Run: 2026-02-19-01KHTXAJEVZDH7106N60T7HVWV

Run Details

Duration:
6m 39s
Cost:
$0.040265
Provider:
Venice

Model input

System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Literary Fiction genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4413" name="Silas Blackwood" aliases="Silas, Si, the Spymaster" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Mentor"> <eyeColor>hazel</eyeColor> <hair>grey-streaked auburn</hair> <height>6'1"</height> <age>58</age> <beard>neatly trimmed, matching his grey-streaked auburn hair</beard> <limp>slight limp in his left leg from an old knee injury</limp> <signetRing>silver signet ring, always worn on his right hand</signetRing> <description>Silas is a retired intelligence operative turned bar owner. He carries himself with quiet authority.</description> <backstory>Former MI6 field agent who retired after a botched operation in Prague left him with a permanent knee injury. He opened "The Raven's Nest" bar in Soho as a front for his network of contacts.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the literary fiction genre. Two old friends who haven't seen each other in years run into each other unexpectedly at a bar. One of them has changed significantly. Through their conversation and the tension between who they were and who they've become, reveal the weight of time and unspoken regret. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
Rory recognised the limp before the face. The left leg dragged slightly, scraping against the floorboards behind the bar, a sound she'd heard last in her father's study seven years ago when arguments about service and silence had finally stopped. The man behind the oak counter turned. The hazel eyes hadn't aged, though the skin around them had tightened into fine lines. Grey-streaked auburn hair, clipped short now, framed a jaw darkened by a neat beard. The silver signet ring on his right hand caught the green neon glow from above the door—The Raven's Nest—and threw phosphorescent shards across the old maps lining the walls. "Carter." He didn't ask which one. He never had. "Silas." The glass in his hand met the counter with a clink that echoed off black-and-white photographs of forgotten cities. "When did you start delivering takeaway?" "When did you start serving it?" She shifted the bags from Golden Empress to her other hand. The crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist blanched white as her grip tightened. She saw his gaze track to it, then back to her face. The air in the bar tasted of dust and single malt, stale and familiar. "You've lost weight," he said. "You've lost mobility." "Rory now. Just Rory." "Aurora suited you better. It had... reach." A muscle jumped in his jaw. The limp was worse than she remembered from the funeral, from the rumours her father had muttered into his whisky about Prague and botched extractions. She'd been nineteen then, full of tort law and certainty, believing the world operated on precedents and rules. Now she stood in a Soho dive at twenty-five, smelling of sesame oil and sweat, and the man who used to sneak her encrypted puzzles at the kitchen table looked like a different species of dangerous. "The flat upstairs," Silas said. It wasn't a question. "You own the building." "I own the bar. The flat comes with certain conditions." He moved then, the scrape of his left foot louder as he limped around the counter. He smelled of sandalwood and gun oil, the same scent from her sixteenth birthday when he'd taught her to pick locks while her father worked late, when the housekeeper had pretended not to notice the MI6 operative eating Weetabix at her breakfast table. "You're hiding," he said. "I'm surviving." "The Rory I knew wanted chambers in Temple. Not grease stains." "The Silas I knew protected Queen and Country. Not battered women in basements." He stopped. The space between them contracted. "From the barrister? Or the boyfriend?" The takeaway bags crackled. She hadn't told him. She hadn't told anyone in London except Eva, and Eva had vanished into Camberwell's chaos three days after Rory's arrival, leaving only the key above the green neon sign. "Evan rang yesterday," Silas said. "Described his missing fiancée perfectly. The straight black hair. The bright blue eyes. The childhood scar from a broken wine glass in Cardiff." Rory's fingers spasmed. The scar throbbed. "It wasn't wine." "I know. I checked the hospital records before you moved in. It was a cider bottle. Domestic presentations are always so theatrical." He turned away, limping toward the back wall where a bookshelf sagged under leather volumes. Her heart hammered. Seven years since her mother's funeral, since Silas had squeezed her shoulder and promised her father he'd watch the bloodline. She'd thought him retired. A crippled old spook with a drinking problem. Not this. "You shouldn't have taken me in," she said. "I didn't take you in. I placed you." His fingers found a Baedeker guide to the Czech Republic. The shelf swung inward. The smell hit her first—copper, sharp and recent. The hidden room contained a table, two chairs, and Evan, tied to the furthest seat. His Savile Row suit hung in tatters. One eye had swollen shut, the colour of ripe aubergine. Her breath stopped. The scar seemed to pulse in time with her heartbeat. "He's been here since Tuesday," Silas said. "Following your delivery routes through Camden. Amateur work, but persistent. I invited him in for a whisky." "Rory," Evan slurred through split lips. "Tell him. Tell him I'm sorry. Tell him we love each other." Silas reached under the counter. He produced a mobile phone, screen cracked, displaying footage. Rory watched herself, three months prior, screaming as Evan hurled her Pre-Law textbooks into the grate. She watched the pages curl and die, watched her future turn to ash while the man she had promised to marry laughed about her father's expectations. "Your father asked me to look after you," Silas said. "He knew you wouldn't run to him. Too proud. So he sent you here through Eva. He knew I'd see the signs." "What signs?" "The way you checked the exits when you walked in. The keys between your knuckles. The flinch when I reached for a glass." He limped into the back room, the scrape of his foot rhythmic as a metronome. "But mostly, I knew because Brendan Carter's daughter doesn't miss Sunday lunch unless she's buried under something heavy." Evan strained against the ropes. "We're engaged. We have a future." "The wedding's off," Silas said. He looked at Rory. "Unless you want to finish it?" He extended his hand. Not toward Evan. Toward the table. A corkscrew lay there, heavy, vintage, the crescent blade curved like the scar on her wrist. "Choose," Silas said. The neon sign hummed outside, a constant insect whine. Evan's breathing came hard through his nose. The blade reflected the green light, curved like the moon, curved like a question mark. Seven years of silence between them. Seven years of her believing she'd escaped alone, clever and brave, when really she'd been herded here by networks and favours owed, deposited above a bar run by a ghost who should have stayed in her past with her textbooks and her illusions. Rory stepped forward. Her fingers closed around the metal. It felt warm.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags11
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences35
tagDensity0.314
leniency0.629
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
84.98% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount999
totalAiIsmAdverbs3
found
0
adverb"slightly"
count1
1
adverb"perfectly"
count1
2
adverb"really"
count1
highlights
0"slightly"
1"perfectly"
2"really"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (16 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
0"Blackwood"
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
59.96% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount999
totalAiIsms8
found
0
word"silence"
count2
1
word"echoed"
count1
2
word"familiar"
count1
3
word"weight"
count1
4
word"throbbed"
count1
5
word"pulse"
count1
6
word"rhythmic"
count1
highlights
0"silence"
1"echoed"
2"familiar"
3"weight"
4"throbbed"
5"pulse"
6"rhythmic"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences70
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount1
narrationSentences70
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences94
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen43
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords991
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions17
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
66.67% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions40
wordCount720
uniqueNames20
maxNameDensity1.11
worstName"Silas"
maxWindowNameDensity3
worstWindowName"Evan"
discoveredNames
Raven1
Nest1
Golden1
Empress1
Prague1
Soho1
Weetabix1
London1
Eva2
Camberwell1
Rory6
Silas8
Baedeker1
Czech1
Republic1
Evan6
Savile1
Row1
Pre-Law1
Seven3
persons
0"Raven"
1"Eva"
2"Rory"
3"Silas"
4"Baedeker"
5"Evan"
places
0"Golden"
1"Prague"
2"Soho"
3"London"
4"Camberwell"
5"Czech"
6"Republic"
globalScore0.944
windowScore0.667
84.21% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences38
glossingSentenceCount1
matches
0"looked like a different species of danger"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount991
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences94
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs42
mean23.6
std23.25
cv0.986
sampleLengths
047
158
21
38
41
525
66
750
85
93
104
117
1285
139
144
1510
1659
174
182
1911
2013
2113
2237
2328
249
2522
2652
278
288
2967
3024
3118
3256
3332
342
3556
3611
3715
3826
393
4080
4112
95.24% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount2
totalSentences70
matches
0"been nineteen"
1"been herded"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs120
matches(empty)
82.07% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount3
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences2
totalSentences94
ratio0.021
matches
0"The silver signet ring on his right hand caught the green neon glow from above the door—The Raven's Nest—and threw phosphorescent shards across the old maps lining the walls."
1"The smell hit her first—copper, sharp and recent."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount729
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount15
adverbRatio0.0205761316872428
lyAdverbCount4
lyAdverbRatio0.0054869684499314125
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences94
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences94
mean10.54
std9.34
cv0.886
sampleLengths
07
133
27
315
414
529
61
75
83
91
1019
116
126
1311
1413
1512
1614
175
183
194
207
216
2225
2318
2436
255
264
274
2810
2916
3043
314
322
3311
3413
352
365
376
384
394
4029
415
4223
433
443
453
4622
4715
483
4920
43.26% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats11
diversityRatio0.32978723404255317
totalSentences94
uniqueOpeners31
0.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount0
totalSentences59
matches(empty)
ratio0
64.07% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount23
totalSentences59
matches
0"He didn't ask which one."
1"He never had."
2"She shifted the bags from"
3"She saw his gaze track"
4"She'd been nineteen then, full"
5"It wasn't a question."
6"He moved then, the scrape"
7"He smelled of sandalwood and"
8"She hadn't told him."
9"She hadn't told anyone in"
10"He turned away, limping toward"
11"Her heart hammered."
12"She'd thought him retired."
13"His fingers found a Baedeker"
14"His Savile Row suit hung"
15"Her breath stopped."
16"He produced a mobile phone,"
17"She watched the pages curl"
18"He limped into the back"
19"He looked at Rory."
ratio0.39
27.80% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount51
totalSentences59
matches
0"Rory recognised the limp before"
1"The left leg dragged slightly,"
2"The man behind the oak"
3"The hazel eyes hadn't aged,"
4"The silver signet ring on"
5"He didn't ask which one."
6"He never had."
7"The glass in his hand"
8"She shifted the bags from"
9"The crescent-shaped scar on her"
10"She saw his gaze track"
11"The air in the bar"
12"A muscle jumped in his"
13"The limp was worse than"
14"She'd been nineteen then, full"
15"It wasn't a question."
16"He moved then, the scrape"
17"He smelled of sandalwood and"
18"The space between them contracted."
19"The takeaway bags crackled."
ratio0.864
84.75% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences59
matches
0"Now she stood in a"
ratio0.017
60.44% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences26
technicalSentenceCount3
matches
0"The glass in his hand met the counter with a clink that echoed off black-and-white photographs of forgotten cities."
1"Now she stood in a Soho dive at twenty-five, smelling of sesame oil and sweat, and the man who used to sneak her encrypted puzzles at the kitchen table looked l…"
2"Seven years of her believing she'd escaped alone, clever and brave, when really she'd been herded here by networks and favours owed, deposited above a bar run b…"
79.55% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags11
uselessAdditionCount1
matches
0"He limped, the scrape of his foot rhythmic as a metronome"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags10
fancyCount1
fancyTags
0"Evan slurred (slur)"
dialogueSentences35
tagDensity0.286
leniency0.571
rawRatio0.1
effectiveRatio0.057
84.4328%