Run: 2026-02-19-01KHTXE6N36Q6VZF58C2S3H3G2

Run Details

Duration:
1m 6s
Cost:
$0.204450

Model input

System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Horror genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the horror genre. A character is alone in a strange, isolated place at night. They came here for a reason, but something feels off from the moment they arrive. The wrongness builds slowly — sounds that shouldn't be there, things that move at the edge of vision, a growing certainty that they are not alone. Build tension through restraint, not through gore. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for the character and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The stone bit into Rory's palm, ancient and cold despite the warmth pulsing from her pendant. Three more to find. The oak standing stones of Richmond Park cast twisted shadows in the moonlight, their bark gnarled into faces that seemed to shift when she wasn't looking directly at them. "Fourth one's always the hardest to spot." She spun, heart hammering. Nothing. Wind through leaves, that's all. Except the air hung still as a held breath. The pendant grew warmer against her chest. She'd followed its pull here after midnight, abandoning her delivery bike outside the park gates. Silas had mentioned something about the Fae Grove during one of his rambling stories. Places where reality wore thin. She'd thought it was pub talk until the Heartstone started burning whenever she passed Richmond. A branch snapped behind her. "Hello?" Her voice came out steadier than she felt. "Park's closed, yeah? Both of us could get in trouble." Silence stretched like taffy. Even the usual night sounds—owls, foxes, distant traffic—had stopped. The wrongness of it crawled up her spine. The fourth stone stood twenty meters away, half-hidden behind a hawthorn bush. As she approached, the temperature dropped. Her breath misted the air. August in London, and suddenly it felt like February. Movement in her peripheral vision. She turned. Nothing but trees and shadows. When she looked back, the hawthorn's branches had shifted, creating an archway. "Brilliant. Definitely not walking through the creepy magic doorway." The pendant burned hotter. She hissed, pulling it away from her skin. The crimson stone pulsed with its own heartbeat, faster now. Urgent. Something was coming. She could feel it in the way the air pressed against her eardrums, in the metallic taste flooding her mouth. The shadows between the trees deepened, spreading like spilled ink. Through the hawthorn arch, she glimpsed wildflowers. Purple foxglove and white meadowsweet blooming out of season, their petals luminescent in the darkness. The Fae Grove. Had to be. Behind her, breathing. Slow. Deliberate. Not quite human. She bolted through the archway. The world tilted. Colours bled together like watercolours in rain. Her stomach lurched as gravity forgot which way was down. Then her feet hit soft grass, and the world snapped back into focus. Wrong focus. The grove spread before her, impossibly vast for a hidden clearing. Flowers carpeted the ground in patterns too perfect for nature. Their scent was thick, cloying—honey mixed with something chemical. The moon hung too large and too bright, casting shadows that fell in directions that made her eyes water. "Shouldn't have come here, little thief." The voice came from everywhere and nowhere. Female, maybe. Or male. Or neither. It shifted between words like smoke. "Not a thief." Rory's hand found the pendant. Still warm, but no longer burning. "Just looking for answers." "Answers have prices. Especially here." A figure emerged from between two silver birch trees. Human-shaped but wrong in every detail. Too tall. Joints that bent in too many places. A face that was beautiful until you tried to focus on any single feature. "The Heartstone." Its voice solidified, decidedly female now. "You wear it like you own it." "Gift from a friend." "Liar." The figure glided closer. No footsteps. The flowers parted before her without being touched. "That stone hasn't been on your side of the Veil for thirteen years. I should know. I'm the one who hid it." Rory backed away. Her heel caught on something solid. A root that hadn't been there seconds before. She stumbled but kept her footing. "Easy there. Wouldn't want you falling into something unpleasant." The figure smiled. Too many teeth. "Though that might solve my problem nicely." "What problem?" "You. Here. With that." A finger that wasn't quite the right length pointed at the pendant. "Do you have any idea what you've done? What doors you've opened?" The temperature dropped again. Frost spread across the flower petals in fractal patterns. The figure's expression shifted from amusement to something sharper. "They're coming, you stupid girl. The stone calls to them. Has been calling since you first touched it." She moved closer, and Rory caught her scent—ozone and rotting flowers. "How many times has it grown warm? How many times has it pulsed?" "I don't—" "Every pulse is a beacon. Every warmth a invitation." The figure circled her now, moving in ways that hurt to watch. "And you've brought it here, to a place where the boundaries are already tissue-thin. Clever little mouse, running straight into the trap." The ground shuddered. Somewhere in the distance, something howled. Not a wolf. Not anything that belonged in Richmond Park or any earthly forest. "What are they?" "Hungry." The figure stopped directly in front of her. This close, Rory could see through her skin to something darker beneath. "And you're wearing their dinner bell." Another howl, closer now. The flowers around them withered, their luminescence fading to ash-grey. The too-bright moon flickered like a dying bulb. "Give me the stone." The figure extended her hand. "I'll hide it again. Deeper this time. Somewhere even you clever mortals won't stumble across it." "No." "No?" Genuine surprise coloured the thing's features. "You'd rather be torn apart? Have your soul extracted through your screaming mouth? Because that's what's coming, little thief. That's what the Heartstone calls." The howling surrounded them now. Multiple voices in a harmony that made Rory's teeth ache. Through the trees, she saw shapes moving. Large. Fast. Getting closer. "The stone's protecting me." "The stone is marking you for dinner." The figure's patience evaporated. "Last chance. Give it freely, or I take it from your corpse." Rory's hand closed around the pendant. The crimson stone flared, bathing the grove in blood-red light. The figure hissed and stumbled backward. "Impossible. You don't have the bloodline to—" The first creature burst through the tree line. Wolf-shaped but wrong, made of shadow and hunger. Its eyes were holes in reality, showing nothing but void. More followed. A pack of nightmares given form. "Run!" The figure grabbed Rory's wrist with fingers like ice. "The arch! Now!" They sprinted across the dying flowers. The creatures gained ground with each heartbeat. Rory could feel their hunger like heat on her back. The hawthorn arch shimmered ahead, already starting to close. "Jump!" They dove through together as the first creature's jaws snapped shut where Rory's head had been. The world tilted again, colours screaming. Then cold earth, real earth, under her palms. Richmond Park. Normal shadows. Normal moon. The figure lay beside her, form flickering between human and something else. Where the moonlight touched her, she seemed to dissolve at the edges. "This isn't over." Her voice was fading with the rest of her. "The stone's awake now. They'll keep coming. Through every thin place, every shadow, every—" She vanished. Only the scent of ozone remained. Rory sat up, breathing hard. The pendant lay cool against her chest, as innocent as costume jewellery. Through the trees, she could see the hawthorn bush. Just a bush now. No archway. No impossible grove. But in the distance, something howled.
total_cost0.20445

Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags13
adverbTagCount2
adverbTags
0"Its voice solidified decidedly [decidedly]"
1"The figure stopped directly [directly]"
dialogueSentences40
tagDensity0.325
leniency0.65
rawRatio0.154
effectiveRatio0.1
95.79% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1188
totalAiIsmAdverbs1
found
0
adverb"suddenly"
count1
highlights
0"suddenly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
36.87% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1188
totalAiIsms15
found
0
word"warmth"
count2
1
word"silence"
count1
2
word"pulsed"
count2
3
word"could feel"
count2
4
word"stomach"
count1
5
word"lurched"
count1
6
word"perfect"
count1
7
word"footsteps"
count1
8
word"pulse"
count1
9
word"beacon"
count1
10
word"flickered"
count1
11
word"shimmered"
count1
highlights
0"warmth"
1"silence"
2"pulsed"
3"could feel"
4"stomach"
5"lurched"
6"perfect"
7"footsteps"
8"pulse"
9"beacon"
10"flickered"
11"shimmered"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences127
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount3
narrationSentences127
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
1"tried to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences153
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen30
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1177
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions2
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
66.67% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions30
wordCount890
uniqueNames11
maxNameDensity1.24
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity3
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
Rory11
Richmond4
Park3
Fae2
Grove2
Heartstone1
Silence1
London1
February1
Genuine1
Through3
persons
0"Rory"
1"Heartstone"
2"Silence"
places
0"Richmond"
1"Park"
2"Fae"
3"Grove"
4"London"
globalScore0.882
windowScore0.667
50.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences75
glossingSentenceCount3
matches
0"faces that seemed to shift when she wasn't looking directly at them"
1"felt like February"
2"quite the right length pointed at the pendant"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1177
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences153
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs58
mean20.29
std13.79
cv0.68
sampleLengths
049
17
219
356
45
519
621
732
824
99
1023
113
1230
1328
148
155
1633
172
1849
196
2019
2118
225
2338
2415
254
2637
2723
2822
292
3028
3122
3242
332
3443
3523
363
3727
3822
3925
401
4131
4226
434
4423
4522
467
4734
4813
4932
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences127
matches(empty)
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount2
totalVerbs150
matches
0"wasn't looking"
1"was coming"
86.83% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount4
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences3
totalSentences153
ratio0.02
matches
0"Even the usual night sounds—owls, foxes, distant traffic—had stopped."
1"Their scent was thick, cloying—honey mixed with something chemical."
2"\"They're coming, you stupid girl. The stone calls to them. Has been calling since you first touched it.\" She moved closer, and Rory caught her scent—ozone and rotting flowers."
89.14% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount900
adjectiveStacks1
stackExamples
0"lay cool against her"
adverbCount41
adverbRatio0.04555555555555556
lyAdverbCount7
lyAdverbRatio0.0077777777777777776
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences153
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences153
mean7.69
std5.35
cv0.696
sampleLengths
016
14
229
37
44
51
65
79
87
915
1014
115
1215
135
149
1510
164
179
188
1912
206
215
229
235
242
255
2612
279
284
298
3010
311
323
3320
3410
357
3615
373
383
393
401
411
423
435
443
457
4610
4713
482
4911
82.35% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats9
diversityRatio0.5294117647058824
totalSentences153
uniqueOpeners81
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount8
totalSentences107
matches
0"Even the usual night sounds—owls,"
1"Then her feet hit soft"
2"Still warm, but no longer"
3"Too many teeth."
4"Somewhere in the distance, something"
5"Then cold earth, real earth,"
6"Only the scent of ozone"
7"Just a bush now."
ratio0.075
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount19
totalSentences107
matches
0"She spun, heart hammering."
1"She'd followed its pull here"
2"She'd thought it was pub"
3"Her voice came out steadier"
4"Her breath misted the air."
5"She hissed, pulling it away"
6"She could feel it in"
7"She bolted through the archway."
8"Her stomach lurched as gravity"
9"Their scent was thick, cloying—honey"
10"It shifted between words like"
11"Its voice solidified, decidedly female"
12"Her heel caught on something"
13"She stumbled but kept her"
14"She moved closer, and Rory"
15"Its eyes were holes in"
16"They sprinted across the dying"
17"They dove through together as"
18"Her voice was fading with"
ratio0.178
100.00% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount77
totalSentences107
matches
0"The stone bit into Rory's"
1"The oak standing stones of"
2"She spun, heart hammering."
3"The pendant grew warmer against"
4"She'd followed its pull here"
5"Silas had mentioned something about"
6"Places where reality wore thin."
7"She'd thought it was pub"
8"A branch snapped behind her."
9"Her voice came out steadier"
10"Silence stretched like taffy."
11"The wrongness of it crawled"
12"The fourth stone stood twenty"
13"Her breath misted the air."
14"August in London, and suddenly"
15"Movement in her peripheral vision."
16"Nothing but trees and shadows."
17"The pendant burned hotter."
18"She hissed, pulling it away"
19"The crimson stone pulsed with"
ratio0.72
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences107
matches(empty)
ratio0
100.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences30
technicalSentenceCount1
matches
0"The moon hung too large and too bright, casting shadows that fell in directions that made her eyes water."
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags13
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags0
90.2551%