Run: 2026-02-19-01KHTXFAF4MBXB6F1YQ8PFX01Y

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2m 59s
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$0.002090
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You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Literary Fiction genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4413" name="Silas Blackwood" aliases="Silas, Si, the Spymaster" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Mentor"> <eyeColor>hazel</eyeColor> <hair>grey-streaked auburn</hair> <height>6'1"</height> <age>58</age> <beard>neatly trimmed, matching his grey-streaked auburn hair</beard> <limp>slight limp in his left leg from an old knee injury</limp> <signetRing>silver signet ring, always worn on his right hand</signetRing> <description>Silas is a retired intelligence operative turned bar owner. He carries himself with quiet authority.</description> <backstory>Former MI6 field agent who retired after a botched operation in Prague left him with a permanent knee injury. He opened "The Raven's Nest" bar in Soho as a front for his network of contacts.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the literary fiction genre. Two old friends who haven't seen each other in years run into each other unexpectedly at a bar. One of them has changed significantly. Through their conversation and the tension between who they were and who they've become, reveal the weight of time and unspoken regret. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The scent of stale beer and old wood soaked into everything in The Raven's Nest. Rory wiped down the counter for the third time, the damp rag pushing grit across the polished oak in gritty, useless circles. Silas had asked her to watch the bar for an hour while he made a call. Said it was about a plumbing invoice, but his knuckles had been white around the phone. A man entered. He moved all wrong. Not a regular. Regulars slid in like they were part of the furniture, with a weary familiarity that matched the dim light. This one paused on the threshold, his eyes scanning the room with a quick, tactical sweep. He clocked the exits first—the main door, the fire exit by the toilets, the staff-only door behind her. Then the patrons. Finally, his gaze settled on her. A cold, hard knot formed in Rory’s stomach. She knew that face. Older now, lines etched around the mouth and across a broad forehead that had once been smooth. The lean, hungry build of a twenty-year-old had filled out into solid, compact muscle beneath a dark grey wool coat. But the eyes were the same. A flat, watchful grey. Connor Flynn. He’d been in her law lectures at Cardiff. The quiet one from Belfast who quoted obscure political theorists and could dismantle an argument with terrifying, surgical precision. They’d shared coffees and conspiratorial whispers in the library, two misfits in a sea of polished future barristers. He’d vanished after their second year. Dropped out. No forwarding address. He saw the recognition in her face. A ghost of a smile touched his lips, but it didn’t reach his eyes. He approached the bar, his movements economical, controlled. “Aurora Carter.” His voice was deeper, rougher around the edges. A Belfast accent that had been softened by university was now pronounced again, each syllable a deliberate choice. “Connor.” She kept her tone neutral, her hands busy beneath the counter. They were steady. Good. “Long way from the law library.” “Aye. Different kind of jurisprudence these days.” He didn’t sit. He stood, his coat still on, a wall of quiet intensity separating them from the low hum of the bar. The man at the end nursing a Guinness gave them a sidelong glance, then wisely returned to his paper. “Whiskey,” Connor said. “Neat.” She reached for the mid-shelf Scotch. His hand, resting on the bar, twitched. “The Jameson. If you have it.” She did. She poured two fingers into a clean glass, the amber liquid catching the green glow of the neon sign in the window. She set it before him. He didn’t touch it. “You’re looking well, Rory.” “No one calls me that anymore.” “I do.” He finally picked up the glass, held it to the light. “Remember the debate? The one on Just War theory?” “You argued that all war was criminal. That the state had no moral authority to send its citizens to die.” “And you argued that in a flawed world, sometimes the only choice was between terrible and catastrophic.” He took a sip, his eyes never leaving hers. “I think about that a lot.” “Which part?” “How sure we were. How clear it all seemed on paper.” He set the glass down with a soft *click*. “The world gets… granular, doesn’t it? Up close.” “What do you do now, Connor?” “Security.” The word was a stone dropped into a pond. “Consultancy.” “You consult on security.” She leaned her hip against the back counter, folding her arms. The crescent scar on her wrist itched. “And that brings you to a backstreet Soho bar on a Tuesday night.” “It brings me to see an old friend.” “We weren’t friends. We were allies. There’s a difference.” His smile this time was genuine, and it transformed his face, bringing back the sharp, clever boy she remembered. It vanished as quickly as it appeared. “Still cutting to the quick. Good. You’ll need that.” A chill that had nothing to do with the draught from the door traced her spine. “Need it for what?” He ignored the question. His gaze drifted past her shoulder, towards the bookshelf that hid Silas’s private room. “This is a good place. Quiet. Off the beaten track. A man could have a private conversation here.” “Or a woman.” “Or a woman,” he conceded. He finished his whiskey. “I heard about your situation. With Evan.” The name hung between them, ugly and raw. She hadn’t heard it spoken aloud in months. Her jaw tightened. “That’s none of your business.” “It became my business when your file crossed my desk.” The air left the room. The low chatter from the corner, the clink of glass, the hum of the cooler—all of it receded into a dull, throbbing silence. *File*. “What file?” “Due diligence. Standard vetting procedure.” “Vetting for *what*?” He reached into his inner coat pocket. She tensed, her fingers curling around the handle of a bottle opener below the bar. He saw the movement and slowed, pulling out a simple, cream-coloured business card. He placed it on the damp wood between them. There was no company name. Just a phone number, engraved. “A friend of mine is looking for someone with your particular skillset,” he said. His voice was low, almost intimate. “Analytical mind. Resilience. A certain… disregard for conventional career paths.” “I deliver dumplings.” “You have a first-class legal mind gathering dust. You left a toxic situation and rebuilt a life in a new city with no support network. That speaks to operational flexibility.” He said it like he was reading from a report. “You’re also currently standing in for a retired MI6 officer, which suggests he trusts your discretion.” The chill solidified into ice. She kept her face utterly blank, the way Silas had taught her. *Don’t give them a thing. Not a flicker.* “I don’t know what you’re talking about.” “Of course you don’t.” He didn’t press it. He tapped the card once with his forefinger. “The work is… sensitive. It pays well. Very well. It would use the parts of your brain that are currently atrophying.” “And what parts would those be, Connor? The part that believes in justice? Or the part you sold?” The flat grey eyes hardened. The friendly ghost was gone, replaced entirely by the man in the wool coat. “The world isn’t a debate hall, Rory. The choices aren’t between terrible and catastrophic. They’re between catastrophic and necessary. I chose necessary.” “And what did it cost you?” For the first time, he looked away. His gaze travelled over the framed maps on the wall, the black-and-white photos of a London that no longer existed. He looked, she realised, like a man viewing a museum exhibit of a life he could no longer inhabit. “Everything worth having,” he said, so quietly she almost didn’t hear it. Then he straightened, the moment gone. “The number is active for seventy-two hours. After that, it’s dead. The offer expires.” “I’m not interested in your shadow war.” “It’s not a war. It’s tidying up.” He pushed the card an inch closer to her. “Think about who you’re working for now. A spymaster in a pub. Running errands for a restaurant. Is that the life you fled Cardiff for? To be an errand girl for other people’s secrets?” His words were a scalpel, precise and cruel. They found the quiet, shameful fear she buried every morning. “Get out.” He nodded, as if he’d expected nothing else. He turned to leave, then paused, looking back at her. The neon sign painted his profile in lurid green and shadow. “We argued about morality, back then,” he said. “But we never talked about utility. What use is a good conscience if it’s all you have left at the end of the day?” He pulled his coat tighter. “Seventy-two hours, Aurora.” He walked out, melting into the Soho night without a backward glance. Rory stared at the card. A phone number. A countdown. She picked it up. It was thick, expensive cardstock. The engraved numbers were sharp under her thumb. The staff door opened. Silas emerged, his limp more pronounced. He took in her posture, the card in her hand, the empty space where Connor had stood. “Trouble?” She looked from the card to Silas’s weary, knowing face. The mentor. The safe harbour. The man whose secrets were slowly becoming her own. “An old friend,” she said, her voice strangely calm. “Offering me a job.” Silas’s hazel eyes narrowed. He didn’t ask for details. He just looked at the card, then at the door, and his expression turned grim. “They always come back,” he said softly. “The ones who walk into the dark. They always try to bring someone with them.” She slipped the card into her jeans pocket. The engraved numbers felt like a brand against her thigh. Seventy-two hours. The choice, it seemed, was no longer between terrible and catastrophic. It was between the devil she knew, and the one who used to quote philosophy in the library.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags17
adverbTagCount1
adverbTags
0"he said softly [softly]"
dialogueSentences60
tagDensity0.283
leniency0.567
rawRatio0.059
effectiveRatio0.033
83.55% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1520
totalAiIsmAdverbs5
found
0
adverb"quickly"
count1
1
adverb"utterly"
count1
2
adverb"very"
count1
3
adverb"slowly"
count1
4
adverb"softly"
count1
highlights
0"quickly"
1"utterly"
2"very"
3"slowly"
4"softly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (16 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
0"Blackwood"
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
67.11% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1520
totalAiIsms10
found
0
word"scanning"
count1
1
word"stomach"
count1
2
word"etched"
count1
3
word"intensity"
count1
4
word"chill"
count2
5
word"traced"
count1
6
word"silence"
count1
7
word"standard"
count1
8
word"flicker"
count1
highlights
0"scanning"
1"stomach"
2"etched"
3"intensity"
4"chill"
5"traced"
6"silence"
7"standard"
8"flicker"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"eyes widened/narrowed"
count1
highlights
0"eyes narrowed"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences116
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences116
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences159
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen41
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans4
markdownWords11
totalWords1508
ratio0.007
matches
0"click"
1"File"
2"what"
3"Don’t give them a thing. Not a flicker."
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions16
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions22
wordCount1012
uniqueNames12
maxNameDensity0.59
worstName"Silas"
maxWindowNameDensity1.5
worstWindowName"Silas"
discoveredNames
Raven1
Nest1
Rory3
Flynn1
Cardiff1
Belfast2
Guinness1
Scotch1
Silas6
London1
Soho1
Connor3
persons
0"Rory"
1"Flynn"
2"Guinness"
3"Silas"
4"Connor"
places
0"Raven"
1"Cardiff"
2"Belfast"
3"London"
4"Soho"
globalScore1
windowScore1
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences72
glossingSentenceCount1
matches
0"felt like a brand against her thigh"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1508
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences159
matches
0"knew that face"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs68
mean22.18
std17.01
cv0.767
sampleLengths
069
17
265
359
42
556
629
72
826
922
107
1142
124
1313
146
1533
164
176
1822
1920
2032
212
2228
236
2411
2535
268
279
2835
2920
3036
313
3216
3324
3410
3529
362
375
383
3944
4010
4130
423
4356
4425
457
4637
4718
4841
496
99.21% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount2
totalSentences116
matches
0"been softened"
1"was gone"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount1
totalVerbs162
matches
0"was reading"
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount2
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences2
totalSentences159
ratio0.013
matches
0"He clocked the exits first—the main door, the fire exit by the toilets, the staff-only door behind her."
1"The low chatter from the corner, the clink of glass, the hum of the cooler—all of it receded into a dull, throbbing silence."
93.90% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1022
adjectiveStacks1
stackExamples
0"simple, cream-coloured business"
adverbCount41
adverbRatio0.040117416829745595
lyAdverbCount13
lyAdverbRatio0.012720156555772993
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences159
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences159
mean9.48
std6.88
cv0.726
sampleLengths
015
122
216
316
43
54
63
719
816
918
103
116
128
134
1417
1520
166
174
182
198
2019
2118
226
232
243
257
2614
278
282
298
3018
3112
323
331
346
357
363
3720
3819
393
401
416
427
436
442
4522
465
474
484
496
50.31% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats15
diversityRatio0.3584905660377358
totalSentences159
uniqueOpeners57
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount4
totalSentences104
matches
0"Then the patrons."
1"Finally, his gaze settled on"
2"Just a phone number, engraved."
3"Then he straightened, the moment"
ratio0.038
0.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount58
totalSentences104
matches
0"He moved all wrong."
1"He clocked the exits first—the"
2"She knew that face."
3"He’d been in her law"
4"They’d shared coffees and conspiratorial"
5"He’d vanished after their second"
6"He saw the recognition in"
7"He approached the bar, his"
8"His voice was deeper, rougher"
9"She kept her tone neutral,"
10"They were steady."
11"He didn’t sit."
12"He stood, his coat still"
13"She reached for the mid-shelf"
14"His hand, resting on the"
15"She poured two fingers into"
16"She set it before him."
17"He didn’t touch it."
18"He finally picked up the"
19"He took a sip, his"
ratio0.558
22.50% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount91
totalSentences104
matches
0"The scent of stale beer"
1"Rory wiped down the counter"
2"Silas had asked her to"
3"A man entered."
4"He moved all wrong."
5"Regulars slid in like they"
6"This one paused on the"
7"He clocked the exits first—the"
8"A cold, hard knot formed"
9"She knew that face."
10"The lean, hungry build of"
11"A flat, watchful grey."
12"He’d been in her law"
13"The quiet one from Belfast"
14"They’d shared coffees and conspiratorial"
15"He’d vanished after their second"
16"He saw the recognition in"
17"A ghost of a smile"
18"He approached the bar, his"
19"His voice was deeper, rougher"
ratio0.875
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences104
matches(empty)
ratio0
63.49% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences36
technicalSentenceCount4
matches
0"Regulars slid in like they were part of the furniture, with a weary familiarity that matched the dim light."
1"The quiet one from Belfast who quoted obscure political theorists and could dismantle an argument with terrifying, surgical precision."
2"A Belfast accent that had been softened by university was now pronounced again, each syllable a deliberate choice."
3"His gaze drifted past her shoulder, towards the bookshelf that hid Silas’s private room."
66.18% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags17
uselessAdditionCount2
matches
0"She kept, her hands busy beneath the counter"
1"she said, her voice strangely calm"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags8
fancyCount1
fancyTags
0"he conceded (concede)"
dialogueSentences60
tagDensity0.133
leniency0.267
rawRatio0.125
effectiveRatio0.033
84.8751%