Run: 2026-02-19-01KHTX6XKWJS2WDS7E7QQJXW4Z

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You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Literary Fiction genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4413" name="Silas Blackwood" aliases="Silas, Si, the Spymaster" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Mentor"> <eyeColor>hazel</eyeColor> <hair>grey-streaked auburn</hair> <height>6'1"</height> <age>58</age> <beard>neatly trimmed, matching his grey-streaked auburn hair</beard> <limp>slight limp in his left leg from an old knee injury</limp> <signetRing>silver signet ring, always worn on his right hand</signetRing> <description>Silas is a retired intelligence operative turned bar owner. He carries himself with quiet authority.</description> <backstory>Former MI6 field agent who retired after a botched operation in Prague left him with a permanent knee injury. He opened "The Raven's Nest" bar in Soho as a front for his network of contacts.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the literary fiction genre. Two old friends who haven't seen each other in years run into each other unexpectedly at a bar. One of them has changed significantly. Through their conversation and the tension between who they were and who they've become, reveal the weight of time and unspoken regret. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The knife hit the wood with a thud that silenced the bar’s low hum. Aurora Carter didn’t flinch. She barely blinked. Her fingers hovered over the hilt of the second blade, not yet thrown, as if deciding whether to follow through or pretend it hadn't been personal. Across the room, near the back where the green neon buzzed like a dying wasp, Silas Blackwood stood with his coat still on, fingers curled around the doorframe. He watched her. She turned, slow, her straight black hair catching the dim light like oil on water. One step. Then another. The knife was forgotten. "You missed," he said. She almost smiled. "Not by much." "Close doesn't cut it when the target’s your neck." They faced each other in the narrow aisle between booths. Ten years folded into silence. Not the kind that settles, but the kind that presses—tight, thick, full of everything unsaid. He gestured toward the dartboard nailed to the back wall. A crude target drawn in charcoal: three concentric circles, a stick figure beneath. Her knife had split the stick figure’s throat. The second blade hovered just above its heart. "Still compensating for accuracy with aggression," he said. "Still lecturing like you’ve got the right," she shot back. His eye twitched. Just once. The only sign he’d felt it. He limped forward, setting his cane against the bar before shrugging off his trench coat. Underneath, the faint outline of a shoulder holster. Old habits, like old scars, never faded. The bartender—new face—started forward with a dishcloth. "Leave it," Silas said, voice low but absolute. "It stays." Aurora folded her arms. "You’ve gone full paranoid. Even the staff don’t know your code words." "I don’t use code words anymore. I use names. And tone." "Right. The Spymaster retires, but the act stays on." He studied her. Not just her face, but the way her weight sat on her heels, the slight tension in her left wrist as she tucked a strand of hair behind her ear—exposing the crescent-shaped scar just beneath her pulse. "You work delivery now," he said. "You kept tabs." "I pay attention." "Same thing." He didn’t deny it. She moved past him, heading for the bar. Took the stool at the far end. The one with the cracked vinyl that no one ever chose. She did it on purpose. Always had—sitting where she could see every exit, every face. Silas followed. Sat across from her. No drink. No smile. "You cut your hair," he said. "You went grey." He almost laughed. Almost. "You used to wear it long," he said. "Down your back. Like your mother’s." Her fingers stilled on the edge of the counter. "Don’t." "She died eight years ago, Rory. I sent flowers." "From Prague." "From a hospital bed. My knee was still held together by screws. I thought you knew." "I didn’t want to." Silence again. He ordered a whiskey—single malt, no ice. She held up two fingers for the same. The glasses arrived. They didn’t clink. "You left Cardiff without a trace," he said. "One day you were in lectures. Next, gone. No note. No call. Just a forwarded number and a voice message saying you’d ‘started fresh’." "I did." "From what?" She looked at him then. Really looked. Blue eyes sharp as broken glass. "From a man who broke my wrist before he realised it wasn’t the one with the scar." Silas didn’t move. But something in the set of his jaw cracked. "Evan Thorne," he said quietly. "You knew?" "I knew he was trouble. I told you." "And I told you to stay out of it." "You were twenty-two. You were brilliant. You were—" “What? Begging for your approval every time I made a decision you didn’t pre-approve?” Her voice was low, controlled, but the tremor ran underneath like live wire. “You weren’t my father, Silas. You weren’t even family.” “No,” he said. “But I was the only one who saw what he was doing. The texts. The way he’d turn up at your flat at two in the morning just to check your phone. How he made you call *him* to confirm you were alone.” Her breath caught. Just once. “You should’ve come to me,” he said. “And do what? Disappear into one of your safe houses? Become another asset in your little network?” “You’d be alive.” “I *am* alive.” “You’re delivering dumplings in a stolen moped, dodging rent and sleeping above a bar you won’t even drink in unless you’re cornered.” “That bar’s the only reason I’m still breathing,” she snapped. “And you don’t get to lecture me about survival. Not after Prague.” His face shuttered. That’s when she knew. He’d thought she didn’t know. "You think I didn’t find out?" she said, leaning in. "That I didn’t spend six months tracking down anyone who remembered you from that operation? A safe flat in Vinohrady. Gunfire. A partner left behind because you were already on the extraction route?" "I was ordered out." "By who? The same people who scrubbed your name from the file? Who buried your partner’s body in an unmarked plot because he knew too much?" "He wasn’t my partner," Silas said, voice hollow. "He was my son." Aurora froze. The bar music skipped. A record needle lifting, searching for a groove. “You never said—” “No one knew. Not officially. We weren’t—close. Not then. He was in Analysis. Thought fieldwork was romantic. Wanted to prove himself.” “And you let him.” “I *tried* to stop him. He falsified clearance. Walked into that flat ahead of me. They were waiting.” His fingers tightened around the glass. “I heard the shot. Felt the blood hit my face. But the extraction call came in five seconds later. Protocol. I followed orders.” “And he bled out alone.” Silas closed his eyes. Just for a second. When they opened, they were dry. Hard. “Yes.” The weight of it sat between them like a corpse. She looked away. At the old black-and-white photos on the wall—spies, likely, long dead. At the maps with pin marks in countries that no longer existed. This place wasn’t just a bar. It was a shrine. “You think I don’t know regret?" he said. "You think I don’t wake up every morning and see his face instead of mine in the mirror? I let him die, Rory. I chose duty. And I’ve paid for it every day since.” “You could’ve told me.” “I couldn’t. Not then. Not after what I’d already asked of you." "What?" He hesitated. Then reached into his inner coat pocket. Slid a photograph across the bar. Her fingers trembled as she picked it up. A woman. Late thirties. Dark hair. Kind eyes. Her mother. Standing beside a man Aurora didn’t recognise. But the scar on his wrist—the same crescent shape as hers—was unmistakable. "That’s your uncle," Silas said. "Your mother’s brother. He worked for us. MI6. Disappeared in ’94. Presumed dead." She stared. "I didn’t know I had an uncle." "You were six. Your parents buried it. Buried him." "Why are you showing me this *now*?" "Because someone’s been asking questions. About him. About you. About me." The air in the bar turned. Aurora set the photo down slowly. "What kind of questions?" "Who knows what happened in Prague. Who might’ve survived." "And?" Silas met her eyes. "They found his body last week. In a drainage tunnel beneath Wapping. Hands gone. Teeth removed. But the tattoo on his ribcage—your initials. In Irish script. Only your mother and one other person knew that." “Who?” Before he could answer, the front door opened. A man stepped in. Late twenties. Wearing a rain-damp jacket. A delivery bag slung over his shoulder. He looked directly at Aurora. "Rory? Got a late order. Chicken lo mein and spring rolls. From the Golden Empress?" Her breath stopped. Because she recognised the voice. Because she’d lived in terror of it. Because the delivery boy’s smile didn’t reach his eyes. And because she’d thought Evan was dead.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags18
adverbTagCount2
adverbTags
0"he said quietly [quietly]"
1"His fingers tightened around [around]"
dialogueSentences74
tagDensity0.243
leniency0.486
rawRatio0.111
effectiveRatio0.054
92.58% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1347
totalAiIsmAdverbs2
found
0
adverb"really"
count1
1
adverb"slowly"
count1
highlights
0"really"
1"slowly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (16 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
0"Blackwood"
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
74.02% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1347
totalAiIsms7
found
0
word"silence"
count2
1
word"weight"
count2
2
word"tension"
count1
3
word"pulse"
count1
4
word"trembled"
count1
highlights
0"silence"
1"weight"
2"tension"
3"pulse"
4"trembled"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells1
narrationSentences113
matches
0"d in terror"
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences113
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences169
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen43
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans4
markdownWords4
totalWords1332
ratio0.003
matches
0"him"
1"am"
2"tried"
3"now"
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions27
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
89.85% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions17
wordCount665
uniqueNames5
maxNameDensity1.2
worstName"Silas"
maxWindowNameDensity2
worstWindowName"Silas"
discoveredNames
Carter1
Silas8
Blackwood1
Aurora6
Evan1
persons
0"Carter"
1"Silas"
2"Blackwood"
3"Aurora"
4"Evan"
places(empty)
globalScore0.898
windowScore1
95.65% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences46
glossingSentenceCount1
matches
0"as if deciding whether to follow through or pretend it hadn't been personal"
49.85% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches2
per1kWords1.502
wordCount1332
matches
0"Not the kind that settles, but the kind"
1"Not just her face, but the way her weight sat on her heels, the slight tension in h"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences169
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs100
mean13.32
std12.14
cv0.911
sampleLengths
014
133
231
323
44
56
69
730
839
98
1010
1141
127
1310
1416
1511
169
1740
186
193
203
212
224
2341
2410
256
263
274
2814
2910
309
312
3216
334
3417
356
3632
372
382
3930
4012
415
422
438
449
458
4636
4746
485
497
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount1
totalSentences113
matches
0"was forgotten"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs126
matches(empty)
24.51% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount9
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences7
totalSentences169
ratio0.041
matches
0"Not the kind that settles, but the kind that presses—tight, thick, full of everything unsaid."
1"The bartender—new face—started forward with a dishcloth."
2"Not just her face, but the way her weight sat on her heels, the slight tension in her left wrist as she tucked a strand of hair behind her ear—exposing the crescent-shaped scar just beneath her pulse."
3"Always had—sitting where she could see every exit, every face."
4"He ordered a whiskey—single malt, no ice."
5"At the old black-and-white photos on the wall—spies, likely, long dead."
6"But the scar on his wrist—the same crescent shape as hers—was unmistakable."
94.99% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount678
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount31
adverbRatio0.045722713864306784
lyAdverbCount7
lyAdverbRatio0.01032448377581121
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences169
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences169
mean7.88
std7.48
cv0.949
sampleLengths
014
14
23
326
428
53
615
72
82
94
104
113
123
139
1410
155
1615
1710
1813
198
208
218
2210
233
242
256
2615
278
287
297
308
312
324
3312
3411
359
363
3737
386
393
403
412
424
438
447
4511
465
4710
482
494
51.08% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats12
diversityRatio0.34911242603550297
totalSentences169
uniqueOpeners59
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount3
totalSentences82
matches
0"Always had—sitting where she could"
1"Just for a second."
2"Then reached into his inner"
ratio0.037
59.02% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount33
totalSentences82
matches
0"She barely blinked."
1"Her fingers hovered over the"
2"He watched her."
3"She turned, slow, her straight"
4"She almost smiled."
5"They faced each other in"
6"He gestured toward the dartboard"
7"Her knife had split the"
8"she shot back"
9"His eye twitched."
10"He limped forward, setting his"
11"He studied her."
12"He didn’t deny it."
13"She moved past him, heading"
14"She did it on purpose."
15"He almost laughed."
16"Her fingers stilled on the"
17"He ordered a whiskey—single malt,"
18"She held up two fingers"
19"They didn’t clink."
ratio0.402
100.00% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount57
totalSentences82
matches
0"The knife hit the wood"
1"Aurora Carter didn’t flinch."
2"She barely blinked."
3"Her fingers hovered over the"
4"He watched her."
5"She turned, slow, her straight"
6"The knife was forgotten."
7"She almost smiled."
8"They faced each other in"
9"He gestured toward the dartboard"
10"A crude target drawn in"
11"Her knife had split the"
12"The second blade hovered just"
13"she shot back"
14"His eye twitched."
15"The only sign he’d felt"
16"He limped forward, setting his"
17"The bartender—new face—started forward with"
18"Silas said, voice low but"
19"Aurora folded her arms."
ratio0.695
100.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount4
totalSentences82
matches
0"Before he could answer, the"
1"Because she recognised the voice."
2"Because she’d lived in terror"
3"Because the delivery boy’s smile"
ratio0.049
98.21% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences16
technicalSentenceCount1
matches
0"Not the kind that settles, but the kind that presses—tight, thick, full of everything unsaid."
69.44% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags18
uselessAdditionCount2
matches
0"Silas said, voice low but absolute"
1"Silas said, voice hollow"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags15
fancyCount1
fancyTags
0"she snapped (snap)"
dialogueSentences74
tagDensity0.203
leniency0.405
rawRatio0.067
effectiveRatio0.027
89.9740%