Run: 2026-02-19-01KHTX9CYEZQZPYGBXFXSW43NM

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You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Romance genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4415" name="Lucien Moreau" aliases="Lucien, Luc, the Frenchman" pronouns="he/him" species="Half-Demon" storyRole="Ally"> <eyeColor>heterochromatic — one amber, one black</eyeColor> <hair>slicked-back platinum blond</hair> <height>5'11"</height> <age>32</age> <cane>ivory-handled cane that conceals a thin blade</cane> <dress>tailored charcoal suits</dress> <description>An impeccably dressed fixer and information broker in London's supernatural underworld. He speaks four languages fluently.</description> <backstory>Born in Marseille to a human mother and a demon father from the realm of Avaros.</backstory> </character> <location id="858" name="Eva's Flat" aliases="Eva's place, the flat on Brick Lane" realm="Earth"> <cat>tabby cat named Ptolemy</cat> <security>three deadbolts on the front door</security> <description>A cramped one-bedroom flat above a curry house on Brick Lane, East London. Every surface is covered with books, scrolls, and research notes.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the romance genre. Two people who parted on complicated terms are forced together again when one shows up unannounced at the other's flat. There's history between them — attraction, hurt, and things left unsaid. Write the scene from the moment the door opens. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The deadbolts clunked open one after another. Three of them. Rory always was paranoid about security. The door swung inward to reveal her, silhouetted against the warm light of Eva's flat. Her straight black hair fell across her face as she blinked, those bright blue eyes widening in recognition before turning to ice. "You." Lucien leaned against the doorframe, ivory-handled cane tapping softly against the worn carpet. The scent of curry from downstairs mingled with the familiar fragrance of Rory's perfume. Vanilla and something uniquely her. "Expecting someone else?" he asked, his charcoal suit immaculate despite the drizzly London evening. "How did you get this address?" Rory's hand remained on the door, ready to slam it shut. Her eyes darted to the street behind him, checking for escape routes or witnesses. "Information is my business, Aurora." He used her full name deliberately. "Or should I call you Laila? Malphora, perhaps? You've collected quite the assortment of identities since Cardiff." Her jaw tightened. "That's not my name anymore." "Names are such fluid things, aren't they?" Lucien stepped forward, forcing her to either retreat or let him enter. "Like loyalties. Like promises." Rory moved aside, just enough. The narrow hallway of Eva's flat was cluttered with books, scrolls, and research notes. A tabby cat—Ptolemy—watched from a precarious stack of ancient manuscripts, green eyes unblinking. "What do you want, Lucien?" Rory closed the door, sliding all three deadbolts back into place. The metallic clicks echoed in the small space. "I thought we agreed London was big enough for both of us." "London is never big enough for people like us." He ran a finger along a dusty book spine. "And we didn't agree on anything. You left." "You gave me no choice." She crossed her arms, the small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist visible. A childhood accident, she'd told him once. He wondered if that had been a lie too. "There are always choices." Lucien turned to face her, his heterochromatic eyes—one amber, one black—catching the light. "You chose to run rather than trust me." "You were keeping secrets." Rory's voice remained steady, but her fingers twisted the hem of her jumper. "About your father. About what you really are." "The half-demon thing bothers you more than the information broker part?" A faint smile touched Lucien's lips. "I find that interesting." "It bothers me that you lied." She moved toward the small kitchenette. "Tea?" "No, thank you." He followed her, the cane making soft tapping sounds on the floor. "I never lied, Rory. I omitted certain truths. There's a difference." "Is there?" She filled the kettle anyway, her back to him. "When the omission is about your father being a demon from another realm who expects you to follow in his footsteps? I'd say that's a fairly significant detail to leave out." Lucien leaned against the counter, watching her movements. Graceful. Controlled. Everything about Aurora Carter was measured. It's what had drawn him to her initially—her cool-headed intelligence, her quick thinking in impossible situations. "He's been in London," Lucien said quietly. Rory's hand froze on the mug she'd been reaching for. "Your father?" "The very same." Lucien's fingers tightened around the ivory handle of his cane. "He's looking for something. Or someone." "Me?" Rory turned, her expression unreadable. "I don't know." That was the truth. "But he knows about you. About us." "There is no 'us,' Lucien. Not anymore." She finished making her tea, her movements precise. "I have a life now. A job. Friends. I deliver Chinese food and study law part-time. It's boring and normal and exactly what I want." "Normal?" Lucien laughed, the sound harsh in the small flat. "Darling, nothing about you has ever been normal. And your friend Eva—her research into pre-Christian Celtic mythology? The artifacts hidden beneath these very books? That's not exactly Sunday bridge club." Rory's knuckles whitened around her mug. "Leave Eva out of this." "I can't." Lucien reached into his suit jacket, pulling out a small, leather-bound book. "My father's people are moving through London. They're asking questions. About Cardiff. About a woman with magic in her blood who doesn't know her own power." "Magic?" Rory set her tea down with a thud. "You're insane. I'm just—" "Just a human woman with an uncanny ability to find things that shouldn't be found? To solve puzzles that have stumped scholars for centuries? To see through the veils between worlds?" Lucien stepped closer, his voice dropping to a near-whisper. "Your mother's family isn't just Welsh, Rory. They're something older. Something your father the barrister never understood." "You're lying." "Am I?" Lucien reached out, tucking a strand of her black hair behind her ear. She flinched but didn't pull away. "Why else would my father be interested in you? Why else would I have spent months searching for you after you left?" "Because you're obsessed." But her voice had lost its certainty. "Because I care." Lucien's thumb brushed her cheekbone. "Because whatever else happened between us, whatever secrets I kept, I never lied about that." Rory closed her eyes, leaning into his touch for just a second before stepping back. "You need to go." "Not until you understand the danger you're in." Lucien placed the leather book on the counter. "This belonged to your mother's grandmother. It's written in Old Welsh, but there are passages about the Malphora. About what flows in your veins." "I can't—" "Yes, you can." Lucien moved toward the door. "I'll be at the Golden Empress tomorrow. Delivering lunch, as it were. We need to talk, Rory. Really talk. Before my father finds you first." He unlocked the deadbolts, the sound loud in the silence that had fallen between them. At the door, he paused, turning back to her. "I never meant to hurt you," he said softly. Rory hugged herself, looking small and vulnerable for the first time since he'd arrived. "I know." The door closed behind him, and Lucien heard all three deadbolts slide into place once more. He stood in the hallway of the Brick Lane building, the scent of curry thick in the air. Below, the London streets bustled with life, unaware of the supernatural currents flowing beneath the surface. Inside the flat, Rory picked up the leather book, her fingers tracing the embossed symbol on its cover—a crescent moon, identical to the scar on her wrist.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
94.74% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags27
adverbTagCount3
adverbTags
0"Lucien said quietly [quietly]"
1"Lucien's fingers tightened around [around]"
2"he said softly [softly]"
dialogueSentences57
tagDensity0.474
leniency0.947
rawRatio0.111
effectiveRatio0.105
67.38% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1073
totalAiIsmAdverbs7
found
0
adverb"softly"
count2
1
adverb"deliberately"
count1
2
adverb"really"
count2
3
adverb"very"
count2
highlights
0"softly"
1"deliberately"
2"really"
3"very"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
58.06% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1073
totalAiIsms9
found
0
word"familiar"
count1
1
word"echoed"
count1
2
word"footsteps"
count1
3
word"measured"
count1
4
word"unreadable"
count1
5
word"uncanny"
count1
6
word"whisper"
count1
7
word"silence"
count1
8
word"tracing"
count1
highlights
0"familiar"
1"echoed"
2"footsteps"
3"measured"
4"unreadable"
5"uncanny"
6"whisper"
7"silence"
8"tracing"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences60
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences60
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences89
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen41
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1059
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions14
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
0.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions37
wordCount583
uniqueNames9
maxNameDensity2.57
worstName"Lucien"
maxWindowNameDensity5.5
worstWindowName"Lucien"
discoveredNames
Eva2
Rory13
London2
Ptolemy1
Lucien15
Aurora1
Carter1
Brick1
Lane1
persons
0"Eva"
1"Rory"
2"Ptolemy"
3"Lucien"
4"Aurora"
5"Carter"
places
0"London"
1"Brick"
2"Lane"
globalScore0.214
windowScore0
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences48
glossingSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1059
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences89
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs44
mean24.07
std13.46
cv0.559
sampleLengths
016
137
21
332
414
531
628
78
823
932
1036
1126
1234
1325
1425
1521
1613
1726
1842
1932
207
2112
2219
236
2414
2540
2640
2711
2840
2913
3057
312
3243
3310
3423
3519
3640
372
3833
3924
409
4116
4250
4327
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences60
matches(empty)
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs103
matches(empty)
14.45% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount6
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences4
totalSentences89
ratio0.045
matches
0"A tabby cat—Ptolemy—watched from a precarious stack of ancient manuscripts, green eyes unblinking."
1"\"There are always choices.\" Lucien turned to face her, his heterochromatic eyes—one amber, one black—catching the light."
2"It's what had drawn him to her initially—her cool-headed intelligence, her quick thinking in impossible situations."
3"Inside the flat, Rory picked up the leather book, her fingers tracing the embossed symbol on its cover—a crescent moon, identical to the scar on her wrist."
88.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount594
adjectiveStacks2
stackExamples
0"small crescent-shaped scar"
1"small, leather-bound book."
adverbCount22
adverbRatio0.037037037037037035
lyAdverbCount7
lyAdverbRatio0.011784511784511785
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences89
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences89
mean11.9
std7.53
cv0.633
sampleLengths
07
13
26
315
422
51
613
714
85
914
1017
1114
1211
1317
143
155
1619
174
185
1914
2013
2116
228
2312
2418
258
2618
277
289
2917
308
3117
328
3317
344
3512
361
3715
3811
3911
4031
418
421
431
446
4516
467
4710
482
4913
88.39% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats3
diversityRatio0.550561797752809
totalSentences89
uniqueOpeners49
0.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount0
totalSentences58
matches(empty)
ratio0
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount17
totalSentences58
matches
0"Her straight black hair fell"
1"he asked, his charcoal suit"
2"Her eyes darted to the"
3"He used her full name"
4"Her jaw tightened."
5"He ran a finger along"
6"She crossed her arms, the"
7"He wondered if that had"
8"She moved toward the small"
9"He followed her, the cane"
10"She filled the kettle anyway,"
11"It's what had drawn him"
12"She finished making her tea,"
13"She flinched but didn't pull"
14"He unlocked the deadbolts, the"
15"he said softly"
16"He stood in the hallway"
ratio0.293
11.72% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount52
totalSentences58
matches
0"The deadbolts clunked open one"
1"Rory always was paranoid about"
2"The door swung inward to"
3"Her straight black hair fell"
4"Lucien leaned against the doorframe,"
5"The scent of curry from"
6"he asked, his charcoal suit"
7"Rory's hand remained on the"
8"Her eyes darted to the"
9"He used her full name"
10"Her jaw tightened."
11"Lucien stepped forward, forcing her"
12"Rory moved aside, just enough."
13"The narrow hallway of Eva's"
14"A tabby cat—Ptolemy—watched from a"
15"Rory closed the door, sliding"
16"The metallic clicks echoed in"
17"He ran a finger along"
18"She crossed her arms, the"
19"A childhood accident, she'd told"
ratio0.897
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences58
matches(empty)
ratio0
98.21% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences16
technicalSentenceCount1
matches
0"Rory closed her eyes, leaning into his touch for just a second before stepping back."
13.89% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags27
uselessAdditionCount6
matches
0"Rory's hand remained, ready to slam it shut"
1"Rory's voice remained, but her fingers twisted the hem of her jumper"
2"He followed, the cane making soft tapping sounds on the floor"
3"Rory turned, her expression unreadable"
4"She finished, her movements precise"
5"Lucien stepped, his voice dropping to a near-whisper"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags4
fancyCount1
fancyTags
0"Lucien laughed (laugh)"
dialogueSentences57
tagDensity0.07
leniency0.14
rawRatio0.25
effectiveRatio0.035
77.8281%