Run: 2026-02-19-01KHTXERGBBVK4QA40N93RBK2W

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Duration:
34.1s
Cost:
$0.064750
Provider:
Amazon Bedrock

Model input

System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Horror genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the horror genre. A character is alone in a strange, isolated place at night. They came here for a reason, but something feels off from the moment they arrive. The wrongness builds slowly — sounds that shouldn't be there, things that move at the edge of vision, a growing certainty that they are not alone. Build tension through restraint, not through gore. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for the character and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The standing stones loomed darker than the night itself, ancient oaks petrified into sentinels that had witnessed centuries of secrets. Aurora pressed her palm against the nearest one, expecting rough bark, finding instead something that felt almost like skin. Cold skin. She pulled her hand back. The Heartstone pendant pulsed once against her collarbone. Warm. Too warm. She shouldn't have come alone. Eva had offered, practically begged to join her, but the message had been clear. *Come to the grove at midnight. Come alone. We have answers about your pendant.* No signature. No return address. Just those words scrawled on parchment that smelled of woodsmoke and something sweeter, something that made her think of her grandmother's garden in summer. Wildflowers carpeted the clearing, their petals catching what little moonlight filtered through the canopy above. They shouldn't be blooming. It was February, and snow had dusted London's streets just that morning. Yet here, primroses and foxgloves swayed in a breeze Aurora couldn't feel, their colours muted to shades of grey in the darkness but somehow still visible, still *present* in a way that ordinary flowers weren't. She checked her phone. No signal. The screen showed 12:03, but when she glanced away and back again, it read 11:58. Then 12:47. Then nothing at all, just black glass reflecting her own pale face. "Hello?" Her voice didn't echo. It should have echoed. The clearing wasn't that large, perhaps fifty metres across, ringed by those impossible standing stones and the press of Richmond Park's ancient trees beyond. Sound should have bounced, reverberated, done something other than simply stop, swallowed by the waiting dark. The pendant pulsed again. Warmer still. Aurora moved deeper into the grove, each step crushing wildflowers that released no scent. The grass beneath felt wrong too, spongy and yielding like walking on something recently dead. She'd grown up in Cardiff, spent summers hiking the Brecon Beacons with her father, learned to read terrain before she learned to read contracts. This ground shouldn't feel like this. It felt hollow. It felt like it was waiting. Something rustled to her left. She spun. Nothing. Just more flowers, more darkness, more of that oppressive silence that pressed against her eardrums like deep water. "I got your message." She forced steel into her voice. "I'm here. So show yourself." The rustling came again, closer now. Behind her. She didn't turn this time. Wouldn't give whatever it was the satisfaction. Instead, she reached up and wrapped her fingers around the pendant, felt its heat seep into her palm. It had never been this warm before. Not even when she'd accidentally wandered too close to that crack in the Underground station, the one that smelled of sulphur and screamed with voices just below human hearing. "Rory." Her name, whispered from everywhere and nowhere. A voice like wind through dead leaves, like the creak of a door in an empty house, like the last breath of something that had forgotten how to breathe. "Who's there?" "Rory." Closer now. "Pretty pendant. Pretty Rory." The flowers around her feet began to wilt. Not slowly, not naturally, but in rapid decay, petals curling black and stems collapsing inward like the grove itself was dying. The rot spread outward from where she stood, racing toward the standing stones in a perfect circle. She ran. The stones seemed further away than before, the clearing stretching like taffy, like a nightmare, like the space between heartbeats when you knew something terrible was about to happen. Her feet tangled in dead stalks. Her lungs burned with air that tasted of copper and grave dirt. The pendant seared against her chest, burning through her shirt, but she didn't dare let go. "Running running running." The voice sang now, a nursery rhyme cadence that made Aurora's skin crawl. "Little lamb, little lamb, where will you go?" She reached the nearest standing stone and pressed her back against it. The not-bark-not-skin texture scraped through her jacket, but she didn't care. She needed something solid, something real, something to prove she hadn't lost her mind entirely. The singing stopped. Silence flooded back, thicker than before. Aurora's breath came in ragged gasps that fogged in front of her face, each exhale hanging longer than it should in air that had grown suddenly, bitterly cold. And then she saw it. At the centre of the clearing, where she'd stood moments ago, the ground had opened. Not a hole, not a crack, but an absence. A space where reality simply wasn't anymore. It was blacker than the night, blacker than the shadows between stars, and it pulsed with a rhythm that matched her heartbeat exactly. The pendant responded. It yanked against its chain, straining toward that void like a compass needle drawn to magnetic north. "Found you." The voice came from the darkness. From *inside* the darkness. "Took so long to find you. So many years. So many false trails." Aurora's fingers found the crescent scar on her wrist, the one from when she was seven, the one she'd told everyone came from falling through a greenhouse window. But she remembered the truth. Remembered the thing in her bedroom that night. Remembered how her grandmother had burst through the door with something silver in her hand, screaming words Aurora hadn't understood. Remembered her grandmother pressing the pendant into her palm the next morning, making her promise to never take it off, never let anyone see it, never speak of what had happened. Her grandmother had been dead for three years now. But someone had sent that message. Someone had known. "I can smell her on you." The void pulsed wider, and something began to emerge. Not a face, not a form, just angles that hurt to look at, geometries that didn't exist in any world Aurora understood. "Eleanor's blood. Eleanor's binding. Did she think it would last forever? Did she think I wouldn't find a way?" The name hit Aurora like a punch. Eleanor. Her grandmother's name. "She's gone." Her voice cracked. "Whatever you want from her—" "Not from her." The angles shifted, assembled themselves into something almost like a smile. "From you. Always from you. She just borrowed time. Stole my due. Locked me away with blood and silver and promises that rot like everything else." The pendant burned. Aurora smelled her own flesh cooking, felt blisters rising on her chest, but still couldn't let go. Wouldn't let go. Whatever her grandmother had done, whatever this thing was, the pendant mattered. It had always mattered. "Eighteen years." The void reached the standing stones now, lapping at them like dark water. "Eighteen years I waited. Eighteen years I whispered through the cracks, searching, calling. And you finally heard. You finally came." The message. The parchment that smelled like summer gardens, like safety, like every good memory of her grandmother's cottage in Pembrokeshire. She hadn't been summoned by an ally. She'd been lured by a trap. The darkness surged forward, and Aurora screamed as the pendant exploded with crimson light.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags7
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences19
tagDensity0.368
leniency0.737
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
91.45% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1170
totalAiIsmAdverbs2
found
0
adverb"slowly"
count1
1
adverb"suddenly"
count1
highlights
0"slowly"
1"suddenly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
31.62% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1170
totalAiIsms16
found
0
word"loomed"
count1
1
word"sentinels"
count1
2
word"pulsed"
count4
3
word"echo"
count1
4
word"echoed"
count1
5
word"reverberated"
count1
6
word"oppressive"
count1
7
word"silence"
count2
8
word"racing"
count1
9
word"perfect"
count1
10
word"grave"
count1
11
word"magnetic"
count1
highlights
0"loomed"
1"sentinels"
2"pulsed"
3"echo"
4"echoed"
5"reverberated"
6"oppressive"
7"silence"
8"racing"
9"perfect"
10"grave"
11"magnetic"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences100
matches(empty)
85.71% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount2
hedgeCount2
narrationSentences100
filterMatches
0"think"
1"see"
hedgeMatches
0"began to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences111
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen36
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans3
markdownWords16
totalWords1167
ratio0.014
matches
0"Come to the grove at midnight. Come alone. We have answers about your pendant."
1"present"
2"inside"
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions7
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
83.33% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions24
wordCount1040
uniqueNames12
maxNameDensity1.06
worstName"Aurora"
maxWindowNameDensity2.5
worstWindowName"Aurora"
discoveredNames
Heartstone1
February1
London1
Aurora11
Richmond1
Park1
Cardiff1
Brecon1
Beacons1
Underground1
Pembrokeshire1
Remembered3
persons
0"Aurora"
places
0"London"
1"Richmond"
2"Park"
3"Cardiff"
4"Underground"
5"Pembrokeshire"
globalScore0.971
windowScore0.833
71.88% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences64
glossingSentenceCount2
matches
0"felt like it was waiting"
1"smelled like summer gardens, like safety,"
0.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches6
per1kWords5.141
wordCount1167
matches
0"Not slowly, not naturally, but in rapid decay, petals curling black"
1"not naturally, but in rapid decay, petals curling black"
2"not-bark-not-skin texture scraped through her jacket, but she didn't care"
3"not-skin texture scraped through her jacket, but she didn't care"
4"Not a hole, not a crack, but an absence"
5"not a crack, but an absence"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences111
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs42
mean27.79
std21.45
cv0.772
sampleLengths
046
111
262
366
435
51
648
76
868
95
1021
1115
128
1366
141
1536
162
177
1846
192
2063
2124
2238
233
2434
255
2654
2720
2825
2961
3031
3118
3256
3311
3410
3540
3639
3735
3821
397
406
4114
98.25% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount2
totalSentences100
matches
0"been summoned"
1"been lured"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount2
totalVerbs186
matches
0"was waiting"
1"was dying"
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences0
totalSentences111
ratio0
matches(empty)
91.38% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1043
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount52
adverbRatio0.04985618408437201
lyAdverbCount12
lyAdverbRatio0.011505273250239693
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences111
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences111
mean10.51
std8.23
cv0.782
sampleLengths
020
119
22
35
48
51
62
75
814
96
102
118
123
1324
1415
154
1612
1735
184
192
2015
212
2212
231
244
254
2624
2716
284
292
3014
3115
3224
336
343
356
365
372
381
3918
4010
415
426
432
445
457
4618
477
4829
491
60.06% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats10
diversityRatio0.4144144144144144
totalSentences111
uniqueOpeners46
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount4
totalSentences86
matches
0"Just those words scrawled on"
1"Then nothing at all, just"
2"Just more flowers, more darkness,"
3"Instead, she reached up and"
ratio0.047
94.42% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount27
totalSentences86
matches
0"She pulled her hand back."
1"She shouldn't have come alone."
2"We have answers about your"
3"They shouldn't be blooming."
4"It was February, and snow"
5"She checked her phone."
6"Her voice didn't echo."
7"It should have echoed."
8"She'd grown up in Cardiff,"
9"It felt hollow."
10"It felt like it was"
11"She forced steel into her"
12"She didn't turn this time."
13"It had never been this"
14"Her name, whispered from everywhere"
15"Her feet tangled in dead"
16"Her lungs burned with air"
17"She reached the nearest standing"
18"She needed something solid, something"
19"It was blacker than the"
ratio0.314
82.09% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount65
totalSentences86
matches
0"The standing stones loomed darker"
1"Aurora pressed her palm against"
2"She pulled her hand back."
3"The Heartstone pendant pulsed once"
4"She shouldn't have come alone."
5"Eva had offered, practically begged"
6"We have answers about your"
7"Wildflowers carpeted the clearing, their"
8"They shouldn't be blooming."
9"It was February, and snow"
10"She checked her phone."
11"The screen showed 12:03, but"
12"Her voice didn't echo."
13"It should have echoed."
14"The clearing wasn't that large,"
15"Sound should have bounced, reverberated,"
16"The pendant pulsed again."
17"Aurora moved deeper into the"
18"The grass beneath felt wrong"
19"She'd grown up in Cardiff,"
ratio0.756
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences86
matches(empty)
ratio0
11.28% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences38
technicalSentenceCount7
matches
0"The standing stones loomed darker than the night itself, ancient oaks petrified into sentinels that had witnessed centuries of secrets."
1"Aurora pressed her palm against the nearest one, expecting rough bark, finding instead something that felt almost like skin."
2"Just those words scrawled on parchment that smelled of woodsmoke and something sweeter, something that made her think of her grandmother's garden in summer."
3"A voice like wind through dead leaves, like the creak of a door in an empty house, like the last breath of something that had forgotten how to breathe."
4"Aurora's breath came in ragged gasps that fogged in front of her face, each exhale hanging longer than it should in air that had grown suddenly, bitterly cold."
5"Remembered her grandmother pressing the pendant into her palm the next morning, making her promise to never take it off, never let anyone see it, never speak of…"
6"The parchment that smelled like summer gardens, like safety, like every good memory of her grandmother's cottage in Pembrokeshire."
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags7
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
97.37% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags1
fancyCount1
fancyTags
0"The voice sang (sing)"
dialogueSentences19
tagDensity0.053
leniency0.105
rawRatio1
effectiveRatio0.105
83.2946%