Run: 2026-02-19-01KHTX6BYTQN0R7E2JPACQFQ3E

Run Details

Model:
GPT-5.2
Duration:
1m 39s
Cost:
$0.057676
Provider:
OpenAI

Model input

System
You are an expert fiction writer. Always keep the following rules in mind: - Write in past tense and use General English spelling, grammar, and colloquialisms/slang. - Write in active voice - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. - Avoid adverbs and cliches and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Convey events and story through dialogue. - Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. - Skip "he/she said said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech - Avoid mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or add unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Reduce indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" When writing text: - NEVER conclude the scene on your own, follow the beat instructions very closely. - NEVER end with foreshadowing. - NEVER write further than what I prompt you with. - AVOID imagining possible endings, NEVER deviate from the instructions. - STOP EARLY if the continuation contains what was required in the instructions. You do not need to fill out the full amount of words possible.
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4413" name="Silas Blackwood" aliases="Silas, Si, the Spymaster" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Mentor"> <eyeColor>hazel</eyeColor> <hair>grey-streaked auburn</hair> <height>6'1"</height> <age>58</age> <beard>neatly trimmed, matching his grey-streaked auburn hair</beard> <limp>slight limp in his left leg from an old knee injury</limp> <signetRing>silver signet ring, always worn on his right hand</signetRing> <description>Silas is a retired intelligence operative turned bar owner. He carries himself with quiet authority.</description> <backstory>Former MI6 field agent who retired after a botched operation in Prague left him with a permanent knee injury. He opened "The Raven's Nest" bar in Soho as a front for his network of contacts.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> </codex> Continue the story using the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the literary fiction genre. Two old friends who haven't seen each other in years run into each other unexpectedly at a bar. One of them has changed significantly. Through their conversation and the tension between who they were and who they've become, reveal the weight of time and unspoken regret. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The green neon sign bled across the wet pavement and turned the puddles the colour of old bottles. Aurora pushed through the door of The Raven’s Nest with the cold still stuck to her jacket. The place held its usual mix of stale beer, lemon peel, and that faint paper-dust smell that came off the wall maps when the radiators kicked in. She slid her helmet strap loose and hooked the helmet on her bag. Her hands ached from gripping handlebars all evening. A delivery shift always left her with the same small fury in her knuckles, like the city had tried to grind her down and failed. Silas stood behind the bar with his sleeves rolled. His silver signet ring caught the light each time he reached for a glass. The limp didn’t slow him; it only changed the rhythm of how he moved, a beat you started to hear once you knew it. Rory lifted two fingers. Silas’s eyes flicked up, hazel under the bar’s warm gloom. “Kitchen feed you or starve you?” His mouth tugged into something that passed for a smile in him. “Yu-Fei slipped me dumplings.” Rory shook rain out of her hair and crossed to the bar. “If I die, it won’t be from hunger. It’ll be from traffic.” Silas set a clean tumbler down. “Traffic always did want you dead. Same as the rest of London.” Rory leaned on her forearms. The crescent scar on her left wrist flashed pale against the bar top when she pulled her sleeve back. “Water first.” She rolled her shoulders. “Then something that burns.” Silas reached for the soda gun. The hiss cut through the murmur of voices and the low jazz that came through the speakers like smoke. Rory drank half the water in one go and let it sit cold in her stomach. She wiped her mouth with the back of her hand. “Quiet tonight,” she muttered. Silas’s gaze slid past her, toward the far end of the bar. “Depends what you call quiet.” Rory followed his look without turning her head, a habit he’d drilled into her when he started teaching her how to read a room. A woman sat with her back half to the wall, elbows close, glass untouched. Her coat looked too expensive for Soho rain. Straight posture. Not a tourist. The woman turned her head a fraction. The light from the bar lamps cut across her cheekbone, across a mouth Rory remembered as always laughing. Rory’s throat tightened so fast it felt like a hand. Eva. Rory’s hand went numb around the glass. She put it down before she dropped it. Silas kept wiping the same patch of bar, like he’d decided not to be part of this. Rory stepped away, slow. Each footfall sounded louder than it should have in her ears. She stopped beside Eva’s stool. Eva looked up. Her eyes moved over Rory in one sweep—wet jacket, delivery bag strap, black hair stuck to her cheek, the faint grime under her nails that never scrubbed out fully. For a second Eva’s face stayed blank. Then her jaw shifted. Something held tight behind her eyes. “Rory.” Rory’s mouth opened and closed. Her tongue felt too big. “Eva.” Eva’s gaze dropped to Rory’s wrist, to the pale crescent. It travelled back up. “You cut your hair.” Rory touched the ends without thinking. “Years ago.” Eva’s laugh came out sharp and short, like it hurt. “Right. Years.” Rory pulled the stool beside her a few inches away instead of taking the one right next to her. The gap looked stupid and loud. “You… you live here?” Rory nodded toward the room, toward the maps and photographs and the familiar dark. “Or you just wandered in off the street like a ghost?” Eva’s fingers tightened around the base of her glass. The drink inside stayed level, untouched. “I came for a drink.” “At this place.” Eva’s mouth twitched again. “I remembered it.” Rory stared at Eva’s hands. No nail polish. A small pale line across the knuckle of her index finger. Not a ring. “You remembered.” Rory swallowed. “You never liked bars.” “I never liked your bars.” Eva tapped the rim of the glass with one fingernail. “This one always felt… organised. Like someone kept an eye on it.” Rory glanced at Silas. He pretended to be busy. “You came all this way for organised misery?” Rory tried to make it sound like a joke. It fell flat between them. Eva’s gaze cut into Rory’s face, direct, the way it never used to. “You still do that.” “Do what?” “Make it a joke so you don’t have to answer anything.” Rory felt heat crawl up her neck. “I answered plenty.” Eva snorted, then leaned closer across the gap. Rory caught the scent of rain on wool and something clean, like soap from a good hotel. “When was the last time you spoke to me?” Rory’s mouth dried. She looked away, at the wall behind the bar where a black-and-white photo showed men in old suits, half-smiling as if someone off-camera held a secret. Eva followed her glance, then looked back. “You can’t even look at me.” Rory dragged her eyes back. “I didn’t know you were gone.” Eva’s shoulders lifted and dropped. A small movement. Controlled. “You didn’t ask.” Rory’s laugh sounded wrong, too high. “I did ask. I texted. I—” Eva’s hand came up and stopped Rory’s words with one hard, open-palmed gesture, not touching her, but close enough Rory felt the air shift. “Don’t do that. Don’t dress it up.” Rory’s fingers curled around the edge of the stool. Splinters caught her skin. She welcomed the sting. “I left Cardiff because I had to.” Rory kept her voice even. “You knew why.” Eva’s eyes flicked, once, like she’d blinked away something. “I knew you ran. I didn’t know you cut the cord and burned the rest.” Rory’s breath scraped. “I didn’t burn you.” Eva’s smile showed no teeth. “You didn’t have to. You just walked away and let the smoke choke whoever stood behind you.” Rory sat back, the stool creaking under her. She forced herself to hold Eva’s gaze. “You look different.” Eva’s eyes stayed on her, unblinking. “So do you.” Rory tried to find the old Eva in the angles of her face. The same nose, the same brows. But the softness that used to sit around her mouth had gone. Even her hair looked different—pulled back tight, not the wild halo Rory remembered from Cardiff nights when they’d shared chips on the kerb and pretended the future waited for them like a door they could open. “What happened?” Rory asked. “Where did you go?” Eva’s fingers left the glass and flattened on the bar top, like she had to anchor herself. “I went home.” Rory blinked. “You hated home.” Eva’s eyes narrowed. “You didn’t see it.” Rory’s throat clenched. She glanced toward Silas again, but he stayed out of it, polishing glass, watching the room in the mirror behind the shelves as if he could see every exit at once. Rory leaned closer, lowering her voice. “Eva, what’s going on?” Eva held Rory’s gaze and took her drink for the first time. She swallowed and set it down with care. “My mum died.” The words landed clean. No drama. No waver. Rory felt them hit her ribs like a thrown stone. Rory’s mouth opened. Air went in and out. “When?” Eva’s eyes stayed dry. “Three years ago.” Rory stared. Three years. The number sat between them like an object neither of them could move. “Why didn’t you—” Rory stopped. She heard how stupid it sounded. Eva nodded once, like Rory had confirmed something. “Because you weren’t there.” Rory pressed her thumb into the scar on her wrist until it hurt. “I didn’t know.” Eva’s laugh came again, harsh. “You didn’t know because you didn’t ask. You didn’t know because you took what you needed from me and then you disappeared into London and—” Eva’s voice dropped. “And I watched you build a new life like I never existed.” Rory’s stomach turned. “I didn’t build anything,” Rory snapped, then caught herself. She let her voice soften. “I stacked shifts. I slept. I kept my head down. That’s not a life, Eva.” Eva’s gaze swept Rory’s face, and something in it softened for a fraction. It vanished again. “You always did love the idea that you suffered more than anyone else.” Rory flinched. “That’s not fair.” Eva leaned back on her stool. Her coat creased at the shoulders. The fabric looked heavy enough to stop a knife. “Fair.” Eva turned the word around like it tasted odd. “Do you remember that night by the river? The one where you promised you’d never leave without telling me.” Rory’s chest tightened. The memory came sharp: cold metal railing, Eva’s fingers laced through hers, the smell of cider, Rory’s laughter cracking because she’d almost cried. “I remember.” Eva’s eyes held Rory’s. “You left without telling me.” Rory’s tongue stuck. “I left because Evan—” Eva’s hand lifted again, and Rory stopped. “Don’t give him that much space in this,” Eva murmured. “Don’t hand him the credit for what you chose.” Rory stared at Eva, shock and anger twisting together. “I chose to live.” Eva nodded. “You chose to live without me.” Rory’s nails bit into her palm. She felt the dampness under her fingertips. She hadn’t realised she’d started sweating. “I thought you’d be fine,” Rory whispered, and hated herself as soon as the words left her mouth. Eva’s face changed. Not much. Just the slightest stiffening around her eyes. “Fine.” Eva repeated it, flat. “You always did think I bounced back.” Rory swallowed. “I’m sorry.” Eva’s mouth tightened. She looked down at her drink, at the amber line in the glass. “Don’t.” Rory’s voice rose before she could stop it. “Don’t what? Don’t apologise? Don’t admit I messed up? What do you want from me, Eva?” Eva looked back up. Her eyes held Rory like a pin through fabric. “I wanted you to show up.” Rory’s breath shuddered. She nodded once, slow, like movement would keep her from breaking into pieces right there on the stool. “I can’t fix what I didn’t know,” Rory said. “But I’m here now.” Eva’s lips parted as if she’d meant to answer, then she shut them. She turned her head and looked around the bar, at the maps, at the dark corners, at Silas moving with that measured limp, at the greenish light bleeding in from the sign. “You live above this place,” Eva murmured. Rory’s eyes snapped back. “How do you know that?” Eva didn’t look at her. “Your window. Light on at odd hours. Same shadow moving past the curtain.” Rory stared at Eva’s profile, at the smooth line of her cheek. “You watched me.” Eva’s jaw flexed. “I walked past.” “How many times?” Eva turned back, and that direct stare pinned Rory again. “Enough.” Rory’s mouth went dry. She forced herself to breathe through her nose. “You could’ve knocked.” Eva leaned forward, elbows on the bar. Her voice dropped. “You would’ve opened the door and looked right through me. Like you did before.” Rory shook her head. “No. I wouldn’t.” Eva’s expression stayed calm, but her hands tightened, knuckles whitening. “You don’t get to tell me how it felt.” Rory’s eyes stung. She blinked hard and focused on Eva’s glass instead. “I missed you.” Eva’s laugh came out like a cough. “You missed the version of me that made you feel safe.” Rory’s head jerked up. “That’s not—” Eva cut her off with a small shake of her head. “You remember my old number?” Rory hesitated. She hated the pause. It betrayed her. Eva watched it happen and looked away first, like that tiny victory left a bad taste. “Of course you don’t.” Rory reached into her jacket pocket with stiff fingers and pulled out her phone. The screen lit her hands in pale blue. She scrolled, too fast, past names and missed calls and delivery app notifications. Eva’s gaze flicked down, then up again. Rory stopped, thumb hovering. “I saved it,” Rory murmured. “I never deleted it.” Eva’s eyes narrowed, a flicker of something—hurt, anger, both. “And you never used it.” Rory locked the phone and shoved it back in her pocket. “I kept thinking you’d call,” Rory admitted. “Stupid, I know.” Eva stared at her for a long beat. The jazz track ended. A new one started, slower, a bass line like footsteps down an empty stairwell. Silas set a fresh drink on a tray and moved down the bar toward a couple in the corner. As he passed, his gaze landed on Rory for a second—sharp, assessing—then moved to Eva. He didn’t smile. He didn’t greet her. He clocked her and kept walking. Eva followed him with her eyes, then looked back at Rory. “You picked up new friends.” Rory’s mouth pulled into something that almost counted as a smile. “He came with the flat. Landlord’s a nightmare.” Eva’s lips twitched, and for a second Rory saw a ghost of the old expression, the one that used to crack open rooms. “Still dodging,” Eva muttered. Rory leaned in again, lowering her voice until it sat between them like a secret. “Tell me what you want,” Rory pressed. “Not in riddles. Not in punches. What did you come here for?” Eva’s fingers slid into her coat pocket. She pulled out a small, worn envelope and set it on the bar between them. The paper looked handled, corners soft. Rory stared at it. Eva didn’t take her eyes off Rory. “I came because I got tired of carrying this alone.” Rory’s hand hovered over the envelope, then stopped. “What is it?” Eva’s gaze didn’t flinch. “Open it.” Rory’s fingers closed around the envelope. The paper felt warmer than it should have, like it had lived against skin. She slid a thumb under the flap, paused, then looked back up at Eva. “You’re not going to disappear again, are you?” Eva’s face stayed still, but her shoulders rose with a breath. “Just open it, Rory.” Rory pulled the flap free. The paper rasped in the quiet between notes of the bass. She eased whatever lay inside toward the opening, her fingers shaking despite herself.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags23
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences107
tagDensity0.215
leniency0.43
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
100.00% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount2403
totalAiIsmAdverbs0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (16 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
0"Blackwood"
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
77.11% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount2403
totalAiIsms11
found
0
word"flicked"
count3
1
word"gloom"
count1
2
word"stomach"
count2
3
word"footfall"
count1
4
word"familiar"
count1
5
word"measured"
count1
6
word"flicker"
count1
7
word"footsteps"
count1
highlights
0"flicked"
1"gloom"
2"stomach"
3"footfall"
4"familiar"
5"measured"
6"flicker"
7"footsteps"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches2
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"eyes widened/narrowed"
count2
highlights
0"eyes narrowed"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences212
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount1
hedgeCount5
narrationSentences212
filterMatches
0"look"
hedgeMatches
0"tried to"
1"started to"
2"tended to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences296
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen37
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords2392
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions23
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
0.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions163
wordCount1787
uniqueNames7
maxNameDensity4.76
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity8.5
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
Raven1
Nest1
Rory85
Silas10
Soho1
Eva64
Cardiff1
persons
0"Raven"
1"Rory"
2"Silas"
3"Eva"
places
0"Soho"
1"Cardiff"
globalScore0
windowScore0
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences124
glossingSentenceCount1
matches
0"felt like a hand"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches1
per1kWords0.418
wordCount2392
matches
0"not touching her, but close enough Rory felt the air shift"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences296
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs200
mean11.96
std11.37
cv0.95
sampleLengths
062
146
247
34
410
518
628
76
812
924
1010
1125
1226
134
1412
155
1651
1725
1810
191
2015
2117
2220
2332
2417
251
2610
271
2814
294
306
312
3210
332
3425
3529
3615
375
383
394
403
4122
428
4327
449
4522
4613
474
482
4911
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences212
matches(empty)
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs353
matches(empty)
94.59% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount5
semicolonCount1
flaggedSentences5
totalSentences296
ratio0.017
matches
0"The limp didn’t slow him; it only changed the rhythm of how he moved, a beat you started to hear once you knew it."
1"Her eyes moved over Rory in one sweep—wet jacket, delivery bag strap, black hair stuck to her cheek, the faint grime under her nails that never scrubbed out fully."
2"Even her hair looked different—pulled back tight, not the wild halo Rory remembered from Cardiff nights when they’d shared chips on the kerb and pretended the future waited for them like a door they could open."
3"Eva’s eyes narrowed, a flicker of something—hurt, anger, both."
4"As he passed, his gaze landed on Rory for a second—sharp, assessing—then moved to Eva."
94.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1798
adjectiveStacks1
stackExamples
0"hard, open-palmed gesture,"
adverbCount66
adverbRatio0.03670745272525028
lyAdverbCount2
lyAdverbRatio0.0011123470522803114
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences296
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences296
mean8.08
std6.12
cv0.758
sampleLengths
018
117
227
313
48
525
69
714
824
94
1010
1118
1216
1312
146
1512
165
1719
186
194
206
2119
2216
2310
244
2512
265
2724
2814
298
302
313
327
3318
3410
351
367
378
3817
394
4011
415
423
4329
447
454
466
471
485
495
45.95% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats12
diversityRatio0.20945945945945946
totalSentences296
uniqueOpeners62
53.19% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount3
totalSentences188
matches
0"Then her jaw shifted."
1"Even her hair looked different—pulled"
2"Just the slightest stiffening around"
ratio0.016
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount41
totalSentences188
matches
0"She slid her helmet strap"
1"Her hands ached from gripping"
2"His silver signet ring caught"
3"His mouth tugged into something"
4"She rolled her shoulders"
5"She wiped her mouth with"
6"Her coat looked too expensive"
7"She put it down before"
8"She stopped beside Eva’s stool."
9"Her eyes moved over Rory"
10"Her tongue felt too big."
11"It travelled back up."
12"He pretended to be busy."
13"It fell flat between them."
14"She looked away, at the"
15"She welcomed the sting."
16"She forced herself to hold"
17"She glanced toward Silas again,"
18"She swallowed and set it"
19"She heard how stupid it"
ratio0.218
0.00% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount179
totalSentences188
matches
0"The green neon sign bled"
1"Aurora pushed through the door"
2"The place held its usual"
3"She slid her helmet strap"
4"Her hands ached from gripping"
5"A delivery shift always left"
6"Silas stood behind the bar"
7"His silver signet ring caught"
8"The limp didn’t slow him;"
9"Rory lifted two fingers."
10"Silas’s eyes flicked up, hazel"
11"His mouth tugged into something"
12"Rory shook rain out of"
13"Silas set a clean tumbler"
14"Rory leaned on her forearms."
15"The crescent scar on her"
16"She rolled her shoulders"
17"Silas reached for the soda"
18"The hiss cut through the"
19"Rory drank half the water"
ratio0.952
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences188
matches(empty)
ratio0
100.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences65
technicalSentenceCount3
matches
0"She looked away, at the wall behind the bar where a black-and-white photo showed men in old suits, half-smiling as if someone off-camera held a secret."
1"She glanced toward Silas again, but he stayed out of it, polishing glass, watching the room in the mirror behind the shelves as if he could see every exit at on…"
2"The memory came sharp: cold metal railing, Eva’s fingers laced through hers, the smell of cider, Rory’s laughter cracking because she’d almost cried."
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags23
uselessAdditionCount1
matches
0"Eva repeated, flat"
56.54% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags12
fancyCount10
fancyTags
0"she muttered (mutter)"
1"Rory snapped (snap)"
2"Eva murmured (murmur)"
3"Rory whispered (whisper)"
4"Eva repeated (repeat)"
5"Eva murmured (murmur)"
6"Rory murmured (murmur)"
7"Rory admitted (admit)"
8"Eva muttered (mutter)"
9"Rory pressed (press)"
dialogueSentences107
tagDensity0.112
leniency0.224
rawRatio0.833
effectiveRatio0.187
84.0462%