7.84
cv0.848
sampleLengths
019
123
24
318
44
53
63
72
83
98
1013
1124
1212
137
145
153
1628
1711
1815
1911
203
212
2212
237
241
257
265
2710
287
292
302
3113
3211
334
344
354
368
3725
3813
392
402
418
428
4313
4416
4512
463
4710
4811
493
56.96% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats10
diversityRatio0.379746835443038
totalSentences158
uniqueOpeners60
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount4
totalSentences102
matches
0"Always three locks."
1"Just nodded once and let"
2"Instead, she looked at the"
3"Instead, she said:"
ratio0.039
74.90% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount37
totalSentences102
matches
0"She wasn't expecting anyone."
1"She'd once asked him about"
2"He'd said it was incense"
3"She hadn't believed him then."
4"She didn't now."
5"His platinum hair was slicked"
6"Her stomach performed a small,"
7"She kept her face neutral."
8"He said her full name"
9"She should say no."
10"He'd accepted that with that"
11"He never talked about the"
12"She stepped aside."
13"He surveyed the room with"
14"It was obscene, really."
15"He scratched behind the cat's"
16"She wasn't going to make"
17"He stood, brushing cat hair"
18"She'd found him holed up"
19"His voice remained level, but"
ratio0.363
33.53% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount87
totalSentences102
matches
0"The knock came at half"
1"Rory set down Ptolemy's evening"
2"She wasn't expecting anyone."
3"Eva was away at a"
4"The chain slid back."
5"The deadbolt turned."
6"The second deadbolt."
7"The habit had become second"
8"The door swung inward, and"
9"Something dark and expensive, sandalwood"
10"She'd once asked him about"
11"He'd said it was incense"
12"She hadn't believed him then."
13"She didn't now."
14"Lucien Moreau stood in the"
15"His platinum hair was slicked"
16"The ivory-handled cane rested against"
17"Charcoal suit, no tie, the"
18"The heterochromatic eyes found her"
19"Amber and black, like two"
ratio0.853
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences102
matches(empty)
ratio0
16.81% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences34
technicalSentenceCount6
matches
0"The knock came at half past midnight, three sharp raps that rattled the cheap composite door in its frame."
1"Something dark and expensive, sandalwood and smoke, with a hint of something else underneath that had never quite made sense to her human nose."
2"The ivory-handled cane rested against his shoulder, that hidden blade no doubt polished and ready."
3"The part that made his eyes do that thing, the part that made certain things about him impossible to ignore—his strength, his speed, the way he'd once caught he…"
4"The way she'd seen something in him that terrified her more than any demon, any monster, any case."
5"The smart thing, the safe thing, the thing that would protect whatever fragile equilibrium she'd built in the months since she'd walked out of his office."
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags13
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags4
fancyCount1
fancyTags
0"Lucien spoke quietly (speak)"
dialogueSentences56
tagDensity0.071
leniency0.143
rawRatio0.25
effectiveRatio0.036
85.7110%