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Run: 2026-02-19-01KHTX82MBX62ZY2S40MVXDJGV
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Model:
Gemini 3 Flash (Preview)
Test:
Bad Writing Habits
Scenario:
Literary fiction: old friends reunite
Duration:
20.4s
Cost:
$0.008145
Provider:
Google AI Studio
Evaluation summary
Score
Evaluator
Details Link
100.00%
Adverbs in dialogue tags
(details)
87.19%
AI-ism adverb frequency
(details)
100.00%
AI-ism character names
(details)
100.00%
AI-ism location names
(details)
38.52%
AI-ism word frequency
(details)
100.00%
Cliché density
(details)
100.00%
Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
(details)
100.00%
Filter word density
(details)
100.00%
Gibberish response detection
(details)
100.00%
Markdown formatting overuse
(details)
100.00%
Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
(details)
83.33%
Name drop frequency
(details)
86.71%
Narrator intent-glossing
(details)
100.00%
"Not X but Y" pattern overuse
(details)
100.00%
Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
(details)
100.00%
Paragraph length variance
(details)
100.00%
Passive voice overuse
(details)
100.00%
Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
(details)
72.60%
Em-dash & semicolon overuse
(details)
100.00%
Purple prose (modifier overload)
(details)
100.00%
Repeated phrase echo
(details)
100.00%
Sentence length variance
(details)
36.07%
Sentence opener variety
(details)
36.23%
Adverb-first sentence starts
(details)
46.09%
Pronoun-first sentence starts
(details)
14.35%
Subject-first sentence starts
(details)
54.35%
Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
(details)
74.83%
Technical jargon density
(details)
0.00%
Useless dialogue additions
(details)
89.39%
Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
(details)
80.6554%
Overall
Model input
System
You are an expert fiction writer. Always keep the following rules in mind: - Write in past tense and use General English spelling, grammar, and colloquialisms/slang. - Write in active voice - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. - Avoid adverbs and cliches and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Convey events and story through dialogue. - Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. - Skip "he/she said said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech - Avoid mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or add unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Reduce indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" When writing text: - NEVER conclude the scene on your own, follow the beat instructions very closely. - NEVER end with foreshadowing. - NEVER write further than what I prompt you with. - AVOID imagining possible endings, NEVER deviate from the instructions. - STOP EARLY if the continuation contains what was required in the instructions. You do not need to fill out the full amount of words possible.
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4413" name="Silas Blackwood" aliases="Silas, Si, the Spymaster" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Mentor"> <eyeColor>hazel</eyeColor> <hair>grey-streaked auburn</hair> <height>6'1"</height> <age>58</age> <beard>neatly trimmed, matching his grey-streaked auburn hair</beard> <limp>slight limp in his left leg from an old knee injury</limp> <signetRing>silver signet ring, always worn on his right hand</signetRing> <description>Silas is a retired intelligence operative turned bar owner. He carries himself with quiet authority.</description> <backstory>Former MI6 field agent who retired after a botched operation in Prague left him with a permanent knee injury. He opened "The Raven's Nest" bar in Soho as a front for his network of contacts.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> </codex> Continue the story using the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the literary fiction genre. Two old friends who haven't seen each other in years run into each other unexpectedly at a bar. One of them has changed significantly. Through their conversation and the tension between who they were and who they've become, reveal the weight of time and unspoken regret. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>
Model response
Messages
Meta
AI
Rain slicked the Soho pavement, turning the neon glow of the Raven’s Nest into a blurred smear of emerald against the black asphalt. Inside, the air tasted of stale cedar and expensive gin.
Silas Blackwood polished a highball
glass with
rhythmic
, surgical precision, his silver signet ring ticking against the
crystal
.
The brass rail of the
bar groaned under the
weight
of a man whose silhouette belonged to a different decade.
Rory pushed through the heavy
oak doors, shedding her damp windbreaker.
She shook her head, sending
a spray of droplets from her black bob onto the floorboards.
She caught her reflection in
the mirrored backbar—sharp eyes, the faint lines of a woman who had learned to sleep with one ear open. Then she saw him.
The man sat three stools
down, hunched over a neat scotch.
His coat was tweed, expensive
but frayed at the cuffs.
His hair, once a controlled
mahogany, now drifted in thin, snowy wisps across a scalp mapped with age spots. "The ice melts if you stare at it that long, Evan." The man flinched.
He turned slowly, the hinge
of his neck stiff. He blinked through thick lenses, his hazel eyes clouded with a milky film of recognition. "Rory?"
His voice rattled like gravel
in a tin can.
The last time she heard
that voice, it had been a roar behind a locked bathroom door in Cardiff.
Now, it barely carried over
the low hum of the refrigerator.
Rory slid onto the stool
next to him, leaving a deliberate gap of one empty seat.
She signaled Silas with a
twitch of her fingers.
A gin and tonic appeared
before her without a word spoken. "You look... different. I almost didn't believe it was you." "A lot happens in seven years. I grew up. I moved. I stopped waiting for permission to breathe."
Evan’s hand trembled as he
reached for his glass.
The gold wedding band he
used to twist compulsively
was gone
, replaced by a band of pale, puckered skin. He looked at her wrist, where the sleeve of her jumper had ridden up to reveal the crescent-shaped scar. He winced and looked away. "I heard you went to London. Your mother mentioned it once, before she stopped taking my calls. I didn't think I’d ever find you in a place like this." "It’s a big city, Evan. Small enough for people who don’t want to be found, and apparently just small enough for ghosts like you to haunt." "I’m not a ghost yet. Though some days, it feels like a dress rehearsal." He gestured to his legs.
They looked thin inside his
trousers, lacking the deceptive strength of the man who used to hike the Brecon Beacons for sport.
He took a sip of
his scotch, the liquid sloshing dangerously close to the rim. "The firm let me go two years ago. Early retirement, they called it. 'Restructuring.' I spend most of my time in the library now. Or here. Silas makes a decent drink." "Silas makes a drink for anyone with a tenner and a
pulse
. Don't mistake hospitality for friendship." Silas didn't look up from a lemon he
was peeling
, but the blade of his paring knife moved with a sudden, deliberate
intensity
. The atmosphere in the Raven's Nest thickened, the shadows in the corners of the room seeming to creep closer toward the pool of amber light where they sat. "I
tried to
write," Evan whispered. "I have a drawer full of envelopes. No addresses. I didn't know where you went after the flat in Roath. You vanished, Rory. Just... poof. Like a magician’s trick." "It wasn't a trick. It was an escape. There’s a distinction. One is for the audience’s benefit. The other is for the survivor’s." "I was a different man back then. The pressure... the caseloads... I took things out on the world that the world didn't deserve." Rory
traced
the rim of her glass.
She felt the cool condensation
on her fingertip, a sharp contrast to the heat rising in her chest. "You took them out on me. Don't broaden the scope to make it feel like a tragedy of circumstance. It was a tragedy of choice. Yours." Evan bowed his head. The neon green light from the sign outside caught the side of his face, highlighting the deep grooves of his cheeks.
He looked fragile, a porcelain
doll glued back together with visible, messy seams. The power he once wielded—the psychological
weight
that could pin her to a chair with a single look—had evaporated. In its place was a hollowed-out shell, shivering in a draft she couldn't feel. "I wanted to say I’m sorry. I know it’s late. I know it’s meaningless. But seeing you here... looking like this... it’s like seeing a version of the future I didn't think you’d get to have." "I got to have it because I took it from you. I didn't ask for it. I didn't wait for your apology to start living. If I’d waited for you to be sorry, I’d still be in that kitchen in Cardiff, counting the cracks in the ceiling." She took a long drink, the bite of the quinine sharp on her tongue. "Why are you in London, Evan? Really." "Medical specialists. Harley Street. My heart is... tired, Rory. The doctors use words like 'degenerate' and 'irreversible.' It’s a funny thing, being told your time has a shelf life. You start looking for the things you broke, wondering if any of them can be fixed." "Some things are
shattered
into sand. You can’t glue sand." "I know. But I thought if I could just see you once. If I could see that you weren't... that I hadn't destroyed everything." "You destroyed the girl you knew. This woman? You didn't make her. You were just the disaster she had to climb out of to become herself." Rory stood up.
Her barstool scraped against the
floor, a harsh, screeching sound that cut through the jazz playing
softly
over the speakers.
She reached into her pocket
and dropped a few crumpled notes onto the mahogany. Evan reached out, his fingers hovering near the sleeve of her jacket,
not quite touching the fabric
. "Rory, wait. Just another five minutes. I don't see many people these days. The
silence
in my flat is... it’s heavy." "That’s the
weight
of your own company, Evan. You should be used to it by now. You spent years making sure I felt that same
silence
, even when you were standing right in front of me." "I'm a dying man. Doesn't that buy me a shred of grace?" Rory looked at him,
really
looked at him.
She saw the tremor in
his jaw, the yellowing of his eyes, the way his expensive tweed hung off his bony shoulders. The fear that had lived in the base of her spine for years didn't flare. It didn't even
flicker
. There was only a
profound
, hollow
sense of
pity, like looking at an old, rusted machine in a scrapyard. "Grace isn't something you buy at the end of the line. It’s what you build along the way. You spent your materials on walls." Silas stopped his work and leaned his elbows on the backbar. The hazel of his eyes met Rory’s, a silent communication passing between them—an offer of intervention, a question of safety. Rory gave a microscopic shake of her head. "I'm going home, Evan. Don't follow me. Don't look for me. This isn't a movie where the protagonist forgives the villain on his deathbed so he can sleep better. This is just a Wednesday in Soho." "Is that all? Just a Wednesday?" "If you're lucky. For me, it's just the end of a shift." She turned her back on him. The bell above the door chimed as she stepped back out into the rain. The cold air hit her face, crisp and clean, washing away the smell of cedar and regret. Behind her, through the window of the Raven’s Nest, she saw the silhouette of the man in the tweed coat. He remained motionless, staring at the empty stool beside him. The green neon
flickered
, casting a
rhythmic
, sickly light over his slumped form. Inside, Silas moved to the end of the bar. He took Rory’s half-finished gin and tonic and poured it down the sink. He didn't look at Evan. He simply picked up a fresh cloth and
began to
wipe the spot where Rory’s hand had rested, erasing the heat of her touch from the wood. Evan peered into his scotch. The ice had finally melted, diluting the amber liquid into a pale, tasteless tea. He raised the glass to his lips, but his hand shook so violently that the liquid spilled over the edge, staining his frayed cuff. He didn't wipe it away. He sat in the green-tinted dark, listening to the rain drum against the glass, a
rhythmic
tapping that
sounded like a countdown
. "Another one?"
Silas asked, his voice devoid of warmth
. Evan looked up, his eyes searching the empty room for a ghost that had finally stopped haunting him. "No,"
Evan said, his voice a dry whisper
. "I think I've had enough." He fumbled for his wallet, his fingers clumsy. He laid a bank note on the bar with the care of a man placing a wreath. He stood, his limp more pronounced than it had been when he arrived, his body tilting toward the left as if pulled by an invisible
weight
. "She’s a
remarkable
woman,"
Evan muttered, more to himself than to the man behind the bar
. Silas didn't look up from the glass he
was drying
. "She is. And she did it all on her own." Evan paused at the door. He looked out at the street, where the crowds moved in a frantic, living tide. He was a stone in the middle of a river, the water rushing past him, indifferent to his presence,
slowly
wearing him down to nothing. He stepped out, the emerald light of the sign overhead casting one last shadow across his face before he disappeared into the London fog. Silas reached for the remote under the bar and turned the music up a fraction. The saxophone wailed a lonely, blue note that filled the space where two people had
tried to
bridge a gap that had become a canyon. He went back to his glasses, the silver ring clicking a steady, indifferent beat against the rim. The rain continued to fall, steady and relentless, washing the footprints from the pavement outside until the sidewalk was once again a blank slate, dark and shimmering under the city lights. Rory walked toward the tube station, her pace brisk, her breathing shallow. She didn't look back. There was nothing left in that bar but a smell she wanted to forget and a man who was already gone. She reached the turnstile and fumbled for her pass. For a second, her hand stalled. She looked at her wrist. The crescent scar was still there, but in the harsh fluorescent light of the station, it looked less like a mark of damage and more like a badge of distance. She touched it, once, then tucked her hand into her pocket and stepped through the gate. Above ground, the green neon of the Raven's Nest hummed, a lonely
beacon
in the Soho night. Silas watched the last of the patrons trickle out, leaving the room to the shadows and the scent of old maps. He moved to the door, flipped the sign to 'Closed,' and turned off the neon. The emerald glow vanished, leaving the sidewalk in total darkness.
created_at
"2026-02-19T12:15:56.562Z"
2/19/2026, 12:15:56 PM
model
"google/gemini-3-flash-preview-20251217"
app_id
182717
external_user
(null)
streamed
true
cancelled
false
latency
816
moderation_latency
(null)
generation_time
20382
tokens_prompt
1094
tokens_completion
2790
native_tokens_prompt
1032
native_tokens_completion
2543
native_tokens_completion_images
0
native_tokens_reasoning
0
native_tokens_cached
0
num_media_prompt
(null)
num_input_audio_prompt
(null)
num_media_completion
0
num_search_results
(null)
origin
"https://ncbench.com/"
is_byok
false
finish_reason
"stop"
native_finish_reason
"STOP"
usage
0.008145
router
(null)
provider_responses
0
endpoint_id
"6e82f652-2693-4b60-bbe0-7362d6e345f0"
is_byok
false
latency
815
model_permaslug
"google/gemini-3-flash-preview-20251217"
provider_name
"Google AI Studio"
status
200
api_type
"completions"
id
"gen-1771503356-NfL4gkbx4egsViG5C6Gu"
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0.008145
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(null)
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0
provider_name
"Google AI Studio"
Evaluation details
Result
Evaluator
Details
Meta Data
100.00%
Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags
5
adverbTagCount
0
adverbTags
(empty)
dialogueSentences
33
tagDensity
0.152
leniency
0.303
rawRatio
0
effectiveRatio
0
87.19%
AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount
1952
totalAiIsmAdverbs
5
found
0
adverb
"slowly"
count
2
1
adverb
"really"
count
2
2
adverb
"softly"
count
1
highlights
0
"slowly"
1
"really"
2
"softly"
100.00%
AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (16 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
0
"Blackwood"
found
(empty)
100.00%
AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
(empty)
found
(empty)
38.52%
AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount
1952
totalAiIsms
24
found
0
word
"rhythmic"
count
3
1
word
"crystal"
count
1
2
word
"weight"
count
4
3
word
"trembled"
count
1
4
word
"pulse"
count
1
5
word
"intensity"
count
1
6
word
"traced"
count
1
7
word
"porcelain"
count
1
8
word
"shattered"
count
1
9
word
"silence"
count
2
10
word
"flicker"
count
1
11
word
"profound"
count
1
12
word
"sense of"
count
1
13
word
"flickered"
count
1
14
word
"warmth"
count
1
15
word
"whisper"
count
1
16
word
"remarkable"
count
1
17
word
"beacon"
count
1
highlights
0
"rhythmic"
1
"crystal"
2
"weight"
3
"trembled"
4
"pulse"
5
"intensity"
6
"traced"
7
"porcelain"
8
"shattered"
9
"silence"
10
"flicker"
11
"profound"
12
"sense of"
13
"flickered"
14
"warmth"
15
"whisper"
16
"remarkable"
17
"beacon"
100.00%
Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches
0
maxInWindow
0
found
(empty)
highlights
(empty)
100.00%
Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells
0
narrationSentences
93
matches
(empty)
100.00%
Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount
0
hedgeCount
2
narrationSentences
93
filterMatches
(empty)
hedgeMatches
0
"began to"
1
"tried to"
100.00%
Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences
122
gibberishSentences
0
adjustedGibberishSentences
0
longSentenceCount
0
runOnParagraphCount
0
giantParagraphCount
0
wordSaladCount
0
repetitionLoopCount
0
controlTokenCount
0
maxSentenceWordsSeen
47
ratio
0
matches
(empty)
100.00%
Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans
0
markdownWords
0
totalWords
1944
ratio
0
matches
(empty)
100.00%
Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions
8
unquotedAttributions
0
matches
(empty)
83.33%
Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions
44
wordCount
1312
uniqueNames
11
maxNameDensity
0.76
worstName
"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity
2.5
worstWindowName
"Evan"
discoveredNames
Soho
2
Raven
4
Nest
4
Blackwood
1
Cardiff
1
Silas
9
Brecon
1
Beacons
1
Rory
10
Evan
10
London
1
persons
0
"Raven"
1
"Nest"
2
"Blackwood"
3
"Silas"
4
"Rory"
5
"Evan"
places
0
"Soho"
1
"Cardiff"
2
"London"
globalScore
1
windowScore
0.833
86.71%
Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences
79
glossingSentenceCount
2
matches
0
"not quite touching the fabric"
1
"sounded like a countdown"
100.00%
"Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches
0
per1kWords
0
wordCount
1944
matches
(empty)
100.00%
Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount
1
totalSentences
122
matches
0
"heard that voice"
100.00%
Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs
59
mean
32.95
std
19.68
cv
0.597
sampleLengths
0
71
1
55
2
40
3
11
4
27
5
1
6
39
7
36
8
10
9
18
10
52
11
29
12
26
13
14
14
42
15
31
16
17
17
51
18
35
19
23
20
23
21
25
22
26
23
71
24
36
25
47
26
14
27
7
28
45
29
10
30
24
31
26
32
37
33
17
34
21
35
36
36
12
37
68
38
24
39
39
40
36
41
6
42
12
43
37
44
43
45
54
46
70
47
9
48
18
49
13
100.00%
Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount
1
totalSentences
93
matches
0
"was gone"
100.00%
Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount
2
totalVerbs
195
matches
0
"was peeling"
1
"was drying"
72.60%
Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount
4
semicolonCount
0
flaggedSentences
3
totalSentences
122
ratio
0.025
matches
0
"She caught her reflection in the mirrored backbar—sharp eyes, the faint lines of a woman who had learned to sleep with one ear open."
1
"The power he once wielded—the psychological weight that could pin her to a chair with a single look—had evaporated."
2
"The hazel of his eyes met Rory’s, a silent communication passing between them—an offer of intervention, a question of safety."
100.00%
Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount
1310
adjectiveStacks
0
stackExamples
(empty)
adverbCount
36
adverbRatio
0.02748091603053435
lyAdverbCount
15
lyAdverbRatio
0.011450381679389313
100.00%
Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences
122
echoCount
0
echoWords
(empty)
100.00%
Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences
122
mean
15.93
std
8.82
cv
0.553
sampleLengths
0
23
1
10
2
18
3
20
4
11
5
16
6
24
7
4
8
11
9
10
10
19
11
11
12
3
13
9
14
15
15
1
16
9
17
19
18
11
19
16
20
9
21
11
22
10
23
18
24
9
25
19
26
19
27
5
28
29
29
26
30
14
31
5
32
22
33
15
34
31
35
17
36
23
37
28
38
6
39
29
40
23
41
23
42
7
43
18
44
26
45
4
46
21
47
13
48
19
49
14
36.07%
Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats
17
diversityRatio
0.2540983606557377
totalSentences
122
uniqueOpeners
31
36.23%
Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount
1
totalSentences
92
matches
0
"Then she saw him."
ratio
0.011
46.09%
Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount
40
totalSentences
92
matches
0
"She shook her head, sending"
1
"She caught her reflection in"
2
"His coat was tweed, expensive"
3
"His hair, once a controlled"
4
"He turned slowly, the hinge"
5
"He blinked through thick lenses,"
6
"His voice rattled like gravel"
7
"She signaled Silas with a"
8
"He looked at her wrist,"
9
"He winced and looked away."
10
"He gestured to his legs."
11
"They looked thin inside his"
12
"He took a sip of"
13
"She felt the cool condensation"
14
"He looked fragile, a porcelain"
15
"She took a long drink,"
16
"Her barstool scraped against the"
17
"She reached into her pocket"
18
"She saw the tremor in"
19
"It didn't even flicker."
ratio
0.435
14.35%
Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount
82
totalSentences
92
matches
0
"Rain slicked the Soho pavement,"
1
"Silas Blackwood polished a highball"
2
"The brass rail of the"
3
"Rory pushed through the heavy"
4
"She shook her head, sending"
5
"She caught her reflection in"
6
"The man sat three stools"
7
"His coat was tweed, expensive"
8
"His hair, once a controlled"
9
"The man flinched."
10
"He turned slowly, the hinge"
11
"He blinked through thick lenses,"
12
"His voice rattled like gravel"
13
"The last time she heard"
14
"Rory slid onto the stool"
15
"She signaled Silas with a"
16
"A gin and tonic appeared"
17
"Evan’s hand trembled as he"
18
"The gold wedding band he"
19
"He looked at her wrist,"
ratio
0.891
54.35%
Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount
1
totalSentences
92
matches
0
"Now, it barely carried over"
ratio
0.011
74.83%
Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences
63
technicalSentenceCount
6
matches
0
"She caught her reflection in the mirrored backbar—sharp eyes, the faint lines of a woman who had learned to sleep with one ear open."
1
"They looked thin inside his trousers, lacking the deceptive strength of the man who used to hike the Brecon Beacons for sport."
2
"The power he once wielded—the psychological weight that could pin her to a chair with a single look—had evaporated."
3
"Evan reached out, his fingers hovering near the sleeve of her jacket, not quite touching the fabric."
4
"Evan looked up, his eyes searching the empty room for a ghost that had finally stopped haunting him."
5
"He stood, his limp more pronounced than it had been when he arrived, his body tilting toward the left as if pulled by an invisible weight."
0.00%
Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags
5
uselessAdditionCount
3
matches
0
"Silas asked, his voice devoid of warmth"
1
"Evan said, his voice a dry whisper"
2
"Evan muttered, more to himself than to the man behind the bar"
89.39%
Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags
4
fancyCount
2
fancyTags
0
"Evan whispered (whisper)"
1
"Evan muttered (mutter)"
dialogueSentences
33
tagDensity
0.121
leniency
0.242
rawRatio
0.5
effectiveRatio
0.121
80.6554%