Run: 2026-02-19-01KHTX5V6FRZD9ANCJFC0MPPV3

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Duration:
4m 39s
Cost:
$0.003394
Provider:
Inceptron

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System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Horror genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the horror genre. A character is alone in a strange, isolated place at night. They came here for a reason, but something feels off from the moment they arrive. The wrongness builds slowly — sounds that shouldn't be there, things that move at the edge of vision, a growing certainty that they are not alone. Build tension through restraint, not through gore. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for the character and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The oak door stood where it shouldn't have been. Aurora pressed her palm against the rough bark, feeling the grain bite into her skin. Twelve steps past the standing stones, and now this—a doorway built into nothing, frame set with hinges that groaned when the wind pushed against it. The pendant at her chest warmed. *You're losing your mind*, she thought. *This is what happens when you take jobs from strange women in bars.* But she'd taken the job anyway. Three nights ago, a woman with silver-streaked hair had slid into the booth opposite her at Silas' place, placed a photograph on the table, and said, "You lost someone once. Someone who walked into the dark and never came back." The photograph showed a clearing in Richmond Park. Ancient trees. Standing stones. A door that didn't exist. "Find what's through there," the woman had said. "And maybe you find him." Evan. Her ex. The one who left Cardiff with promises of London and a fresh start, then stopped answering calls six months ago. The one the police couldn't find, the one Eva said she needed to let go of, the one who haunted the corners of Aurora's flat at 3 a.m. when sleep wouldn't come. The door swung inward with a sigh. She stepped through. The grove smelled wrong. That was her first thought—wrong, like someone had mixed autumn into summer, dropped in a hint of copper, and stirred. Wildflowers should have been dead this time of year, but they bloomed in silver-tinged clusters around her feet, their petals catching light that had no source. No moon. No stars. Yet she could see. "Okay," she whispered, and her voice fell flat, absorbed by the trees that crowded too close. "Okay." The standing stones marked a circle thirty metres across. She counted them—eight, nine, ten—and each one bore carvings she'd never seen in any archaeology text. Not Celtic. Not anything. The symbols seemed to shift when she looked at them directly, settling into new shapes when she glanced away. The pendant pulsed warmer. Aurora pulled it from beneath her shirt, holding the crimson stone up to what passed for light. It glowed faintly, the way it had in the woman's presence, the way it had when she'd walked past the old church on Millbank and felt sudden heat against her chest. The woman had called it a Heartstone. Had said it led to Hel. Not hell. Hel. The realm of the dead. The place between places. *Evan was always interested in the weird stuff*, she thought. *Always reading about folklore, ancient ruins, secret histories. Said London had layers. Said you just had to know where to dig.* Maybe he'd dug too deep. She walked the perimeter of the clearing, stepping over roots that rose from the earth like knuckles, studying the shadows between the oaks. Nothing moved. Nothing made sound except her own footsteps and the occasional whisper of wind through leaves that didn't rustle. Then: a branch snapped. She spun. "Hello?" Silence. But the silence had weight, pressing against her ears like deep water. *You're alone*, she told herself. *You're alone and this is a grove in Richmond Park and there are no such things as—* Another snap. Closer this time. Then a sound she couldn't name—a low hum that rose from the ground itself, vibrating through her bones. The wildflowers around her feet began to close. Not wilting, not dying. Closing, like hands folding into prayer. She walked faster. The pendant grew hot enough to burn. She clutched it, wincing, and realised she couldn't see the door anymore. The entrance stood behind her—she was certain of it—but when she turned, only trees met her gaze. Dense, unbroken, pressing inward. The clearing had shrunk. No. Not shrunk. She'd walked in a circle without noticing. The stones stood before her now, their carvings clearer than before, wet with something that glistened black in the non-light. *Run*, said a voice in her head that sounded like Eva. *Run now.* She didn't run. She walked toward the stones instead, because running meant panic and panic meant mistakes and she'd made enough mistakes in her life. The last one sat in a flat above a bar, wondering why she'd agreed to this. The symbols on the nearest stone weren't shifting anymore. They stared at her, fixed, and she recognised one. A shape like a door. A shape like a mouth. Something breathed behind her. She didn't turn. If she turned, she'd see something she couldn't unsee. She'd learned that much from the photograph the woman had shown—a second image, taken at the same spot, showing a figure that wasn't quite a figure, a smear of shadow with two points of light where eyes should be. "He came through here," she said aloud, because the words felt true. "Evan came through here." The breathing stopped. "So did you," said a voice that came from everywhere and nowhere, from the stones and the trees and the space between her own ears. "You came looking for him. That's how it works. That's how it always works." The pendant blazed. Pain shot through her hand, and she nearly dropped it, but something kept her fingers curled around the chain. Some instinct. Some refusal. "Show me," she said. The grove laughed. It wasn't a human sound—it layered and multiplied, echoing off trees that seemed farther away now, closer, then far again. The wildflowers had stopped moving. Everything had stopped moving. The world held its breath. A figure stepped out from behind the nearest oak. It wore Evan’s face. His build. His stupid bomber jacket that he'd refuses to throw away even when the zipper broke. But its eyes reflected nothing, and its smile stretched too wide, and when it opened its mouth, what came out wasn't his voice. "Looking for me?" The Heartstone cracked. Aurora screamed as light exploded from the crimson gem—not the gentle pulse she'd known, but something violent, something raw. It tore through the grove like sunrise through mist, and the figure in Evan’s face shrieked,扭曲, folding in on itself as the ancient oaks groaned and the standing stones began to move. The door reappeared. Twenty metres away. Ten. She ran. The grove tried to grab her feet, roots rising and falling, the wrong-thing-smell thickening until she gagged on it. Behind her, the thing that wasn't Evan screamed again, and something else screamed with it—a chorus of voices, old voices, voices that had called this place home long before humans drew their first boundaries. She hit the door. Slammed through it. Stumbled onto wet grass that smelled like normal rain, like normal earth, like the world she'd left behind. Richmond Park stretched before her, black under a moonless sky. The standing stones stood where they should—silent, ancient, harmless. No door. No wildflowers. No breathing. She ran until her lungs burned, until she hit the main road, until a taxi driver stared at her like she'd escaped from a hospital somewhere. "Flat in Shoreditch," she gasped. "Please." The driver didn't ask questions. He drove. Aurora sat in the backseat, heart pounding, hand still clutched around the pendant. The stone had gone cold. When she pulled it out, she saw the crack running through its centre—faint, but present. Something had broken. Something was coming. She pressed her forehead to the window and watched London flash past, streetlights bleeding into streaks, and thought about the thing that had worn Evan's face. About what it had said. *That's how it always works.* She'd find the woman again. She'd demand answers. And if the woman didn't give them— The pendant pulsed once. Faint. Cold. Waiting.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
0.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags7
adverbTagCount2
adverbTags
0"she said aloud [aloud]"
1"said a voice that came from everywhere and nowhere [everywhere nowhere]"
dialogueSentences14
tagDensity0.5
leniency1
rawRatio0.286
effectiveRatio0.286
100.00% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1292
totalAiIsmAdverbs0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
57.43% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1292
totalAiIsms11
found
0
word"tinged"
count1
1
word"pulsed"
count2
2
word"footsteps"
count1
3
word"whisper"
count1
4
word"silence"
count2
5
word"weight"
count1
6
word"echoing"
count1
7
word"pulse"
count1
8
word"pounding"
count1
highlights
0"tinged"
1"pulsed"
2"footsteps"
3"whisper"
4"silence"
5"weight"
6"echoing"
7"pulse"
8"pounding"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences137
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount4
narrationSentences137
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
1"began to"
2"tried to"
98.66% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences144
gibberishSentences1
adjustedGibberishSentences1
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen49
ratio0.007
matches
0"It tore through the grove like sunrise through mist, and the figure in Evan’s face shrieked,扭曲, folding in on itself as the ancient oaks groaned and the standing stones began to mo…"
85.40% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans9
markdownWords73
totalWords1274
ratio0.057
matches
0"You're losing your mind"
1"This is what happens when you take jobs from strange women in bars."
2"Evan was always interested in the weird stuff"
3"Always reading about folklore, ancient ruins, secret histories. Said London had layers. Said you just had to know where to dig."
4"You're alone"
5"You're alone and this is a grove in Richmond Park and there are no such things as—"
6"Run"
7"Run now."
8"That's how it always works."
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions17
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions28
wordCount1208
uniqueNames12
maxNameDensity0.5
worstName"Evan"
maxWindowNameDensity1.5
worstWindowName"Evan"
discoveredNames
Ancient1
Evan6
Cardiff1
London3
Eva2
Aurora5
Celtic1
Millbank1
Heartstone2
Hel2
Richmond2
Park2
persons
0"Evan"
1"Eva"
2"Aurora"
3"Heartstone"
places
0"Cardiff"
1"London"
2"Hel"
3"Richmond"
4"Park"
globalScore1
windowScore1
0.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences62
glossingSentenceCount4
matches
0"sounded like Eva"
1"quite a figure, a smear of shadow with two points of light where eyes should be"
2"seemed farther away now, closer, then far again"
3"smelled like normal rain, like normal eart"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches1
per1kWords0.785
wordCount1274
matches
0"not the gentle pulse she'd known, but something violent, something raw"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences144
matches
0"learned that much"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs60
mean21.23
std18.08
cv0.852
sampleLengths
09
146
219
363
413
555
67
73
850
98
1017
1148
124
1361
1412
1531
165
1743
184
193
2013
2122
2223
2318
243
2540
264
2730
2813
2941
3028
314
3251
3316
343
3539
3626
374
3837
399
4044
413
423
4351
447
452
4653
4725
4825
4926
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences137
matches(empty)
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount2
totalVerbs233
matches
0"weren't shifting"
1"was coming"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount15
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences13
totalSentences144
ratio0.09
matches
0"Twelve steps past the standing stones, and now this—a doorway built into nothing, frame set with hinges that groaned when the wind pushed against it."
1"That was her first thought—wrong, like someone had mixed autumn into summer, dropped in a hint of copper, and stirred."
2"She counted them—eight, nine, ten—and each one bore carvings she'd never seen in any archaeology text."
3"*You're alone and this is a grove in Richmond Park and there are no such things as—*"
4"Then a sound she couldn't name—a low hum that rose from the ground itself, vibrating through her bones."
5"The entrance stood behind her—she was certain of it—but when she turned, only trees met her gaze."
6"She'd learned that much from the photograph the woman had shown—a second image, taken at the same spot, showing a figure that wasn't quite a figure, a smear of shadow with two points of light where eyes should be."
7"It wasn't a human sound—it layered and multiplied, echoing off trees that seemed farther away now, closer, then far again."
8"Aurora screamed as light exploded from the crimson gem—not the gentle pulse she'd known, but something violent, something raw."
9"Behind her, the thing that wasn't Evan screamed again, and something else screamed with it—a chorus of voices, old voices, voices that had called this place home long before humans drew their first boundaries."
10"The standing stones stood where they should—silent, ancient, harmless."
11"When she pulled it out, she saw the crack running through its centre—faint, but present."
12"And if the woman didn't give them—"
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount134
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount4
adverbRatio0.029850746268656716
lyAdverbCount0
lyAdverbRatio0
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences144
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences144
mean8.85
std8.76
cv0.991
sampleLengths
09
115
225
36
46
513
66
748
82
92
105
118
125
131
142
1520
1628
174
187
193
204
2120
2226
232
242
254
2616
271
289
2916
302
312
3219
334
3417
3531
367
376
382
391
405
414
4210
438
444
459
465
4723
482
4918
56.25% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats19
diversityRatio0.4166666666666667
totalSentences144
uniqueOpeners60
94.34% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount3
totalSentences106
matches
0"*Always reading about folklore, ancient"
1"Maybe he'd dug too deep."
2"Then a sound she couldn't"
ratio0.028
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount26
totalSentences106
matches
0"*You're losing your mind*, she"
1"She stepped through."
2"she whispered, and her voice"
3"She counted them—eight, nine, ten—and"
4"It glowed faintly, the way"
5"She walked the perimeter of"
6"*You're alone*, she told herself."
7"*You're alone and this is"
8"She walked faster."
9"She clutched it, wincing, and"
10"She'd walked in a circle"
11"She didn't run."
12"She walked toward the stones"
13"They stared at her, fixed,"
14"She didn't turn."
15"She'd learned that much from"
16"she said aloud, because the"
17"It wasn't a human sound—it"
18"It wore Evan’s face."
19"His stupid bomber jacket that"
ratio0.245
92.08% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount78
totalSentences106
matches
0"The oak door stood where"
1"Aurora pressed her palm against"
2"The pendant at her chest"
3"*You're losing your mind*, she"
4"*This is what happens when"
5"A door that didn't exist."
6"the woman had said"
7"The one who left Cardiff"
8"The one the police couldn't"
9"The door swung inward with"
10"She stepped through."
11"The grove smelled wrong."
12"That was her first thought—wrong,"
13"Wildflowers should have been dead"
14"she whispered, and her voice"
15"The standing stones marked a"
16"She counted them—eight, nine, ten—and"
17"The symbols seemed to shift"
18"The pendant pulsed warmer."
19"Aurora pulled it from beneath"
ratio0.736
47.17% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences106
matches
0"If she turned, she'd see"
ratio0.009
14.65% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences39
technicalSentenceCount7
matches
0"Wildflowers should have been dead this time of year, but they bloomed in silver-tinged clusters around her feet, their petals catching light that had no source."
1"The stones stood before her now, their carvings clearer than before, wet with something that glistened black in the non-light."
2"She'd learned that much from the photograph the woman had shown—a second image, taken at the same spot, showing a figure that wasn't quite a figure, a smear of …"
3"It wasn't a human sound—it layered and multiplied, echoing off trees that seemed farther away now, closer, then far again."
4"Behind her, the thing that wasn't Evan screamed again, and something else screamed with it—a chorus of voices, old voices, voices that had called this place hom…"
5"Stumbled onto wet grass that smelled like normal rain, like normal earth, like the world she'd left behind."
6"She pressed her forehead to the window and watched London flash past, streetlights bleeding into streaks, and thought about the thing that had worn Evan's face."
53.57% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags7
uselessAdditionCount1
matches
0"she said aloud, because the words felt true"
0.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags5
fancyCount3
fancyTags
0"she whispered (whisper)"
1"said a voice that came from everywhere and nowhere (say come)"
2"she gasped (gasp)"
dialogueSentences14
tagDensity0.357
leniency0.714
rawRatio0.6
effectiveRatio0.429
76.6516%