Run: 2026-02-19-01KHTXG49TZF3ZAKMWMEXC08R5

Run Details

Duration:
52.3s
Cost:
$0.008858
Provider:
OpenAI

Model input

System
You are an expert fiction writer. Always keep the following rules in mind: - Write in past tense and use General English spelling, grammar, and colloquialisms/slang. - Write in active voice - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. - Avoid adverbs and cliches and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Convey events and story through dialogue. - Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. - Skip "he/she said said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech - Avoid mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or add unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Reduce indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" When writing text: - NEVER conclude the scene on your own, follow the beat instructions very closely. - NEVER end with foreshadowing. - NEVER write further than what I prompt you with. - AVOID imagining possible endings, NEVER deviate from the instructions. - STOP EARLY if the continuation contains what was required in the instructions. You do not need to fill out the full amount of words possible.
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4414" name="Eva Kowalski" aliases="Eva, Evie" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Best Friend"> <eyeColor>green</eyeColor> <hair>curly red</hair> <height>5'4"</height> <age>26</age> <glasses>round glasses</glasses> <satchel>worn leather satchel full of books</satchel> <freckles>freckled complexion</freckles> <nervousHabit>tucking hair behind her left ear</nervousHabit> <description>Aurora's childhood friend and an occult researcher.</description> <backstory>Moved to London two years before Aurora and works as a research assistant at the British Museum's restricted archives. She holds a master's degree in Ancient History from Oxford.</backstory> </character> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> <item id="2004" name="Veil Compass" aliases="the Compass, shadow compass" type="Tool" origin="The Veil Market"> <casingMaterial>small brass compass</casingMaterial> <faceMarkings>face etched with protective sigils</faceMarkings> <needle>points toward the nearest supernatural rift or portal</needle> <patina>casing has a patina of verdigris</patina> <creator>crafted by a Shade artisan</creator> <description>A compass attuned to supernatural energy.</description> </item> </codex> Continue the story using the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the mystery genre. A detective arrives at a crime scene in an unusual location. Something is wrong — the evidence doesn't add up. A colleague is present, offering a different interpretation. Through careful observation and deduction, the detective begins to see what others have missed. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
Quinn climbed down into the station with the same economy of motion that had carried her through three tours abroad and two decades of policing. The light from Bowen's torch cut a hard wedge through the dim. It bounced off tiles stained with old grime and new dust. Her watch face caught the shaft and glinted; she checked it without thinking. The seconds were small and honest. She liked that. A shifting of boots. Eva stood beneath the arch where the market booths had been yesterday: a knot of tarpaulin hung like a dead sail. Her hair would not stay behind her ear; she kept tucking it and then tugging it free. She held a clipboard that read like a student’s list—chain of custody, samples, witness statements—handwriting neat enough to make Quinn bristle. "You're late," Quinn said. Eva tightened her grip on the clipboard. "I took the Victoria line," she answered, voice pitched too high for the space. She tucked hair past her left ear with a finger that trembled a fraction. "Transport delays. Also, the constable at the mouth insisted on a proper bone token. Thought you might appreciate the irony." Quinn let her eyes sweep the scene instead of answering. The stalls had been stripped to frames. Lanterns hung from hooks, their flames guttering as if the air was trying to breathe through a wound. A body lay near platform three, half under a collapsed lattice. No splatter. No pool. Just a swath of dark cloth and a shape that had gone too rigid to hold secrets. "Who found him?" Quinn asked. "A vendor named Marek. He came in to open; saw the frame and shouted. He said it smelled like burnt paper. He called it in." Eva's voice flattened with recital. Quinn crouched. The face was turned away. The collar had been torn in a jagged line, as if clawed by something with keener nails than a human’s. The palms were pale where they lay splayed on the tile. No bruising. No weapon. No fibres. Her fingers hovered above the collar like a machine making allowance for heat. She smelled ozone and something sweet and metallic, the sort of tang that sat on tongues after lightning. "Fingerprints?" Quinn asked. "Partials on the lattice. No prints on the body. Marek said he stepped back the minute he saw the—" Eva closed her mouth, chewed the inside of her cheek. "He said he didn't touch him. Witness is clean." Quinn's eyes drifted to the lattice. Someone had scrawled symbols in chalk across the metal. At first they looked like graffiti. Then the pattern shifted under her gaze, the arcs aligning into an imperfect circle. That meant intention. It meant someone had traced a shape without the steadiness of ritual training. Sloppiness that tried to be precise. "Ritual?" Eva pressed. Quinn's mouth thinned. "Either that, or someone faked a ritual to make people look away from the common things." "You mean a struggle? A mugging?" Eva's head tilted. Her green eyes searched Quinn's for assent. "This area moves with the market. Lots of petty crimes. Someone could have been set upon." Quinn inspected the feet. Shoe prints ran around the body like a clock without hours. Sizes varied, but most prints showed a heel-toe drag. Yet the drag began and stopped cleanly at odd intervals. The pattern suggested handling rather than flight. Someone had choreographed the movement. "How does a body end up with no blood?" Quinn asked more to herself. She cupped her hands and breathed against the cold air as if coaxing the scene to speak. "How does a collar tear without contact marks?" Eva answered before the silence could warp into accusation. "Marek said the victim's watch stopped at twenty-three forty-three. He thought it was broken. Forensic says it froze from heat, not an impact." Quinn's fingers found the edge of the fabric and drew back. The edges of the tear were crisp but not burnt. Tiny white crystals dusted the weave—ashes with the consistency of ground bone. She scraped a sliver between her thumbnail; it flaked and smelled of old earth and iron. Not soot. Not household fire. Something older. "Does the name match the missing persons feed?" Quinn asked, rising to her knees. Her voice flattened into work. Eva prodded the clipboard. "Yes. Tomasz Voss. Forty-two. Eastern European. No known associates. No criminal record." "He sold things?" Quinn nodded toward the frames. "Trinkets? Curios?" "Occult supplies," Eva said. She pressed a thumb into her temple when Quinn stared. "The Veil Market sells that. He traded—muscovite, bones, charms. Marek called him careful." Quinn looked at the hand again. The skin between Tomasz's knuckles bore a faint line of scar as if from a knife. She had seen that before. It marked someone who had cut himself out of danger once and kept the lesson as a brand. "Where's the Compass?" she asked. Eva blinked. "Compass?" "The Veil Compass," Quinn said. "Vendor page said he handled shipping. If someone moved in on a regular seller, they'd take the Compass first. Without it the rifts get messy." She wasn't sure why she said that, only that the name fit the knot in her stomach. Her partner, Morris, had once named items like that as if they were people. Quinn had told herself to stop letting his vocabulary creep back into her life, but the compass was a thing she recognised now in the way a second heart recognised rhythm. Eva's hand dove into Tomasz's satchel. Leather creaked. She drew out a small brass compass that had been wrapped in oilcloth. Its casing had a verdigris that made it look older than it had any right to be. The face was etched with lines that tried to be protection sigils. The needle spun like a trapped bird and then slammed North toward a place where the track did not run. "It points to the platform wall," Eva observed. "To where the tile is chipped. I thought—" Quinn moved to the wall. At eye level, the tiles bulged. Someone had pushed a palm through plaster and left the plaster to heal like a scar. The compass needle wavered when close; its motion was quick and then decisive. It would do that when a rift was close, Morris used to say. Quinn had dismissed him when he talked about it. The dismissal tasted like guilt in her mouth now. "Take it," she said. "Chain it and mark it." Eva hesitated, thumb on the glass, then wrapped the Compass in evidence paper. "If it's a relic, the Market's guilds will come looking," she murmured. "They'll want it." "Not if we keep it." Quinn's jaw tightened. She looked past the compass at the lattice. The chalk circle caught the torchlight. The arcs were uneven because someone had tried to draw them while flinching. The pattern suggested rehearsal and haste. Someone had practiced the shape and then bungled the real thing. "Why would someone fake a ritual?" Eva asked, voice small now. "To cover a theft? To frighten people away from the stalls?" Quinn knelt by the body again. Her hands moved with the sort of precision she had asked for in teams, in operations. She checked the throat for rare traces—no crushed trachea, no ligature. She rolled the wrist. The veins had collapsed in a way blood didn't when life bled out. The chest was not bruised from a struggle. There were no hair fragments lodged between fingers. A smoked ring, a residue in concentric lines, sat on the tile around the torso as if someone had burnt a wreath and left it for a year. "It wasn't death from outside force," Quinn said. "It wasn't blunt trauma. He wasn't run through or shot. He wasn't suffocated. He wasn't stabbed cleanly." "Exsanguination?" Eva suggested. "No." Quinn's breath fogged in the cooler air of the platform. Her eyes caught on a faint sheen on Tomasz's tongue. A metallic film. She had seen copper touches before—not enough to dissolve someone, but enough to make a body behave like it had been present in a storm. "He left. Or the thing that took him didn't remove matter so much as it displaced it. The collar's torn because whatever moved through his clothes moved faster than fabric could follow." "Like a portal?" Eva's voice sounded higher now, a string snapping toward disbelief. Quinn didn't answer. She rubbed the pad of her thumb across the inside of her wrist where a shallow scar threaded like a map. She had written off the supernatural in public a long time ago. In private she kept a ledger of oddities. Her ledger had an empty page next to Morris's name. She hated that emptiness. She stood and walked the prints again, counting them like a man checking rations. Seven different shoes. Two of them didn't belong—impractical soles, a pattern that made no sense for London streets. Someone had left boot prints that sank like a clock spring. Someone had pressed pads of something into the tile in a pattern that mimicked life. "Why fake it?" Eva persisted. "Why stage a ritual and then take a man?" Quinn looked at the collapsed lattice. She imagined hands moving through air, careful hands pulling the lattice aside like curtains. She imagined a compass needle jerking. She imagined a seller with a satchel of objects that opened like promises and then closed forever. "What if the staging was to make us look the other way?" she said finally. "To send the story toward the familiar. Rituals draw attention and superstition. They make people assign cause to old, safe things—mystic snares, curses. That keeps investigators busy with symbols while the real work goes on. A diversion." "Someone who knew the Market," Eva said slowly. "Someone who knew who would look where." Quinn tapped a finger against her watch. "Time matters. If the Compass pointed at the wall when it spun, and then the needle locked, it meant a rift pulsed open there. Those pulses don't happen without a catalyst. They don't happen with a simple theft." A constable leaned in, breath cold. "Detective Quinn? Forensics want to know if to bag the lattice or to leave it. It's covered in chalk." Quinn glanced at the marks. The chalk had been pressed with fingers, not a piece of chalk drawn on a whim. There were prints in the powder—small prints like fingertips. She nodded. "Bag it," she said. "Bag everything that holds the line." As the constable moved to obey, Quinn crouched and lifted a scrap of tarpaulin caught on the lattice. Underneath, a row of small teeth—real, bleached and drilled—had been woven into the fabric like a fringe. They chimed faintly as she shook them. Not human teeth all. Animal, maybe smaller things. They were worn in a way that suggested long use. Someone had assembled that fringe slowly. Someone who kept time in hands like that. "An offering?" Eva mouthed. Quinn let the words sit. Offerings could be protective, they could be forsale, they could be bait. "Or a signature," she said. "Signature for a group?" Eva's eyes shone in the thin light. "Something like that." Quinn's voice tightened. "The Market's guilds mark wares. But this was left as a mark in the open. A message to someone who would know how to read it." She crouched by Tomasz again and spread the man's hands. An indentation in one palm suggested he had held something small—a coin, a bone, a compass—right before the end. Dust packed the indentation. She ran a gloved fingertip across it. The pattern was scorch-like: concentric rings, not unlike the ones that had formed on the tile around the torso. "The compass," Eva said, then stopped, because it sounded like a plea. Quinn stared at the brass casing in the evidence bag. The needle did not point to any of them. It lay idle, as if exhausted, and then quivered toward the bulge in the wall. "Seal the perimeter tighter," Quinn ordered. "No vendors. No curiosity seekers. Lock the station entrances. Call the Guild liaison and tell him we found a Compass. Tell him it's been moved. Tell him politely that we have it. Thread the message with patience." Eva wrote it down with hands that steadied a fraction. "And the body?" Quinn looked up. The platform hummed with small, professional movements. Forensics collected swabs, a student from the Museum snapped photographs. The market smelled of old spice and soap, the kind of smell people clung to when they wanted to remember yesterday's comfort. Tomasz's chest rose in a slow, indifferent rhythm only in the way a body could be still and speak. "Hold him," Quinn said. "Don't let anyone take him to the mortuary until we know. Check for the vendors on the ledger. Find Marek's statement on timing. See if anyone else reported the compass missing in the last forty-eight hours. Cross-check." Eva nodded and tucked a curl behind her ear as she moved away. She stepped lightly, almost as if the tile itself might crack underfoot. Quinn stayed where she was until the crowd thickened with the professional hum. She watched the compass in the bag. The patina on the brass matched a photograph she'd seen once in Morris's case notes: a small object pinned in a vendor's collection. The same tiny loop at the hinge. The same etching of protective lines that tried not to be pretty. She had believed in simple explanations for years. A man fell prey to another man. A thief took a watch and ran. The world answered in loud, human noise. Tonight it whispered and expected her to mishear. She checked the platform clock. Twenty-three fifty-one. The wall's bulge swallowed the light like a mouth. The needle had moved. It now pointed not at the wall but at the tunnel, where darkness pooled like spilled ink. "Someone knew exactly where to put the bait," she said aloud, low enough for only her and the floor to hear. Eva paused in the doorway, the clipboard clutched to her chest. "Who?" Quinn exhaled through her teeth and let the answer live as a thought between them. She did not know. But she saw the seams. She saw the staging. She saw the compass as both tool and trap. She saw the market as a theatre where someone had rearranged the set. And she knew what the missing evidence really meant: not that a man had been murdered by a human hand, but that an absence had been engineered to look like a presence. "Find the vendors with the same teeth," she said. "Find anyone who bought the Compass in the last week. And check our missing feed for others who left without blood." Eva's mouth opened, closed. "Do you think the Market did this?" Quinn did not look at her. She looked at the compass. She let the thought stay blunt and raw. "I think someone used the Market," she said. "And I think the Compass was the lure."
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
94.74% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags38
adverbTagCount4
adverbTags
0"Quinn asked more [more]"
1"she said finally [finally]"
2"Eva said slowly [slowly]"
3"she said aloud [aloud]"
dialogueSentences68
tagDensity0.559
leniency1
rawRatio0.105
effectiveRatio0.105
92.09% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount2527
totalAiIsmAdverbs4
found
0
adverb"slowly"
count2
1
adverb"lightly"
count1
2
adverb"really"
count1
highlights
0"slowly"
1"lightly"
2"really"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
80.21% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount2527
totalAiIsms10
found
0
word"trembled"
count1
1
word"traced"
count1
2
word"silence"
count1
3
word"stomach"
count1
4
word"etched"
count1
5
word"wavered"
count1
6
word"familiar"
count1
7
word"pulsed"
count1
8
word"quivered"
count1
9
word"etching"
count1
highlights
0"trembled"
1"traced"
2"silence"
3"stomach"
4"etched"
5"wavered"
6"familiar"
7"pulsed"
8"quivered"
9"etching"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences204
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount3
hedgeCount3
narrationSentences204
filterMatches
0"watch"
1"look"
hedgeMatches
0"tried to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences234
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen42
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords2505
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions33
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
16.67% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions78
wordCount1835
uniqueNames9
maxNameDensity2.13
worstName"Quinn"
maxWindowNameDensity4.5
worstWindowName"Quinn"
discoveredNames
Bowen1
Quinn39
Eva25
Tomasz5
Morris4
North1
Compass1
London1
Museum1
persons
0"Quinn"
1"Eva"
2"Tomasz"
3"Morris"
places
0"Bowen"
1"Compass"
2"London"
globalScore0.437
windowScore0.167
74.81% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences133
glossingSentenceCount4
matches
0"looked like graffiti"
1"as if coaxing the scene to speak"
2"tasted like guilt in her mouth now"
3"sounded like a plea"
80.24% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches3
per1kWords1.198
wordCount2505
matches
0"not enough to dissolve someone, but enough to make a body behave like it had been present in a s"
1"not at the wall but at the tunnel"
2"not that a man had been murdered by a human hand, but"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences234
matches
0"hated that emptiness"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs72
mean34.79
std24.41
cv0.702
sampleLengths
070
163
24
355
467
55
630
775
83
938
1057
113
1219
1332
1446
1539
1632
1756
1819
1916
2010
2127
2245
235
243
2592
2670
2716
2871
299
3028
3152
3222
3394
3425
353
3681
3713
3858
3958
4014
4143
4252
4315
4445
4525
4632
4710
4874
494
89.78% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount9
totalSentences204
matches
0"been stripped"
1"was turned"
2"been torn"
3"been wrapped"
4"was etched"
5"been pressed"
6"been woven"
7"were worn"
8"been murdered"
9"been engineered"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount1
totalVerbs352
matches
0"was trying"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount11
semicolonCount5
flaggedSentences13
totalSentences234
ratio0.056
matches
0"Her watch face caught the shaft and glinted; she checked it without thinking."
1"Her hair would not stay behind her ear; she kept tucking it and then tugging it free."
2"She held a clipboard that read like a student’s list—chain of custody, samples, witness statements—handwriting neat enough to make Quinn bristle."
3"\"A vendor named Marek. He came in to open; saw the frame and shouted. He said it smelled like burnt paper. He called it in.\" Eva's voice flattened with recital."
4"Tiny white crystals dusted the weave—ashes with the consistency of ground bone."
5"She scraped a sliver between her thumbnail; it flaked and smelled of old earth and iron."
6"The compass needle wavered when close; its motion was quick and then decisive."
7"She checked the throat for rare traces—no crushed trachea, no ligature."
8"She had seen copper touches before—not enough to dissolve someone, but enough to make a body behave like it had been present in a storm."
9"Two of them didn't belong—impractical soles, a pattern that made no sense for London streets."
10"There were prints in the powder—small prints like fingertips."
11"Underneath, a row of small teeth—real, bleached and drilled—had been woven into the fabric like a fringe."
12"An indentation in one palm suggested he had held something small—a coin, a bone, a compass—right before the end."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1850
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount61
adverbRatio0.032972972972972976
lyAdverbCount10
lyAdverbRatio0.005405405405405406
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences234
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences234
mean10.71
std7.54
cv0.704
sampleLengths
025
112
211
313
46
53
64
721
817
921
104
117
1214
1314
1420
1510
167
1718
1811
192
202
2117
225
2330
242
255
2620
2711
282
292
302
3113
3218
333
3429
359
366
379
386
3914
403
4113
426
433
443
4516
469
477
4816
494
42.02% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats30
diversityRatio0.32905982905982906
totalSentences234
uniqueOpeners77
38.76% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount2
totalSentences172
matches
0"Just a swath of dark"
1"Then the pattern shifted under"
ratio0.012
94.42% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount54
totalSentences172
matches
0"It bounced off tiles stained"
1"Her watch face caught the"
2"She liked that."
3"Her hair would not stay"
4"She held a clipboard that"
5"she answered, voice pitched too"
6"She tucked hair past her"
7"Her fingers hovered above the"
8"She smelled ozone and something"
9"It meant someone had traced"
10"Her green eyes searched Quinn's"
11"She cupped her hands and"
12"She scraped a sliver between"
13"Her voice flattened into work."
14"She pressed a thumb into"
15"She had seen that before."
16"It marked someone who had"
17"She wasn't sure why she"
18"Her partner, Morris, had once"
19"She drew out a small"
ratio0.314
12.33% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount154
totalSentences172
matches
0"Quinn climbed down into the"
1"The light from Bowen's torch"
2"It bounced off tiles stained"
3"Her watch face caught the"
4"The seconds were small and"
5"She liked that."
6"A shifting of boots."
7"Eva stood beneath the arch"
8"Her hair would not stay"
9"She held a clipboard that"
10"Eva tightened her grip on"
11"she answered, voice pitched too"
12"She tucked hair past her"
13"Quinn let her eyes sweep"
14"The stalls had been stripped"
15"Lanterns hung from hooks, their"
16"A body lay near platform"
17"Eva's voice flattened with recital"
18"The face was turned away."
19"The collar had been torn"
ratio0.895
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences172
matches(empty)
ratio0
89.95% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences81
technicalSentenceCount6
matches
0"She held a clipboard that read like a student’s list—chain of custody, samples, witness statements—handwriting neat enough to make Quinn bristle."
1"She tucked hair past her left ear with a finger that trembled a fraction."
2"Lanterns hung from hooks, their flames guttering as if the air was trying to breathe through a wound."
3"Her partner, Morris, had once named items like that as if they were people."
4"The pattern was scorch-like: concentric rings, not unlike the ones that had formed on the tile around the torso."
5"The same etching of protective lines that tried not to be pretty."
85.53% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags38
uselessAdditionCount3
matches
0"she answered, voice pitched too high for the space"
1"Eva asked, voice small now"
2"Eva's voice sounded, a string snapping toward disbelief"
61.76% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags28
fancyCount6
fancyTags
0"Eva pressed (press)"
1"Eva observed (observe)"
2"she murmured (murmur)"
3"Eva suggested (suggest)"
4"Eva mouthed (mouth)"
5"Quinn ordered (order)"
dialogueSentences68
tagDensity0.412
leniency0.824
rawRatio0.214
effectiveRatio0.176
78.4434%