Run: 2026-02-19-01KHTXD7WZTDQRAGZ0NGCG0X9Q

Run Details

Duration:
2m 50s
Cost:
$0.003437
Provider:
Together

Model input

System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Horror genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the horror genre. A character is alone in a strange, isolated place at night. They came here for a reason, but something feels off from the moment they arrive. The wrongness builds slowly — sounds that shouldn't be there, things that move at the edge of vision, a growing certainty that they are not alone. Build tension through restraint, not through gore. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for the character and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The path opened into the clearing like a held breath finally released. Aurora stopped at the edge of the grove, one hand pressed against the rough bark of the boundary oak. The standing stones marked the entrance in their ancient half-circle, twisted branches reaching overhead like fingers curled around something precious. Wildflowers she had no names for bloomed in the moonlight, pale petals catching light that seemed to come from nowhere and everywhere at once. She'd wanted to come here alone. That was the plan. Eva had offered to tag along, and Silas had made his usual grumbling noise about responsible adults and sensible decisions, but this was something Aurora needed to do by herself. The pendant had been pulling her toward Richmond Park for three nights now, that faint warmth against her sternum growing stronger with each step closer to the grove. Whatever waited in that pocket between worlds, she needed to face it alone. The entry felt different tonight. That was the first wrong thing. Before, stepping through the boundary had been like wading into a warm bath, the membrane of the Fae realm yielding around her. Now, the transition scraped. Her skin prickled as she crossed the threshold, static electricity crawling up her arms. The air tasted of copper and something older, something that made her think of deep wells and sealed doors. "Hello?" Her voice fell flat in the unnatural stillness. No insects hummed. No owls called. The silence pressed against her ears like cupped hands. Aurora walked deeper into the clearing, past the flower rings and the moss-covered stone table Isolde used for their gatherings. The Heartstone pendant pulsed warmer against her chest, a steady rhythm now instead of the weak flicker she'd grown used to. The geminner glow had shifted from faint crimson to something brighter, veins of light climbing toward the surface like roots seeking sun. She stopped in the centre of the clearing and turned slowly, scanning the tree line. The grove was never truly dark—not with the ambient Fae light that hung like permanent dawn—but tonight shadows pooled in the corners of her vision, clinging to the bases of the standing stones. Moving shadows. She was certain she'd seen movement just there, at the edge of the ring, just outside the light's reach. "Show yourself." Her voice came out steadier than she felt. Cool-headed, that's what she was. Quick thinking. She wasn't about to let some errant shadow make her run home to Silas's bar like a child. The shadows didn't answer. But they moved again, a slow undulation that could have been wind through leaves—if there had been any wind. If there had been any sound. Something was different about the Fae Grove tonight. The pendant was practically burning now, hot enough that she pulled it away from her skin and held it in her fist. The glow spilled between her fingers, crimson light painting her knuckles. That's when she heard it. A footstep. Behind her. Aurora spun, heart lurching into her throat. Nothing. The clearing stood empty, the stone table and flower rings and ancient oaks all exactly as they should be. But she'd heard it. The crunch of weight on dead leaves, the soft displacement of earth. Someone—or something—had been directly behind her. She stood very still, listening with every fibre of her being. The pendant dimmed in her palm, its heat fading as if exhausted. Her own breathing sounded loud in the silence. Her pulse hammered in her ears. A twig snapped. To her left. She whirled, but again there was nothing. The shadows there had stilled completely, frozen in place like held breath. Watching. Waiting. Her skin crawled. The hair on her arms stood up. Some ancient part of her brain, the part that still remembered what it meant to be prey, was screaming at her to run. Aurora forced herself to breathe. To think. This was the Fae realm's edge, not some back alley in London. Things here had rules. Boundaries. She'd been here dozens of times with Isolde, had walked these paths safely, had learned which flowers to avoid and which stones not to touch. This place was strange but it wasn't dangerous. It couldn't be. The pendant pulsed once, sharp and sudden, then went cold. That wasn't right. The warmth was its function, its purpose. Without it, the gem was just a pretty stone. But now it sat in her palm like a chip of ice, and when she looked down at it, the inner glow had gone from crimson to grey. The clearing felt larger than before. The trees seemed farther away, the stone circle at the entrance impossibly distant. The wildflowers had closed their petals, heads bowed as if in mourning. She heard breathing. Not her own. It came from everywhere and nowhere, a soft rhythm that didn't match any living thing she knew. Too slow. Too steady. Coming from the air itself, from the space between spaces, from the pocket dimension that the Fae Grove occupied. Aurora backed toward the boundary, toward home, toward the entrance she'd come through only minutes ago. Her heel caught on something—a root, a stone, she didn't look—and she stumbled. Caught herself. Kept moving. The shadows were no longer at the edge of the light. They were closer now, pooling around her feet, curling around her ankles like smoke that had learned to touch. She couldn't see what cast them. There was nothing there, nothing she could point to and name, but they moved with intention. Purpose. They were reaching for her. The pendant sparked once in her hand, a flicker of warmth that died before she could feel relief. She ran. The boundary couldn't have been far—she'd only walked ten minutes in—but the clearing stretched and stretched and the trees kept their distance and her legs burned and the breathing, that awful too-steady breathing, grew louder, closer, filling her ears and her nose and the space behind her eyes. Something touched her shoulder. Aurora screamed. The moon was bright through the window of the bedroom she didn't have, morning light cutting across her face like a blade. She lay still, heart thudding, sweat cooling on her skin, one hand clutching the pendant that was warm again, that had never stopped being warm, and for a long moment she couldn't remember anything at all. Then it came back. Not clearly—a sense of wrongness, of something vast pressing close, of reaching shadows and breathing darkness and the cold grey nothing of the pendant's light. She remembered running. She remembered being touched. She sat up in her bed in the flat above Silas's bar, in London, in Wales, in the world she knew, and the sun was rising outside her window in exactly the way mornings always did. The pendant pulsed, warm and steady. A reminder. A promise. Something was waiting for her to come back.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags2
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences2
tagDensity1
leniency1
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
82.80% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1163
totalAiIsmAdverbs4
found
0
adverb"slowly"
count1
1
adverb"truly"
count1
2
adverb"very"
count1
3
adverb"completely"
count1
highlights
0"slowly"
1"truly"
2"very"
3"completely"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
26.91% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1163
totalAiIsms17
found
0
word"warmth"
count3
1
word"silence"
count2
2
word"pulsed"
count3
3
word"flicker"
count2
4
word"scanning"
count1
5
word"lurching"
count1
6
word"weight"
count1
7
word"pulse"
count1
8
word"could feel"
count1
9
word"sense of"
count1
10
word"reminder"
count1
highlights
0"warmth"
1"silence"
2"pulsed"
3"flicker"
4"scanning"
5"lurching"
6"weight"
7"pulse"
8"could feel"
9"sense of"
10"reminder"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells1
narrationSentences106
matches
0"a flicker of warmth"
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount1
hedgeCount1
narrationSentences106
filterMatches
0"think"
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences106
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen51
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1149
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions2
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions26
wordCount1146
uniqueNames11
maxNameDensity0.61
worstName"Aurora"
maxWindowNameDensity1
worstWindowName"Aurora"
discoveredNames
Silas3
Aurora7
Richmond1
Park1
Fae5
Isolde2
Heartstone1
Cool-headed1
Grove2
London2
Wales1
persons
0"Silas"
1"Aurora"
2"Isolde"
places
0"Richmond"
1"Park"
2"Fae"
3"Grove"
4"London"
5"Wales"
globalScore1
windowScore1
73.08% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences65
glossingSentenceCount2
matches
0"light that seemed to come from nowhere and everywhere at once"
1"seemed farther away, the stone circle at the entrance impossibly distant"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1149
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences106
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs38
mean30.24
std22.13
cv0.732
sampleLengths
012
163
281
311
459
524
663
769
835
929
1041
115
124
1349
1437
156
1621
1733
1860
1910
2047
2131
226
2340
2433
2511
2647
2718
282
2948
304
312
3258
3336
3436
356
364
378
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences106
matches(empty)
67.33% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount4
totalVerbs201
matches
0"was screaming"
1"were reaching"
2"was rising"
3"was waiting"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount10
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences6
totalSentences106
ratio0.057
matches
0"The grove was never truly dark—not with the ambient Fae light that hung like permanent dawn—but tonight shadows pooled in the corners of her vision, clinging to the bases of the standing stones."
1"But they moved again, a slow undulation that could have been wind through leaves—if there had been any wind."
2"Someone—or something—had been directly behind her."
3"Her heel caught on something—a root, a stone, she didn't look—and she stumbled."
4"The boundary couldn't have been far—she'd only walked ten minutes in—but the clearing stretched and stretched and the trees kept their distance and her legs burned and the breathing, that awful too-steady breathing, grew louder, closer, filling her ears and her nose and the space behind her eyes."
5"Not clearly—a sense of wrongness, of something vast pressing close, of reaching shadows and breathing darkness and the cold grey nothing of the pendant's light."
99.55% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1160
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount47
adverbRatio0.04051724137931034
lyAdverbCount13
lyAdverbRatio0.011206896551724138
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences106
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences106
mean10.84
std9.34
cv0.862
sampleLengths
012
119
220
324
46
54
630
728
813
95
106
1122
124
1314
1419
159
163
173
189
1920
2021
2122
2215
2333
242
2519
2610
275
282
2918
304
3119
326
338
3422
3511
365
372
382
397
401
4119
424
4312
446
4511
4612
478
486
493
55.03% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats10
diversityRatio0.3867924528301887
totalSentences106
uniqueOpeners41
37.88% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount1
totalSentences88
matches
0"Then it came back."
ratio0.011
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount24
totalSentences88
matches
0"She'd wanted to come here"
1"Her skin prickled as she"
2"Her voice fell flat in"
3"She stopped in the centre"
4"She was certain she'd seen"
5"Her voice came out steadier"
6"She wasn't about to let"
7"She stood very still, listening"
8"Her own breathing sounded loud"
9"Her pulse hammered in her"
10"She whirled, but again there"
11"Her skin crawled."
12"She'd been here dozens of"
13"It couldn't be."
14"She heard breathing."
15"It came from everywhere and"
16"Her heel caught on something—a"
17"They were closer now, pooling"
18"She couldn't see what cast"
19"They were reaching for her."
ratio0.273
50.91% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount72
totalSentences88
matches
0"The path opened into the"
1"Aurora stopped at the edge"
2"The standing stones marked the"
3"Wildflowers she had no names"
4"She'd wanted to come here"
5"That was the plan."
6"Eva had offered to tag"
7"The pendant had been pulling"
8"Whatever waited in that pocket"
9"The entry felt different tonight."
10"That was the first wrong"
11"Her skin prickled as she"
12"The air tasted of copper"
13"Her voice fell flat in"
14"The silence pressed against her"
15"Aurora walked deeper into the"
16"The Heartstone pendant pulsed warmer"
17"The geminner glow had shifted"
18"She stopped in the centre"
19"The grove was never truly"
ratio0.818
100.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount4
totalSentences88
matches
0"Before, stepping through the boundary"
1"Now, the transition scraped."
2"If there had been any"
3"To her left."
ratio0.045
47.62% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences45
technicalSentenceCount6
matches
0"Wildflowers she had no names for bloomed in the moonlight, pale petals catching light that seemed to come from nowhere and everywhere at once."
1"The pendant had been pulling her toward Richmond Park for three nights now, that faint warmth against her sternum growing stronger with each step closer to the …"
2"The air tasted of copper and something older, something that made her think of deep wells and sealed doors."
3"The grove was never truly dark—not with the ambient Fae light that hung like permanent dawn—but tonight shadows pooled in the corners of her vision, clinging to…"
4"They were closer now, pooling around her feet, curling around her ankles like smoke that had learned to touch."
5"She lay still, heart thudding, sweat cooling on her skin, one hand clutching the pendant that was warm again, that had never stopped being warm, and for a long …"
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags2
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags0
84.7036%