Run: 2026-02-19-01KHTXE9AACP48F80Z352XMWN2

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You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Literary Fiction genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
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Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4413" name="Silas Blackwood" aliases="Silas, Si, the Spymaster" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Mentor"> <eyeColor>hazel</eyeColor> <hair>grey-streaked auburn</hair> <height>6'1"</height> <age>58</age> <beard>neatly trimmed, matching his grey-streaked auburn hair</beard> <limp>slight limp in his left leg from an old knee injury</limp> <signetRing>silver signet ring, always worn on his right hand</signetRing> <description>Silas is a retired intelligence operative turned bar owner. He carries himself with quiet authority.</description> <backstory>Former MI6 field agent who retired after a botched operation in Prague left him with a permanent knee injury. He opened "The Raven's Nest" bar in Soho as a front for his network of contacts.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the literary fiction genre. Two old friends who haven't seen each other in years run into each other unexpectedly at a bar. One of them has changed significantly. Through their conversation and the tension between who they were and who they've become, reveal the weight of time and unspoken regret. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

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The bell above the door sang its cold little note as Rory stepped into The Raven’s Nest, her delivery bag brushing the line of her hip and the crescent scar on her left wrist catching a pale glow from the green neon. A breath of wool and menthol clung to her jacket; she did not look for the familiar, but there he was, as if he’d never left the chair behind the bar. Silas lifted his head, the silver glint of his signet ring catching the light, and the room seemed to tilt for a heartbeat, as if a blade had been sheathed and then very slowly drawn. The Nest was quiet in a way that invited talk, the way old maps on the walls invited memory. The walls wore their years like a uniform: coffee rings, smudges, a swirl of cigarette smoke that wouldn’t quite die. A shelf near the back hid a door that could slide open with a quiet click, and Rory knew the trick of it; she had watched Silas use it to convene people who didn’t belong to the ordinary hours. Tonight, the door would stay quiet, or so she told herself as the neon hummed and the air tasted faintly of lime and something sharper, a citrus that had become a memory in her own mouth. “Rory,” Silas said, not loud, but the word stretched and thinned in the space between them, as if he were testing the sound of it after years stored away. “Si,” she replied, letting his nickname fall warm and easy from her lips, though her mouth had learned a dozen careful, other names since Cardiff and the old alleys and the long, foolish nights that felt like someone else’s. He did not rise from behind the bar. He did not need to. The chair opposite him pulled away with a penny-bite of noise and for a moment she saw a different Silas—the one who had cut a path through Prague as if the city itself were a chessboard and he a player who never forgot a square. Now, the knee told him when to hold still; a limp stitched into the rhythm of the night and the cigars and the old maps that lined the room like witnesses. “You came with a bag,” he observed, eyes sliding to the leather strap that bound the Golden Empress label around her shoulder, the name of the restaurant and the little black motor of its delivery service folding into one familiar murmur. “What’s in it tonight, Miss Carter?” “Not what you’re thinking,” she said, though the words felt old and half-remembered, as though she’d rehearsed a dozen times to tell the truth without spilling it all. “Just a parcel for a man who thinks he’s charming and forgets to blink.” The line stung the way a soft phrase can sting when it’s meant to wound, and she didn’t care to soften it further. She set the bag on the bar with a careful thud that sounded like a hand bracing against a balcony railing. The air between them began to pull tight, a rope drawn taut with years of unspoken weather between two people who had learned to move in the same rooms without speaking of the weather, or the past, or the private things that sit inside the ribs like old coins pressed into a velvet lining. “Cardiff days are gone,” Silas said, his voice low enough that a visitor would miss the care in it. He leaned into the bar, the weight of his body a quiet assertion of years lived in the margins of other people’s days. “And you, Rory—Laila—Aurora—Carter—Malphora—pick your name for the hours and stick with it. Which one travels best these nights?” The question landed, not as a trap but as a test. She did not answer with a name; she answered with a movement: a quick, almost unnoticeable shift of the shoulder, a touch of the scar on her wrist, the way her eyes slid toward the back room with a learned, almost habitual caution. The back room—a bookshelf door, a room beyond, a place that had saved more secrets than a dozen nervous confessions could swallow. “You left the city with a story that wouldn’t sit still,” Silas said, the words measured, a tonic he offered without asking permission to antidote whatever poison the story had become. “You came back with a different map. Not worse, not better—different.” She looked at him then, really looked, and the blue in her eyes seemed to deepen as if a line of sky belonged to her and no one else’s. Her breath came out in a careful arc. “I’ve learned to draw outlines in the dark,” she said, her voice quiet but precise, a line drawn with the tip of a blade. “And to walk along the edges of other people’s rules without breaking mine completely.” “Edges fray,” he said, and the corner of his mouth gave a faint, wry twist. “Edge-work ruins more people than it saves, Rory. You know that.” Her answer came in the form of a slow exhale, a soft ache that was not visible on the face but lived in the tremor of her fingers as they brushed the scar again, almost absentmindedly, almost as if she were trying to remember why the mark mattered when so much else did not. “Time changes how you measure risk,” she said, and the words felt like a shared lockpick she could no longer use without someone on the other side knowing her by heart. A bottle clinked somewhere in the room and a man’s laugh rose—thin, too loud, almost a mistake—before dropping back into silence. The Nest’s quiet seemed to swallow sound for a moment, then spit it back out with a sour note. Rory’s gaze moved, not hurried, to the shelf behind Silas, to the small, secret door that could swing open like a mouth that knew all your secrets. “The room is still there,” Silas said, not looking away from her. “Just because you’ve learned to read the air doesn’t mean you’ve learned to live with the knowing of others.” He paused, the words hanging in the air between them, a challenge and a warning in one breath. “What are you really here for, Rory? If this is merely a visit, I’ll pour you a drink and send you on your way with the fond, old friend’s memory you crave. If not, you’ll tell me what you’re chasing that won’t sit still.” She met the weight of his eyes, the color of well-worn old coins and the memory of a debt paid with interest long ago. “A debt,” she said finally, the single word a tight knot that refused to loosen. She did not explain what debt she meant; she let it hang there, crowded with old answers and unspoken apologies. The room’s door—the bookshelf one—trembled, just barely, as if someone in the back shook their head in warning. The movement was so slight that the patrons wouldn’t notice, but Rory read it as a sign: trouble was not gossiping in the corners tonight. It was standing by the far table, listening. “I didn’t come here to trade old ghosts for new ones,” she added, speaking not to him but to the memory of the Cardiff nights when they’d thought nothing could ever hurt more than leaving a friend behind in a city that never slept. “I came because time pulled me here and left me with a question that won’t survive another week without an answer.” “Time, again,” Silas murmured, the signet ring catching light and turning it into a small, bright hinge in his palm. “And what is the question, Rory? The one that won’t let you sleep unless you spill it like a secret onto this bar’s grimy surface?” Her lips pressed together in a line that remembered an edge of danger and fear in equal measure. She stared down at the glass in front of her, empty, as if the absence of liquid could also carry away some of the distance between them. “It’s not mine alone to answer,” she said at last, not meeting his gaze, “but I need to know if you still remember the night Prague changed us more than the years did.” Prague—an old, bright memory that had once flickered through them as if it belonged to a different life, not the one they’d pinched into their pockets and taken on as if it were a passport. Silas’s face remained calm, but a tightness around the eyes told a different story. He’d been there; he’d known the risk; he’d carried a weight far heavier than most men his age would admit in a room like this. “Prague changes people who don’t keep their angles sharp,” he said, and the phrase sounded almost like a reminder to himself. “What’s happened since then to make you come back to me with questions that remember their own teeth?” She could have spoken of the years between Cardiff’s quiet desperation and London’s restless towers, of the way she’d learned to move unseen, of the job that paid enough to look after her own life while never letting a question go unanswered. She could have told him that she’d learned to disappear behind a name, to vanish into a city’s night and reappear somewhere else as if she’d never left the old friends who had once believed in her. But she didn’t. Instead, she looked at him with a gravity that only someone who had learned to carry a secret for years could muster. “Sometimes the past isn’t a map, it’s a weight you learn to carry and pretend is a coat,” she said, choosing a line that was not too harsh, not too soft, a line that might be true for both of them and yet still leave the room for something else to occur. “I’m here because the weight is pushing on the wrong shoulder and I can’t pretend it isn’t there anymore.” From behind them, a voice drifted, easy as a glass of watered wine sliding across a counter. A guest’s laugh teased the corners of the room, and a foot shifted, tapping a rhythm on the planks. The room did not tilt again, but the air between them shifted, as if the old gravity had suddenly learned a new axis. “Tell me,” Silas said, leaning closer, the distance between them narrowing until the green neon’s glow painted pale blue across their faces. “If you were still the Rory I thought I knew, what would you have said five years ago when Evan appeared again in your life like a punctuation mark you forgot to remove from a sentence you’ve been writing in secret?” A faint, almost amused half-smile tugged at Rory’s mouth, then vanished as quickly as it had come. The memory pressed against her—Evan, the ex who had become a weather system you couldn’t predict but couldn’t outrun. She rubbed the scar on her wrist again, a nervous habit she hadn’t entirely outgrown, a reminder that some marks never fade, they simply shift in the night’s light. “Five years ago,” she began, choosing words with care, “I would have asked you to pretend nothing had ever happened, to forget that there was a map with Prague’s streets etched into it, to pretend that the weight wasn’t mine to carry alone.” She paused, letting the truth take root in the space between them. “I wouldn’t ask you to pretend now, Silas. I’d ask you to help me lift it for a moment, just long enough to see what’s underneath.” His eyes softened, though his mouth kept its line of control. It was a look that spoke of a thousand practiced deceptions kept in reserve, a look that could cut through a lie the way a blade cuts through sheet glass. “I am not your shelter, Rory,” he said, almost gently. “But I can be the room you keep your secrets in long enough for you to decide what to do with them when the night ends its counting.” A silence fell, heavy with the memory of nights when they’d watched city lights flicker over the Thames and pretend they were invincible. The door to the back room whispered again, a thread of sound that tugged at a shared knowledge neither man nor woman dared to name aloud. The bookshelf door wasn’t an invitation tonight; it was a warning. “Someone is waiting for your decision,” Rory said softly, not accusing, only stating what she could not deny. “Not here to drink, not here to talk it away. Waiting.” The waiter cleared his throat somewhere near the end of the bar, his eyes flicking toward Rory with a shake of professional politeness that barely hid curiosity. Silas straightened, as if the back-room door itself had just exhaled a sigh and reminded him of the duties that still tethered him to the old life he’d never fully left behind. “Then we speak plainly,” Silas said, his tone returning to business that never left his bones. “Not for the sake of nostalgia, but for necessity. If you’ve come here with a plan, I want to hear it. If you’ve come here to bury it, I’ll remind you that you can’t. Not in this room, not while a bookshelf knows your name and the signet ring remembers your stride.” Rory leaned in, the bar’s edge cold against her knuckles, the blue light painting thin lines across her cheekbone. She spoke with a careful practicality that still carried the tenderness of someone who had learned to trust in a crisis more than in a claimed certainty. “I’m not here to recruit you, Silas. I’m here to warn you. Quietly.” “Warnings are currency,” he replied, as if trading in a shadow economy, his eyes narrowing. “What’s the balance?” “Somewhere outside, a man with a pistol and a shadow over Prague’s old districts isn’t looking for a quiet word,” she said, her voice dropping to a level that kept her own nerves from flashing across her face. “He’s looking for a door that used to be a way out. He’s here for the room, for the people in it who still have a name to protect. And he’s not alone.” The words hung, heavy, and the Nest’s soft murmur grew louder as if the building itself leaned closer. The neon buzzed, the maps on the wall rustled, and the quiet in the back room grew more intimate, more dangerous, as if it held a handful of witnesses to something that hadn’t yet happened. Silas did not blink. He reached beneath the bar without looking away from her and drew out a small pistol tucked into a secret drawer beneath the counter, the metal catching the neon’s glow and throwing a cold star across his palm. The gesture was not for show; it was a reinforcement of a promise he had learned long ago: some doors open only when you are ready to walk through them with your eyes open. “Then let us speak with our hands as well as our mouths,” he said, voice steady, as if the decision to draw a weapon was as routine as pouring a drink. “If there is trouble in the night, we face it here. If there is a way out, we take it together. If not, we stand and hold what remains of what we once believed in.” A footfall—light, deliberate—came from the hall behind them, the source only a silhouette, a shadow in the doorway of the back room. The silhouette paused, waited, and then someone cleared their throat deliberately, as if to remind them all that this was not a private theatre but a bar that knew too much. “Time’s up, Spymaster,” a voice drawled—young and too confident, the kind of voice that believed secrets were simply currency to be spent. The intruder’s presence did not back away; it pressed forward, as if stepping through a door that only supposed itself to be closed. The silhouette emerged into the dim bar light, and the room shifted again as if the air itself rearranged around a repurposed threat. The man wore a tailored coat that had seen too many winters, the edge of a sleeve catching the neon with a gleam that suggested a weapon or a badge or something else entirely—something not meant for polite company. Rory’s breath caught in her chest, a sound that could have been mistaken for a sigh of relief or a sneeze of fear, and she steadied herself by the bar, by the weight of her past and the weight of the present. Silas’s hand did not tremble as the stranger’s presence sharpened the room’s focus; he moved with a careful, quiet poise that did not forgive a needless risk. The stranger’s lips curled into a half-smile that didn’t reach his eyes. He looked at Rory, then at Silas, and back again, as if reading a page the other could not quite see. “Rory,” Silas finally spoke, the name not quite a question, not quite a statement, a soft anchor dropped into a sea of shifting intentions. “Rory,” the stranger echoed, as if naming her were a test of which memory was most valuable. Rory stepped forward, not to provoke but to assert the boundary that always kept her safe in a room that was never truly safe. “Not here to discuss old games,” she said, her voice calmer than she felt, though the scar on her wrist burned with a familiar, small flame. “Only here to keep a door from opening that should stay shut.” The stranger’s gaze flicked to the bookshelf, to the secret door, to the room that had once hidden more truth than any other space could hold. Then he smiled again, not kind, not cruel—simply a calculated expression designed to measure the risk of a decision that could end badly for all involved. The room, which had felt crowded with history a moment before, suddenly seemed to expand, as if the night itself was pulling back the curtain to reveal the real stage—the room behind the room, the space where deals were sealed with more than words and where old friends could become enemies without a single shout. And then, as if in response to an unseen cue, a soft, insistent rustle sounded from the bookshelf. The door did not slide open with a dramatic sigh; it yielded with the quiet, precise ease of a weapon being drawn from its sheath. The room’s back light flickered once, twice, and in that flicker a figure stepped through, not a stranger but someone the Nest’s occupants knew by a different name. The newcomer’s face registered first as a shadow of recognition before it snapped into a memory’s shape. A second of silence—heavy, deliberate. The green glow threw hard angles across the man’s jaw, across the sleeve’s crease and the careful, measured steps. The atmosphere thickened, a glass of water left to shake on a wobbly table. Silas straightened his shoulders, the old spy’s instinct waking with a dry click in his chest. Rory’s fingers closed around the edge of the bar, not in fear but in a steady grip that said she was ready to act, to protect what mattered, to pay a debt that would not forgive itself. The room existed for moments like this, a crucible where past promises and present choices collided with the quiet, inevitable force of consequence. The two old friends—no longer simply Rory and Silas, but Rory and Silas as they had once been, and as they were becoming again—stood in the glow of a sign that never forgot what it had witnessed. In that suspended breath, the door behind the bookshelf shifted again, and the air grew dense with a new danger, the kind that arrives when old loyalties are tested and time itself seems to lean in to watch the outcome. The figure in the doorway stepped forward, and the scene’s electricity sharpened to a single, bright line: a choice would be made, and the choice would change what they could become, what they could lose, and what they would never be able to forget. The first word breaking the tense silence did not come from Rory or Silas, but from the bar itself, as if the old room’s walls finally chose to speak in a voice that could not be ignored. The word was not a shout, not a warning, but a promise: the night had just begun. And the room’s shadowed door, once merely a quiet secret, stood ready to admit whatever fate chose to walk through.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags30
adverbTagCount3
adverbTags
0"she said finally [finally]"
1"Rory said softly [softly]"
2"Silas finally spoke [finally]"
dialogueSentences50
tagDensity0.6
leniency1
rawRatio0.1
effectiveRatio0.1
82.76% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount3480
totalAiIsmAdverbs12
found
0
adverb"very"
count1
1
adverb"slowly"
count1
2
adverb"really"
count2
3
adverb"completely"
count1
4
adverb"suddenly"
count2
5
adverb"quickly"
count1
6
adverb"gently"
count1
7
adverb"softly"
count1
8
adverb"deliberately"
count1
9
adverb"truly"
count1
highlights
0"very"
1"slowly"
2"really"
3"completely"
4"suddenly"
5"quickly"
6"gently"
7"softly"
8"deliberately"
9"truly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (16 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
0"Blackwood"
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
49.71% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount3480
totalAiIsms35
found
0
word"familiar"
count3
1
word"glint"
count1
2
word"unspoken"
count2
3
word"velvet"
count1
4
word"weight"
count8
5
word"measured"
count2
6
word"soft ache"
count1
7
word"silence"
count4
8
word"trembled"
count1
9
word"flickered"
count2
10
word"reminder"
count2
11
word"etched"
count1
12
word"flicker"
count2
13
word"tenderness"
count1
14
word"footfall"
count1
15
word"echoed"
count1
16
word"flicked"
count1
17
word"calculated"
count1
highlights
0"familiar"
1"glint"
2"unspoken"
3"velvet"
4"weight"
5"measured"
6"soft ache"
7"silence"
8"trembled"
9"flickered"
10"reminder"
11"etched"
12"flicker"
13"tenderness"
14"footfall"
15"echoed"
16"flicked"
17"calculated"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells1
narrationSentences116
matches
0"t in fear"
68.97% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount6
narrationSentences116
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
1"began to"
2"seems to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences136
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen56
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords3451
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions44
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions52
wordCount2762
uniqueNames11
maxNameDensity0.76
worstName"Silas"
maxWindowNameDensity2
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
Rory15
Raven1
Nest5
Silas21
Cardiff3
Prague2
Golden1
Empress1
London1
Evan1
Thames1
persons
0"Rory"
1"Nest"
2"Silas"
3"Evan"
places
0"Raven"
1"Cardiff"
2"Prague"
3"London"
4"Thames"
globalScore1
windowScore1
0.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences111
glossingSentenceCount9
matches
0"quite die"
1"felt like someone else’s"
2"sounded like a hand bracing against a balc"
3"felt like a shared lockpick she could n"
4"as if trading in a shadow economy, his eyes narrowing"
5"as if stepping through a door that only supposed itself to be closed"
6"as if reading a page the other could not quite see"
7"not quite see"
8"not quite a question, not quite a statement, a soft anchor dropped into a sea of shifting intentions"
9"not quite a statement, a soft anchor dropped into a sea of shifting intentions"
10"as if naming her were a test of which memory was most valuable"
0.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches15
per1kWords4.347
wordCount3451
matches
0"not loud, but the word stretched"
1"not as a trap but as a test"
2"not visible on the face but lived in the tremor of her fingers as they brushed the scar"
3"not to him but to the memory of the Cardiff nights"
4"not mine alone to answer,” she said at last, not meeting his gaze, “but I need to know if you still remember the night Prague change"
5"not meeting his gaze, “but I need to know if you still remember the night Prague change"
6"not tilt again, but the air between them shifted, as if the old gravity had sudd"
7"neither man nor"
8"Not for the sake of nostalgia, but for necessity"
9"not a private theatre but a bar"
10"not to provoke but to assert the boundary"
11"not a stranger but someone the Nest’s occupants knew by a different name"
12"not in fear but in a steady grip"
13"not a shout, not a warning, but a promise: the night had just begun"
14"not a warning, but a promise: the night had just begun"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences136
matches(empty)
54.42% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs56
mean61.63
std20.98
cv0.34
sampleLengths
0108
1114
229
339
489
547
686
754
860
976
1042
1175
1226
1385
1467
1593
1659
1751
1865
1945
2078
2174
2239
23104
2471
2559
2663
2765
2881
2979
3060
3129
3259
3368
3459
3518
3671
3753
3876
3966
4053
4145
4262
4369
4433
4524
4617
4762
4852
4955
90.14% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount5
totalSentences116
matches
0"been sheathed"
1"been mistaken"
2"were sealed"
3"being drawn"
4"are tested"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount6
totalVerbs434
matches
0"were testing"
1"were trying"
2"was not gossiping"
3"was standing"
4"was pulling"
5"were becoming"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount17
semicolonCount12
flaggedSentences24
totalSentences136
ratio0.176
matches
0"A breath of wool and menthol clung to her jacket; she did not look for the familiar, but there he was, as if he’d never left the chair behind the bar."
1"A shelf near the back hid a door that could slide open with a quiet click, and Rory knew the trick of it; she had watched Silas use it to convene people who didn’t belong to the ordinary hours."
2"The chair opposite him pulled away with a penny-bite of noise and for a moment she saw a different Silas—the one who had cut a path through Prague as if the city itself were a chessboard and he a player who never forgot a square."
3"Now, the knee told him when to hold still; a limp stitched into the rhythm of the night and the cigars and the old maps that lined the room like witnesses."
4"She did not answer with a name; she answered with a movement: a quick, almost unnoticeable shift of the shoulder, a touch of the scar on her wrist, the way her eyes slid toward the back room with a learned, almost habitual caution."
5"The back room—a bookshelf door, a room beyond, a place that had saved more secrets than a dozen nervous confessions could swallow."
6"A bottle clinked somewhere in the room and a man’s laugh rose—thin, too loud, almost a mistake—before dropping back into silence."
7"She did not explain what debt she meant; she let it hang there, crowded with old answers and unspoken apologies."
8"The room’s door—the bookshelf one—trembled, just barely, as if someone in the back shook their head in warning."
9"Prague—an old, bright memory that had once flickered through them as if it belonged to a different life, not the one they’d pinched into their pockets and taken on as if it were a passport."
10"He’d been there; he’d known the risk; he’d carried a weight far heavier than most men his age would admit in a room like this."
11"The memory pressed against her—Evan, the ex who had become a weather system you couldn’t predict but couldn’t outrun."
12"The bookshelf door wasn’t an invitation tonight; it was a warning."
13"The gesture was not for show; it was a reinforcement of a promise he had learned long ago: some doors open only when you are ready to walk through them with your eyes open."
14"A footfall—light, deliberate—came from the hall behind them, the source only a silhouette, a shadow in the doorway of the back room."
15"“Time’s up, Spymaster,” a voice drawled—young and too confident, the kind of voice that believed secrets were simply currency to be spent."
16"The intruder’s presence did not back away; it pressed forward, as if stepping through a door that only supposed itself to be closed."
17"The man wore a tailored coat that had seen too many winters, the edge of a sleeve catching the neon with a gleam that suggested a weapon or a badge or something else entirely—something not meant for polite company."
18"Silas’s hand did not tremble as the stranger’s presence sharpened the room’s focus; he moved with a careful, quiet poise that did not forgive a needless risk."
19"Then he smiled again, not kind, not cruel—simply a calculated expression designed to measure the risk of a decision that could end badly for all involved."
20"The room, which had felt crowded with history a moment before, suddenly seemed to expand, as if the night itself was pulling back the curtain to reveal the real stage—the room behind the room, the space where deals were sealed with more than words and where old friends could become enemies without a single shout."
21"The door did not slide open with a dramatic sigh; it yielded with the quiet, precise ease of a weapon being drawn from its sheath."
22"A second of silence—heavy, deliberate."
23"The two old friends—no longer simply Rory and Silas, but Rory and Silas as they had once been, and as they were becoming again—stood in the glow of a sign that never forgot what it had witnessed."
97.30% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount2785
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount120
adverbRatio0.04308797127468582
lyAdverbCount31
lyAdverbRatio0.011131059245960502
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences136
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences136
mean25.38
std11.74
cv0.463
sampleLengths
042
131
235
319
420
539
636
729
839
98
105
1145
1231
1341
146
1528
1637
1721
1854
1919
2023
2118
2211
2343
2422
2531
2611
2729
288
2924
3014
3115
3211
3354
3431
3521
3619
3727
3812
3937
4044
4124
4215
4320
4418
4525
468
4744
4821
4920
36.76% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats18
diversityRatio0.2647058823529412
totalSentences136
uniqueOpeners36
57.47% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount2
totalSentences116
matches
0"Instead, she looked at him"
1"Then he smiled again, not"
ratio0.017
82.07% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount40
totalSentences116
matches
0"she replied, letting his nickname"
1"He did not rise from"
2"He did not need to."
3"he observed, eyes sliding to"
4"she said, though the words"
5"She set the bag on"
6"He leaned into the bar,"
7"She did not answer with"
8"She looked at him then,"
9"Her breath came out in"
10"she said, her voice quiet"
11"he said, and the corner"
12"Her answer came in the"
13"she said, and the words"
14"He paused, the words hanging"
15"She met the weight of"
16"she said finally, the single"
17"She did not explain what"
18"It was standing by the"
19"she added, speaking not to"
ratio0.345
0.00% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount108
totalSentences116
matches
0"The bell above the door"
1"A breath of wool and"
2"Silas lifted his head, the"
3"The Nest was quiet in"
4"The walls wore their years"
5"A shelf near the back"
6"Tonight, the door would stay"
7"Silas said, not loud, but"
8"she replied, letting his nickname"
9"He did not rise from"
10"He did not need to."
11"The chair opposite him pulled"
12"he observed, eyes sliding to"
13"she said, though the words"
14"The line stung the way"
15"She set the bag on"
16"The air between them began"
17"Silas said, his voice low"
18"He leaned into the bar,"
19"The question landed, not as"
ratio0.931
43.10% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences116
matches
0"Now, the knee told him"
ratio0.009
0.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences79
technicalSentenceCount26
matches
0"The walls wore their years like a uniform: coffee rings, smudges, a swirl of cigarette smoke that wouldn’t quite die."
1"Tonight, the door would stay quiet, or so she told herself as the neon hummed and the air tasted faintly of lime and something sharper, a citrus that had become…"
2"The chair opposite him pulled away with a penny-bite of noise and for a moment she saw a different Silas—the one who had cut a path through Prague as if the cit…"
3"Now, the knee told him when to hold still; a limp stitched into the rhythm of the night and the cigars and the old maps that lined the room like witnesses."
4"The air between them began to pull tight, a rope drawn taut with years of unspoken weather between two people who had learned to move in the same rooms without …"
5"The back room—a bookshelf door, a room beyond, a place that had saved more secrets than a dozen nervous confessions could swallow."
6"Her answer came in the form of a slow exhale, a soft ache that was not visible on the face but lived in the tremor of her fingers as they brushed the scar again…"
7"Rory’s gaze moved, not hurried, to the shelf behind Silas, to the small, secret door that could swing open like a mouth that knew all your secrets."
8"Prague—an old, bright memory that had once flickered through them as if it belonged to a different life, not the one they’d pinched into their pockets and taken…"
9"She could have spoken of the years between Cardiff’s quiet desperation and London’s restless towers, of the way she’d learned to move unseen, of the job that pa…"
10"She could have told him that she’d learned to disappear behind a name, to vanish into a city’s night and reappear somewhere else as if she’d never left the old …"
11"Silas straightened, as if the back-room door itself had just exhaled a sigh and reminded him of the duties that still tethered him to the old life he’d never fu…"
12"She spoke with a careful practicality that still carried the tenderness of someone who had learned to trust in a crisis more than in a claimed certainty."
13"The words hung, heavy, and the Nest’s soft murmur grew louder as if the building itself leaned closer."
14"The neon buzzed, the maps on the wall rustled, and the quiet in the back room grew more intimate, more dangerous, as if it held a handful of witnesses to someth…"
15"The silhouette paused, waited, and then someone cleared their throat deliberately, as if to remind them all that this was not a private theatre but a bar that k…"
16"The silhouette emerged into the dim bar light, and the room shifted again as if the air itself rearranged around a repurposed threat."
17"The man wore a tailored coat that had seen too many winters, the edge of a sleeve catching the neon with a gleam that suggested a weapon or a badge or something…"
18"Rory’s breath caught in her chest, a sound that could have been mistaken for a sigh of relief or a sneeze of fear, and she steadied herself by the bar, by the w…"
19"Silas’s hand did not tremble as the stranger’s presence sharpened the room’s focus; he moved with a careful, quiet poise that did not forgive a needless risk."
20"The stranger’s lips curled into a half-smile that didn’t reach his eyes."
21"The stranger’s gaze flicked to the bookshelf, to the secret door, to the room that had once hidden more truth than any other space could hold."
22"Then he smiled again, not kind, not cruel—simply a calculated expression designed to measure the risk of a decision that could end badly for all involved."
23"The room, which had felt crowded with history a moment before, suddenly seemed to expand, as if the night itself was pulling back the curtain to reveal the real…"
24"And then, as if in response to an unseen cue, a soft, insistent rustle sounded from the bookshelf."
25"In that suspended breath, the door behind the bookshelf shifted again, and the air grew dense with a new danger, the kind that arrives when old loyalties are te…"
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags30
uselessAdditionCount9
matches
0"she said, though the words felt old and half-remembered, as though she’d rehearsed a dozen times to tell the truth without spilling it all"
1"she said, and the words felt like a shared lockpick she could no longer use without someone on the other side knowing her by heart"
2"Silas said, not looking away from her"
3"she said, not meeting his gaze,"
4"he said, and the phrase sounded almost like a reminder to himself"
5"Rory said softly, not accusing, only stating what she could not deny"
6"Silas said, his tone returning to business that never left his bones"
7"he replied, as if trading in a shadow economy, his eyes narrowing"
8"the stranger echoed, as if naming her were a test of which memory was most valuable"
53.85% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags26
fancyCount5
fancyTags
0"he observed (observe)"
1"she added (add)"
2"Silas murmured (murmur)"
3"a voice drawled— (drawl)"
4"Silas finally spoke (speak)"
dialogueSentences50
tagDensity0.52
leniency1
rawRatio0.192
effectiveRatio0.192
67.2183%