Run: 2026-02-19-01KHTXCR015CV714CJCJRGPTPX

Run Details

Duration:
1m 44s
Cost:
$0.004984
Provider:
OpenAI

Model input

System
You are an expert fiction writer. Always keep the following rules in mind: - Write in past tense and use General English spelling, grammar, and colloquialisms/slang. - Write in active voice - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. - Avoid adverbs and cliches and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Convey events and story through dialogue. - Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. - Skip "he/she said said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech - Avoid mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or add unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Reduce indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" When writing text: - NEVER conclude the scene on your own, follow the beat instructions very closely. - NEVER end with foreshadowing. - NEVER write further than what I prompt you with. - AVOID imagining possible endings, NEVER deviate from the instructions. - STOP EARLY if the continuation contains what was required in the instructions. You do not need to fill out the full amount of words possible.
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4413" name="Silas Blackwood" aliases="Silas, Si, the Spymaster" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Mentor"> <eyeColor>hazel</eyeColor> <hair>grey-streaked auburn</hair> <height>6'1"</height> <age>58</age> <beard>neatly trimmed, matching his grey-streaked auburn hair</beard> <limp>slight limp in his left leg from an old knee injury</limp> <signetRing>silver signet ring, always worn on his right hand</signetRing> <description>Silas is a retired intelligence operative turned bar owner. He carries himself with quiet authority.</description> <backstory>Former MI6 field agent who retired after a botched operation in Prague left him with a permanent knee injury. He opened "The Raven's Nest" bar in Soho as a front for his network of contacts.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> </codex> Continue the story using the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the literary fiction genre. Two old friends who haven't seen each other in years run into each other unexpectedly at a bar. One of them has changed significantly. Through their conversation and the tension between who they were and who they've become, reveal the weight of time and unspoken regret. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The Raven’s Nest wore its age like a badge. A distinctive green neon sign hummed above the door, slicing through the drizzle and pooling on the pavement in a slick emerald smear. Inside, maps crowded the walls, black-and-white photos pinned like weathered echoes. The scent rode the air first—a mix of old whiskey, citrus oil, and a heat that wouldn’t quit, never quite surrendering to the night. A bookshelf set into the back wall looked ordinary enough, but the way the shelf shifted ever so slightly when you brushed past it hinted at something else, something you kept quiet about. Rory stepped across the threshold and paused where the light fell thinly on the floorboards. The Nest smelled of rain and secrets. She moved with the practiced economy of someone who had learned to vanish in plain sight, a courier’s gait that appeared casual but kept danger a fingertip away. Her eyes, bright blue, scanned the room in a single sweep, weighing who was there, what was left unsaid on every table, every glass. Her hair lay flat against her head, a black line against candlelight, and the small crescent scar on her left wrist glinted as she checked the clock on the wall and then the door. The room narrowed to a single focal point: a man seated with the ritual patience of a chess player who had forgotten more games than most people had played. Silas Blackwood. The name was a rumor in the right circles, spoken with a kind of reverence and fear, the sound of it like a door being closed softly. He wore a lean, deliberate calm, the limp in his left leg barely noticeable unless you looked for it, the silver signet ring on his right hand catching the neon glow when he turned his palm to study the scrim of steam above his drink. The two hadn’t spoken in years. The world had turned dozens of times since then. Back then, Silas had been a mentor and a warning, a man who could knead truth out of a roomful of lies while the room never knew what hit it. Back then, Rory had sashayed through the shadows with a blend of nerves and nerve, a kid playing at adulthood with a map of Dublin alleys in her pockets and a stubborn flame in her eyes. Now she carried the weight of a life that wouldn’t fit into the margins of a patrol route or a delivery receipt. Now she carried a quiet that came from knowing too much and saying too little. The door sighed again and closed with a soft click. The room’s murmur silenced itself, respectfully, as if it knew what was coming and preferred not to witness it. Rory’s steps slowed as she came to the table where Silas waited, still and precise as a clockwork man. “Rory, is that you?” Silas asked, though the words carried no surprise so much as recognition, a careful catching of a name that might have meant everything and nothing all at once. Rory’s breath brushed past her lips, a tremor that vanished as she pressed it flat. She didn’t pretend to be anyone she wasn’t anymore. “That depends on who asked.” The line of Silas’s mouth barely altered, a man who had learned to measure the truth in the tremor of a lamp’s wick. He did not rise. He did not blink. He studied her as if she were a person who could still be understood if you looked long enough. “Four legged stools, old maps, a shelf that hides a room,” he said, as if naming the room would remind him of a time when those things had mattered more than the price of a drink. “You’ve come back to the Nest.” The creak of the stool behind Rory’s chair whispered as she settled into it. She kept her hands on the table, where the crescent scar on her wrist drew a pale silver line in the lamplight. “People move,” she said, keeping her voice even, careful not to betray the ache beneath it. “Sometimes they end up on a different rung of the ladder than they meant to be.” She let the words rest, and allowed a thin smile to brush across her face, more a defense mechanism than a sign of warmth. “You didn’t come for a drink,” Silas observed, the lines of his face softening only enough to suggest memory rather than judgment. “You came to talk.” “Always straight to the point,” Rory said, nudging the glass toward the middle of the table with the flat of her palm. She watched the glass roll, a small, almost ceremonial move, as if she needed to prove to herself that she could still direct the world with her hands. Silas leaned back and let his chair creak once, a sound that had no business being so intimate. “You’ve learned to anchor yourself somewhere other than inside the stories you tell yourself,” he replied without bitterness, which was as close as he ever got to praise. “That’s not nothing.” Rory’s gaze traveled the room, the way it did when she was mapping a route through a crowded street. The Secret Room’s bookshelf waited behind glass and shadow, a reminder of the things that moved when the room forgot to breathe. She found it in Silas’s eyes before she found it in the room: the knowledge that a man like him never stopped listening, never stopped weighing the value of what he heard against what he chose not to say. “I haven’t asked you for a favor in a long time,” she said, finally meeting his gaze with a steadiness that felt deliberate, the kind that could pass for fear if you didn’t know what tremor lay beneath. “But you know I could tell you something that would get you killed, and you would still listen for the truth in the smoke and the glass.” The corner of Silas’s mouth quirked, a small, almost shy gesture for a man who wore his secrets like armor. “We both know the Nest isn’t a place for favors, only for revelations dressed in whiskey and smoke.” Rory’s fingers tapped a quick rhythm on the table, a signal she kept for herself to remind her that she hadn’t lost the nerve that had kept her alive in hallways where the light did not reach. She looked at the maps lining the walls, the routes drawn and re-drawn in ink that had started to crack at the edges. Her mind wandered to the childhood rush she had escaped: Eva’s whispered promises, a future that never arrived, a boy named Evan who had given her more bruises than stories she could tell without trembling. The past pressed at her temples, soft and insistent, and she pushed it back with the long breath she had learned to take in the quiet of night. “What changed,” she finally asked, and the question came out not as a demand but as a reckoning she owed herself, “that you’re here, in the back room of a bar that pretends to be just a bar?” A dry sound escaped Silas—the smallest of laughs, a thing that could be mistaken for a cough if you didn’t know better. “Sometimes the weight of years lands on a person and teaches them where to stand. I stood at the edge and learned where not to fall. You stood at the edge and learned how not to be seen.” Rory’s mouth tightened at the corners. She did not pretend the weight wasn’t there. She had learned to wear it without flinching. She looked toward the hidden door behind the bookshelf—the secret room that not many people knew was real, and fewer still trusted not to be a trap. The door stayed still, quiet as a kept promise. She drew a slow breath and let it out, the act ritual, almost ceremonial now. “If you’ve been listening for years,” she said, choosing her words with care, “you’ve heard things you can’t unhear, seen things you can’t forget. The kind of things that keep you awake with the taste of copper in your mouth and the sense that you’ve learned to count every life you’ve touched.” Silas watched her, eyes old and patient under the shadow of his lashes. He did not interrupt, which might have been a sign of respect or a refusal to reveal anything he didn’t want to reveal. The clock on the wall ticked, constant as a metronome, his breath slow and measured, the limp in his leg a quiet reminder that fate still found him, even in a room that pretended to be safe. “Eva,” Rory said, almost under her breath, as if saying the name aloud made the air heavier with what was not spoken. “The last time we talked, you were the one who dragged me out of a place I didn’t belong to and told me to keep moving. That girl isn’t here anymore.” “People don’t vanish that cleanly,” Silas murmured, as if the truth were a map he could unfold with a single word. “You changed. London did what it does to anyone who survives a thing that wanted to end them.” His gaze dipped to the signet ring on his finger, then lifted again to lock with hers. “Even if your hands still shake when you hold a bottle of this whiskey.” Rory’s eyes warmed for a heartbeat, a flicker of something almost tender crossing the cool surface she wore like a mask. “Sometimes I shake while I’m holding nothing at all,” she admitted after a moment, the admission not a confession so much as a necessary amputation—severing a piece of herself that had stopped fitting where it used to. A silence fell, heavy and clean. The Nest’s hum rose again, a secondary heartbeat in the room. The shelves breathed as if they could speak if you listened hard enough, a chorus of voices from the past that insisted on being heard in the present tense. “Your friends”—the phrase came out almost casual, as if he’d never lost the nerve to speak of them—“they’re still breathing.” Rory shook her head, slow and decisive. “Not everyone survives a flood.” The words hung between them for longer than either of them cared to admit. Then Rory’s gaze drifted to the bookshelf again, to the space behind it where a door waited like a mouth that might swallow what you didn’t want to think about. She did not move toward it. She did not pretend she wasn’t tempted. “Sometimes it’s necessary to go somewhere you’re not supposed to be,” Silas said softly, a line drawn in coffee steam and quiet. “Sometimes you know a place’s doors better than its people.” She half-smiled at that, a realized calculus rather than a charm. “I came for something you wouldn’t know how to give unless you’d seen the inside of the door you pretend to forget exists.” “You came for a name,” Silas replied, not accusing, simply stating, the way a man states a fact that he has not yet decided what to do with. Rory did not look away. She watched the way a memory pressed at the edge of his glass, a thing’s shape taking a moment to settle into the room’s gravity. “A few years ago, there was a file,” she said, choosing the truth not by its complexity but by its concealment. “A file you looked through and then forgot to keep, a file that could unmake a lot of people if it ever revealed itself again.” She paused, tasting the risk on her tongue. “I want the door behind the shelf to stay shut, or I want it to open wide enough for something that matters to come through.” Silas’s voice lowered, become almost a whisper that didn’t belong to a bar or to a man who owned it. “Some doors only open for people who have earned the right to go through them. Some doors stay shut to protect the ones who should not see what follows.” Her breath slowed, and she set her glass down with a little more care than the moment warranted. “I’ve earned something,” she said, not boastfully but with a gravity that insisted it was true. “Have you?” He tilted his head, measuring. “What is it you’ve earned?” Rory’s eyes softened. The blue was bright again for a moment, a flare of something she’d almost forgotten—the audacity of a younger self who believed in shortcuts and bright, clever solutions. Then it vanished behind the long line of her jaw as she spoke. “A little more patience. A little less fear. And the knowledge that some battles aren’t meant to be won in the dark, but in the open where you can breathe and see who’s beside you.” She paused, and the memory gathered around her like a cloak—the memory of Eva whispering in a cramped kitchen or along a fog-wet street in Cardiff, the memory of a hiding place that had never really hidden anything. The Nest’s door sighed again somewhere farther in the building, the noise of a distant conversation seeping through the walls, as if the bar itself held its breath to listen. Silas shifted, the movement almost imperceptible, and then he reached into a pocket and drew out a small, flat object, the kind of thing you kept if you wanted to remind yourself you still carried a piece of the old world. He slid it across the table toward her: a thin metal badge, its surface tarnished, a siren’s echo in its lines. Rory picked it up, stared at it. The badge looked fragile in her palm, its edges worn down like something that had rubbed against another world for too long. “This was yours,” she said, her voice quiet, almost reverent. “You kept this for the nights you didn’t sleep, the nights you watched a hallway for the light to come on and it never did.” “It’s a reminder,” Silas said, not denying his own memories, not defending them either. “Not a trophy.” The moment stretched, thin as a thread. Outside, a rain-slick street carried the sound of distant tires, a dog barked somewhere beyond the black glass, and the room felt suspended between time and a choice that hadn’t been made yet. Rory set the badge down again, careful to avoid clinking glass or any sound that would betray nerves she kept in check. “If I asked you for a safe room, a clean exit, something you’d give to someone you trusted more than yourself, would you give it to me?” Silas looked at her then, really looked, and there was something in the gaze that reminded her of every night he had watched over her as if her life were the last piece in a puzzle he couldn’t quite finish. He did not answer with promises. He answered with a question of his own, the oldest game they played: “Do you still carry the name that could get you killed if it slipped from your lips in the wrong place?” Her breath hitched, the scar at her wrist catching the light again. “I carry it when I have to. I lay it down when I don’t.” “Good,” Silas said, and the word carried more weight than a sentence should. He wasn’t praising, not exactly, but he was granting permission to keep walking forward, one foot in front of the other, through doors that would rather stay shut. The room grew quiet again, the kind of quiet that belongs to people who have learned to speak in the spaces between words, in the pause after a glance, in the hinge-groan of a chair as someone shifts their weight and chooses not to break. Rory found herself listening for the sound of Eva’s whisper in the bar’s murmur, a memory that had learned to survive on its own without a voice. “Say it,” Silas murmured, as if the invitation would coax truth out of the room itself. “What do you want from a door that doesn’t belong to you?” Rory’s hand hovered over the tabletop, not quite reaching for the glass again. Her fingers found the crescent scar, the small crescent that had shaded her childhood in Cardiff, and she pressed it lightly, as if testing whether the scar could still ground her in a moment like this. She spoke without rushing, letting the words travel along the room’s lines, letting the space between them fill with something that wasn’t quite a confession and not quite a vow either. “I want to walk through one door I chose, not the doors that choose me,” she said, and in that moment the line between past and present blurred enough to notice. “I want to be certain I’m not running away from something I should face.” Silas’s eyes softened again, a hint of a smile crossing his lips that didn’t belong to the man who was supposed to be hard as steel but instead felt like a metal that had learned to bend without breaking. He stood, a slow, deliberate motion, and gracefully limped toward the shelf, the silver ring catching a last flash of neon before dipping into shadow. “Then walk toward the back,” he said, not a command so much as a chance offered. “If you’re ready to tell me what you’re running toward, you’ll know where to go.” She watched him move, the way a teacher might watch a student test a fronter line of truth, a line that could either hold or snap. The shelf behind him shifted again, and for a breath Rory could swear she heard the old hiss of a door being nudged open, the whisper of a hinge that lay between a world that wanted to hide and a world that would not. The memory was almost too heavy to hold. She could feel it like a weight on her chest, a steady press that insisted on being acknowledged. She stood slowly, careful not to hurry the moment, and stepped closer to the shelf as if the proximity to a missing piece of her past could render the present legible. “I’ll see you later,” she said, her voice taking on a steadiness that surprised her. Silas didn’t answer with words. He simply nodded, an old, subtle acknowledgment that he understood how a girl who had learned to survive could become a woman who chose not to disappear. He stepped back, offering space more than sanction, and watched her slide a palm along the bookshelf’s carved edge as if it were a map, as if every notch and grain told a direction she’d once trusted and could trust again or refuse to. Rory reached the edge of the shelf and paused. The room’s warm assembly of air and memory pressed against her skin, the way a crowd might press in a stadium the night a rainstorm starts outside. The door, a mouth behind the shelf, waited. She did not push. She did not recoil. She simply stood there, listening to the quiet that had grown so loud it almost sounded like a truth. Behind her, Silas’s chair creaked again, a tiny sound that felt like permission to choose, or perhaps a reminder that choices themselves were rarely loud. Rory finally spoke to the room, not to Silas, not to herself, but to the space that had always held more than it let on: “I’m done running in circles.” The words came out clear, almost crisp, as if they slid along a surface and found a crack where light could pass through. Silas’s response came not as a shout or a promise, but as a measured breath, as if he had learned to arrest every impulse and let it float away on air. “Then walk the line you’ve drawn and be prepared for what follows.” The silence settled again, thick and intimate. Rory turned away from the shelf, the ghost of the back room hovering just beyond the door, the past with its fingers pressed to the glass. She didn’t speak for a long moment, letting the room fill with the unspoken—the weight of time, the ache of unspoken regrets, the knowledge that some doors could not stay closed forever. When she finally met Silas’s gaze again, it carried no accusation, just a hard, honest resolve. “Keep your back room shut,” she said, the line both a warning and an invitation. “If you must open it, open it for someone who understands what they’re letting loose.” Silas set his jaw, the muscles in his face tightening with an old precision. He did not promise. He did not sigh. He simply nodded, acknowledging the truth in her words the way he often did—without fanfare, with the quiet currency of someone who knew how to read people even when they tried to hide. Rory stepped away from the shelf and took a slow, careful walk toward the room, not back toward it but toward the future she’d chosen, toward the path that was hers to walk if she could bear the weight of the truth she carried. The nest’s room remained as it always did: a shelter and a cage, a doorway and a wall, a place where time paused for the brave and the broken alike. She paused again at the threshold, feeling the pull of the back room’s hush, the gravity of what lay beyond the door, the memory of a life she had almost not survived. Then she looked over her shoulder once more, toward Silas, toward the green glow of the sign and the maps that held the night together, and said without turning fully to face him: “Not tonight.” The word wasn’t a vow or a threat, just a decision. A line drawn. The door waited. And the Nest hummed, patient, waiting, a place where two old friends stood on the edge of what had been and what might still be, listening to the quiet that had become their only truth.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags30
adverbTagCount3
adverbTags
0"she finally asked [finally]"
1"Silas said softly [softly]"
2"Rory finally spoke to the room [finally]"
dialogueSentences57
tagDensity0.526
leniency1
rawRatio0.1
effectiveRatio0.1
90.52% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount3692
totalAiIsmAdverbs7
found
0
adverb"ever so slightly"
count1
1
adverb"softly"
count2
2
adverb"really"
count2
3
adverb"lightly"
count1
4
adverb"slowly"
count1
highlights
0"ever so slightly"
1"softly"
2"really"
3"lightly"
4"slowly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (16 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
0"Blackwood"
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
60.73% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount3692
totalAiIsms29
found
0
word"echoes"
count1
1
word"scanned"
count1
2
word"carried the weight"
count1
3
word"warmth"
count1
4
word"reminder"
count4
5
word"weight"
count7
6
word"measured"
count2
7
word"flicker"
count1
8
word"silence"
count2
9
word"charm"
count1
10
word"whisper"
count3
11
word"echo"
count1
12
word"could feel"
count1
13
word"unspoken"
count2
14
word"resolve"
count1
highlights
0"echoes"
1"scanned"
2"carried the weight"
3"warmth"
4"reminder"
5"weight"
6"measured"
7"flicker"
8"silence"
9"charm"
10"whisper"
11"echo"
12"could feel"
13"unspoken"
14"resolve"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"weight of words/silence"
count1
highlights
0"the weight of the truth"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences150
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount4
narrationSentences150
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"tend to"
1"started to"
2"tended to"
3"tried to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences176
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen75
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords3678
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions47
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
83.33% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions68
wordCount2957
uniqueNames11
maxNameDensity0.95
worstName"Silas"
maxWindowNameDensity2.5
worstWindowName"Silas"
discoveredNames
Raven1
Nest5
Blackwood1
Silas28
Rory24
Dublin1
Secret1
Room1
Eva3
Evan1
Cardiff2
persons
0"Raven"
1"Nest"
2"Blackwood"
3"Silas"
4"Rory"
5"Eva"
6"Evan"
places
0"Dublin"
1"Secret"
2"Room"
3"Cardiff"
globalScore1
windowScore0.833
0.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences137
glossingSentenceCount10
matches
0"appeared casual but kept danger a fingertip away"
1"as if naming the room would remind him of a time when those things had mattered more than the price of a drink"
2"as if saying the name aloud made the air heavier with what was not spoken"
3"quite finish"
4"not quite reaching for the glass again"
5"as if testing whether the scar could still ground her in a moment like this"
6"quite a confession and not quite a vow either"
7"not quite a vow either"
8"felt like a metal that had learned to b"
9"sounded like a truth"
10"felt like permission to choose, or perh"
0.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches8
per1kWords2.175
wordCount3678
matches
0"not as a demand but as a reckoning she owed herself, “"
1"not by its complexity but by its concealment"
2"not boastfully but with a gravity"
3"not exactly, but he was granting permission to keep walking forward, one foot"
4"not to Silas, not to herself, but to the space"
5"not to herself, but to the space"
6"not as a shout or a promise, but as a measured breath, as if he had learned to arrest every i"
7"not back toward it but toward the future she’d chosen, toward the path"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences176
matches(empty)
98.13% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs71
mean51.8
std25.56
cv0.493
sampleLengths
0100
1108
2103
3118
448
532
629
750
842
936
1056
1126
1250
1349
1480
1565
1638
17123
1838
1960
2073
2152
2273
2353
2470
2558
2646
2720
2812
2957
3032
3134
3228
33109
3449
3534
3612
3744
3873
3930
4062
4164
4217
4340
4449
4559
4621
4726
4841
4972
93.57% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount5
totalSentences150
matches
0"being closed"
1"being heard"
2"been made"
3"was supposed"
4"being nudged"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount4
totalVerbs486
matches
0"was coming"
1"was mapping"
2"was granting"
12.99% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount8
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences8
totalSentences176
ratio0.045
matches
0"The scent rode the air first—a mix of old whiskey, citrus oil, and a heat that wouldn’t quit, never quite surrendering to the night."
1"A dry sound escaped Silas—the smallest of laughs, a thing that could be mistaken for a cough if you didn’t know better."
2"She looked toward the hidden door behind the bookshelf—the secret room that not many people knew was real, and fewer still trusted not to be a trap."
3"“Sometimes I shake while I’m holding nothing at all,” she admitted after a moment, the admission not a confession so much as a necessary amputation—severing a piece of herself that had stopped fitting where it used to."
4"The blue was bright again for a moment, a flare of something she’d almost forgotten—the audacity of a younger self who believed in shortcuts and bright, clever solutions."
5"“A little more patience. A little less fear. And the knowledge that some battles aren’t meant to be won in the dark, but in the open where you can breathe and see who’s beside you.” She paused, and the memory gathered around her like a cloak—the memory of Eva whispering in a cramped kitchen or along a fog-wet street in Cardiff, the memory of a hiding place that had never really hidden anything."
6"She didn’t speak for a long moment, letting the room fill with the unspoken—the weight of time, the ache of unspoken regrets, the knowledge that some doors could not stay closed forever."
7"He simply nodded, acknowledging the truth in her words the way he often did—without fanfare, with the quiet currency of someone who knew how to read people even when they tried to hide."
94.06% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount2971
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount139
adverbRatio0.046785594076068665
lyAdverbCount27
lyAdverbRatio0.009087849209020532
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences176
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences176
mean20.9
std12.3
cv0.589
sampleLengths
09
123
211
324
433
515
67
728
824
934
1029
112
1227
1345
146
159
1630
1736
1822
1915
2010
2119
2219
2332
2415
259
265
2723
284
294
3019
3136
326
3314
3422
3516
3640
3722
384
3922
4028
4118
4228
433
4419
4522
4639
4738
4827
4920
35.23% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats26
diversityRatio0.2159090909090909
totalSentences176
uniqueOpeners38
67.11% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount3
totalSentences149
matches
0"Then Rory’s gaze drifted to"
1"Then it vanished behind the"
2"Then she looked over her"
ratio0.02
50.87% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount63
totalSentences149
matches
0"She moved with the practiced"
1"Her eyes, bright blue, scanned"
2"Her hair lay flat against"
3"He wore a lean, deliberate"
4"She didn’t pretend to be"
5"He did not rise."
6"He did not blink."
7"He studied her as if"
8"he said, as if naming"
9"She kept her hands on"
10"she said, keeping her voice"
11"She let the words rest,"
12"She watched the glass roll,"
13"he replied without bitterness, which"
14"She found it in Silas’s"
15"she said, finally meeting his"
16"She looked at the maps"
17"Her mind wandered to the"
18"she finally asked, and the"
19"She did not pretend the"
ratio0.423
0.27% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount137
totalSentences149
matches
0"The Raven’s Nest wore its"
1"A distinctive green neon sign"
2"The scent rode the air"
3"A bookshelf set into the"
4"Rory stepped across the threshold"
5"The Nest smelled of rain"
6"She moved with the practiced"
7"Her eyes, bright blue, scanned"
8"Her hair lay flat against"
9"The room narrowed to a"
10"The name was a rumor"
11"He wore a lean, deliberate"
12"The two hadn’t spoken in"
13"The world had turned dozens"
14"The door sighed again and"
15"The room’s murmur silenced itself,"
16"Rory’s steps slowed as she"
17"Silas asked, though the words"
18"Rory’s breath brushed past her"
19"She didn’t pretend to be"
ratio0.919
67.11% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount2
totalSentences149
matches
0"Now she carried the weight"
1"Now she carried a quiet"
ratio0.013
0.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences87
technicalSentenceCount19
matches
0"She moved with the practiced economy of someone who had learned to vanish in plain sight, a courier’s gait that appeared casual but kept danger a fingertip away…"
1"The room narrowed to a single focal point: a man seated with the ritual patience of a chess player who had forgotten more games than most people had played."
2"Now she carried a quiet that came from knowing too much and saying too little."
3"The room’s murmur silenced itself, respectfully, as if it knew what was coming and preferred not to witness it."
4"Rory’s breath brushed past her lips, a tremor that vanished as she pressed it flat."
5"Her mind wandered to the childhood rush she had escaped: Eva’s whispered promises, a future that never arrived, a boy named Evan who had given her more bruises …"
6"The clock on the wall ticked, constant as a metronome, his breath slow and measured, the limp in his leg a quiet reminder that fate still found him, even in a r…"
7"The blue was bright again for a moment, a flare of something she’d almost forgotten—the audacity of a younger self who believed in shortcuts and bright, clever …"
8"The Nest’s door sighed again somewhere farther in the building, the noise of a distant conversation seeping through the walls, as if the bar itself held its bre…"
9"The badge looked fragile in her palm, its edges worn down like something that had rubbed against another world for too long."
10"Outside, a rain-slick street carried the sound of distant tires, a dog barked somewhere beyond the black glass, and the room felt suspended between time and a c…"
11"He wasn’t praising, not exactly, but he was granting permission to keep walking forward, one foot in front of the other, through doors that would rather stay sh…"
12"The room grew quiet again, the kind of quiet that belongs to people who have learned to speak in the spaces between words, in the pause after a glance, in the h…"
13"She spoke without rushing, letting the words travel along the room’s lines, letting the space between them fill with something that wasn’t quite a confession an…"
14"She watched him move, the way a teacher might watch a student test a fronter line of truth, a line that could either hold or snap."
15"She could feel it like a weight on her chest, a steady press that insisted on being acknowledged."
16"She stood slowly, careful not to hurry the moment, and stepped closer to the shelf as if the proximity to a missing piece of her past could render the present l…"
17"He simply nodded, an old, subtle acknowledgment that he understood how a girl who had learned to survive could become a woman who chose not to disappear."
18"Behind her, Silas’s chair creaked again, a tiny sound that felt like permission to choose, or perhaps a reminder that choices themselves were rarely loud."
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags30
uselessAdditionCount11
matches
0"Silas asked, though the words carried no surprise so much as recognition, a careful catching of a name that might have meant everything and nothing all at once"
1"he said, as if naming the room would remind him of a time when those things had mattered more than the price of a drink"
2"she finally asked, and the question came out not as a demand but as a reckoning she owed herself,"
3"Silas murmured, as if the truth were a map he could unfold with a single word"
4"Silas said softly, a line drawn in coffee steam and quiet"
5"She paused, and the memory gathered around her like a cloak—the memory of Eva whispering in a cramped kitchen or along a fog-wet street in Cardiff, the memory of a hiding place that had never really hidden anything"
6"she said, her voice quiet, almost reverent"
7"Silas said, not denying his own memories, not defending them either"
8"Silas said, and the word carried more weight than a sentence should"
9"Silas murmured, as if the invitation would coax truth out of the room itself"
10"she said, her voice taking on a steadiness that surprised her"
62.28% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags25
fancyCount5
fancyTags
0"Silas observed (observe)"
1"Silas murmured (murmur)"
2"she admitted (admit)"
3"Silas murmured (murmur)"
4"Rory finally spoke to the room (speak)"
dialogueSentences57
tagDensity0.439
leniency0.877
rawRatio0.2
effectiveRatio0.175
70.5402%