Run: 2026-02-19-01KHTXHY2058GSSDC5P2BWR8DX

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Duration:
59.5s
Cost:
$0.008076
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Nebius

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System
You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Romance genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4415" name="Lucien Moreau" aliases="Lucien, Luc, the Frenchman" pronouns="he/him" species="Half-Demon" storyRole="Ally"> <eyeColor>heterochromatic — one amber, one black</eyeColor> <hair>slicked-back platinum blond</hair> <height>5'11"</height> <age>32</age> <cane>ivory-handled cane that conceals a thin blade</cane> <dress>tailored charcoal suits</dress> <description>An impeccably dressed fixer and information broker in London's supernatural underworld. He speaks four languages fluently.</description> <backstory>Born in Marseille to a human mother and a demon father from the realm of Avaros.</backstory> </character> <location id="858" name="Eva's Flat" aliases="Eva's place, the flat on Brick Lane" realm="Earth"> <cat>tabby cat named Ptolemy</cat> <security>three deadbolts on the front door</security> <description>A cramped one-bedroom flat above a curry house on Brick Lane, East London. Every surface is covered with books, scrolls, and research notes.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the romance genre. Two people who parted on complicated terms are forced together again when one shows up unannounced at the other's flat. There's history between them — attraction, hurt, and things left unsaid. Write the scene from the moment the door opens. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
Thefirst deadbolt screeched as I threw it back. The second followed with a dull thud. The third, a heavy brass beast I’d installed after the last incident, required a sharp jerk of my wrist. I pulled the door open, ready to unleash a tirade about the curry shop’s delivery hours, but the words died in my throat. Lucien Moreau stood in the hallway, looking like he’d just stepped out of a Savile Row catalogue and into a nightmare. His charcoal suit was immaculate, not a crease in sight, but the air around him vibrated with a low, dangerous frequency. The amber iris of his right eye fixed on me, while the black one seemed to stare right through the drywall behind me. "Miss Carter. You’re difficult to find." "I moved. That's usually the point." I didn't step back. I didn't invite him in. I gripped the edge of the door, my knuckles turning white. "How did you get past the building security?" "The lock on the street door is a joke. I’d expect better from a barrister’s daughter, even a dropout one." He didn't wait for an invitation. His ivory-handled cane tapped against the floorboards as he brushed past me, the scent of ozone and expensive cologne invading the cramped space. "This is a private residence." "Private is a relative term in our circles." He stopped in the centre of the room, surveying the chaos. Towers of books, stacks of scrolls, and Eva’s arcane research notes covered every available surface. Ptolemy, the tabby cat, hissed from the top of a refrigerator and flattened his ears. Lucien ignored the cat. He turned slowly, his cane tapping a rhythm against a pile of ancient textbooks. "You smell like cumin and desperation. How... quaint." "It’s Brick Lane. It’s supposed to smell like curry. And I’m working, so if you could just state your business and leave..." "You’re delivering takeaway for a woman who sees the future in tea leaves. Hardly the career path your father envisioned for you at Cardiff." I slammed the door, the sound echoing through the flat. I crossed my arms, ignoring the way my heart hammered against my ribs. Lucien had a talent for making me feel like a scruffy child, even though I was only inches shorter than him. "I didn't invite you here to critique my CV. Why are you here, Lucien?" He moved closer. The cane stopped tapping. He reached out, his gloved fingers hovering near the small, crescent-shaped scar on my left wrist. I flinched, pulling my hand back against my stomach. "It appears," he said softly, his voice dropping an octave, "that your littlest ex has not learned his lesson." "Evan?" I forced a laugh, but it sounded hollow. "He’s in Bristol. He’s barely allowed within fifty yards of a restraining order." "Not Evan." Lucien sighed, a sound of immense boredom, and walked over to the window. He twitched the curtain aside with the tip of his cane. "The other one. The one with the teeth." The blood drained from my face. "He’s gone. Silas handled it." "Silas is a bartender who thinks he’s a wolf because he owns too many leather jackets. He cannot handle what is coming." Lucien turned back, the light catching the sharp angle of his jaw. "I found traces of Avaros sigils on your fire escape this morning." "That's impossible. I scrubbed that ledge last week." "Then you missed a spot. Or, more likely, someone is painting new ones." He stepped into my personal space again. I could feel the heat radiating off him. Demons ran hot. "They are marking you, Rory. You are a beacon, and you are currently unshielded." "I don't need a shield. I need you to leave." I turned towards the tiny kitchenette, needing space, needing a glass of water, anything to break the tension. But his hand shot out, gripping my upper arm. Not hard enough to bruise, but firm enough to stop me cold. "You need to stop lying to yourself. I can see the fear rolling off you in waves." His gaze dropped to my lips, then back up to my eyes. "It is... distracting." "Let go of me." "No." The simple word hung in the air, heavy and final. He pulled me closer, the fabric of his suit rough against my thin t-shirt. For a moment, the animosity between us—the failed alliances, the arguments, the night six months ago that we never spoke of—crackled into something else. Something hotter. "You always were arrogant," I whispered. "It is not arrogance if one is correct." He released my arm, but his fingers trailed down to my wrist, lingering over the pulse point. "You are in danger. I am here to offer a solution." "I don't trust your solutions. They usually involve blood." "Only when necessary." Ptolemy launched himself from the fridge, landing on a stack of newspapers and sending them sliding across the floor. The sudden clatter broke the spell. Lucien stepped back, adjusting his cuffs, his mask of indifference sliding back into place. "We need to leave. Tonight." "I have a shift at the Golden Empress." "Forget the dumplings. Unless you want to be the main course." He walked to the door, his movements fluid and predatory. He paused with his hand on the handle, looking back over his shoulder. "Pack a bag. Only what you can carry. We leave in five minutes." "I'm not going anywhere with you until you tell me what you saw on the fire escape." Lucien’s lips curved into a smile that showed too many teeth. "A calling card. Someone wants you back, Aurora. And they don't intend to ask nicely." Before I could demand specifics, the window behind me shattered. Glass exploded inward, spraying across the room in a glittering rain. A heavy, dark object thudded onto the floorboards amidst the shards, hissing like a snake. Smoke, thick and acrid with the smell of sulphur, began to pour from it. Lucien was moving before the glass stopped falling. He dove across the room, tackling me to the ground behind the sofa. "Get down!" he roared, his human veneer shattering to reveal the predator beneath. The hissing object pulsed with a sickly green light. "Run!"
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
97.44% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags11
adverbTagCount2
adverbTags
0"he said softly [softly]"
1"Lucien turned back [back]"
dialogueSentences39
tagDensity0.282
leniency0.564
rawRatio0.182
effectiveRatio0.103
90.40% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1042
totalAiIsmAdverbs2
found
0
adverb"slowly"
count1
1
adverb"softly"
count1
highlights
0"slowly"
1"softly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
42.42% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1042
totalAiIsms12
found
0
word"vibrated"
count1
1
word"echoing"
count1
2
word"stomach"
count1
3
word"could feel"
count1
4
word"beacon"
count1
5
word"tension"
count1
6
word"pulse"
count1
7
word"mask of indifference"
count1
8
word"shattered"
count1
9
word"amidst"
count1
10
word"predator"
count1
11
word"pulsed"
count1
highlights
0"vibrated"
1"echoing"
2"stomach"
3"could feel"
4"beacon"
5"tension"
6"pulse"
7"mask of indifference"
8"shattered"
9"amidst"
10"predator"
11"pulsed"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"hung in the air"
count1
highlights
0"hung in the air"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences57
matches(empty)
67.67% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount1
hedgeCount2
narrationSentences57
filterMatches
0"feel"
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
1"began to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences85
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen34
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1038
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions8
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
89.94% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions15
wordCount666
uniqueNames7
maxNameDensity1.2
worstName"Lucien"
maxWindowNameDensity2
worstWindowName"Lucien"
discoveredNames
Moreau1
Savile1
Row1
Towers1
Eva1
Lucien8
Ptolemy2
persons
0"Moreau"
1"Eva"
2"Lucien"
3"Ptolemy"
places(empty)
globalScore0.899
windowScore1
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences49
glossingSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
7.32% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches2
per1kWords1.927
wordCount1038
matches
0"not a crease in sight, but the air around him vibrated with a low, dangerous frequency"
1"Not hard enough to bruise, but firm enough to stop me cold"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences85
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs46
mean22.57
std15.42
cv0.683
sampleLengths
034
123
265
36
434
520
629
75
849
926
1022
1124
1244
1314
1432
1519
1622
1734
1811
1946
208
2145
2210
2339
2432
254
261
2750
286
2936
309
313
3239
335
348
3511
3623
3713
3817
3926
4010
4140
4221
4313
449
451
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount0
totalSentences57
matches(empty)
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs111
matches(empty)
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount2
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences1
totalSentences85
ratio0.012
matches
0"For a moment, the animosity between us—the failed alliances, the arguments, the night six months ago that we never spoke of—crackled into something else."
94.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount670
adjectiveStacks1
stackExamples
0"small, crescent-shaped scar"
adverbCount17
adverbRatio0.025373134328358207
lyAdverbCount4
lyAdverbRatio0.005970149253731343
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences85
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences85
mean12.21
std6.75
cv0.553
sampleLengths
08
17
219
323
421
521
623
76
810
95
1011
118
1220
136
1423
155
1619
1715
1815
194
2014
218
2222
2324
2410
2513
2621
2714
283
294
3016
319
3219
339
3413
3515
3611
378
386
395
4034
4112
428
4320
448
453
4614
4710
4818
499
62.35% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats7
diversityRatio0.4235294117647059
totalSentences85
uniqueOpeners36
0.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount0
totalSentences55
matches(empty)
ratio0
23.64% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount27
totalSentences55
matches
0"I pulled the door open,"
1"His charcoal suit was immaculate,"
2"I didn't step back"
3"I didn't invite him in."
4"I gripped the edge of"
5"He didn't wait for an"
6"His ivory-handled cane tapped against"
7"He stopped in the centre"
8"He turned slowly, his cane"
9"I slammed the door, the"
10"I crossed my arms, ignoring"
11"He moved closer."
12"He reached out, his gloved"
13"I flinched, pulling my hand"
14"he said softly, his voice"
15"I forced a laugh, but"
16"He twitched the curtain aside"
17"He stepped into my personal"
18"I could feel the heat"
19"I turned towards the tiny"
ratio0.491
5.45% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount50
totalSentences55
matches
0"Thefirst deadbolt screeched as I"
1"The second followed with a"
2"The third, a heavy brass"
3"I pulled the door open,"
4"Lucien Moreau stood in the"
5"His charcoal suit was immaculate,"
6"The amber iris of his"
7"I didn't step back"
8"I didn't invite him in."
9"I gripped the edge of"
10"He didn't wait for an"
11"His ivory-handled cane tapped against"
12"He stopped in the centre"
13"Towers of books, stacks of"
14"Ptolemy, the tabby cat, hissed"
15"Lucien ignored the cat."
16"He turned slowly, his cane"
17"I slammed the door, the"
18"I crossed my arms, ignoring"
19"Lucien had a talent for"
ratio0.909
90.91% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount1
totalSentences55
matches
0"Before I could demand specifics,"
ratio0.018
100.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences30
technicalSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags11
uselessAdditionCount4
matches
0"he said softly, his voice dropping an octave,"
1"Lucien turned back, the light catching the sharp angle of his jaw"
2"He released, but his fingers trailed down to my wrist, lingering over the pulse point"
3"he roared, his human veneer shattering to reveal the predator beneath"
73.08% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags4
fancyCount3
fancyTags
0"Lucien sighed (sigh)"
1"I whispered (whisper)"
2"he roared (roar)"
dialogueSentences39
tagDensity0.103
leniency0.205
rawRatio0.75
effectiveRatio0.154
78.1539%