Run: 2026-02-19-01KHTXHX64Q271GA2DF6RNMZH4

Run Details

Duration:
1m 2s
Cost:
$0.053610
Provider:
Google AI Studio

Model input

System
You are an expert fiction writer. Always keep the following rules in mind: - Write in past tense and use General English spelling, grammar, and colloquialisms/slang. - Write in active voice - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. - Avoid adverbs and cliches and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Convey events and story through dialogue. - Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. - Skip "he/she said said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech - Avoid mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or add unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Reduce indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" When writing text: - NEVER conclude the scene on your own, follow the beat instructions very closely. - NEVER end with foreshadowing. - NEVER write further than what I prompt you with. - AVOID imagining possible endings, NEVER deviate from the instructions. - STOP EARLY if the continuation contains what was required in the instructions. You do not need to fill out the full amount of words possible.
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> </codex> Continue the story using the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the horror genre. A character is alone in a strange, isolated place at night. They came here for a reason, but something feels off from the moment they arrive. The wrongness builds slowly — sounds that shouldn't be there, things that move at the edge of vision, a growing certainty that they are not alone. Build tension through restraint, not through gore. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for the character and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The biting wind off the Thames didn't reach this far into Richmond, but the cold settled in Aurora’s bones regardless. She killed the headlight on her bicycle, plunging the gravel path into a suffocating darkness. The silence of the park at 2:00 AM felt heavy, a physical weight pressing against her eardrums. She swung her leg over the frame, boots crunching on the frost-dusted path. The silver chain around her neck felt like a wire heated by a flame, the Heartstone pendant beneath her layers pulsing with a rhythm that didn't match her own heart. It had woken her up, a searing heat against her sternum that demanded movement, demanded presence. "Alright. I'm here. Cool off." She rubbed the crescent scar on her left wrist, a nervous tick she hadn’t managed to shake since childhood. The pendant didn't listen. It throbbed harder, a dull crimson ache radiating through her sternum. Aurora pushed the bike into the underbrush, locking the frame to a hawthorn sturdy enough to hold it. Leaving the reliable metal frame felt like abandoning a limb. She adjusted her jacket, breath pluming in white clouds before her face, and turned toward the cluster of ancient oaks that marked the boundary. Most people saw trees. Aurora saw the threshold. The oaks stood like gnarled sentinels, their branches interlocked to form a natural archway. Between them, the air shimmered with an oily, translucent quality, confusing the eye. It looked like heat haze on tarmac, but the night was freezing. She stepped through. The transition wasn't physical—no pop, no wind. It was a shift in density. The air inside the Fae Grove tasted sweet, cloying like rotting jasmine and overripe peaches. The biting London chill vanished, replaced by a humid, stagnant warmth that made her skin crawl under her heavy coat. Aurora unzipped the jacket. "Isolde? This better not be some cryptic fae game." Her voice didn't echo. The sound simply dropped dead three feet from her lips, absorbed by the moss and the unnatural stillness. The grove defied the season. While Richmond Park outside withered under winter’s approach, here, foxgloves and poppies stood tall and vibrant, their colors oddly saturated in the gloom. They didn't sway. There was no wind here. They stood perfectly, terrifyingly still. She clicked on her torch. The beam cut a stark cone through the humidity, illuminating the suspended dust motes. They didn't drift; they hung in place until she walked through them. The pendant cooled slightly, its job apparently done now that she stood in the center of the clearing. "Great. You dragged me out of bed to look at flowers." She swept the light across the perimeter. The tree line seemed further away than she remembered. The boundary stones were gone, swallowed by thickets of briar that hadn't been there ten seconds ago. A twig snapped. Aurora spun, the beam of light whipping through the darkness. It landed on a patch of ferns. Nothing. She lowered the light, forcing her breathing to even out. Logic. Think. Animals lived here. Foxes, deer, badgers. Even in a pocket dimension, things had to eat. Another snap. Louder. Directly behind her. She turned slower this time, keeping the light low to preserve her night vision. The dense canopy blocked out the stars, leaving the grove in a pitch blackness that felt intentional. "If that's you, Silas, it’s not funny." Silence answered. Not the quiet of an empty room, but the held breath of a room with someone standing in the corner. She took a step forward. A wet, sucking sound came from beneath her boot. The ground, previously firm moss, had turned to bog. She lifted her foot, and the mud made a noise that sounded disturbingly like a tongue clicking against the roof of a mouth. *Click.* Aurora froze. She hadn't moved her foot that time. The sound came from the left, deep in the shadows of the briar patch. It was wet, rhythmic. *Click. Click.* She shone the torch toward the noise. The light caught the glossy sheen of leaves, the thorns long and hooked like rusted nails. Deep within the tangle, two points of light reflected the beam. Eyes. Too wide apart to be a fox. Too low to be a man. "Who's there?" The eyes blinked. Side to side, not simultaneously. First the left, then the right. Aurora backpedaled, her boots sliding on the slick mud. The air grew heavier, the floral scent souring into something metallic, familiar. Copper. Blood. The eyes vanished. Not moving away, just ceasing to reflect. She kept the light trained on the spot, her other hand instinctively going to the pocket where she kept her box cutter from the delivery job. A useless piece of metal against whatever lived in a place where time didn't obey physics, but the weight of it in her palm grounded her. A rustle to her right. Fast. She jerked the light. Nothing but foxgloves, heads bowed. "Show yourself." A giggle floated through the air. It sounded like a child, high and breathless, but it ended in a gargle, like water filling a lung. Aurora’s stomach turned over. She checked her six, spinning in a tight circle. The grove was closing in. The briars had crept forward, shrinking the clearing. She was sure of it. The path back to the oaks was gone, replaced by a wall of thorns. She needed to move. Standing still made her prey. She picked a direction that looked less dense and walked, keeping her steps light. The mud seemed to grab at her ankles, eager to pull her down. Every movement she made was accompanied by a delay—the squelch of her boot echoed a fraction of a second too late, creating a disorienting feedback loop. *Step. Squelch. ...Squelch.* *Step. Squelch. ...Squelch.* She stopped. *...Squelch.* The third step hadn't been hers. Aurora killed the light. The darkness slammed into her, absolute and suffocating. If she couldn't see them, maybe they couldn't see her. She crouched low, the damp soaking through her jeans immediately. She held her breath, counting the beats of her pulse in her ears. *One. Two. Three.* Something brushed against her hair. She flinched, slapping a hand to her neck, expecting a spider or a branch. Her fingers came away wet. Not water. It was warm. Viscous. She wiped her hand on the grass, fighting the urge to vomit. Above her, the canopy groaned. Not the creak of wood, but a vocalization. A low, wooden moan of exertion. Aurora scrambled forward on her hands and knees, staying low. She needed cover. Her hand hit something hard—stone. One of the markers? No, this was smooth, carved. She risked the light for a split second, shielding the beam with her fingers to create just a sliver of illumination. It was a statue. Or it had been. It looked like a garden gnome, the kind seen in tacky suburban lawns, but distorted. The face was elongated, the mouth stretched open in a silent scream, the ceramic eyes rolled back into the head. And it was warm. She yanked her hand back. Stone shouldn't be warm. From the darkness ahead, the clicking returned. It was faster now. Excited. *Click-click-click.* It was coming from multiple directions. The briars rustled, a dry, scratching sound like thousands of insect legs on paper. "Invited," she muttered, her voice trembling. "I was invited. The pendant." She clutched the crimson stone. It was cold now. Dead cold. A voice whispered, right next to her ear. It mimicked her own tone perfectly, stealing her cadence, her pitch. "Invited." Aurora lashed out with the box cutter, slicing through empty air. She rolled away, ignoring the mud, and scrambled to her feet. She ran. She ran blindly into the dark, arms up to shield her face. Thorns tore at her jacket, snagging the heavy fabric. She didn't feel pain, only the adrenaline flooding her system. The ground was uneven, roots rising up to trip her, but she vaulted them with a dexterity born of panic. The sound of pursuit didn't come from behind. It came from everywhere. The rustling matched her pace. When she sprinted, the forest sprinted. A shape loomed out of the fog—a tree, pale and slender. She swerved, her shoulder clipping the bark. It felt soft, yielding like flesh. She stumbled into a clearing she didn't recognize. In the center lay a bicycle. Her bicycle. But it was rusted, the metal pitted and ancient, the tires disintegrated. It looked like it had been rotting there for fifty years. Aurora stopped, chest heaving. "That's impossible. I just… I just left it." The wheel of the rusted bike spun slowly, squeaking. The only moving thing in the grove. *Squeak. Squeak.* "Rory," the darkness said. It wasn't a whisper this time. It was a shout. It sounded like Evan. The confident, sneering tone he used when he’d had too much to drink. "Don't be stupid, Rory. Come here." The voice came from the rusted bike. Aurora backed away, her hands shaking so hard the torch beam jittered wildly. "You're not real. None of this is real. It’s the grove. It’s a glamour." "Real enough to bleed," the Evan-voice said, shifting, dropping an octave into something guttural and grinding. A shadow detached itself from the tree line behind the bike. It unfolded, limb by erratic limb. It stood seven feet tall, lanky and disjointed, like a stick figure drawn by a disturbed child. It wore the rags of a delivery uniform. It had no face. Just a smooth, pale surface where features should be. Aurora gripped the box cutter, the blade extended. "Stay back." The thing didn't walk. It glitched forward—one moment it was by the trees, the next it was ten feet closer, the space between traversed without movement. It tilted its head. The surface of its face rippled. A mouth tore open, vertical and jagged. "Stay back," it mimicked, using her voice again, panic and all. Aurora scanned the perimeter. The briars were a solid wall now. The only open space was behind the creature. She tightened her grip on the flashlight. It was heavy, a Maglite she used for late-night deliveries. "Okay," she breathed. "Okay." She feinted left. The creature twitched, its movement a blur of shutter-speed jerks. She threw the flashlight. It tumbled through the air, the beam spinning dizzily, and struck the creature in the chest. The thing didn't flinch, but the light distracted it for the fraction of a second she needed. Aurora dove to the right, crashing through a patch of oversized ferns. She hit the ground rolling and came up running. She didn't look back. The sounds behind her changed—the mimicry stopped, replaced by a wet, tearing noise and the heavy thud of weight hitting the earth. She saw the ancient oaks ahead. They were faint, ghostly outlines in the swirling mist, but they were there. The exit. She pushed harder, her lungs burning. The distance didn't seem to close. The faster she ran, the more the trees seemed to recede, trapped in a dolly-zoom of nightmare perspective. Something looped around her ankle—a vine, thick and muscular. Aurora slammed into the dirt, the air driven from her lungs. She rolled onto her back, kicking out. The vine tightened, dragging her backward into the dark. Her fingernails scraped furrows in the mud. She slashed at the vine with the box cutter. The blade bit in, and black ichor sprayed across her hand. The vine recoiled, thrashing like a severed snake. She scrambled up, gasping. The oaks were right there. Ten feet. The creature stood between them. It wasn't wearing the delivery uniform anymore. It was wearing a suit. A barrister's suit. Her father’s suit. It raised a hand, the fingers lengthening, stretching out toward her like willow branches. "Aurora," it said, in a voice that was a perfect, heartbreaking recording of her mother. "Don't go." The air pressure plummeted. Her ears popped. The sensation of being underwater returned, crushing and absolute. The pendant on her chest flared hot again, not a warning this time, but a scream. Aurora stared at the thing wearing her trauma like a costume. "She's dead," Aurora said, her voice flat, cold. "And you have three seconds to move." She stepped forward, not away. Complex problems required out-of-the-box thinking. If the distance grew when she ran, maybe it shrank when she confronted it. Fae logic was about intent, not physics. She walked toward the monster. It hissed, the mother-voice dissolving into static. The jagged mouth opened wider, splitting the head in two. Aurora didn't flinch. She kept her eyes on the space between the oaks, visualizing the gravel path, the cold wind, the smell of the Thames. The creature lunged.
created_at"2026-02-19T12:21:18.666Z" 2/19/2026, 12:21:18 PM
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags7
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences22
tagDensity0.318
leniency0.636
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
90.62% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount2133
totalAiIsmAdverbs4
found
0
adverb"perfectly"
count2
1
adverb"slightly"
count1
2
adverb"slowly"
count1
highlights
0"perfectly"
1"slightly"
2"slowly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
41.40% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount2133
totalAiIsms25
found
0
word"silence"
count2
1
word"weight"
count3
2
word"searing"
count1
3
word"throbbed"
count1
4
word"sturdy"
count1
5
word"sentinels"
count1
6
word"shimmered"
count1
7
word"chill"
count1
8
word"warmth"
count1
9
word"echo"
count1
10
word"gloom"
count1
11
word"stark"
count1
12
word"rhythmic"
count1
13
word"familiar"
count1
14
word"stomach"
count1
15
word"echoed"
count1
16
word"pulse"
count1
17
word"loomed"
count1
18
word"whisper"
count1
19
word"scanned"
count1
20
word"perfect"
count1
21
word"complex"
count1
highlights
0"silence"
1"weight"
2"searing"
3"throbbed"
4"sturdy"
5"sentinels"
6"shimmered"
7"chill"
8"warmth"
9"echo"
10"gloom"
11"stark"
12"rhythmic"
13"familiar"
14"stomach"
15"echoed"
16"pulse"
17"loomed"
18"whisper"
19"scanned"
20"perfect"
21"complex"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences251
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount4
narrationSentences251
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"managed to"
1"seemed to"
2"seem to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences266
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen30
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans8
markdownWords16
totalWords2120
ratio0.008
matches
0"Click."
1"Click. Click."
2"Step. Squelch. ...Squelch."
3"Step. Squelch. ...Squelch."
4"...Squelch."
5"One. Two. Three."
6"Click-click-click."
7"Squeak. Squeak."
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions6
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
100.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions34
wordCount2026
uniqueNames11
maxNameDensity0.99
worstName"Aurora"
maxWindowNameDensity2
worstWindowName"Aurora"
discoveredNames
Thames2
Richmond2
Aurora20
Heartstone1
Fae2
Grove1
London1
Park1
Evan2
Evan-voice1
Maglite1
persons
0"Aurora"
1"Evan"
2"Evan-voice"
places
0"Thames"
1"Richmond"
2"Fae"
3"Grove"
4"London"
5"Park"
globalScore1
windowScore1
26.76% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences142
glossingSentenceCount7
matches
0"felt like a wire heated by a flame, the"
1"felt like abandoning a limb"
2"looked like heat haze on tarmac, but the"
3"ghtly, its job apparently done now that she s"
4"sounded like a child, high and breathless"
5"looked like a garden gnome, the kind seen"
6"looked like it had been rotting there for"
58.49% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches3
per1kWords1.415
wordCount2120
matches
0"Not the quiet of an empty room, but the held breath of a room with someone standing in the corne"
1"Not the creak of wood, but a vocalization"
2"not a warning this time, but a scream"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences266
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs113
mean18.76
std14.52
cv0.774
sampleLengths
052
159
25
334
452
58
639
73
848
913
1022
1141
1231
1318
1411
1533
163
1718
1827
196
2031
217
2222
2346
241
259
2618
272
2834
2914
302
3114
3223
3310
3452
356
369
372
3825
3945
409
4153
423
433
442
451
466
4732
4813
493
98.27% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount5
totalSentences251
matches
0"were gone"
1"was gone"
2"was accompanied"
3"was elongated"
4"was rusted"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount4
totalVerbs367
matches
0"was closing"
1"was coming"
2"wasn't wearing"
3"was wearing"
56.93% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount7
semicolonCount1
flaggedSentences8
totalSentences266
ratio0.03
matches
0"The transition wasn't physical—no pop, no wind."
1"They didn't drift; they hung in place until she walked through them."
2"Every movement she made was accompanied by a delay—the squelch of her boot echoed a fraction of a second too late, creating a disorienting feedback loop."
3"Her hand hit something hard—stone."
4"A shape loomed out of the fog—a tree, pale and slender."
5"It glitched forward—one moment it was by the trees, the next it was ten feet closer, the space between traversed without movement."
6"The sounds behind her changed—the mimicry stopped, replaced by a wet, tearing noise and the heavy thud of weight hitting the earth."
7"Something looped around her ankle—a vine, thick and muscular."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount2039
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount63
adverbRatio0.03089749877390878
lyAdverbCount23
lyAdverbRatio0.011280039234919078
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences266
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences266
mean7.97
std5.87
cv0.737
sampleLengths
020
115
217
313
430
516
65
719
84
911
1018
1110
1224
134
144
1514
1613
1712
183
197
206
2115
2220
234
249
254
2618
275
2823
293
305
315
325
3314
3412
3518
3611
377
389
3917
403
4110
427
431
4410
451
461
473
483
499
39.47% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats28
diversityRatio0.2744360902255639
totalSentences266
uniqueOpeners73
62.31% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount4
totalSentences214
matches
0"Directly behind her."
1"Too wide apart to be"
2"Too low to be a"
3"Just a smooth, pale surface"
ratio0.019
51.78% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount90
totalSentences214
matches
0"She killed the headlight on"
1"She swung her leg over"
2"It had woken her up,"
3"She rubbed the crescent scar"
4"It throbbed harder, a dull"
5"She adjusted her jacket, breath"
6"It looked like heat haze"
7"She stepped through."
8"It was a shift in"
9"Her voice didn't echo."
10"They didn't sway."
11"They stood perfectly, terrifyingly still."
12"She clicked on her torch."
13"They didn't drift; they hung"
14"She swept the light across"
15"It landed on a patch"
16"She lowered the light, forcing"
17"She turned slower this time,"
18"She took a step forward."
19"She lifted her foot, and"
ratio0.421
27.76% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount185
totalSentences214
matches
0"The biting wind off the"
1"She killed the headlight on"
2"The silence of the park"
3"She swung her leg over"
4"The silver chain around her"
5"It had woken her up,"
6"She rubbed the crescent scar"
7"The pendant didn't listen."
8"It throbbed harder, a dull"
9"Aurora pushed the bike into"
10"She adjusted her jacket, breath"
11"Aurora saw the threshold."
12"The oaks stood like gnarled"
13"It looked like heat haze"
14"She stepped through."
15"The transition wasn't physical—no pop,"
16"It was a shift in"
17"The air inside the Fae"
18"The biting London chill vanished,"
19"Aurora unzipped the jacket."
ratio0.864
93.46% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount4
totalSentences214
matches
0"While Richmond Park outside withered"
1"Even in a pocket dimension,"
2"If she couldn't see them,"
3"If the distance grew when"
ratio0.019
80.36% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences80
technicalSentenceCount7
matches
0"The silver chain around her neck felt like a wire heated by a flame, the Heartstone pendant beneath her layers pulsing with a rhythm that didn't match her own h…"
1"It had woken her up, a searing heat against her sternum that demanded movement, demanded presence."
2"She adjusted her jacket, breath pluming in white clouds before her face, and turned toward the cluster of ancient oaks that marked the boundary."
3"The biting London chill vanished, replaced by a humid, stagnant warmth that made her skin crawl under her heavy coat."
4"The dense canopy blocked out the stars, leaving the grove in a pitch blackness that felt intentional."
5"She picked a direction that looked less dense and walked, keeping her steps light."
6"She flinched, slapping a hand to her neck, expecting a spider or a branch."
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags7
uselessAdditionCount2
matches
0"she muttered, her voice trembling"
1"Aurora said, her voice flat, cold"
59.09% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags6
fancyCount2
fancyTags
0"she muttered (mutter)"
1"she breathed (breathe)"
dialogueSentences22
tagDensity0.273
leniency0.545
rawRatio0.333
effectiveRatio0.182
79.5564%