Run: 2026-02-19-01KHTX9RM0WMK4PWX8ZSSJ1MZC

Run Details

Model:
GPT-5.2
Duration:
1m 34s
Cost:
$0.053456
Provider:
OpenAI

Model input

System
You are an expert fiction writer. Always keep the following rules in mind: - Write in past tense and use General English spelling, grammar, and colloquialisms/slang. - Write in active voice - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. - Avoid adverbs and cliches and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Convey events and story through dialogue. - Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. - Skip "he/she said said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech - Avoid mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or add unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Reduce indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" When writing text: - NEVER conclude the scene on your own, follow the beat instructions very closely. - NEVER end with foreshadowing. - NEVER write further than what I prompt you with. - AVOID imagining possible endings, NEVER deviate from the instructions. - STOP EARLY if the continuation contains what was required in the instructions. You do not need to fill out the full amount of words possible.
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4418" name="Nyx" aliases="Nyx, the Shadow, Nightwhisper" pronouns="they/them" species="Shade" storyRole="Wild Card"> <eyeColor>faintly glowing violet</eyeColor> <height>approximately 6'2" in solid form</height> <age>ageless</age> <form>humanoid silhouette of living shadow, can shift between solid and incorporeal</form> <voice>sounds like a whisper carried on the wind</voice> <description>A being of living shadow, existing between the mortal plane and the spaces between realms.</description> <backstory>Nyx was once a human sorcerer named Aldric who became trapped between realms during a failed summoning ritual in 1643. They now exist as a Shade, bound to the mortal plane but able to slip between shadows.</backstory> </character> <character id="4424" name="Isolde Varga" aliases="Isolde, the Seer" pronouns="she/her" species="Half-Fae" storyRole="Oracle"> <eyeColor>pale lavender</eyeColor> <hair>silver, reaching her waist</hair> <height>5'5"</height> <age>300 years old</age> <appearance>ethereal, ageless</appearance> <speech>speaks in riddles</speech> <footprints>leaves no footprints when she walks</footprints> <compulsion>cannot lie (Fae compulsion) but can mislead</compulsion> <description>A Half-Fae seer exiled from the Fae Courts for sharing visions with mortals.</description> <backstory>She now lives in a hidden grove in Richmond Park, offering cryptic prophecies to those who seek her out.</backstory> </character> <location id="853" name="Dymas (Gluttony)" aliases="Dymas, gluttony, Dymasian" realm="Hel" sin="Gluttony"> <ruler>Prince Belphegor</ruler> <skyColor>warm amber</skyColor> <description>A place of excess and indulgence. Sprawling vineyards, orchards, and gardens provide exotic ingredients for master chefs — often helbound souls contracted from Earth. Grand feasts and culinary competitions are common.</description> </location> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> <item id="2006" name="Fae-Forged Blade" aliases="the Fae blade, Isolde's gift" type="Weapon" origin="The Fae Courts"> <material>moonsilver</material> <shape>slender, leaf-shaped dagger</shape> <temperature>always cold to the touch</temperature> <glow>faintly luminescent in moonlight</glow> <power>can cut through magical wards; particularly effective against demons</power> <givenTo>given to Aurora by Isolde as a gift</givenTo> <description>A weapon of the Fae Courts, rare and highly coveted.</description> </item> <lore id="7001" name="The Veil" aliases="the Veil, the Barrier, the Boundary" category="Cosmology"> <solsticeEffect>weakens during the winter solstice, strengthens during the summer solstice</solsticeEffect> <appearance>faint shimmering distortion visible only to those with supernatural sight</appearance> <monitoring>rift points (tears in the Veil) are monitored by the Wardens</monitoring> <description>The Veil is the metaphysical barrier separating Earth from Hel and the Fae Realms.</description> </lore> </codex> Continue the story using the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the fantasy genre. A small group enters an ancient, otherworldly place for the first time. The environment is alien and wondrous. Describe their exploration — what they see, hear, and feel as they move deeper. Include moments of discovery, unease, and wonder. Let the world-building emerge through the characters' experience rather than exposition. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters, setting, and lore. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
Rory’s boots crunched through frost-stiff grass at the edge of Richmond Park, each step sending a thin, brittle sound into the trees. The city sat behind her like a held breath—distant tyres, a siren that never arrived, a smear of orange streetlight under low cloud. Ahead, the park went black, the trunks packed tight as rib bones. Eva kept close, hands jammed into the pockets of her jacket, shoulders raised to her ears. “You sure this isn’t just some weird bit of landscaping?” Eva’s voice came out flat, like she’d decided not to give the dark anything it could grab. Rory slid her phone into her pocket without looking at it again. No signal. No bars. The screen had dimmed the moment they’d crossed the last lamp post. “Landscaping doesn’t do that,” Rory muttered, and lifted the Heartstone pendant from under her jumper. The gem sat against her palm like a living thing. Warm. Warmer than it had any right to be in this cold. A faint pulse beat into her skin—slow, steady, patient. The path narrowed into deer track. Brambles snagged at Eva’s sleeve. Rory moved ahead, shoulder brushing wet leaves that threw off cold beads onto her neck. The pendant’s chain tugged, as if it wanted to lead. A patch of darkness peeled itself away from the trunk of an oak and took shape beside Rory, long-limbed, taller than the hedges around them. Violet light glimmered where eyes might have been. Eva jolted back, breath catching. Rory didn’t flinch. Not this time. She kept her pace even. “You promised you wouldn’t do the dramatic materialise thing,” Rory murmured. Nyx’s silhouette shifted, edges blurring into smoke and pulling tight again, like a cloak in wind. “Your friend’s heart sounds like a trapped bird,” their voice scraped past Rory’s ear, a whisper that belonged to draughts under doors. Eva pressed her palm to her chest as if she could quiet it by force. “Can it… hear that?” Nyx’s head angled towards Eva. The violet glimmer held. “Everything hears in places where the Veil thins.” Rory’s stomach tightened. She kept the pendant in her fist and looked ahead, where the trees opened into a clearing that hadn’t been there a minute ago. Ancient oak standing stones rose from the ground in a loose ring. Not neat, not arranged for tourists, but hunched and crooked, each one wrapped with pale lichen that looked like old frost. The stones stood taller than Rory, their tops jagged like broken teeth. A few had shallow cuts along their faces—marks that might have been runes or the scars of tools that had stopped working halfway through. The air changed at the edge of the ring. It tasted like metal and crushed mint. Rory slowed and lifted her free hand. A shimmer ran across the space between two stones—thin as soap film, catching no light until you stared straight at it and then it caught everything. Eva leaned in, eyes narrowing. “That’s… not fog.” “It wasn’t fog,” Nyx breathed. Their outline softened, as if the shimmer pulled at them. Rory swallowed and stepped closer. The pendant throbbed against her palm, heat blooming through her fingers, a warning and an invitation at once. A figure stood on the far side of the ring as if she’d always been there. Silver hair fell straight down her back, bright even in the dark. Pale lavender eyes watched Rory without blinking. Her dress hung like mist caught on branches, the fabric shifting in colours that didn’t belong to winter. Isolde Varga raised a hand. Her fingers looked too delicate to hold anything sharper than a teacup, yet moonsilver flashed between them—a slender dagger shaped like a leaf, its surface catching the faintest light and sending it back with a cold gleam. Rory’s skin prickled. The blade’s presence cut through the night. “You brought your shadow and your spark,” Isolde’s voice drifted over the stones. Not loud, not soft—present, like the ring itself spoke. Eva stared. “You’re… her?” Isolde turned her head towards Eva with the calm of something that had watched centuries of people ask the same question. “I was called that. Names break less than bones.” Nyx’s shape leaned towards the shimmer. The edge of their form frayed where it touched, as if the boundary tasted them. Isolde held the dagger out, hilt first, offering it across the ring to Rory. “Cold iron hurts your kind, yes?” Rory’s eyes flicked to Nyx. Nyx’s violet gaze stayed on the blade. Their outline pulled back from it, like a shadow retracting from flame. Isolde’s lips curved. Not a smile. A notch of acknowledgement. “This one belonged to a court that kept its promises sharp. Moonsilver. It cut through wards. It remembered demons.” Rory reached for it. The hilt bit into her palm with cold that sank past skin and into bone. Her breath fogged. Eva let out a thin noise. “That’s not normal cold.” Rory flexed her fingers around the grip. The blade felt balanced, too light, as if it wanted to move on its own. “Is this a trade?” Rory asked, keeping her voice steady. Isolde’s gaze drifted down to Rory’s fist still closed around the Heartstone pendant. “It wasn’t purchased,” Isolde replied. “It was placed. Like bait.” The pendant’s pulse doubled, then eased, like it had heard its own name. Rory’s throat tightened. “Then why hand me something that can cut wards?” Isolde stepped closer to the shimmer, and Rory noticed the ground under her feet held no mark. Frost stayed smooth, undented. “Because you were already walking,” Isolde answered. “Better shoes did not make the road kinder.” Eva dragged in a breath. “I don’t like this,” she muttered. “I don’t like any of this. Rory, we can go.” Rory’s thumb traced the crescent scar on her left wrist out of habit, the old mark pale against her skin. Her other hand clenched around the pendant until the chain dug in. “We came for answers,” Rory replied, and lifted her chin at Isolde. “You said you’d show us.” Isolde’s eyes flicked to Nyx. “And you brought a door that walked.” Nyx’s silhouette stiffened. “I was trapped,” their whisper sharpened. “Not built.” Isolde tilted her head. “All doors begin as walls.” Rory stepped between them before the air could crack. “Show us,” Rory repeated. “Or don’t. But stop speaking like you’re winding a clock.” Isolde’s gaze held Rory for a beat, then she lifted her hand and placed her palm flat against the shimmer between the stones. The Veil bent around her fingers. It didn’t tear. It didn’t ripple like water. It drew back like skin yielding to a blade. A slit opened, tall enough to walk through, thin enough to make Rory’s teeth ache. Warm air rolled out, smelling of damp earth and flowers in full sun. Eva blinked hard. “It’s summer in there.” Rory stared at the opening. The pendant burned now, a small coal in her fist. “What happens to time?” Rory asked, and kept her feet planted outside. Isolde’s eyes softened in a way that felt like pity and not comfort. “An hour inside could be minutes outside,” Isolde replied. “Or days.” Eva swore under her breath. Nyx leaned towards the opening, the edges of their form smoothing as if the air inside welcomed them. “This place tastes old,” they murmured. “Older than your city’s bones.” Rory lifted the dagger slightly. The moonsilver caught the shimmer and threw back a faint glow, like moonlight trapped under ice. She looked at Eva. “Stay close. If we get turned around, grab my sleeve. Don’t let go.” Eva’s jaw tightened. “Don’t talk to me like I’m—” She cut herself off, took a step closer anyway. “Fine. Fine. I’m close. I’m practically inside your pocket.” Rory stepped through first. The Veil brushed her skin without touch. A pressure slid over her like a hand over wet paint, and for a heartbeat she felt every hair on her body stand up, each one its own antenna. Her stomach lurched like she’d missed a stair. Then her boots sank into soft ground. Not mud. Not grass. Moss thick as a mattress, springy underfoot, cool and damp through the soles. The air wrapped around her face with warmth that carried the scent of wildflowers and clean rain. Behind her, Eva stumbled through with a sharp gasp. “It’s—” Eva stopped and turned in a slow circle. “It’s bright.” Rory turned too. Light filtered down through branches that didn’t match the oaks outside. The trees rose tall and pale, bark smooth as bone, their leaves thin and translucent, catching the light and turning it green-blue. The canopy moved with no wind, a slow tide overhead. Between the trunks, flowers crowded the ground—bluebells beside roses, daisies beside blooms Rory couldn’t name, petals like curled glass and stamens that glowed faintly as if dusted with starlight. The sound hit her next. Not birdsong. Not quite. A chiming threaded through the grove, like distant bells underwater, the notes bending as if they passed through different rooms. Eva’s fingers tightened around Rory’s sleeve. “Those flowers… they’re moving.” Rory crouched and held the dagger away from her body, careful. A cluster of small violet blossoms leaned towards her breath. Not with wind. With attention. Their petals quivered, then settled, then leaned again, like something sniffed. Nyx drifted through the opening behind them, their outline deepening in the grove’s light, shadow becoming richer, more solid. Their violet gaze travelled over the trees. “Living light,” they whispered. “It had weight.” Isolde stepped through last and the slit in the Veil closed behind her, the shimmer snapping back into seamless air between stones. The clearing outside vanished, replaced by more grove—more pale trunks, more flowers, more wrong, beautiful abundance. Eva spun and slapped her palm against empty air. “No, no. Open it again.” Isolde watched Eva’s hand press and press, leaving no mark. “Doors did not obey panic,” Isolde replied. Eva’s throat bobbed. “Days,” she hissed. “You said days.” Rory stood and turned, bringing the pendant up. The Heartstone glowed faintly from within, deep crimson like a drop of blood held to the sun. Its warmth pulsed against her skin, but the beat had changed—less warning, more… eager. Rory moved deeper, tugging Eva with her. The moss gave without tearing. The flowers shifted aside from her boots, not crushed, not flattened, but making space as if they recognised a right of way. “Rory,” Eva’s voice came thin, “tell me you’re seeing that.” Rory followed Eva’s stare. Between two pale trees, something hung in the air: a thread of water, suspended without falling, each droplet stretched into a bead that caught the grove’s green light. The strand twisted slowly, forming a loose spiral. No source. No sound of splash. It hovered like a question mark. Nyx drifted close. Their shadow-hand reached out and stopped short of touching it. “That wasn’t water,” they murmured. “That was time that forgot to run.” Isolde’s bare feet moved over moss without bend or mark. “Time did not forget,” she replied. “Time feasted.” Rory’s grip tightened on the dagger. “What does that mean?” She stepped closer to the spiral, and the pendant throbbed hot enough to sting. “Is this place feeding on us?” Isolde’s lavender eyes flicked to Rory’s pendant, then to the trees. “Everything fed,” she replied. “Everything was fed upon.” Eva let out a harsh laugh that cracked at the end. “That’s not an answer. That’s a riddle wrapped in—” A sound cut through her words. Not a roar. Not a growl. A deep, slow exhale that rolled between the trees, like something huge breathing through a flute. The flowers around Rory tilted away from the sound. The chiming in the air went thin, notes stretching out, then snapping back. Nyx’s silhouette pulled taller, edges sharpening. “Something noticed,” they whispered. Rory lifted the moonsilver blade until it sat between her and the darkening line of trees ahead. The metal held its cold, a hard point in the warm grove. The pendant’s heat beat against her palm like a second heart. Eva swallowed, still clutching Rory’s sleeve. “Tell me that’s just… the grove. Tell me it breathes.” Rory kept her eyes forward. Pale trunks stood in neat spacing until, deeper in, they began to lean closer together, their smooth bark marked with thin black lines that looked like scratches made by careful claws. “It breathed,” Isolde murmured, gaze fixed ahead. “But not for air.” Rory took one step. Then another. The moss gave under her boots with a faint sigh. The suspended spiral of “water” behind them shivered, and a droplet slid sideways, moving like a bead on invisible wire. Nyx moved to Rory’s left, their shadow stretching across the moss, darker than any natural shade in this bright place. “Your pendant,” they whispered. “It called to something.” Rory glanced down. The Heartstone’s glow had strengthened, the crimson deepening as if it drank the grove’s light. The pulse ran quicker. Isolde’s silver hair swayed though the air stayed still. “Bait,” she murmured again, and looked at Rory like she watched a match hover over dry straw. Rory pushed Eva behind her with an elbow and spoke without turning. “Stay on me.” Eva’s grip tightened until Rory’s sleeve bunched. “Not letting go.” Rory stepped into the denser stand of trees, the air cooling by degrees with each pace. The chiming faded, replaced by a low hum that felt more than it sounded. The flowers thinned. In their place, small stones appeared under the moss, smooth and pale, arranged in a line that curved deeper into the grove. Rory followed the line, blade up, pendant burning in her fist, while the deep exhale came again—closer this time—and the pale trunks ahead pressed together like a crowd making room for something that wanted to pass.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags32
adverbTagCount1
adverbTags
0"she murmured again [again]"
dialogueSentences68
tagDensity0.471
leniency0.941
rawRatio0.031
effectiveRatio0.029
95.68% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount2317
totalAiIsmAdverbs2
found
0
adverb"slightly"
count1
1
adverb"slowly"
count1
highlights
0"slightly"
1"slowly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
59.00% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount2317
totalAiIsms19
found
0
word"pulse"
count3
1
word"whisper"
count2
2
word"stomach"
count2
3
word"throbbed"
count2
4
word"flicked"
count3
5
word"traced"
count1
6
word"lurched"
count1
7
word"warmth"
count2
8
word"quivered"
count1
9
word"weight"
count1
10
word"pulsed"
count1
highlights
0"pulse"
1"whisper"
2"stomach"
3"throbbed"
4"flicked"
5"traced"
6"lurched"
7"warmth"
8"quivered"
9"weight"
10"pulsed"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"hung in the air"
count1
highlights
0"hung in the air"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells1
narrationSentences205
matches
0"e with warmth"
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount1
narrationSentences205
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"began to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences241
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen38
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords2303
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions22
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
0.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions126
wordCount1962
uniqueNames9
maxNameDensity2.7
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity5.5
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
Richmond1
Park1
Rory53
Heartstone4
Eva28
Nyx13
Varga1
Isolde22
Veil3
persons
0"Rory"
1"Heartstone"
2"Eva"
3"Nyx"
4"Varga"
5"Isolde"
6"Veil"
places
0"Richmond"
1"Park"
globalScore0.149
windowScore0
50.79% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences126
glossingSentenceCount5
matches
0"looked like old frost"
1"tasted like metal and crushed mint"
2"felt like pity and not comfort"
3"looked like scratches made by careful cla"
4"appeared under the moss, smooth and pale, arranged in a line that curved deeper into the grove"
26.31% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches4
per1kWords1.737
wordCount2303
matches
0"Not neat, not arranged for tourists, but hunched"
1"not arranged for tourists, but hunched"
2"not crushed, not flattened, but making space as if they recognised a right of way"
3"not flattened, but making space as if they recognised a right of way"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences241
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs138
mean16.69
std13.86
cv0.831
sampleLengths
057
116
227
328
415
531
636
733
85
911
1011
1116
1222
1315
144
159
168
1727
1869
1916
2033
215
223
2315
2423
2553
2642
2710
2822
292
302
3121
329
3321
3414
3511
3619
3710
3819
3922
406
414
4222
4310
4413
4510
4613
473
489
4921
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences205
matches(empty)
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs363
matches(empty)
24.30% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount11
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences10
totalSentences241
ratio0.041
matches
0"The city sat behind her like a held breath—distant tyres, a siren that never arrived, a smear of orange streetlight under low cloud."
1"A faint pulse beat into her skin—slow, steady, patient."
2"A few had shallow cuts along their faces—marks that might have been runes or the scars of tools that had stopped working halfway through."
3"A shimmer ran across the space between two stones—thin as soap film, catching no light until you stared straight at it and then it caught everything."
4"Her fingers looked too delicate to hold anything sharper than a teacup, yet moonsilver flashed between them—a slender dagger shaped like a leaf, its surface catching the faintest light and sending it back with a cold gleam."
5"Not loud, not soft—present, like the ring itself spoke."
6"Between the trunks, flowers crowded the ground—bluebells beside roses, daisies beside blooms Rory couldn’t name, petals like curled glass and stamens that glowed faintly as if dusted with starlight."
7"The clearing outside vanished, replaced by more grove—more pale trunks, more flowers, more wrong, beautiful abundance."
8"Its warmth pulsed against her skin, but the beat had changed—less warning, more…"
9"Rory followed the line, blade up, pendant burning in her fist, while the deep exhale came again—closer this time—and the pale trunks ahead pressed together like a crowd making room for something that wanted to pass."
94.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1976
adjectiveStacks1
stackExamples
0"ahead pressed together like"
adverbCount65
adverbRatio0.03289473684210526
lyAdverbCount4
lyAdverbRatio0.0020242914979757085
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences241
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences241
mean9.56
std6.88
cv0.72
sampleLengths
022
123
212
316
427
512
62
72
812
915
1010
111
1211
139
146
155
1615
1710
1825
198
205
213
223
235
2411
2516
2622
2715
284
295
304
318
323
3324
3412
3521
3612
3724
389
397
407
4126
425
433
445
4510
465
4718
4816
4912
41.29% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats21
diversityRatio0.2572614107883817
totalSentences241
uniqueOpeners62
18.83% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount1
totalSentences177
matches
0"Then her boots sank into"
ratio0.006
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount24
totalSentences177
matches
0"She kept her pace even."
1"their voice scraped past Rory’s"
2"She kept the pendant in"
3"It tasted like metal and"
4"Their outline softened, as if"
5"Her dress hung like mist"
6"Her fingers looked too delicate"
7"Their outline pulled back from"
8"Her breath fogged."
9"Her other hand clenched around"
10"their whisper sharpened"
11"It didn’t tear."
12"It didn’t ripple like water."
13"It drew back like skin"
14"She looked at Eva."
15"She cut herself off, took"
16"Her stomach lurched like she’d"
17"Their petals quivered, then settled,"
18"Their violet gaze travelled over"
19"Its warmth pulsed against her"
ratio0.136
19.32% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount156
totalSentences177
matches
0"Rory’s boots crunched through frost-stiff"
1"The city sat behind her"
2"Eva kept close, hands jammed"
3"Eva’s voice came out flat,"
4"Rory slid her phone into"
5"The screen had dimmed the"
6"Rory muttered, and lifted the"
7"The gem sat against her"
8"A faint pulse beat into"
9"The path narrowed into deer"
10"Brambles snagged at Eva’s sleeve."
11"Rory moved ahead, shoulder brushing"
12"The pendant’s chain tugged, as"
13"A patch of darkness peeled"
14"Violet light glimmered where eyes"
15"Eva jolted back, breath catching."
16"Rory didn’t flinch."
17"She kept her pace even."
18"Nyx’s silhouette shifted, edges blurring"
19"their voice scraped past Rory’s"
ratio0.881
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences177
matches(empty)
ratio0
20.91% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences82
technicalSentenceCount14
matches
0"Rory moved ahead, shoulder brushing wet leaves that threw off cold beads onto her neck."
1"Eva pressed her palm to her chest as if she could quiet it by force."
2"Her fingers looked too delicate to hold anything sharper than a teacup, yet moonsilver flashed between them—a slender dagger shaped like a leaf, its surface cat…"
3"Isolde turned her head towards Eva with the calm of something that had watched centuries of people ask the same question."
4"Between the trunks, flowers crowded the ground—bluebells beside roses, daisies beside blooms Rory couldn’t name, petals like curled glass and stamens that glowe…"
5"A chiming threaded through the grove, like distant bells underwater, the notes bending as if they passed through different rooms."
6"Nyx drifted through the opening behind them, their outline deepening in the grove’s light, shadow becoming richer, more solid."
7"The flowers shifted aside from her boots, not crushed, not flattened, but making space as if they recognised a right of way."
8"Between two pale trees, something hung in the air: a thread of water, suspended without falling, each droplet stretched into a bead that caught the grove’s gree…"
9"A deep, slow exhale that rolled between the trees, like something huge breathing through a flute."
10"Pale trunks stood in neat spacing until, deeper in, they began to lean closer together, their smooth bark marked with thin black lines that looked like scratche…"
11"The Heartstone’s glow had strengthened, the crimson deepening as if it drank the grove’s light."
12"In their place, small stones appeared under the moss, smooth and pale, arranged in a line that curved deeper into the grove."
13"Rory followed the line, blade up, pendant burning in her fist, while the deep exhale came again—closer this time—and the pale trunks ahead pressed together like…"
78.13% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags32
uselessAdditionCount3
matches
0"She stepped, and the pendant throbbed hot enough to sting"
1"Isolde murmured, gaze fixed ahead"
2"behind them shivered, and a droplet slid sideways, moving like a bead on invisible wire"
0.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags22
fancyCount13
fancyTags
0"Rory muttered (mutter)"
1"Rory murmured (murmur)"
2"Nyx breathed (breathe)"
3"she muttered (mutter)"
4"Rory repeated (repeat)"
5"they murmured (murmur)"
6"they whispered (whisper)"
7"she hissed (hiss)"
8"they murmured (murmur)"
9"they whispered (whisper)"
10"Isolde murmured (murmur)"
11"they whispered (whisper)"
12"she murmured again (murmur)"
dialogueSentences68
tagDensity0.324
leniency0.647
rawRatio0.591
effectiveRatio0.382
70.9522%