Run: 2026-02-19-01KHTXGNCZ25QSG1PXRKDGJ2YM

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Duration:
56.1s
Cost:
$0.045576

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System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Literary Fiction genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4413" name="Silas Blackwood" aliases="Silas, Si, the Spymaster" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Mentor"> <eyeColor>hazel</eyeColor> <hair>grey-streaked auburn</hair> <height>6'1"</height> <age>58</age> <beard>neatly trimmed, matching his grey-streaked auburn hair</beard> <limp>slight limp in his left leg from an old knee injury</limp> <signetRing>silver signet ring, always worn on his right hand</signetRing> <description>Silas is a retired intelligence operative turned bar owner. He carries himself with quiet authority.</description> <backstory>Former MI6 field agent who retired after a botched operation in Prague left him with a permanent knee injury. He opened "The Raven's Nest" bar in Soho as a front for his network of contacts.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the literary fiction genre. Two old friends who haven't seen each other in years run into each other unexpectedly at a bar. One of them has changed significantly. Through their conversation and the tension between who they were and who they've become, reveal the weight of time and unspoken regret. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The whisky glass slipped from Rory's fingers. Not dropped. Slipped. Like her grip had forgotten how to hold things the moment she saw him across the smoky haze of The Raven's Nest. The glass hit the bar with a sharp crack, amber liquid spreading across the scarred wood surface. "Easy there." Silas appeared with a tea towel, mopping up the mess without breaking stride. His hazel eyes followed her gaze to the corner booth. "Someone you know?" The question hung unanswered. Because yes, she knew him. Knew the way his left shoulder dipped slightly when he walked. Knew how he drummed his fingers against his thigh when nervous. Knew that he preferred his pint glasses filled to the exact rim, no foam. But the man sitting alone in the shadows wasn't Evan Holbrook from Cardiff University. This version wore an expensive charcoal suit that fit too perfectly. His sandy hair was shorter, styled with the kind of precision that cost more than her monthly rent. The boyish softness she remembered had hardened into sharp angles and calculated composure. "Rory?" Her name. Spoken in that familiar Welsh lilt, but stripped of warmth. She turned, meeting eyes that used to hold laughter. Now they held something else. Assessment. Recognition. A flicker of something that might have been surprise. "Hello, Evan." "Been a while." He stood, and she noticed the gold watch on his wrist. Cartier. The kind that screamed old money or new desperation. "You look..." "Different?" "Healthy." The word landed like a slap. She remembered the last time they'd spoken. The bruise on her ribs that had taken three weeks to fade. The way he'd apologized afterwards, flowers in hand, tears in his eyes. Genuine remorse wrapped around hollow promises. "Drink?" Silas's voice cut through the tension. He stood behind the bar like a sentry, polishing glasses that didn't need polishing. His silver signet ring caught the light as he worked. "Jameson. Neat." Evan's order rolled off his tongue with practiced ease. "Make it a double." Rory watched Silas pour, noting how the older man's movements slowed deliberately. Buying time. Reading the room with the instincts of someone who'd spent decades in rooms where the wrong word could start wars. "Still partial to whisky, I see." Evan settled onto the barstool beside her, close enough that she caught his cologne. Something expensive and foreign. Nothing like the cheap aftershave he'd worn at uni. "Some things don't change." "Don't they?" He accepted the glass from Silas, fingers steady as stone. "I heard you left Cardiff rather suddenly." "People leave university towns all the time." "In the middle of the night? Without telling anyone?" The accusation hung between them. Silas had moved to the far end of the bar, but Rory could feel his attention like a physical presence. Ready to intervene. Ready to protect. The knowledge settled something tight in her chest. "I told who needed to know." "Your flatmate thought you'd been kidnapped. Had me calling every hospital between Cardiff and London." "Did she." Rory lifted her replacement whisky, grateful when her hand remained steady. "How thoughtful." Evan's laugh held no humor. "Three years, Rory. Three years of wondering if you were alive or dead." "And which were you hoping for?" The question hit its mark. She saw it in the way his jaw tightened, the slight pause before he took another sip. When he spoke again, his voice carried the polished cadence of someone who'd learned to weaponize words. "I'm a barrister now. King's Counsel track at Pemberton, Whitmore & Associates. Youngest solicitor they've ever fast-tracked to the bar." "Congratulations." The word tasted like ash. "Your father must be proud." "He is." Evan's fingers found their old rhythm against the bar. Tap-tap-pause. Tap-tap-pause. "I defended my first murder case last month. Won it too. Front page of the Cardiff Western Mail." She remembered his father's expectations. The pressure that had twisted Evan into knots during their second year together. How he'd taken that pressure and passed it along to her, piece by poisonous piece. "Still trying to impress him?" "Still running away from responsibility?" The words cracked like a whip. Across the bar, a glass clinked too loudly as Silas set it down with deliberate force. A warning. Rory felt the familiar crawl of anxiety up her spine. The urge to apologize. To smooth things over. To make herself smaller until the anger passed. Old patterns died hard. But she wasn't twenty-two anymore. "What responsibility would that be? The responsibility to let you take your bad days out on me? To pretend your father's disappointment was my fault?" "I never laid a hand on you." "No. You just made sure I knew you wanted to." The silence that followed felt combustible. Evan's knuckles had gone white around his glass. His breathing had shifted, deeper and more controlled. She recognized the signs. The calm before the storm that had taught her to sleep with one eye open. But The Raven's Nest wasn't their cramped student flat. And she wasn't trapped anymore. "You've gotten harder." His voice had dropped to the tone she remembered too well. Soft and dangerous. "London suits you poorly." "London saved me." "From what? From me loving you?" The laugh that escaped her throat surprised them both. Sharp and bitter and entirely without humor. "Is that what you called it?" Evan's mask slipped for just a moment. She caught a glimpse of the boy she'd once known. Insecure. Desperate for approval. Terrified of being abandoned. It almost made her feel sorry for him. Almost. "I've changed, Rory. I'm not that scared kid anymore." "No." She studied his expensive suit, his perfect hair, the watch that probably cost more than some people made in a year. "Now you're a scared adult with better clothes." He flinched. Actually flinched. The small victory felt hollow. "I built something. Made something of myself. While you're what, delivering Chinese food?" Heat flashed through her. The old shame, the old certainty that she was somehow less than. That her choices were failures rather than survival. But before she could respond, Silas materialized beside them. He moved with the fluid grace of someone who'd spent decades learning to appear exactly where he was needed. "Gentlemen's evening, is it?" His voice carried the deceptive calm of deep water. "Lovely to see old friends reconnecting." The words were polite. The tone was not. Evan straightened, suddenly aware he was being evaluated by someone who didn't care about his pedigree or his prospects. Someone who saw through expensive suits to the scared boy beneath. "I should go." He stood abruptly, leaving money on the bar. Too much money. The kind of gesture meant to impress rather than pay. "Good to see you, Rory. You look... well." He paused at the door, hand on the brass handle. For a moment she thought he might say something real. Something that acknowledged what they'd been to each other. What he'd cost her. Instead, he straightened his tie and walked into the London night. Rory stared at the door long after it closed, her reflection wavering in the glass panels. The woman looking back at her had straight black hair instead of the unruly curls she'd worn at university. Blue eyes that had learned to hold steady under pressure. A small crescent scar on her left wrist that she no longer tried to hide. "You all right?" Silas had returned to his post behind the bar, but his attention remained focused on her. "Getting there." He nodded, understanding contained in the simple gesture. No questions about the past. No demands for explanation. Just acceptance of who she'd chosen to become. Outside, she caught a glimpse of Evan through the window. He stood on the pavement, mobile phone pressed to his ear, animated gestures punctuating whatever conversation demanded his immediate attention. Even in profile, she could see the tension in his shoulders. The same restless energy that had once made her feel like she was never enough to hold his focus. The door chimed as another patron entered, bringing the scent of rain and exhaust fumes. London smells. Home smells. "Another?" Silas raised the whisky bottle. Rory pushed the empty glass across the bar and watched golden liquid catch the light. Three years since she'd fled Cardiff with nothing but a suitcase and Eva's promise of sanctuary. Three years of building a life that belonged entirely to her. "Some people change," she said, more to herself than to Silas. "Others just get better at hiding who they've always been." The older man's smile held approval. "And some people," he said, "finally learn the difference."
total_cost0.045576

Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags16
adverbTagCount2
adverbTags
0"The word tasted like [like]"
1"He stood abruptly [abruptly]"
dialogueSentences52
tagDensity0.308
leniency0.615
rawRatio0.125
effectiveRatio0.077
82.72% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1447
totalAiIsmAdverbs5
found
0
adverb"slightly"
count1
1
adverb"perfectly"
count1
2
adverb"deliberately"
count1
3
adverb"suddenly"
count2
highlights
0"slightly"
1"perfectly"
2"deliberately"
3"suddenly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (16 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
0"Blackwood"
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
51.62% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1447
totalAiIsms14
found
0
word"calculated"
count1
1
word"familiar"
count2
2
word"lilt"
count1
3
word"warmth"
count1
4
word"flicker"
count1
5
word"tension"
count2
6
word"practiced ease"
count1
7
word"could feel"
count1
8
word"silence"
count1
9
word"perfect"
count1
10
word"wavering"
count1
11
word"sanctuary"
count1
highlights
0"calculated"
1"familiar"
2"lilt"
3"warmth"
4"flicker"
5"tension"
6"practiced ease"
7"could feel"
8"silence"
9"perfect"
10"wavering"
11"sanctuary"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences131
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount2
hedgeCount1
narrationSentences131
filterMatches
0"feel"
hedgeMatches
0"tried to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences166
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen25
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1441
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions8
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions46
wordCount1142
uniqueNames15
maxNameDensity0.88
worstName"Evan"
maxWindowNameDensity2
worstWindowName"Evan"
discoveredNames
Rory7
Raven2
Nest2
Evan10
Holbrook1
Cardiff2
University1
Welsh1
Cartier1
Silas10
Tap-tap-pause2
Soft1
London2
Eva1
Knew3
persons
0"Rory"
1"Raven"
2"Evan"
3"Holbrook"
4"Silas"
5"Eva"
places
0"Cardiff"
1"University"
2"London"
globalScore1
windowScore1
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences85
glossingSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount1441
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount2
totalSentences166
matches
0"Knew that he"
1"taken that pressure"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs71
mean20.3
std14.98
cv0.738
sampleLengths
07
142
228
345
456
51
637
72
826
91
101
1143
1231
1315
1434
1533
164
1719
187
199
2039
216
2215
2315
2418
256
2639
2720
2811
2931
3033
315
325
3324
3430
355
3625
377
3810
3941
4014
4121
423
436
4416
456
4633
471
489
4930
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount1
totalSentences131
matches
0"being evaluated"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs196
matches(empty)
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences0
totalSentences166
ratio0
matches(empty)
94.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1147
adjectiveStacks1
stackExamples
0"watched golden liquid catch"
adverbCount44
adverbRatio0.03836094158674804
lyAdverbCount13
lyAdverbRatio0.011333914559721011
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences166
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences166
mean8.68
std5.51
cv0.634
sampleLengths
07
12
21
322
417
515
610
73
84
95
1011
1111
1214
1314
1411
1518
1613
171
182
1910
209
215
221
231
249
252
2614
271
289
292
301
311
326
337
3412
3512
366
377
3814
3910
4011
414
4212
432
4420
4520
464
479
484
4912
76.10% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats12
diversityRatio0.5
totalSentences166
uniqueOpeners83
87.72% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount3
totalSentences114
matches
0"Too much money."
1"Instead, he straightened his tie"
2"Just acceptance of who she'd"
ratio0.026
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount23
totalSentences114
matches
0"His hazel eyes followed her"
1"His sandy hair was shorter,"
2"She turned, meeting eyes that"
3"He stood, and she noticed"
4"She remembered the last time"
5"He stood behind the bar"
6"His silver signet ring caught"
7"He accepted the glass from"
8"She saw it in the"
9"She remembered his father's expectations."
10"His breathing had shifted, deeper"
11"She recognized the signs."
12"His voice had dropped to"
13"She caught a glimpse of"
14"It almost made her feel"
15"She studied his expensive suit,"
16"He moved with the fluid"
17"His voice carried the deceptive"
18"He stood abruptly, leaving money"
19"He paused at the door,"
ratio0.202
100.00% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount76
totalSentences114
matches
0"The whisky glass slipped from"
1"The glass hit the bar"
2"Silas appeared with a tea"
3"His hazel eyes followed her"
4"The question hung unanswered."
5"This version wore an expensive"
6"His sandy hair was shorter,"
7"The boyish softness she remembered"
8"She turned, meeting eyes that"
9"A flicker of something that"
10"He stood, and she noticed"
11"The kind that screamed old"
12"The word landed like a"
13"She remembered the last time"
14"The bruise on her ribs"
15"The way he'd apologized afterwards,"
16"Silas's voice cut through the"
17"He stood behind the bar"
18"His silver signet ring caught"
19"Evan's order rolled off his"
ratio0.667
100.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount5
totalSentences114
matches
0"Because yes, she knew him."
1"Now they held something else."
2"To smooth things over."
3"To make herself smaller until"
4"Even in profile, she could"
ratio0.044
80.75% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences46
technicalSentenceCount4
matches
0"His sandy hair was shorter, styled with the kind of precision that cost more than her monthly rent."
1"He stood behind the bar like a sentry, polishing glasses that didn't need polishing."
2"Evan straightened, suddenly aware he was being evaluated by someone who didn't care about his pedigree or his prospects."
3"Someone who saw through expensive suits to the scared boy beneath."
31.25% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags16
uselessAdditionCount3
matches
0"He accepted, fingers steady as stone"
1"Silas had, but his attention remained focused on her"
2"she said, more to herself than to Silas"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags2
fancyCount0
fancyTags(empty)
dialogueSentences52
tagDensity0.038
leniency0.077
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
93.4722%