Run: 2026-02-19-01KHTXFPCS4A16YY57R05ZSCM8

Run Details

Duration:
2m 17s
Cost:
$0.017905
Provider:
Novita

Model input

System
You are an expert fiction writer. Always keep the following rules in mind: - Write in past tense and use General English spelling, grammar, and colloquialisms/slang. - Write in active voice - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. - Avoid adverbs and cliches and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Convey events and story through dialogue. - Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. - Skip "he/she said said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech - Avoid mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or add unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Reduce indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" When writing text: - NEVER conclude the scene on your own, follow the beat instructions very closely. - NEVER end with foreshadowing. - NEVER write further than what I prompt you with. - AVOID imagining possible endings, NEVER deviate from the instructions. - STOP EARLY if the continuation contains what was required in the instructions. You do not need to fill out the full amount of words possible.
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> </codex> Continue the story using the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the horror genre. A character is alone in a strange, isolated place at night. They came here for a reason, but something feels off from the moment they arrive. The wrongness builds slowly — sounds that shouldn't be there, things that move at the edge of vision, a growing certainty that they are not alone. Build tension through restraint, not through gore. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for the character and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
Rory's breath fogged in the January air, but the vapor vanished the moment she crossed beneath the oak arch. Richmond Park had loomed behind her, all bare branches and frost-crisped grass, yet here—where the standing stones marked a boundary her eyes struggled to focus on—dandelions poked through soil that smelled of midsummer. She unzipped her jacket. The heat pressed against her cheeks, unnatural, cloying. The Heartstone Pendant thrummed against her sternum. She touched it. The crimson gemstone felt feverish, its silver chain conducting heat straight to the crescent scar on her left wrist. That old childhood mark itched. She had followed the pulse across London. Yu-Fei would dock her wages for abandoning the delivery scooter outside the Pembroke Lodge car park, but the pendant's rhythm had grown insistent, a second heartbeat drowning out the traffic noise from the A307. Now, inside the grove, the stone blazed with an inner glow that painted her fingers red. "Hello?" Her voice fell flat. No echo. The sound died two feet from her lips, swallowed by the wildflowers nodding in a breeze she couldn't feel. The standing stones encircled the clearing, ancient oaks warped into vertical slabs. Rory counted seven. She counted again. Eight. She blinked. The eighth stone hadn't been there a moment ago. It stood closer than the others, its bark etched with spirals that seemed to rotate when she looked away. Her phone screen cracked with static when she checked the time. 11:47 PM. The digits dripped downward like melting wax, reforming into Roman numerals she couldn't read. She pocketed the device. The grove operated on different mathematics. Something rustled. Not the wind. The wildflowers—bluebells and poppies and foxgloves that had no business blooming together, let alone in winter—bent aside as if pressed by passing feet. Rory turned. The path she'd followed through the stones had sealed shut, brambles weaving together in a braid too thick for her delivery satchel to fit through. The pendant pulsed. Once. Hard enough to bruise. She moved deeper into the clearing. Her trainers sank into moss that shouldn't exist in a London park. Each step released the scent of rotting petals and ozone. Above, the stars shone wrong. Orion's belt hung askew, the stars themselves pulsing in time with her pendant. A branch snapped behind her. Rory spun. The eighth stone had moved again. Now it stood ten feet closer, and the spirals carved into its trunk wept sap that smelled like iron. "Is someone there?" The question tasted stupid in her mouth. Of course someone was there. Something was there. The temperature spiked. Sweat beaded along her hairline, matting her black hair to her neck. She backed toward the center of the grove. The wildflowers parted for her, then closed ranks, cutting off retreat. The bluebells chimed like bells when they touched. The sound harmonized with the pendant's vibration in her chest. She reached the center. A flat stone slab lay there, covered in the same crimson shade as her gemstone. The pendant leaped against her skin, pulling toward the altar-like rock. Rory gripped the silver chain, fighting the magnetism. Her knuckles whitened. The crescent scar on her wrist burned. Whispers threaded through the air. Not words—textures. The sound of velvet dragging across stone, of water circling a drain, of Evan's voice in the dark corners of their Cardiff flat before she'd fled to London. The whispers knew her name. They knew about the bar upstairs from Silas' place, about the abusive ex, about the way she checked locks three times before sleeping. "You're not real," she said. Her voice shook. She steadied it. "Projection. Psychological warfare." The eighth stone groaned. It tilted forward, roots tearing from the soil with the wet sound of teeth pulling free from gums. It wasn't a stone. It had never been a stone. The bark split open, revealing not wood but a cavity lined with rows of thorns that curved inward like a lamprey's mouth. Rory ran. She bolted toward the gap between two standing stones, her satchel bouncing against her hip. The wildflowers grabbed at her ankles. Poppy stems wrapped around her left wrist, pressing against the crescent scar. She tore free. Skin peeled. Blood welled. The grove stretched. She sprinted for what felt like minutes, yet the standing stones retreated, maintaining their distance. Her lungs seared. The air had grown thick, honey-sweet, impossible to breathe. She checked over her shoulder. The thing that had pretended to be a stone moved through the wildflowers without disturbing them. It flowed, a vertical slash of darkness that absorbed the starlight. The spirals on its surface rotated now, visibly spinning, creating a vortex that pulled at the edges of her vision. Her phone buzzed. She yanked it out, desperate for signal, for time, for proof that the world outside still existed. The screen displayed a text from Eva, timestamped three days from now: *Don't look at the ninth stone.* Rory's thumb hovered over the reply button. The screen went black. In the glass reflection, something stood behind her left shoulder. Tall. Thin. Smelling of summer and carrion. She didn't turn around. She knew better than to turn around. In every story Silas told over the bar at closing time, turning around was when the teeth closed. The pendant scalded her. She clutched it, using the pain to focus. The stone's glow intensified, casting her shadow forward onto the moss. Her shadow didn't match her posture. It stood upright while she crouched, and it raised an arm that she kept pressed to her side. The whispers coalesced into a voice. It spoke from the flowers, from the soil, from the scar on her wrist. "Laila." Her birth name. The name her mother used when she was angry. The name Evan carved into her fear. "Wrong girl," Rory whispered. She forced her legs to straighten. The shadow mimicked the movement, but with a delay—half a second too slow, like a video buffering. "You have the wrong girl." The ninth stone rose from the earth between her and the exit. It hadn't been there before. It had always been there. The math of the grove shifted, seven becoming eight becoming nine, the geometry of a nightmare where counting offered no safety. The stone cracked open. Inside, something pale uncurled. Fingers. Too many fingers, each jointed backward, reaching toward her with the inevitability of roots finding water. Rory stepped back. Her heel struck the altar stone. The Heartstone Pendant went silent, its warmth vanishing, leaving her chest cold and hollow. The silence was worse than the whispers. In the silence, she heard breathing that wasn't hers—steady, patient, hungry. The fingers from the ninth stone touched the grass. The wildflowers died where they brushed, turning to ash that floated upward instead of falling. Rory pressed her back against the altar. She had nowhere else to go. The grove had shrunk while she wasn't looking, the standing stones now forming a tight circle twenty feet across, a courtroom where she stood accused by things that wore the shapes of trees. Her scar bled. The blood didn't fall. It floated toward the ninth stone, drawn like iron to a magnet. Rory clamped her hand over the wound. The blood seeped between her fingers, warm, steady. The thing that had been the eighth stone spoke. Its voice was the sound of her jacket zipper catching, of delivery scooters backfiring, of Evan's knuckles cracking. "You brought the key." Rory looked down at the pendant. The crimson gemstone had gone black. In its depths, something watched her back. She closed her fist around the chain. The silver cut into her palm. She wouldn't give it up. She wouldn't hand over the only thing that had guided her here, even if here was a trap, even if the benefactor who'd mailed her the pendant three weeks ago had known exactly what would happen in this grove. The ninth stone's inhabitant pulled itself free from the crevice. It moved like a marionette with half its strings cut, jerking upward, unfolding at angles that made Rory's eyes water. It had no face, only the spirals, and they spun faster as it approached. Rory's phone buzzed again. She ignored it. The sound came from her satchel, insistent, vibrating against her hip. The thing paused, tilting its head—a gesture so human it made her stomach clench. She reached into the bag. Her fingers closed around cold metal—not her phone, but the taser Eva had forced on her before she'd moved into the flat above the bar. The weight grounded her. The grove had no rules she understood, but electricity worked everywhere. Probably. The creature took another step. The wildflowers beneath its feet turned to glass, then shattered. Rory raised the taser. Her hand trembled. She steadied it. The creature stopped. The spirals on its face slowed, curious, predatory. Behind her, the altar stone shifted. She felt it move through her spine, a grinding vibration that traveled up her vertebrae. She didn't look back. Looking back meant death. She knew this with the certainty of prey. The grove held its breath. The temperature plunged. Summer became winter in an instant, frost crystallizing on the wildflowers, on her eyelashes, on the thing's reaching fingers. Rory pressed the taser's activation switch. The arc snapped blue-white in the darkness. The creature recoiled, its body folding in on itself like a closing book. She ran. Not toward the standing stones—they would only retreat again—but toward the space where the eighth stone had first stood, where the soil looked churned and raw. She plunged through brambles that cut her cheeks, through air that resisted like water. The pendant flared back to life, burning hot, pointing the way like a compass needle. The grove screamed. The sound wasn't audible; it manifested as pressure in her sinuses, as blood weeping from her nose. She tasted copper. She kept running. Her foot struck the boundary. The oak arch loomed ahead, visible now, the exit a rectangle of true night beyond the false summer. She dove toward it. A hand closed around her ankle. The fingers were cold, smooth, wrong. They pulled. Rory struck the ground. Her chin bounced off stone. She tasted dirt and nectar. She kicked backward, her trainer connecting with something that gave like wet clay. The grip loosened. She scrambled forward on elbows and knees, the pendant swinging free, its crimson light strobing against the darkness. She reached the arch. The hand grabbed her again, this time her left wrist, fingers pressing into the crescent scar. The pain was exquisite, surgical. It knew exactly where she was weak. Rory twisted. She looked back. The grove had emptied. The standing stones stood in their circle, seven of them, innocent, ancient. The wildflowers swayed in a wind she couldn't feel. The thing that held her wore no face, only the spirals, and they spun counterclockwise now, unwinding time, unwinding her. "Not yet," it said. It let go. Rory stumbled backward through the arch. Frost bit her face. Traffic noise rushed back—distant, but real. The A307. London. Earth. She lay on her back in Richmond Park, staring up at Orion's belt, aligned correctly now, distant and indifferent. Her chest heaved. The pendant lay cold against her skin, dormant, innocent. In the grove behind her, visible only as a shimmer at the edge of vision, something moved between the stones. Counting. Always counting. She didn't wait to see if it followed. She ran toward the car park, toward the scooter, toward the city lights that never slept and never watched. Behind her, the grove remained, patient as stone, hungry as winter. Her phone buzzed in her pocket. She didn't check it. She knew what it would say. The message had already been sent. It was always going to be sent. Rory reached the scooter. Her hands shook so badly she dropped the keys twice. The third time, she managed to slot them into the ignition. The engine coughed to life. She looked back once. The grove entrance had vanished, replaced by ordinary hedge and frost-bitten grass. But in the air above where it had stood, the stars pulsed. Once. Twice. A third time. She gunned the engine and did not look back again.
created_at"2026-02-19T12:20:06.174Z" 2/19/2026, 12:20:06 PM
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags6
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences9
tagDensity0.667
leniency1
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
100.00% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount2055
totalAiIsmAdverbs0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
56.20% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount2055
totalAiIsms18
found
0
word"loomed"
count2
1
word"pulse"
count1
2
word"echo"
count1
3
word"etched"
count1
4
word"pulsed"
count2
5
word"velvet"
count1
6
word"warmth"
count1
7
word"silence"
count2
8
word"depths"
count1
9
word"stomach"
count1
10
word"weight"
count1
11
word"shattered"
count1
12
word"trembled"
count1
13
word"churned"
count1
14
word"aligned"
count1
highlights
0"loomed"
1"pulse"
2"echo"
3"etched"
4"pulsed"
5"velvet"
6"warmth"
7"silence"
8"depths"
9"stomach"
10"weight"
11"shattered"
12"trembled"
13"churned"
14"aligned"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells1
narrationSentences236
matches
0"was angry"
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount3
narrationSentences236
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
1"tended to"
2"managed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences240
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen39
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans1
markdownWords6
totalWords2038
ratio0.003
matches
0"Don't look at the ninth stone."
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions5
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
99.95% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions45
wordCount1998
uniqueNames15
maxNameDensity1
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity2
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
January1
Park2
Heartstone2
Pendant2
London4
Pembroke1
Lodge1
Roman1
Evan3
Cardiff1
Eva2
Rory20
Silas1
Richmond2
Orion2
persons
0"Pendant"
1"Roman"
2"Evan"
3"Eva"
4"Rory"
5"Silas"
6"Orion"
places
0"January"
1"Park"
2"London"
3"Pembroke"
4"Cardiff"
5"Richmond"
globalScore0.999
windowScore1
74.24% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences132
glossingSentenceCount4
matches
0"spirals that seemed to rotate when she looked away"
1"smelled like iron"
2"felt like minutes, yet the standing sto"
3"e rotated now, visibly spinning, creating"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches2
per1kWords0.981
wordCount2038
matches
0"not wood but a cavity lined with rows of thorns"
1"not her phone, but the taser Eva had forced on her before she'd moved into the"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences240
matches(empty)
93.18% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs61
mean33.41
std15.91
cv0.476
sampleLengths
064
134
257
326
449
537
655
78
846
932
1018
1152
1248
1363
1414
1554
1642
1735
1847
1938
2028
2129
2247
2321
2419
2532
2643
2725
2841
2970
3034
3131
3219
3357
3444
3532
3646
3715
3821
3937
4027
4126
4257
4326
4427
4514
4648
4732
485
4945
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount1
totalSentences236
matches
0"been sent"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount1
totalVerbs374
matches
0"wasn't looking"
23.81% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount12
semicolonCount1
flaggedSentences10
totalSentences240
ratio0.042
matches
0"Richmond Park had loomed behind her, all bare branches and frost-crisped grass, yet here—where the standing stones marked a boundary her eyes struggled to focus on—dandelions poked through soil that smelled of midsummer."
1"The wildflowers—bluebells and poppies and foxgloves that had no business blooming together, let alone in winter—bent aside as if pressed by passing feet."
2"Not words—textures."
3"The shadow mimicked the movement, but with a delay—half a second too slow, like a video buffering."
4"In the silence, she heard breathing that wasn't hers—steady, patient, hungry."
5"The thing paused, tilting its head—a gesture so human it made her stomach clench."
6"Her fingers closed around cold metal—not her phone, but the taser Eva had forced on her before she'd moved into the flat above the bar."
7"Not toward the standing stones—they would only retreat again—but toward the space where the eighth stone had first stood, where the soil looked churned and raw."
8"The sound wasn't audible; it manifested as pressure in her sinuses, as blood weeping from her nose."
9"Traffic noise rushed back—distant, but real."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount583
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount14
adverbRatio0.024013722126929673
lyAdverbCount0
lyAdverbRatio0
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences240
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences240
mean8.49
std6.83
cv0.804
sampleLengths
019
133
24
38
47
53
619
75
87
934
1016
115
122
1319
1412
153
163
171
182
199
2019
2111
222
2314
244
256
262
273
2823
292
3025
313
321
334
346
3512
3610
375
3813
395
402
416
4219
4310
445
453
463
4712
488
4911
35.00% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats36
diversityRatio0.22083333333333333
totalSentences240
uniqueOpeners53
32.21% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount2
totalSentences207
matches
0"Of course someone was there."
1"Too many fingers, each jointed"
ratio0.01
67.34% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount79
totalSentences207
matches
0"She unzipped her jacket."
1"She touched it."
2"She had followed the pulse"
3"Her voice fell flat"
4"She counted again."
5"It stood closer than the"
6"Her phone screen cracked with"
7"She pocketed the device."
8"She moved deeper into the"
9"Her trainers sank into moss"
10"She backed toward the center"
11"She reached the center."
12"Her knuckles whitened."
13"They knew about the bar"
14"Her voice shook."
15"She steadied it."
16"It tilted forward, roots tearing"
17"It wasn't a stone."
18"It had never been a"
19"She bolted toward the gap"
ratio0.382
8.31% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount187
totalSentences207
matches
0"Rory's breath fogged in the"
1"Richmond Park had loomed behind"
2"She unzipped her jacket."
3"The heat pressed against her"
4"The Heartstone Pendant thrummed against"
5"She touched it."
6"The crimson gemstone felt feverish,"
7"That old childhood mark itched."
8"She had followed the pulse"
9"Yu-Fei would dock her wages"
10"Her voice fell flat"
11"The sound died two feet"
12"The standing stones encircled the"
13"Rory counted seven."
14"She counted again."
15"The eighth stone hadn't been"
16"It stood closer than the"
17"Her phone screen cracked with"
18"The digits dripped downward like"
19"She pocketed the device."
ratio0.903
48.31% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount2
totalSentences207
matches
0"Now, inside the grove, the"
1"Now it stood ten feet"
ratio0.01
43.40% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences79
technicalSentenceCount11
matches
0"Richmond Park had loomed behind her, all bare branches and frost-crisped grass, yet here—where the standing stones marked a boundary her eyes struggled to focus…"
1"The wildflowers—bluebells and poppies and foxgloves that had no business blooming together, let alone in winter—bent aside as if pressed by passing feet."
2"The bark split open, revealing not wood but a cavity lined with rows of thorns that curved inward like a lamprey's mouth."
3"The thing that had pretended to be a stone moved through the wildflowers without disturbing them."
4"The Heartstone Pendant went silent, its warmth vanishing, leaving her chest cold and hollow."
5"The grove had shrunk while she wasn't looking, the standing stones now forming a tight circle twenty feet across, a courtroom where she stood accused by things …"
6"Its voice was the sound of her jacket zipper catching, of delivery scooters backfiring, of Evan's knuckles cracking."
7"It moved like a marionette with half its strings cut, jerking upward, unfolding at angles that made Rory's eyes water."
8"She felt it move through her spine, a grinding vibration that traveled up her vertebrae."
9"She kicked backward, her trainer connecting with something that gave like wet clay."
10"The thing that held her wore no face, only the spirals, and they spun counterclockwise now, unwinding time, unwinding her."
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags6
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
38.89% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags3
fancyCount1
fancyTags
0"Rory whispered (whisper)"
dialogueSentences9
tagDensity0.333
leniency0.667
rawRatio0.333
effectiveRatio0.222
80.6949%