Run: 2026-02-19-01KHTX4R4564K6H2MWPR711Z09

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Duration:
43.2s
Cost:
$0.040461

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You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Literary Fiction genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4413" name="Silas Blackwood" aliases="Silas, Si, the Spymaster" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Mentor"> <eyeColor>hazel</eyeColor> <hair>grey-streaked auburn</hair> <height>6'1"</height> <age>58</age> <beard>neatly trimmed, matching his grey-streaked auburn hair</beard> <limp>slight limp in his left leg from an old knee injury</limp> <signetRing>silver signet ring, always worn on his right hand</signetRing> <description>Silas is a retired intelligence operative turned bar owner. He carries himself with quiet authority.</description> <backstory>Former MI6 field agent who retired after a botched operation in Prague left him with a permanent knee injury. He opened "The Raven's Nest" bar in Soho as a front for his network of contacts.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the literary fiction genre. Two old friends who haven't seen each other in years run into each other unexpectedly at a bar. One of them has changed significantly. Through their conversation and the tension between who they were and who they've become, reveal the weight of time and unspoken regret. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The pint glass slipped from Rory's fingers. She caught it before it hit the floor, foam sloshing over her knuckles, but the damage was already done. The woman at the bar had turned. Those same green eyes that used to spark with mischief now held something harder, more calculating. "Christ. Rory Carter." Eva Sullivan looked nothing like the girl who'd dragged Rory through Cardiff's underground music scene, who'd danced barefoot in their shared flat whilst cooking terrible pasta at three in the morning. This Eva wore a tailored black coat that probably cost more than Rory's monthly rent. Her wild red curls had been tamed into a sleek bob. Diamond earrings caught the Raven's Nest's amber lighting. "Eva." Rory set her pint on the nearest table. "What are you doing here?" "Business meeting. Client wanted somewhere discrete." Eva's gaze swept the bar's worn leather seats and dusty photographs. "Though I'm wondering if discrete was code for divey." The words stung. Rory had grown fond of Silas's place, with its crooked dartboard and the way regulars argued about football matches from 1987. It felt real in a way that mattered. "You look well." "Do I?" Eva's laugh held no warmth. "You look exactly the same. Delivery uniform and all." Rory glanced down at her Golden Empress polo shirt, suddenly conscious of the soy sauce stain on her sleeve. She'd planned to change before meeting Silas for their weekly chess game, but the evening had gotten away from her. "Some things don't change." "No. Some things don't." The silence stretched between them like a chasm. At the bar, Silas polished glasses with practiced efficiency, but Rory caught him watching their reflection in the mirror behind the bottles. He'd developed an instinct for tension during his MI6 days. "Should we sit?" Rory gestured toward a corner booth. Eva checked her watch. Rose gold. "Five minutes. Then I need to go." They slid into opposite seats. The cracked leather whispered against Eva's expensive coat. Up close, Rory could see the careful makeup that didn't quite hide the shadows under her eyes. "So. London." "So. London." Rory took a sip of her beer. "You said you'd never leave Cardiff." "People change." Eva's fingers drummed against the table. "Besides, you left first." "That was different." "Was it?" The question carried years of hurt. "One day you were there. The next, gone. No forwarding address. No goodbye." Rory's chest tightened. She'd rehearsed this conversation a hundred times, but never found words that felt adequate. How do you explain running from everything, including the people who mattered most? "Evan was getting worse. You knew that." "I knew you were scared. I knew you needed help." Eva leaned forward. "What I didn't know was that you'd disappear without a word." "I left a note." "Three lines. On a napkin." Eva's voice rose slightly. A few patrons glanced over. She noticed and lowered it again. "Three years, Rory. Three bloody years before I heard you were alive." "You seem to have done well for yourself." Eva's smile was sharp. "Investment banking. Turns out I have a talent for making rich people richer." "That's not who you wanted to be." "No. I wanted to change the world. Save the whales. Fight the patriarchy." Eva's fingers found the stem of an imaginary wine glass, then stopped. "Turns out the world doesn't want saving. It wants returns on investment." "Eva..." "Don't." The word cut through the air like a blade. "Don't you dare pity me. I made my choices." But Rory could see through the performance. The old Eva was still there, buried beneath the expensive clothes and careful composure. In the way her left hand worried at her wedding ring. In how she kept glancing toward the door like she might bolt. "Are you happy?" The question seemed to catch Eva off guard. For a moment, her mask slipped. Rory glimpsed something raw and desperate before the walls went back up. "Happy." Eva tested the word like it was foreign. "I'm successful. Respected. I have a flat in Canary Wharf and a country house in the Cotswolds." "That's not what I asked." "It's what matters." "Does it?" Eva stood abruptly. "I have to go." "Wait." Rory reached across the table, catching Eva's wrist. The contact sparked something electric between them. "Please. Just... talk to me. Like we used to." "Like we used to?" Eva stared down at Rory's hand on her wrist. "When we used to? When we'd stay up all night planning our futures? When you promised we'd always be there for each other?" "I was scared." "So was I." Eva pulled free. "But I stayed. I waited. I called hospitals thinking you might be dead in a ditch somewhere." The words hung in the air like smoke. At the bar, Silas had stopped polishing and was openly listening now. He caught Rory's eye and nodded toward the back room. Safe harbour if needed. "I'm sorry." "Are you?" Eva's voice was barely above a whisper. "Or are you sorry you got caught?" Before Rory could answer, the bar's door chimed. A man in an expensive suit looked around, spotted Eva, and approached their table. Mid-forties, silver at his temples, the kind of polished confidence that came from never having to check his bank balance. "Darling. The car's outside." Eva's transformation was instant. Her shoulders straightened, her smile brightened, the vulnerability disappeared behind a wall of performance. "Perfect timing." She gathered her handbag. "Richard, this is Rory. An old friend from university." Richard's handshake was firm, dismissive. The kind that said he'd already catalogued Rory's cheap clothes and delivery uniform and found her wanting. "Pleasure." "We were just catching up." Eva's voice had taken on a different cadence. Posher. More refined. "Weren't we, Rory?" "Something like that." Eva leaned down and kissed Rory's cheek. The gesture looked casual, but Rory felt her whisper against her ear. "Room 412. The Langham. Tomorrow. Eight PM." Then she was gone, walking out on Richard's arm like she belonged in his world. Like she'd never spent Sunday mornings in Rory's bed reading terrible poetry aloud and arguing about whether Radiohead was overrated. Rory sat alone in the booth, staring at the door long after it had closed. Her beer had gone flat. The foam had settled into an unappetizing skin on the surface. "Friend of yours?" Silas appeared beside the table, fresh pint in hand. "Used to be." He slid into Eva's abandoned seat. "Ah. Those are the hardest kind." "I hurt her." "Clearly." Silas sipped his beer thoughtfully. "Question is, what are you going to do about it?" Outside, a car engine started. Expensive. Powerful. The sound faded into London's evening chorus of sirens and arguments and lives colliding in the dark. Rory touched her cheek where Eva had kissed her. The skin still tingled.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags18
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences65
tagDensity0.277
leniency0.554
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
86.85% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1141
totalAiIsmAdverbs3
found
0
adverb"suddenly"
count1
1
adverb"slightly"
count1
2
adverb"barely above a whisper"
count1
highlights
0"suddenly"
1"slightly"
2"barely above a whisper"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (16 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
0"Blackwood"
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
64.94% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1141
totalAiIsms8
found
0
word"calculating"
count1
1
word"warmth"
count1
2
word"silence"
count1
3
word"tension"
count1
4
word"electric"
count1
5
word"whisper"
count2
6
word"perfect"
count1
highlights
0"calculating"
1"warmth"
2"silence"
3"tension"
4"electric"
5"whisper"
6"perfect"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"hung in the air"
count1
highlights
0"hung in the air"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences83
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount1
hedgeCount1
narrationSentences83
filterMatches
0"watch"
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences128
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen31
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1140
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions10
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
0.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions66
wordCount771
uniqueNames14
maxNameDensity3.24
worstName"Eva"
maxWindowNameDensity6
worstWindowName"Eva"
discoveredNames
Rory23
Sullivan1
Cardiff1
Eva25
Raven1
Nest1
Silas6
Golden1
Empress1
Richard2
Posher1
Sunday1
Radiohead1
London1
persons
0"Rory"
1"Sullivan"
2"Eva"
3"Raven"
4"Nest"
5"Silas"
6"Richard"
places
0"Cardiff"
1"London"
globalScore0
windowScore0
65.25% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences59
glossingSentenceCount2
matches
0"quite hide the shadows under her eyes"
1"appeared beside the table, fresh pint in hand"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1140
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences128
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs66
mean17.27
std13.86
cv0.803
sampleLengths
07
142
23
365
414
526
632
73
816
939
104
114
1240
139
1413
1530
162
1715
1812
193
2021
2130
227
2324
244
2532
268
2717
287
2937
301
3119
3244
333
3426
3526
365
373
382
397
4025
4136
423
4323
4434
452
4616
4742
484
4918
92.58% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount3
totalSentences83
matches
0"been tamed"
1"was gone"
2"was overrated"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs137
matches(empty)
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences0
totalSentences128
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount772
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount19
adverbRatio0.02461139896373057
lyAdverbCount9
lyAdverbRatio0.011658031088082901
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences128
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences128
mean8.91
std5.71
cv0.641
sampleLengths
07
119
27
316
43
531
615
711
88
99
105
1117
129
133
1421
158
163
177
189
1919
2020
214
224
238
2422
2510
269
274
282
297
305
318
3217
332
349
356
368
374
383
398
4013
413
4214
4313
447
4513
4611
474
489
495
89.32% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats4
diversityRatio0.5546875
totalSentences128
uniqueOpeners71
42.74% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount1
totalSentences78
matches
0"Then she was gone, walking"
ratio0.013
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount13
totalSentences78
matches
0"She caught it before it"
1"Her wild red curls had"
2"It felt real in a"
3"She'd planned to change before"
4"He'd developed an instinct for"
5"They slid into opposite seats."
6"She'd rehearsed this conversation a"
7"She noticed and lowered it"
8"He caught Rory's eye and"
9"Her shoulders straightened, her smile"
10"She gathered her handbag"
11"Her beer had gone flat."
12"He slid into Eva's abandoned"
ratio0.167
56.15% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount63
totalSentences78
matches
0"The pint glass slipped from"
1"She caught it before it"
2"The woman at the bar"
3"Those same green eyes that"
4"Eva Sullivan looked nothing like"
5"This Eva wore a tailored"
6"Her wild red curls had"
7"Diamond earrings caught the Raven's"
8"Rory set her pint on"
9"Eva's gaze swept the bar's"
10"The words stung."
11"Rory had grown fond of"
12"It felt real in a"
13"Eva's laugh held no warmth"
14"Rory glanced down at her"
15"She'd planned to change before"
16"The silence stretched between them"
17"He'd developed an instinct for"
18"Rory gestured toward a corner"
19"Eva checked her watch."
ratio0.808
64.10% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences78
matches
0"Before Rory could answer, the"
ratio0.013
19.70% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences29
technicalSentenceCount5
matches
0"Those same green eyes that used to spark with mischief now held something harder, more calculating."
1"Eva Sullivan looked nothing like the girl who'd dragged Rory through Cardiff's underground music scene, who'd danced barefoot in their shared flat whilst cookin…"
2"How do you explain running from everything, including the people who mattered most?"
3"Mid-forties, silver at his temples, the kind of polished confidence that came from never having to check his bank balance."
4"The kind that said he'd already catalogued Rory's cheap clothes and delivery uniform and found her wanting."
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags18
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags0
86.0550%