Run: 2026-02-19-01KHTXHZ0J3F1ZZQ9RBDR5R65H

Run Details

Duration:
1m 25s
Cost:
$0.003484
Provider:
OpenAI

Model input

System
You are an expert fiction writer. Always keep the following rules in mind: - Write in past tense and use General English spelling, grammar, and colloquialisms/slang. - Write in active voice - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. - Avoid adverbs and cliches and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Convey events and story through dialogue. - Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. - Skip "he/she said said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech - Avoid mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or add unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Reduce indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" When writing text: - NEVER conclude the scene on your own, follow the beat instructions very closely. - NEVER end with foreshadowing. - NEVER write further than what I prompt you with. - AVOID imagining possible endings, NEVER deviate from the instructions. - STOP EARLY if the continuation contains what was required in the instructions. You do not need to fill out the full amount of words possible.
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4416" name="Detective Harlow Quinn" aliases="Quinn, Detective Quinn, Harlow" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Antagonist"> <eyeColor>brown</eyeColor> <hair>closely cropped salt-and-pepper</hair> <height>5'9"</height> <age>41</age> <jawline>sharp jaw</jawline> <watch>worn leather watch on her left wrist</watch> <bearing>military precision</bearing> <description>A Metropolitan Police detective with 18 years of decorated service who suspects the clique is involved in criminal activity.</description> <backstory>She lost her partner, DS Morris, during a case three years ago under unexplained circumstances that had supernatural origins she doesn't yet understand.</backstory> </character> <character id="4417" name="Tomás Herrera" aliases="Tommy, Tomás, Herrera" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Support"> <eyeColor>warm brown</eyeColor> <hair>short curly dark brown</hair> <height>5'10"</height> <age>29</age> <skinTone>olive skin</skinTone> <scar>scar running along his left forearm from a knife attack</scar> <medallion>Saint Christopher medallion around his neck</medallion> <birthplace>Seville, Spain</birthplace> <description>A former paramedic who provides off-the-books medical care for the clique.</description> <backstory>Born in Seville, Spain. He moved to London to work for the NHS but lost his license after administering unauthorized treatments to supernatural patients.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> <location id="856" name="The Veil Market" aliases="Veil Market, the Market, underground market" realm="Earth"> <currentLocation>abandoned Tube station beneath Camden</currentLocation> <entryRequirement>bone token</entryRequirement> <schedule>moves locations every full moon</schedule> <description>A hidden supernatural black market that sells enchanted goods, banned alchemical substances, and information.</description> </location> </codex> Continue the story using the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the thriller genre. A detective is pursuing a suspect through rain-soaked city streets at night. The chase takes them from the street level down into an underground market. The detective must decide whether to follow the suspect into unfamiliar and potentially dangerous territory. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
Rain slicked the pavement, and the city wore its night like a coat. Streetlamps bled orange halos onto puddles, and the rain hissed off the iron railings where the alleyways curled into shadow. A figure in a charcoal coat moved through the spray with a discipline that matched the detective’s own. The figure’s breath came in measured puffs, then vanished as if the air swallowed it. Quinn: Stop. Her boots punched dull potholes in the curb, the leather of her coat catching on a stray gust. The suspect twisted into an alley that reeked of damp brick and old paint, and the chase found a rhythm—one step ahead, then a turn, a half step back to crouch behind a dumpster, listening for the sirens that never quite came close enough. Quinn: You know I’ll keep up until you trip. The line of the city blurred into rain and neon as she closed the distance. Her watch clicked, a reminder of eighteen years behind the badge, the left wrist worn leather catching a glint of reflected green from a storefront sign. The suspect ducked into a doorway that smelled like beer and copper coins, and the detective followed, slipping the edge of her coat free to swing in a controlled arc as she stepped inside. A bell chimed, damp air washing over them, and the bar’s murmur rose like the first swell of a storm. The Raven’s Nest held its own weather, a dim room with walls crowded by maps, photographs, and secrets. The green neon sign above the entrance hummed with a tired vitality, casting the room in an uneasy glow. The suspect pressed into the crowded interior, the crowd parting with a practiced ease that kept him visible but undisturbed. Quinn moved through the rain-still air, eyes narrowing to brown slits behind the lid of her hat. They traded the bar’s quiet for the sharper sounds of coins and low voices. Suspect: Not tonight, Quinn. You’re spoiling the city’s little keepsakes. Quinn: I’m spoiling nothing. I’m collecting answers. The suspect pressed through a cluster near the bar, a path that angled toward a shelf crowded with junk and old books. He glanced over a shoulder, his gaze glinting with a feverish energy that told her he anticipated this moment. Quinn: You know what I want. Tell me where you’ve hidden the ledger. Suspect: Ledger? You’re chasing moonlight. You’ll never pin this on a book. A heavy breath fogged the glasses of a man at the end of the bar as he watched, pretending not to watch, pretending not to know which way the chase would tilt. Quinn kept her steps tight, closing the distance to the suspect with a confidence earned in long nights and colder alleys. The suspect sidestepped a chair, and the wood groaned like a tired animal. He moved with a dancer’s economy, a calculated mercy in the way he avoided contact. He bumped a shelf with his shoulder, sending a cascade of coins rolling across the floor, the sound slicing through the bar’s murmur. Quinn: Enough games. You’re not getting away this time. The suspect shot a hand toward the back of the room, toward a wall that looked like it’d always held a few secrets, a wall that wore a seam that might have been a door if you believed hard enough. He pressed. Suspect: You’re chasing a rumor, Detective. There’s nothing here for you but rain and smoke. Quinn: I’ve watched you breathe through walls before. Do you think I haven’t noticed your little routes? She followed, a long breath rafting from her chest. The bar’s floorboards creaked; the air tasted of whiskey and something sharper—metal and rain—like a blade’s edge catching night-light. The suspect’s steps slowed as a bookshelf came into view, the edge of a plaster wall hiding something behind it. He reached out and the bookcase gave, a quiet sigh of hinges and deliberate gravity. Suspect: You see what you want to see, Quinn. Quinn: I see path, and I’ll take it. The shelf slid to reveal a thin, dark corridor, a passage built into the bones of the old building. The air shifted, cooler here, smelling faintly of coal dust and something older—something that kept disease away or drew it in, depending on who you asked. The crowd behind them pressed, a living curtain that softened into silence as the door closed with a soft thud, a wordless transition from tavern to tunnel. Quinn: You think you’ve dragged this into daylight. It won’t glow as bright down there. Suspect: Every light burns, detective. The corridor opened into a narrow stairwell, metal rungs slick with rain—though no rain fell here, only the echo of it and the promise of something beyond. Quinn descended, the stairwell hanging in a space between the bar’s hum and the unknown’s still hush. Her breath came in measured, steady puffs. The marker on the wall—handwritten, almost affectionate in its roughness—read: The Veil Market? The Market? The bone token isn’t a rumor, she reminded herself, it’s a gate. The stairs opened into a vaulted chamber filled with a damp, metallic scent and a murky light that didn’t come from any lantern or neon. The walls were carved with runes and sigils that looked older than the brick around them, the kind of thing you might mistake for a joke until it pressed against your skin and insisted you listen. The market’s sound curled around the tunnel, a low rustle of exchange and the occasional bark of a vendor’s cry, everything muffled by the earthen walls. Suspect: You don’t belong down here, Quinn. This isn’t your beat, not your kind of rain. Quinn: I’ve walked worse nights. The market’s glow was a phosphorescent fog, shifting and moist, a living thing that clung to the walls and seeped into the cracks of the ceiling. Stalls hummed with concentrates of power: jars of glistening liquids, vials of amber dust, coins that clicked with a sound not quite metal, something more ancient, more patient. The market moved, she remembered, like the city’s own pulse, and tonight it would be in a different location if the full moon chose to rise. The suspect moved with an almost affectionate familiarity, gliding toward a stall that offered maps—maps that weren’t maps so much as possibilities, routes you could walk if you dared. The air carried a weight, the kind that settled in the corners of bones and told stories you didn’t know you were living until your mouth could taste them. Quinn: Stop stalling. Show me the ledger you hid in your sleeve and tell me who else paid your debts. Suspect: Debts routinize the night. You know that. There are favors owed to the right hands at the right moments. A stall keeper, gaunt and pale, lifted a waxed finger toward the suspect and then toward Quinn. The gesture was oddly theatrical, as if the market itself had decided to stage this confrontation. The gaunt vendor wore a pendant that hummed with a pale light, something like a key without teeth. The crowd shifted, a living sea of strangers who watched without seeming to, as if the tunnel itself held its breath. Vendor: Bone tokens for entry, madam. You’ve found the gate—now show your hand. Quinn kept her eyes on the suspect. She didn’t answer the vendor. She felt the weight of a chance pressing into her chest—the chance to go forward into a space where the supernatural stirred in the exact way a crime would, if you believed the rumors you’d rather not admit. If she followed the suspect into this place, it would be a descent into something larger than any case she’d ever carried. Suspect: You don’t have the token, not yet. You’ll need someone who knows the paths, someone who’s walked them with a lighter foot and a heavier conscience. Quinn: I don’t need a token to keep you here. The suspect flashed a sudden, almost boyish grin. It dissolved into a scowl as he ducked behind a curtain of mist, slipping between two stalls that breathed like lungs. Quinn followed, boots slapping softly on the stone, the rain-slick city falling away behind her like a memory she was pretending she didn’t want to recall. Vendor: The Market sees all who walk its paths. It will remember your choice. Quinn: I’m not here to trade memories. I’m here to take you in. The suspect paused at the threshold of a deeper shadow, where the market’s sound bent into a chorus of whispered conflicts. He looked back at her, eyes almost tender in the glow of the market’s strange light. A moment passed when the world just held its breath and then moved on again, as if a page had turned in a book too heavy to finish reading in one sitting. Quinn: We’re not finished. Not by a long shot. Suspect: Then come, detective. Decide quickly what you owe your city. She stood at a crossroad of damp, crowded aisles that smelled of oil and rain and something older, something that remembered when London learned to stand on the bones of the earth. The market’s crowd pressed closer, some faces half-hidden beneath hoods, others exposed to the strange light, their expressions a blend of fear and hunger, calculation and desire. A child-like tremor ran through her—an unexpected, almost innocent fear of what waited beyond the tunnel’s next bend. Quinn: If I step into this, I’m not coming back the same. Suspect: You’ll come back with what you came for—a ledger, a word you can piece into a confession. Or you’ll come back empty, and you’ll learn the truth a different way. A quiet interruption threaded through the market—footfalls that weren’t hers, a pair of heavy, deliberate steps moving with a purpose that suggested the path could be a trap. The steps closed the distance, and the crowd parted, not suddenly, but with the familiarity of a ritual. The footsteps belonged to someone who did not belong to this evening’s chase; they belonged to the city’s own, someone who knew the night’s language. Tomás Herrera’s name flickered in her memory as if a telegram from a life she’d already left behind. A former paramedic who dealt with off-book medical duties for the clique—an ally, if you could call him that, of people who always seemed to survive on the edge of law. He’d left a mark on London’s underworld that didn’t always show on a chart, a reminder that every shadow could bear a pulse. You could trust a man who’d saved your life once and knew how many lives you’d saved in return. Quinn: I don’t want anyone else in this. Suspect: Then stay with me, old friend. Stay with me in this tunnel where every breath costs something. The suspect slid a finger along a stall’s edge, brushing against a vial that shone like a tiny moon. The vial’s glow didn’t illuminate the faces around it so much as deepen them, making eyes gleam with something close to hunger and something else—recognition, maybe, of the danger the market could hold for every soul that walked its passages. Quinn: You’ll tell me where you’ve hidden— Suspect: You’ll never prove the magic you think you’re chasing. Quinn: Then you’ll tell me the name of the person who fed you the ledger’s contents. He paused, the glint in his eye turning into a wary caution. The market’s murmur swelled, a creature listening for the wrong note, a choir that could be broken by one misstep. The suspect’s lips curled in a thin smile and then firmed into a line of conviction. Suspect: There are doors in this market, detective. Doors that lead to honesty and to ruin, to healing and to treachery. Tonight, I went one way. Tomorrow, you’ll go another. If you’re lucky, you’ll choose a door that doesn’t close behind you. Quinn: The doors won’t close on me. Not while I’m here. Her voice carried a weight that suggested a decision had already been weighed, and she was no longer listening for the suspect’s confessions but for a path through a space that defied all maps. The market’s glow shifted, a tide moving with the pressure of a full moon’s influence, even if the moon itself hadn’t risen yet. The market’s crowd thinned a fraction as she determined her next move. Ahead, a narrow passage unfolded between two stalls. The sign on the stall nearest read in a script too old to belong to the city—and in the faint glow, what looked like a staircase rose, carved from the earth itself and spiraling down into deeper shadows. The bone token’s memory pressed at the edge of her thoughts, a reminder that entry into this space could demand more than metal and key knowledge. Quinn: If I need a token, I’ll take one from the right person at the right moment. Suspect: Then hurry, or I’ll vanish with whatever you’re chasing into the market’s heart. The suspect’s voice cracked with a tremor of nerves he tried to hide. He moved with a last, almost pitiable speed toward the staircase. Quinn watched the glow breathe with his passing, listening to the market’s breaths as it adjusted to a new rhythm, a rhythm that demanded the detective’s choice. Quinn: You won’t outrun me in here. Suspect: We’ll see about that. The distance closed, and the tunnel’s walls grew colder, damper, and more intimate. Quinn’s fingers brushed the hilt of her service pistol tucked under her coat, the weight a familiar punctuation against the market’s lingering hush. She counted the steps in her head as if counting heartbeats, a language she trusted more than any spoken word. Quinn: Stop this now. You’ll talk, or you’ll taste the floor of the market when I take you down. The suspect’s breath hitched, a small sound that stitched into the tunnel’s fabric. He pivoted, trying to throw a glance past Quinn, toward a shadow that seemed to hold its breath as well. The crowd behind them pressed inward, the market’s life becoming a pressure that pressed down on both of them. Suspect: You don’t want to follow all the way. You don’t know what lies beyond that stair, or who waits there for you. Quinn: I’ll take my chances with what waits. I’ve faced worse storms. The stairwell’s length stretched out beneath them, a descent into something that wore the form of a market but could as easily be a memory in the making. The light diminished until it was only a pale suggestion of brightness, and the sounds of commerce grew fainter, replaced by a careful, patient quiet that waited for a who’s-who of danger to reveal itself. The man hesitated at the first step, his expression turning toward something like fear mixed with determination. He reached for a pocket, as if his fingers might coax a hidden door open with the touch of a sleeve. Instead, his hand found nothing and returned empty. Suspect: This is where you choose, detective. Above ground, you chase a ledger. Below, you chase a truth. Quinn: A truth that’s earned, not handed. She stepped closer to the stair, the rain outside a memory and the night inside a living thing. The market’s temperature dropped, and with it, her breath fogged in rings that curled upward before dissolving into the cold air. The stair’s metal stairs clattered under her weight, a careful percussion that kept the moment from tipping into panic. Her eyes found a small sign etched into the wall at the base of the stairs: a symbol she didn’t recognise, a mark that seemed to hum when she approached it. It pulsed with a pale light, a warning or an invitation—she couldn’t tell which. The suspect’s shoulders lowered, a sign of surrender or exhaustion, and then they both faced the same downward path, each to their own uncertainty. Quinn: You’ll come with me, or you’ll stay in the dark and watch it swallow you. Suspect: You think you’re ready for what comes next. You think you can walk away with a normal life after this, with the city’s justice on your side. Quinn made a decision then, a decision that felt like a hinge turning, a door shifting on its frame. She didn’t reach for the token or call out to someone she hadn’t seen in years. She stepped forward into the darkness, into the unknown stairwell that led to the Veil Market’s heart, where the unusual laws of the night pressed in close and asked for more than just a confession. The decision was made in the simple act of stepping, in the weight of rain she no longer heard and the look in the suspect’s eyes that suggested he’d already played this game before. The market would teach them who walked its steps and who stayed above, but for now, she followed the suspect into the underground, leaving behind the street’s weather and entering a place where weather had a different name and a different price. The world narrowed to sound—the soft scuff of her boot on stone, the whisper of cloth against a sleeve, the faint sigh of a door that might open to anything or nothing at all. She did not falter. She did not pretend to be fearless. She moved with a certainty that came from years of watching the city bend, from knowing that some nights demanded more of a person than courage alone could supply. A hand reached out, and the air felt charged, almost charged enough to crack. The suspect’s voice returned, softer, almost respectful, as if he’d found a small mercy at the end of this tunnel. Suspect: This is where the choice becomes ours, not mine. Quinn: Then we’ll choose together. She took a breath, the night’s rain forgotten, and stepped deeper into the unknown. The stairs descended again, and the sounds of the underground market swelled around them, a chorus of possibilities—some harmless, some deadly, all of them waiting for a decision to be made. The city’s rain remained above, but its pulse now beat through a different kind of storm, one that would demand more of her than any case had before. She stopped for the barest moment, eyes catching a glimpse of a doorway that wasn’t there a heartbeat earlier, a threshold lined with bone tokens and runes, the kind of threshold that promised entry to the Veil Market’s most guarded secrets. The choice sat in her chest, heavy and unyielding, and she took the next step. The decision hung in the damp air as the tunnel clung to them like a vow, and Quinn moved forward, determined to follow the suspect into the subterranean heart, into a place where the city’s crimes wore different colours and wore them loudly enough to be heard in every corner. She chose to go deeper, to chase the truth to its source, to the market’s core where the ledger’s secrets crouched, waiting to be pulled into the light. The scene paused on the edge of the stair, the last word unspoken, the last breath still forming. She stepped again, and the stair gave way to the Market’s breath. The alley’s rain was left behind, but the night’s weight remained, pressing, patient, and uncertain. The choice had been made. She moved, and the darkness moved with her, and the city, watching, held its own breath as the chase crossed into the Veil Market’s shadows, where every turn could rewrite a life.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags0
95.42% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount3277
totalAiIsmAdverbs3
found
0
adverb"softly"
count1
1
adverb"quickly"
count1
2
adverb"suddenly"
count1
highlights
0"softly"
1"quickly"
2"suddenly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
46.60% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount3277
totalAiIsms35
found
0
word"measured"
count2
1
word"reminder"
count3
2
word"glint"
count2
3
word"practiced ease"
count1
4
word"glinting"
count1
5
word"calculated"
count1
6
word"silence"
count1
7
word"echo"
count1
8
word"glistening"
count1
9
word"pulse"
count3
10
word"weight"
count7
11
word"desire"
count1
12
word"footsteps"
count1
13
word"flickered"
count1
14
word"determined"
count2
15
word"familiar"
count1
16
word"etched"
count1
17
word"pulsed"
count1
18
word"whisper"
count1
19
word"charged"
count2
20
word"unspoken"
count1
highlights
0"measured"
1"reminder"
2"glint"
3"practiced ease"
4"glinting"
5"calculated"
6"silence"
7"echo"
8"glistening"
9"pulse"
10"weight"
11"desire"
12"footsteps"
13"flickered"
14"determined"
15"familiar"
16"etched"
17"pulsed"
18"whisper"
19"charged"
20"unspoken"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells1
narrationSentences201
matches
0"d with determination"
14.93% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount12
hedgeCount6
narrationSentences201
filterMatches
0"know"
1"watch"
2"think"
3"see"
4"listen"
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
1"tried to"
2"tend to"
3"try to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences201
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen50
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords3254
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions21
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
66.67% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions107
wordCount3254
uniqueNames15
maxNameDensity1.2
worstName"Quinn"
maxWindowNameDensity3
worstWindowName"Quinn"
discoveredNames
Stop3
You25
Raven1
Nest1
Quinn39
Ledger1
Enough1
Detective1
Veil4
Market7
Debts1
Bone1
London2
Herrera1
Suspect19
persons
0"Stop"
1"You"
2"Raven"
3"Nest"
4"Quinn"
5"Enough"
6"Detective"
7"Market"
8"Debts"
9"Herrera"
10"Suspect"
places
0"Veil"
1"London"
globalScore0.901
windowScore0.667
0.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences172
glossingSentenceCount11
matches
0"smelled like beer and copper coins, and th"
1"looked like it’d always held a few secret"
2"not quite metal, something more ancient, more patient"
3"something like a key without teeth"
4"something close to hunger and something else—rec"
5"looked like a staircase rose, carved from"
6"as if counting heartbeats, a language she trusted more than any spoken word"
7"shadow that seemed to hold its breath as well"
8"something like fear mixed with determination"
9"mark that seemed to hum when she approached it"
10"felt like a hinge turning, a door shift"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches1
per1kWords0.307
wordCount3254
matches
0"not suddenly, but with the familiarity of a ritual"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences201
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs87
mean37.4
std27.38
cv0.732
sampleLengths
066
12
262
39
475
557
651
710
87
941
1013
1112
1253
1351
149
1542
1615
1717
1863
199
208
2172
2215
235
2478
2587
2616
275
2880
2958
3020
3120
3272
3313
3472
3527
3610
3755
3814
3913
4069
419
4211
4377
4412
4531
4671
4791
488
4918
96.53% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount5
totalSentences201
matches
0"were carved"
1"been weighed"
2"earned"
3"was made"
4"been made"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount2
totalVerbs539
matches
0"were living"
1"was pretending"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount20
semicolonCount2
flaggedSentences19
totalSentences201
ratio0.095
matches
0"The suspect twisted into an alley that reeked of damp brick and old paint, and the chase found a rhythm—one step ahead, then a turn, a half step back to crouch behind a dumpster, listening for the sirens that never quite came close enough."
1"The bar’s floorboards creaked; the air tasted of whiskey and something sharper—metal and rain—like a blade’s edge catching night-light."
2"The air shifted, cooler here, smelling faintly of coal dust and something older—something that kept disease away or drew it in, depending on who you asked."
3"The corridor opened into a narrow stairwell, metal rungs slick with rain—though no rain fell here, only the echo of it and the promise of something beyond."
4"The marker on the wall—handwritten, almost affectionate in its roughness—read: The Veil Market?"
5"The suspect moved with an almost affectionate familiarity, gliding toward a stall that offered maps—maps that weren’t maps so much as possibilities, routes you could walk if you dared."
6"You’ve found the gate—now show your hand."
7"She felt the weight of a chance pressing into her chest—the chance to go forward into a space where the supernatural stirred in the exact way a crime would, if you believed the rumors you’d rather not admit."
8"A child-like tremor ran through her—an unexpected, almost innocent fear of what waited beyond the tunnel’s next bend."
9"Suspect: You’ll come back with what you came for—a ledger, a word you can piece into a confession."
10"A quiet interruption threaded through the market—footfalls that weren’t hers, a pair of heavy, deliberate steps moving with a purpose that suggested the path could be a trap."
11"The footsteps belonged to someone who did not belong to this evening’s chase; they belonged to the city’s own, someone who knew the night’s language."
12"A former paramedic who dealt with off-book medical duties for the clique—an ally, if you could call him that, of people who always seemed to survive on the edge of law."
13"The vial’s glow didn’t illuminate the faces around it so much as deepen them, making eyes gleam with something close to hunger and something else—recognition, maybe, of the danger the market could hold for every soul that walked its passages."
14"Quinn: You’ll tell me where you’ve hidden—"
15"The sign on the stall nearest read in a script too old to belong to the city—and in the faint glow, what looked like a staircase rose, carved from the earth itself and spiraling down into deeper shadows."
16"It pulsed with a pale light, a warning or an invitation—she couldn’t tell which."
17"The world narrowed to sound—the soft scuff of her boot on stone, the whisper of cloth against a sleeve, the faint sigh of a door that might open to anything or nothing at all."
18"The stairs descended again, and the sounds of the underground market swelled around them, a chorus of possibilities—some harmless, some deadly, all of them waiting for a decision to be made."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount3277
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount80
adverbRatio0.024412572474824534
lyAdverbCount12
lyAdverbRatio0.00366188587122368
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences201
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences201
mean16.19
std10.1
cv0.624
sampleLengths
013
120
218
315
42
518
644
79
815
926
1034
1120
1218
1319
1420
1517
1614
174
186
194
203
2122
2219
236
247
252
263
277
2832
2921
3013
3115
3223
333
346
3540
362
376
389
398
409
419
4219
4320
4415
459
468
4719
4826
4927
33.08% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats34
diversityRatio0.16417910447761194
totalSentences201
uniqueOpeners33
16.92% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount1
totalSentences197
matches
0"Instead, his hand found nothing"
ratio0.005
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount50
totalSentences197
matches
0"Her boots punched dull potholes"
1"Her watch clicked, a reminder"
2"They traded the bar’s quiet"
3"You’re spoiling the city’s little"
4"I’m collecting answers."
5"He glanced over a shoulder,"
6"You’re chasing moonlight."
7"You’ll never pin this on"
8"He moved with a dancer’s"
9"He bumped a shelf with"
10"You’re not getting away this"
11"She followed, a long breath"
12"He reached out and the"
13"It won’t glow as bright"
14"Her breath came in measured,"
15"You know that."
16"You’ve found the gate—now show"
17"She didn’t answer the vendor."
18"She felt the weight of"
19"You’ll need someone who knows"
ratio0.254
100.00% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount136
totalSentences197
matches
0"Rain slicked the pavement, and"
1"Streetlamps bled orange halos onto"
2"A figure in a charcoal"
3"The figure’s breath came in"
4"Her boots punched dull potholes"
5"The suspect twisted into an"
6"The line of the city"
7"Her watch clicked, a reminder"
8"The suspect ducked into a"
9"A bell chimed, damp air"
10"The Raven’s Nest held its"
11"The green neon sign above"
12"The suspect pressed into the"
13"Quinn moved through the rain-still"
14"They traded the bar’s quiet"
15"You’re spoiling the city’s little"
16"I’m collecting answers."
17"The suspect pressed through a"
18"He glanced over a shoulder,"
19"You’re chasing moonlight."
ratio0.69
50.76% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount2
totalSentences197
matches
0"If she followed the suspect"
1"If you’re lucky, you’ll choose"
ratio0.01
0.00% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences130
technicalSentenceCount30
matches
0"The suspect twisted into an alley that reeked of damp brick and old paint, and the chase found a rhythm—one step ahead, then a turn, a half step back to crouch …"
1"The suspect ducked into a doorway that smelled like beer and copper coins, and the detective followed, slipping the edge of her coat free to swing in a controll…"
2"The suspect pressed into the crowded interior, the crowd parting with a practiced ease that kept him visible but undisturbed."
3"The suspect pressed through a cluster near the bar, a path that angled toward a shelf crowded with junk and old books."
4"He glanced over a shoulder, his gaze glinting with a feverish energy that told her he anticipated this moment."
5"He bumped a shelf with his shoulder, sending a cascade of coins rolling across the floor, the sound slicing through the bar’s murmur."
6"The air shifted, cooler here, smelling faintly of coal dust and something older—something that kept disease away or drew it in, depending on who you asked."
7"The crowd behind them pressed, a living curtain that softened into silence as the door closed with a soft thud, a wordless transition from tavern to tunnel."
8"The market’s glow was a phosphorescent fog, shifting and moist, a living thing that clung to the walls and seeped into the cracks of the ceiling."
9"Stalls hummed with concentrates of power: jars of glistening liquids, vials of amber dust, coins that clicked with a sound not quite metal, something more ancie…"
10"The suspect moved with an almost affectionate familiarity, gliding toward a stall that offered maps—maps that weren’t maps so much as possibilities, routes you …"
11"You’ll need someone who knows the paths, someone who’s walked them with a lighter foot and a heavier conscience."
12"She stood at a crossroad of damp, crowded aisles that smelled of oil and rain and something older, something that remembered when London learned to stand on the…"
13"A quiet interruption threaded through the market—footfalls that weren’t hers, a pair of heavy, deliberate steps moving with a purpose that suggested the path co…"
14"Tomás Herrera’s name flickered in her memory as if a telegram from a life she’d already left behind."
15"The suspect slid a finger along a stall’s edge, brushing against a vial that shone like a tiny moon."
16"The vial’s glow didn’t illuminate the faces around it so much as deepen them, making eyes gleam with something close to hunger and something else—recognition, m…"
17"Quinn: Then you’ll tell me the name of the person who fed you the ledger’s contents."
18"Her voice carried a weight that suggested a decision had already been weighed, and she was no longer listening for the suspect’s confessions but for a path thro…"
19"Quinn watched the glow breathe with his passing, listening to the market’s breaths as it adjusted to a new rhythm, a rhythm that demanded the detective’s choice…"
20"The stairwell’s length stretched out beneath them, a descent into something that wore the form of a market but could as easily be a memory in the making."
21"The market’s temperature dropped, and with it, her breath fogged in rings that curled upward before dissolving into the cold air."
22"The stair’s metal stairs clattered under her weight, a careful percussion that kept the moment from tipping into panic."
23"She stepped forward into the darkness, into the unknown stairwell that led to the Veil Market’s heart, where the unusual laws of the night pressed in close and …"
24"The decision was made in the simple act of stepping, in the weight of rain she no longer heard and the look in the suspect’s eyes that suggested he’d already pl…"
25"The market would teach them who walked its steps and who stayed above, but for now, she followed the suspect into the underground, leaving behind the street’s w…"
26"The world narrowed to sound—the soft scuff of her boot on stone, the whisper of cloth against a sleeve, the faint sigh of a door that might open to anything or …"
27"She moved with a certainty that came from years of watching the city bend, from knowing that some nights demanded more of a person than courage alone could supp…"
28"The suspect’s voice returned, softer, almost respectful, as if he’d found a small mercy at the end of this tunnel."
29"She stopped for the barest moment, eyes catching a glimpse of a doorway that wasn’t there a heartbeat earlier, a threshold lined with bone tokens and runes, the…"
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags0
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags0
77.3638%