Run: 2026-02-19-01KHTX4TE67MXZK8A9RX7NE9HS

Run Details

Duration:
1m 53s
Cost:
$0.075880
Provider:
Amazon Bedrock

Model input

System
You are an expert fiction writer. Always keep the following rules in mind: - Write in past tense and use General English spelling, grammar, and colloquialisms/slang. - Write in active voice - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. - Avoid adverbs and cliches and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Convey events and story through dialogue. - Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. - Skip "he/she said said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech - Avoid mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or add unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Reduce indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" When writing text: - NEVER conclude the scene on your own, follow the beat instructions very closely. - NEVER end with foreshadowing. - NEVER write further than what I prompt you with. - AVOID imagining possible endings, NEVER deviate from the instructions. - STOP EARLY if the continuation contains what was required in the instructions. You do not need to fill out the full amount of words possible.
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4417" name="Tomás Herrera" aliases="Tommy, Tomás, Herrera" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Support"> <eyeColor>warm brown</eyeColor> <hair>short curly dark brown</hair> <height>5'10"</height> <age>29</age> <skinTone>olive skin</skinTone> <scar>scar running along his left forearm from a knife attack</scar> <medallion>Saint Christopher medallion around his neck</medallion> <birthplace>Seville, Spain</birthplace> <description>A former paramedic who provides off-the-books medical care for the clique.</description> <backstory>Born in Seville, Spain. He moved to London to work for the NHS but lost his license after administering unauthorized treatments to supernatural patients.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> </codex> Continue the story using the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the thriller genre. A detective is pursuing a suspect through rain-soaked city streets at night. The chase takes them from the street level down into an underground market. The detective must decide whether to follow the suspect into unfamiliar and potentially dangerous territory. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The rain hammered Wardour Street in thick silver ropes, turning the pavement into a mirror of neon and brake lights. Quinn's boots cracked through a puddle as she rounded the corner, her eyes locked on the back of Tomás Herrera's jacket — olive drab, hood up, moving fast but not running. Not yet. He was still pretending he hadn't spotted her. She pressed her earpiece. Dead air. Comms had cut out two blocks back, right around the time she'd lost mobile signal near that strange little antiques shop on Brewer Street. Didn't matter. She'd called in her position before the static swallowed everything. Backup would come or it wouldn't. Eighteen years on the force had taught her that the window between spotting a suspect and losing them was measured in heartbeats, not dispatch response times. Herrera cut left onto Old Compton Street. She followed, keeping her distance at thirty metres, threading between a couple huddled under a single umbrella and a delivery cyclist who swore at her in Polish. The rain plastered her cropped hair to her skull and ran in cold fingers down the back of her collar. She ignored it. He glanced back. Their eyes met through the downpour — his warm brown, wide with recognition, hers steady and flat. The pretence died between them like a candle pinched out. He ran. Quinn exploded forward, her legs driving hard, arms pumping. She was forty-one and felt every year of it in her knees, but adrenaline had its own mathematics. The gap shrank. Twenty-five metres. Twenty. "Herrera! Metropolitan Police! Stop where you are!" He didn't stop. They never stopped. He vaulted a low railing outside a café, scattering chairs, sending a metal table spinning into the gutter with a clang that rang beneath the thunder. Quinn went around the railing — faster, cleaner — and closed another three metres. She could see the Saint Christopher medallion bouncing against his chest when his collar flapped open, the chain glinting wet. He cut down a side alley. She followed without hesitation, her worn leather watch catching on the brick wall as she banked the turn. The alley stank of grease and old beer. Her feet found broken glass, cardboard, something soft she didn't want to think about. At the far end, a fire escape ladder hung rusted and useless. Dead end. But Herrera wasn't slowing down. He dropped to his knees at the base of the alley's back wall and yanked at something — a grate, she realized, a ventilation grate that shouldn't have moved but came free in his hands as if the bolts were decorative. He slid through feet-first, his body disappearing into the dark below with a grunt and a splash. Quinn reached the opening four seconds later. She crouched, rain streaming off her jaw, and stared down into blackness. Warm air rose from the hole, carrying smells she couldn't catalogue — sandalwood, copper, something electrical and burnt, something alive. A metal ladder descended into the shaft, its rungs gleaming with condensation. She pulled her torch from her belt and aimed it down. The shaft dropped about four metres and opened into a horizontal tunnel — old brickwork, Victorian by the look of it. Somewhere far below, she heard Herrera's footsteps retreating, each one producing a wet echo that bounced and multiplied. Her hand went to her radio. Dead. Her phone — no signal, hadn't had one for ten minutes. She looked back up the alley. Rain. Empty. The distant honk of a taxi on some other, normal street. Three years ago, DS Morris had followed a lead underground. They'd found him four days later in a maintenance tunnel beneath King's Cross, sitting upright against the wall, eyes open, every hair on his head turned white. The pathologist listed the cause of death as cardiac arrest. Quinn had read the report six times. She'd read the unofficial notes the pathologist kept in a separate file — the ones that mentioned the expression on Morris's face, which the pathologist described, with uncharacteristic imprecision, as "sustained terror." The ones that noted his fingernails were worn to the quick, as if he'd been clawing at something for hours, though his hands showed no brick dust, no concrete residue. He'd been clawing at nothing. Or at something that left no trace. Quinn's hand found the top rung of the ladder. Cold iron. Solid. She knew what the smart play was. Wait. Call it in when comms came back. File the location. Return with a team, proper equipment, authorization. She also knew Herrera was connected to the network she'd been circling for eleven months. The clique. The ones who operated in the margins of the case files she couldn't close, the witness statements that contradicted physical evidence, the forensic anomalies that made her senior officers change the subject. Herrera was a thread. If she let him vanish into whatever this was, the thread would snap, and she'd be back to staring at dead ends and dead partners and dead air on the radio. She swung her legs into the shaft and descended. The rungs were slick. Her fingers ached where they gripped. The sounds of the city above — rain, traffic, the electric hum of being alive in London — faded with each step down until they became a memory, then a suggestion, then nothing. The tunnel at the bottom was wide enough for two abreast, lined with those dark Victorian bricks that sweated in the torchlight. The floor was damp but not flooded. Old rail tracks ran along the ground, half-buried in silt. An abandoned Tube station. She was somewhere beneath Camden, she reckoned, though the geography didn't quite make sense given where she'd entered. The distances were wrong. The direction was wrong. She filed that observation and kept moving. Herrera's wet footprints led forward. She followed them. The tunnel bent, then opened without warning into a cavernous space, and Quinn stopped walking. It was the size of a cathedral nave. The arched ceiling rose fifteen metres overhead, supported by iron columns wrapped in what she initially mistook for ivy but recognized, on second look, as something else entirely — tendrils of pale bioluminescence that pulsed with a rhythm uncomfortably close to breathing. The old platform stretched in both directions, and on it, arranged in tight rows and winding aisles, were stalls. Dozens of stalls. Scores of them. They were constructed from salvaged materials — old doors propped on oil drums, sheets of corrugated metal bent into canopies, silk curtains hung from ropes strung between the iron columns. Each one was lit from within by its own source: candles, lanterns, orbs of light that hovered with no visible support. The air was dense with competing scents — the sandalwood she'd caught from above, but also dried herbs, tallow, ozone, and something beneath it all that reminded her of the smell before a lightning strike. People moved between the stalls. Not many — perhaps fifty or sixty — but enough to create a low murmur of commerce that echoed off the tiled walls. She swept her torch across the nearest stall and saw glass jars arranged on a plank shelf, each containing a liquid of a different color, none of them labeled with any alphabet she recognized. The vendor, a gaunt woman with pupils that seemed too large for her face, looked up at Quinn's torchlight and went very still. Quinn killed the torch. She pressed herself against the tunnel mouth and steadied her breathing. Her pulse thudded in her ears. She catalogued what she was seeing with the mechanical precision of two decades of police work: illegal market, underground, no visible means of legitimate access, goods of indeterminate nature, multiple vendors, multiple customers, no emergency exits visible from current vantage point. Her hand drifted to her hip. Her sidearm was there — she was one of the authorized firearms officers in her unit, had been since the incident with Morris. The weight of it was a kind of grammar, a sentence she understood. But the other things she was seeing — the lights that floated, the tendrils that breathed, the jars of liquid that seemed to shift color when she wasn't looking directly at them — those didn't fit any grammar she'd been taught. She spotted Herrera. He'd stopped running. He stood forty metres ahead, near a stall draped in dark red fabric, speaking urgently to a heavyset man whose arms were covered in tattoos that moved. Quinn blinked. The tattoos moved. Ink serpents coiling around the man's wrists, reshuffling themselves in slow loops. Herrera pulled something from his pocket — small, pale, the size of a coin. A bone token. He pressed it into the man's palm. The man nodded and pointed deeper into the market. Quinn's jaw tightened. Eleven months of circumstantial evidence, of phone records that led nowhere, of witnesses who forgot her questions mid-sentence, of her DCI telling her to focus on cases with "prosecutorial traction." Eleven months, and here it was — the thing behind the curtain. The thing she hadn't been able to name but had felt in every dead-end case, every unexplained forensic result, every sleepless night spent re-reading Morris's autopsy report. The Veil Market. She'd heard the name once, in a pub, from a retired officer who'd drunk too much and said too little, who'd gripped her wrist across the table and told her some doors shouldn't be knocked on. She'd written it off as the ramblings of a burnout. She'd written down the name anyway. Herrera was moving again, weaving between stalls, heading toward the far end of the platform where the darkness thickened. If he reached whatever exit lay beyond, she'd lose him. Lose the thread. Go back to her desk and her dead radio and her files full of questions with no answers. She stepped out of the tunnel mouth and into the market. The murmur didn't stop, but it changed — a shift in pitch, a reorganization of attention. Heads turned. Eyes found her. She felt them like heat on her skin. She was wearing plain clothes, no warrant card visible, but she carried herself with the bearing of someone who'd spent years kicking in doors and reading rights, and in a place like this, that was its own kind of uniform. A vendor to her left — a young man with filed teeth and a necklace of small bones — leaned forward and sniffed the air near her as she passed. His lip curled. "Copper," he said, not to her but to the stall beside him. The word traveled. It passed from mouth to mouth in a whisper that rippled through the aisles like wind through grass. Quinn kept walking. She fixed her eyes on the olive drab jacket ahead and matched its pace. Her right hand rested on her hip, fingertips touching the grip of her weapon through her coat. The market pressed close on either side — stalls crammed with objects she refused to examine too closely, sellers who watched her with expressions ranging from contempt to curiosity to something that might have been hunger. A woman stepped into her path. Tall, wrapped in layers of grey linen, face half-hidden by a hood. "You don't have a token." Quinn didn't slow down. "Move." "You don't have a token, and you don't have jurisdiction. Not here. Not below." Quinn stopped. She looked at the woman — really looked. The visible half of her face was old, deeply lined, but her one visible eye was clear and sharp and ancient in a way that had nothing to do with age. "A man just passed through here. Olive jacket, scar on his left arm. Where did he go?" The woman tilted her head. A smile that wasn't a smile. "Everything has a price in the Market. Even answers. Especially answers." Quinn stepped around her and kept moving. Herrera's jacket flashed between two stalls thirty metres ahead. She was gaining. The copper-whisper followed her like a tide, and the market watched, and the luminescent tendrils on the ceiling pulsed, and Detective Harlow Quinn walked deeper into a world that had no place for badges or warrants or the comfortable certainty that the law was the sharpest thing in any room.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags3
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences9
tagDensity0.333
leniency0.667
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
95.08% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount2031
totalAiIsmAdverbs2
found
0
adverb"very"
count1
1
adverb"really"
count1
highlights
0"very"
1"really"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
53.23% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount2031
totalAiIsms19
found
0
word"measured"
count1
1
word"pumping"
count1
2
word"glinting"
count1
3
word"streaming"
count1
4
word"gleaming"
count1
5
word"footsteps"
count1
6
word"echo"
count1
7
word"electric"
count1
8
word"pulsed"
count2
9
word"constructed"
count1
10
word"silk"
count1
11
word"echoed"
count1
12
word"pulse"
count1
13
word"mechanical"
count1
14
word"weight"
count1
15
word"whisper"
count2
16
word"comfortable"
count1
highlights
0"measured"
1"pumping"
2"glinting"
3"streaming"
4"gleaming"
5"footsteps"
6"echo"
7"electric"
8"pulsed"
9"constructed"
10"silk"
11"echoed"
12"pulse"
13"mechanical"
14"weight"
15"whisper"
16"comfortable"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences155
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount1
hedgeCount2
narrationSentences155
filterMatches
0"watch"
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences161
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen61
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords2049
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions8
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
83.33% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions59
wordCount1989
uniqueNames24
maxNameDensity0.8
worstName"Quinn"
maxWindowNameDensity2.5
worstWindowName"Quinn"
discoveredNames
Wardour1
Street3
Tomás1
Herrera11
Brewer1
Old2
Compton1
Polish1
Saint1
Christopher1
Victorian2
Morris4
King1
Cross1
London1
Tube1
Camden1
Quinn16
Eleven2
Veil1
Market1
Detective1
Harlow1
Dead3
persons
0"Tomás"
1"Herrera"
2"Saint"
3"Christopher"
4"Morris"
5"King"
6"Cross"
7"Quinn"
8"Harlow"
places
0"Wardour"
1"Street"
2"Brewer"
3"Old"
4"Compton"
5"Polish"
6"London"
7"Dead"
globalScore1
windowScore0.833
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences104
glossingSentenceCount2
matches
0"quite make sense given where she'd entered"
1"liquid that seemed to shift color when she wasn't looking directly at them — those didn't fit any grammar she'd been taught"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches1
per1kWords0.488
wordCount2049
matches
0"not to her but to the stall beside him"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences161
matches
0"filed that observation"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs51
mean40.18
std30.26
cv0.753
sampleLengths
061
174
257
33
427
52
633
77
86
960
1060
115
1258
1351
1450
1537
16128
1712
1825
1984
209
2182
2237
238
2415
2569
266
2786
2885
294
30100
3141
3250
3333
3472
3555
3650
3711
3869
3933
4033
4170
4218
435
445
4514
4641
4717
4811
4911
89.42% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount7
totalSentences155
matches
0"was measured"
1"were worn"
2"was connected"
3"were constructed"
4"was lit"
5"been taught"
6"were covered"
80.60% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount6
totalVerbs335
matches
0"wasn't slowing"
1"was seeing"
2"was seeing "
3"was wearing"
4"was gaining"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount26
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences21
totalSentences161
ratio0.13
matches
0"Quinn's boots cracked through a puddle as she rounded the corner, her eyes locked on the back of Tomás Herrera's jacket — olive drab, hood up, moving fast but not running."
1"Their eyes met through the downpour — his warm brown, wide with recognition, hers steady and flat."
2"Quinn went around the railing — faster, cleaner — and closed another three metres."
3"He dropped to his knees at the base of the alley's back wall and yanked at something — a grate, she realized, a ventilation grate that shouldn't have moved but came free in his hands as if the bolts were decorative."
4"Warm air rose from the hole, carrying smells she couldn't catalogue — sandalwood, copper, something electrical and burnt, something alive."
5"The shaft dropped about four metres and opened into a horizontal tunnel — old brickwork, Victorian by the look of it."
6"Her phone — no signal, hadn't had one for ten minutes."
7"She'd read the unofficial notes the pathologist kept in a separate file — the ones that mentioned the expression on Morris's face, which the pathologist described, with uncharacteristic imprecision, as \"sustained terror.\" The ones that noted his fingernails were worn to the quick, as if he'd been clawing at something for hours, though his hands showed no brick dust, no concrete residue."
8"The sounds of the city above — rain, traffic, the electric hum of being alive in London — faded with each step down until they became a memory, then a suggestion, then nothing."
9"The arched ceiling rose fifteen metres overhead, supported by iron columns wrapped in what she initially mistook for ivy but recognized, on second look, as something else entirely — tendrils of pale bioluminescence that pulsed with a rhythm uncomfortably close to breathing."
10"They were constructed from salvaged materials — old doors propped on oil drums, sheets of corrugated metal bent into canopies, silk curtains hung from ropes strung between the iron columns."
11"The air was dense with competing scents — the sandalwood she'd caught from above, but also dried herbs, tallow, ozone, and something beneath it all that reminded her of the smell before a lightning strike."
12"Not many — perhaps fifty or sixty — but enough to create a low murmur of commerce that echoed off the tiled walls."
13"Her sidearm was there — she was one of the authorized firearms officers in her unit, had been since the incident with Morris."
14"But the other things she was seeing — the lights that floated, the tendrils that breathed, the jars of liquid that seemed to shift color when she wasn't looking directly at them — those didn't fit any grammar she'd been taught."
15"Herrera pulled something from his pocket — small, pale, the size of a coin."
16"Eleven months of circumstantial evidence, of phone records that led nowhere, of witnesses who forgot her questions mid-sentence, of her DCI telling her to focus on cases with \"prosecutorial traction.\" Eleven months, and here it was — the thing behind the curtain."
17"The murmur didn't stop, but it changed — a shift in pitch, a reorganization of attention."
18"A vendor to her left — a young man with filed teeth and a necklace of small bones — leaned forward and sniffed the air near her as she passed."
19"The market pressed close on either side — stalls crammed with objects she refused to examine too closely, sellers who watched her with expressions ranging from contempt to curiosity to something that might have been hunger."
20"She looked at the woman — really looked."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1971
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount40
adverbRatio0.020294266869609334
lyAdverbCount8
lyAdverbRatio0.004058853373921867
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences161
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences161
mean12.73
std11.63
cv0.914
sampleLengths
020
131
22
38
44
52
624
72
810
96
1026
117
1227
1320
143
153
1617
1710
182
199
2018
213
222
231
247
253
263
2726
2814
2920
306
3118
328
3314
3412
352
365
3741
3817
397
4012
4120
4212
4311
4421
4518
466
471
4811
496
43.69% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats13
diversityRatio0.3105590062111801
totalSentences161
uniqueOpeners50
24.15% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount1
totalSentences138
matches
0"Somewhere far below, she heard"
ratio0.007
54.78% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount57
totalSentences138
matches
0"He was still pretending he"
1"She pressed her earpiece."
2"She'd called in her position"
3"She followed, keeping her distance"
4"She ignored it."
5"He glanced back."
6"Their eyes met through the"
7"She was forty-one and felt"
8"He didn't stop."
9"They never stopped."
10"He vaulted a low railing"
11"She could see the Saint"
12"He cut down a side"
13"She followed without hesitation, her"
14"Her feet found broken glass,"
15"He dropped to his knees"
16"He slid through feet-first, his"
17"She crouched, rain streaming off"
18"She pulled her torch from"
19"Her hand went to her"
ratio0.413
28.84% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount119
totalSentences138
matches
0"The rain hammered Wardour Street"
1"Quinn's boots cracked through a"
2"He was still pretending he"
3"She pressed her earpiece."
4"Comms had cut out two"
5"She'd called in her position"
6"Backup would come or it"
7"Herrera cut left onto Old"
8"She followed, keeping her distance"
9"The rain plastered her cropped"
10"She ignored it."
11"He glanced back."
12"Their eyes met through the"
13"The pretence died between them"
14"Quinn exploded forward, her legs"
15"She was forty-one and felt"
16"The gap shrank."
17"He didn't stop."
18"They never stopped."
19"He vaulted a low railing"
ratio0.862
72.46% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount2
totalSentences138
matches
0"If she let him vanish"
1"If he reached whatever exit"
ratio0.014
10.20% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences70
technicalSentenceCount13
matches
0"She followed, keeping her distance at thirty metres, threading between a couple huddled under a single umbrella and a delivery cyclist who swore at her in Polis…"
1"He vaulted a low railing outside a café, scattering chairs, sending a metal table spinning into the gutter with a clang that rang beneath the thunder."
2"He dropped to his knees at the base of the alley's back wall and yanked at something — a grate, she realized, a ventilation grate that shouldn't have moved but …"
3"Somewhere far below, she heard Herrera's footsteps retreating, each one producing a wet echo that bounced and multiplied."
4"The ones who operated in the margins of the case files she couldn't close, the witness statements that contradicted physical evidence, the forensic anomalies th…"
5"The tunnel at the bottom was wide enough for two abreast, lined with those dark Victorian bricks that sweated in the torchlight."
6"He stood forty metres ahead, near a stall draped in dark red fabric, speaking urgently to a heavyset man whose arms were covered in tattoos that moved."
7"Ink serpents coiling around the man's wrists, reshuffling themselves in slow loops."
8"She'd heard the name once, in a pub, from a retired officer who'd drunk too much and said too little, who'd gripped her wrist across the table and told her some…"
9"She was wearing plain clothes, no warrant card visible, but she carried herself with the bearing of someone who'd spent years kicking in doors and reading right…"
10"The market pressed close on either side — stalls crammed with objects she refused to examine too closely, sellers who watched her with expressions ranging from …"
11"The visible half of her face was old, deeply lined, but her one visible eye was clear and sharp and ancient in a way that had nothing to do with age."
12"The copper-whisper followed her like a tide, and the market watched, and the luminescent tendrils on the ceiling pulsed, and Detective Harlow Quinn walked deepe…"
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags3
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
38.89% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags2
fancyCount1
fancyTags
0"She'd (would)"
dialogueSentences9
tagDensity0.222
leniency0.444
rawRatio0.5
effectiveRatio0.222
79.1556%