Run: 2026-02-19-01KHTX6W2J67J7DEMHD13KSP8N

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Duration:
23.4s
Cost:
$0.013448
Provider:
Amazon Bedrock

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System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Romance genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4415" name="Lucien Moreau" aliases="Lucien, Luc, the Frenchman" pronouns="he/him" species="Half-Demon" storyRole="Ally"> <eyeColor>heterochromatic — one amber, one black</eyeColor> <hair>slicked-back platinum blond</hair> <height>5'11"</height> <age>32</age> <cane>ivory-handled cane that conceals a thin blade</cane> <dress>tailored charcoal suits</dress> <description>An impeccably dressed fixer and information broker in London's supernatural underworld. He speaks four languages fluently.</description> <backstory>Born in Marseille to a human mother and a demon father from the realm of Avaros.</backstory> </character> <location id="858" name="Eva's Flat" aliases="Eva's place, the flat on Brick Lane" realm="Earth"> <cat>tabby cat named Ptolemy</cat> <security>three deadbolts on the front door</security> <description>A cramped one-bedroom flat above a curry house on Brick Lane, East London. Every surface is covered with books, scrolls, and research notes.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the romance genre. Two people who parted on complicated terms are forced together again when one shows up unannounced at the other's flat. There's history between them — attraction, hurt, and things left unsaid. Write the scene from the moment the door opens. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The chain clattered like a warning. Rory didn’t answer the first knock. Or the second. The third came harder, rattling the flimsy wood of Eva’s front door. Ptolemy hissed from under the sofa, fur ridged like storm clouds. She unhooked the top bolt. Then the middle. The bottom one resisted—stiff from London damp—so she rocked it loose with her palm. The man on the landing didn’t step back. Lucien. His platinum hair was slicked into its usual precision, the charcoal suit flawless despite the drizzle clinging to his shoulders. The ivory cane rested lightly in his left hand, tip just above the threshold. One amber eye. One black. Both locked on her. “Evening, Rory.” She didn’t move. Didn’t invite him in. The scar on her wrist—a silver crescent beneath the sleeve of her hoodie—itched. It always did when the air changed. Or when lies were close. “Shouldn’t you be brokering soul trades in Soho?” “Postponed. A demon from Leeds kept his side of the bargain. Rare occurrence. Felt it deserved recognition.” “Right. You’re here to *celebrate*.” A flicker. Not in his face. In the way his thumb slid over the cane’s handle. A fraction too tight. “May I come in? This corridor smells of vindaloo and forgotten laundry.” “No.” Silence. The neon sign from the curry house below pulsed red through the stairwell’s frosted glass, painting half his face in temporary flame. “You’ve changed your scent,” he said. She exhaled sharply. Not a laugh. Closer to disbelief. “Now you’re scenting me like some feral cryptid?” “You still wear that citrus thing. Bergamot. But something underneath. Sharper. Ozone, almost.” He tilted his head. “Like right before lightning hits.” Her fingers curled into her palms. “I deliver in a van that smells of soy sauce and existential dread. That’s the ozone.” “Ah.” He didn’t blink. “And the nightmares? Still frequent?” Her breath caught. Just once. Enough. “That’s not—” “You used to sleep with salt under the pillow. And a knife beside the bed.” His voice dropped, smooth as poured tar. “Now you don’t.” “How the hell would you—” “Because I watched you do it for three nights, standing on that very landing, wondering if I should knock. And *not* because I enjoy voyeurism.” Her pulse thudded in her throat. “You *watched*?” “I *cared*.” The word hung like a blade between them. Wind shoved a newspaper up the stairs. It skittered around Lucien’s polished shoes, printing smudged headlines across his cuffs. She remembered the last time. Rain, then too. Her cheek stinging from where Evan’s ring had split the skin. Lucien appearing under the awning of the post office near the tube station. No umbrella. Just his coat collar turned up, and eyes that saw too much. *You don’t have to go back*, he’d said. *I have nowhere else*, she’d answered. *You do*. That was the night he’d given her Eva’s number. The night he’d killed a man for her—quiet, efficient, and never spoken of since. “I don’t need a protector,” she said now, voice low. “Not yours. Not anyone’s.” “You never said thank you, by the way.” “For?” “The ledger. In Camden. The one with your ex’s name in it.” Her stomach dropped. “What ledger?” “The one listing debts. Yours was under *collateral paid*. In full.” He glanced at his cane. “With interest.” “You paid for me?” “No. I *settled*. There’s a difference. One implies charity. The other—” “—implies ownership.” Their eyes met. His heterochromatic gaze didn’t waver. “I don’t own you. I never have.” “Then what were we?” “Complicated.” A beat. Then another. Ptolemy crept forward, sniffing the air near Lucien’s leg. The half-demon looked down. Slowly, he lowered the cane. Not to strike. To offer. The silver tip hovered near the cat’s nose. Ptolemy sniffed. Then—impossibly—rubbed his cheek against it. Rory stared. “He hates strangers.” “Demons smell like endings,” Lucien said. “Cats like endings. They know they’re inevitable.” “Don’t.” “Don’t what? Speak truth? We both know why I’m here, Rory. You’ve been on the edge for weeks. Jumping at shadows. Taking dangerous routes home. And that cut on your forearm—three days old, ragged edges—not from a delivery box.” Her sleeve slipped. Just enough. A thin, healing line ran from wrist to elbow. “You’ve been followed.” “It was a dog.” “East End goblins don’t leave parallel wounds.” She stepped back. The door creaked open wider. He didn’t move. “They’re coming for you. Not because of your ex. Because of *me*.” “Why would they—” “Because when I killed your abuser’s debt collector, I used my real name.” He almost smiled. Cold. Bitter. “I *wanted* them to know it was me. Wanted the message clear. But messages have consequences.” Her mouth went dry. “You used yourself as bait.” “To buy you time. To draw them away. And it worked—until tonight.” His amber eye caught the red neon, turning molten. “They found you anyway.” She reached for the door. To close it? To keep him out? Or— “Come in,” she said. He didn’t react. “That’s dangerous.” “More dangerous to leave you standing there. They’ll see you. They’ll know you care.” A pause. Then, slowly, he stepped over the threshold. The door shut behind him. All three bolts slid into place—*thunk, thunk, thunk*—like prison gates. He stood in the middle of the flat, cane tapping once against the floorboards. Ptolemy wound around his ankles. Books. Scrolls. Notes scattered like fallen wings. One page displayed a crude sketch of a sigil—a spiral with jagged teeth. The same one carved into the warehouse wall where Lucien had broken a man’s spine. She’d drawn it in her sleep. He turned to her. “You dream of my violence.” “I dream of not being afraid.” “And are you?” She met his gaze. “I was. When I opened that door.” “And now?” Now, she was close enough to see the faint silver line across his collarbone—older than her scar. A wound from Avaros, maybe. Or somewhere worse. “Now I’m wondering why it took you eight months to come back.” His jaw tightened. Just once. “Because every step toward you risks dragging you deeper into my world. And last time…” He looked away. “Last time, I crossed a line to protect you. And another to leave.” “What line?” “The one where I stop being your shield,” he said softly, “and start being your ruin.” Outside, a tube train groaned beneath Brick Lane. The walls shivered. Dust drifted from the ceiling. Then—crash. Glass shattered in the alley behind the flat. Lucien moved before sound fully landed. He shoved her behind the sofa, cane already drawn, blade whispering free. Footsteps. Three sets. Light. Fast. Not human. Rory’s hand found the letter opener on the coffee table. He glanced at her. “Still no knife?” “I upgraded.” A shadow flickered across the frosted windowpane. Tall. Hunched. Antlers? Horns? Lucien’s voice was barely audible. “Don’t trust me tonight.” “Why not?” “Because when they come through that door,” he said, raising the blade, “the man who walks through first won’t be your protector.” The lock began to *hiss*. Not breaking. *Melting*. “—he’ll be the thing that kept you alive.”
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags12
adverbTagCount2
adverbTags
0"He looked away [away]"
1"he said softly [softly]"
dialogueSentences68
tagDensity0.176
leniency0.353
rawRatio0.167
effectiveRatio0.059
74.90% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1195
totalAiIsmAdverbs6
found
0
adverb"lightly"
count1
1
adverb"sharply"
count1
2
adverb"very"
count1
3
adverb"slowly"
count2
4
adverb"softly"
count1
highlights
0"lightly"
1"sharply"
2"very"
3"slowly"
4"softly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
58.16% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1195
totalAiIsms10
found
0
word"flawless"
count1
1
word"flicker"
count1
2
word"silence"
count1
3
word"pulsed"
count1
4
word"pulse"
count1
5
word"efficient"
count1
6
word"stomach"
count1
7
word"shattered"
count1
8
word"footsteps"
count1
9
word"flickered"
count1
highlights
0"flawless"
1"flicker"
2"silence"
3"pulsed"
4"pulse"
5"efficient"
6"stomach"
7"shattered"
8"footsteps"
9"flickered"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"stomach dropped/sank"
count1
highlights
0"stomach dropped"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences131
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount1
narrationSentences131
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"began to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences186
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen41
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans14
markdownWords26
totalWords1181
ratio0.022
matches
0"celebrate"
1"not"
2"watched"
3"cared"
4"You don’t have to go back"
5"I have nowhere else"
6"You do"
7"collateral paid"
8"settled"
9"me"
10"wanted"
11"thunk, thunk, thunk"
12"hiss"
13"Melting"
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions11
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
92.11% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions26
wordCount691
uniqueNames11
maxNameDensity1.16
worstName"Lucien"
maxWindowNameDensity2
worstWindowName"Lucien"
discoveredNames
Eva2
London1
Lucien8
Evan1
Cold1
Avaros1
Brick1
Lane1
Rory3
Ptolemy4
One3
persons
0"Eva"
1"Lucien"
2"Evan"
3"Rory"
4"Ptolemy"
5"One"
places
0"London"
1"Avaros"
2"Brick"
3"Lane"
globalScore0.921
windowScore1
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences42
glossingSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1181
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences186
matches
0"eyes that saw"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs96
mean12.3
std10.22
cv0.831
sampleLengths
06
132
222
38
41
534
69
72
832
98
1017
115
1220
1312
141
1523
166
1717
1822
1922
209
216
222
2325
245
2525
268
272
288
2919
3046
318
326
332
3423
3514
368
371
3812
395
4018
414
4211
432
4415
454
461
474
4831
497
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount1
totalSentences131
matches
0"was slicked"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs126
matches(empty)
4.61% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount13
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences9
totalSentences186
ratio0.048
matches
0"The bottom one resisted—stiff from London damp—so she rocked it loose with her palm."
1"The scar on her wrist—a silver crescent beneath the sleeve of her hoodie—itched."
2"The night he’d killed a man for her—quiet, efficient, and never spoken of since."
3"Then—impossibly—rubbed his cheek against it."
4"Or—"
5"All three bolts slid into place—*thunk, thunk, thunk*—like prison gates."
6"One page displayed a crude sketch of a sigil—a spiral with jagged teeth."
7"Now, she was close enough to see the faint silver line across his collarbone—older than her scar."
8"Then—crash."
85.14% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount702
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount40
adverbRatio0.05698005698005698
lyAdverbCount8
lyAdverbRatio0.011396011396011397
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences186
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences186
mean6.35
std5.69
cv0.896
sampleLengths
06
16
23
312
411
55
63
714
88
91
1020
1114
123
132
144
152
163
174
1813
197
205
218
2217
235
242
254
2610
274
2812
291
301
3122
326
333
343
353
368
3717
385
396
4016
414
425
433
442
451
462
4722
483
495
64.16% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats4
diversityRatio0.3978494623655914
totalSentences186
uniqueOpeners74
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount5
totalSentences95
matches
0"Then the middle."
1"Just his coat collar turned"
2"Slowly, he lowered the cane."
3"Then—impossibly—rubbed his cheek against it."
4"Then, slowly, he stepped over"
ratio0.053
55.79% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount39
totalSentences95
matches
0"She unhooked the top bolt."
1"His platinum hair was slicked"
2"She didn’t move."
3"It always did when the"
4"She exhaled sharply."
5"He tilted his head"
6"Her fingers curled into her"
7"He didn’t blink"
8"Her breath caught."
9"His voice dropped, smooth as"
10"Her pulse thudded in her"
11"It skittered around Lucien’s polished"
12"She remembered the last time."
13"Her cheek stinging from where"
14"*You don’t have to go"
15"*I have nowhere else*, she’d"
16"she said now, voice low"
17"Her stomach dropped."
18"He glanced at his cane"
19"Their eyes met."
ratio0.411
75.79% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount73
totalSentences95
matches
0"The chain clattered like a"
1"Rory didn’t answer the first"
2"The third came harder, rattling"
3"Ptolemy hissed from under the"
4"She unhooked the top bolt."
5"The bottom one resisted—stiff from"
6"The man on the landing"
7"His platinum hair was slicked"
8"The ivory cane rested lightly"
9"Both locked on her."
10"She didn’t move."
11"The scar on her wrist—a"
12"It always did when the"
13"A fraction too tight."
14"The neon sign from the"
15"She exhaled sharply."
16"He tilted his head"
17"Her fingers curled into her"
18"He didn’t blink"
19"Her breath caught."
ratio0.768
100.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount3
totalSentences95
matches
0"To close it?"
1"To keep him out?"
2"Now, she was close enough"
ratio0.032
100.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences20
technicalSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
83.33% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags12
uselessAdditionCount1
matches
0"she said, voice low"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags6
fancyCount0
fancyTags(empty)
dialogueSentences68
tagDensity0.088
leniency0.176
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
89.7996%