Run: 2026-02-19-01KHTXN9PD9SDQDAK3V5SM6R8B

Run Details

Duration:
1m 26s
Cost:
$0.084140
Provider:
Amazon Bedrock

Model input

System
You are an expert fiction writer. Always keep the following rules in mind: - Write in past tense and use General English spelling, grammar, and colloquialisms/slang. - Write in active voice - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. - Avoid adverbs and cliches and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Convey events and story through dialogue. - Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. - Skip "he/she said said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech - Avoid mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or add unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Reduce indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" When writing text: - NEVER conclude the scene on your own, follow the beat instructions very closely. - NEVER end with foreshadowing. - NEVER write further than what I prompt you with. - AVOID imagining possible endings, NEVER deviate from the instructions. - STOP EARLY if the continuation contains what was required in the instructions. You do not need to fill out the full amount of words possible.
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4413" name="Silas Blackwood" aliases="Silas, Si, the Spymaster" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Mentor"> <eyeColor>hazel</eyeColor> <hair>grey-streaked auburn</hair> <height>6'1"</height> <age>58</age> <beard>neatly trimmed, matching his grey-streaked auburn hair</beard> <limp>slight limp in his left leg from an old knee injury</limp> <signetRing>silver signet ring, always worn on his right hand</signetRing> <description>Silas is a retired intelligence operative turned bar owner. He carries himself with quiet authority.</description> <backstory>Former MI6 field agent who retired after a botched operation in Prague left him with a permanent knee injury. He opened "The Raven's Nest" bar in Soho as a front for his network of contacts.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> </codex> Continue the story using the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the literary fiction genre. Two old friends who haven't seen each other in years run into each other unexpectedly at a bar. One of them has changed significantly. Through their conversation and the tension between who they were and who they've become, reveal the weight of time and unspoken regret. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The green neon sign buzzed and flickered against the wet pavement, throwing sickly light across puddles that hadn't been there an hour ago. Rory pushed through the door of The Raven's Nest with a bag of takeaway containers balanced on one forearm, the smell of Yu-Fei's garlic prawns cutting through the bar's permanent fog of old wood and spilled lager. "Last one," she called out, sliding the bag onto the counter. "Tell Silas his kung pao is getting cold." The bartender — a narrow-faced kid named Jamie who'd started three weeks ago and still couldn't pour a Guinness without panicking — jerked his chin toward the back. "He's in the office. Said not to bother him." Rory peeled off her rain jacket and draped it over a stool. The delivery shift was done. Her calves ached. She'd earned a drink and had nowhere else to be, which was either freedom or something sadder dressed up in the same clothes. She pulled a pint glass from the rack behind the bar — Jamie had given up protesting this weeks ago — and tilted it under the tap. The bar was half-full for a Wednesday. A couple argued in low voices near the jukebox. Two men in paint-spattered overalls nursed whiskeys at the far end. The old maps on the walls seemed to swallow what little light the pendant lamps offered, their faded coastlines and trade routes dissolving into brown stains at the edges. Rory had memorized most of them during slow nights. She could close her eyes and trace the shipping lanes across the Indian Ocean, the red pin-marks someone had pressed into the paper decades before she was born. She took her pint to a corner booth and sat with her back against the wall — a habit she'd picked up without noticing, one that Silas had pointed out to her once with a look she couldn't quite read. She pulled out her phone. Two missed calls from her mother. A text from Eva: *u alive?* She typed back a thumbs-up and set the phone face-down on the table. That was when she heard the laugh. Not loud. Not performative. A single note of genuine amusement, half-swallowed, coming from the bar. She knew that laugh the way she knew the crescent scar on her left wrist — by feel, without looking, the shape of it pressed into some deep layer of muscle memory. Rory looked up. The woman at the bar had her back turned. Auburn hair — no, darker, closer to chestnut now, cropped short where it used to fall past her shoulder blades. She wore a charcoal blazer that fit her like money, and she held her wine glass by the stem, which was new. The Niamh Sullivan that Rory had known in Cardiff drank cider from the can and thought wine was pretentious. But she tilted her head the same way when she laughed. That sideways drop, chin to left shoulder, like the joke had knocked her slightly off balance. Rory's stomach tightened. She sat very still. Niamh was talking to Jamie, who had apparently discovered how to smile. She said something Rory couldn't catch, and Jamie pointed at the chalkboard menu above the bottles, and Niamh shook her head, waving him off. Seven years. Rory counted them out like coins on a table. Seven years since the flat in Cathays, since the mildewed bathroom they'd shared with three other girls, since the night Niamh packed her bags and left for a consultancy job in Brussels without telling anyone until the taxi was already outside. She'd sent a text to the group chat. *Sorry for the Irish exit lol.* Eva had been furious. Rory had been something quieter than furious and much harder to name. She could leave. The door was right there. Her jacket was on the stool, but she could survive without it, buy another from the charity shop on Greek Street. She could finish her drink in the back room — she had the code for the bookshelf panel — and wait until Niamh settled her tab and walked back into whatever chrome-and-glass life had brought her to Soho on a Wednesday evening. Niamh turned on her stool to scan the room, and their eyes met. The recognition was instant. Not a slow dawning. Not a squint and a double-take. Niamh's face opened like a door flung wide, and then just as quickly something shuttered behind it — a flicker of calculation, of adjustment, that Rory had never seen before. The old Niamh didn't calculate. The old Niamh said whatever sat on her tongue and dealt with the consequences at speed. "Rory bloody Carter." She was already off the stool, wine glass in hand, crossing the room. Her shoes were heeled and clicked against the floorboards. Up close, the blazer was even more expensive than it had looked from a distance. Subtle stitching. No creases. Her face was thinner, the cheekbones more pronounced, and she wore makeup now — not much, but enough to notice. Foundation. Something on her lips. The freckles Rory remembered were gone, buried under powder or faded from years of indoor living. "Can I sit? God, can I sit? I can't believe—" "Sit down, Niamh." Niamh slid into the opposite side of the booth. She set her wine on the table with exaggerated care, as if it were evidence of something. "What are you doing in London?" "I live here." "Since when?" "About a year." "A year." Niamh repeated it like she was tasting it, testing the vintage. "And you never — I mean, I've been back from Brussels since January. I'm in Islington now." "I didn't know that." "No, I suppose you wouldn't." Silence. The jukebox changed tracks. Something with a harmonica. Niamh lifted her glass and took a measured sip. "You look good. You look exactly the same, actually, which is borderline offensive." "You don't." It came out harder than Rory intended. Or maybe exactly as hard as she intended. She watched the words land. Niamh's chin dipped. Not the laughing tilt. Something else. "I mean you look different. Not bad. Just — different." "Different covers a lot of ground." "The hair. The—" Rory gestured vaguely at the blazer, the shoes, the posture that was several degrees more upright than the girl who used to sit cross-legged on the kitchen counter eating cereal at midnight. Niamh touched her own collar. "Brussels changes a person. All those diplomats. You start dressing like them or they eat you alive." She smiled, but it didn't reach the right muscles. "You're doing — what, then? Lawyering? Your dad must have finally won that war." "I deliver food." "You deliver food." "For a Chinese restaurant. Golden Empress. Three streets from here." Niamh blinked. Not judgmentally — or if it was judgment, she'd gotten skilled enough to bury it beneath three or four layers of something warmer. "Okay. That's — is that temporary, or—" "Does it matter?" "I'm asking because I care, Rory." "You care now." The harmonica song ended. In the gap before the next track, Rory could hear the couple near the jukebox whispering, the scrape of a barstool, the rain picking up against the windows. She ran her thumb along the crescent scar on her left wrist. Old plastic. A broken toy she'd fought with until it bit her. She was six. The scar never faded. "That's fair," Niamh said. She set the wine glass down and folded her hands on the table. Her nails were painted a dark, professional burgundy. Not bitten to the quick anymore. "That's fair, and I know it is, and I've had a long time to know it. But you didn't exactly chase me either." "You didn't give me the chance." "I sent—" "A text to the group chat, yeah. *Sorry for the Irish exit.* We all got it. We all laughed. Eva threw her phone at the wall." Niamh's mouth twitched. "That sounds like Eva." "She was the only one honest enough to be angry." "And you?" Rory looked at her pint. The foam had thinned to a pale ring around the rim. "I wasn't angry." "What were you?" The question sat between them like something with weight. Rory thought about lying. She thought about one of those tight, clever deflections she was good at, the ones that made people laugh and moved the conversation sideways. Silas called it her barrister gene — the inherited ability to answer a question without answering it. "I was relieved," she said. Niamh went still. "Because you leaving meant I didn't have to figure out why I wanted you to stay. And I was twenty years old and I didn't have the vocabulary for that. So you left and I filed it away under 'things that happened' and I got on with failing Pre-Law and dating someone I shouldn't have and eventually running away to London, which I suppose makes me exactly as much of a coward as you were, just slower." The rain hit the window in a gust. The black-and-white photographs on the wall behind Niamh's head showed men in overcoats on bridges, blurred faces in crowd scenes. Someone else's history preserved under glass while hers sat across a table in a charcoal blazer, waiting. Niamh pressed her thumb to the base of her wine glass and rotated it in a slow circle. "I knew," she said. "That's why I left the way I did. Not because of Brussels. I mean, the job was real. But the reason I took it at three days' notice without telling anyone face to face — I knew what you were starting to figure out, and I wasn't brave enough to be there when you said it." "Were you scared of what I'd say, or scared you'd say it back?" Niamh's eyes were dark in the dim light. Darker than Rory remembered. She didn't answer immediately, and in the pause Rory saw the new version of her and the old version of her overlaid like a double exposure. The girl on the kitchen counter. The woman in the blazer. Both of them with the same fault line running through them, plastered over with different materials. "Both," Niamh said. "Equally. I know that's not satisfying." "It's honest." "First time for everything." Rory exhaled something that wasn't quite a laugh. She picked up her pint and drank. It had gone room temperature and slightly flat, and she drank it anyway because it gave her hands something to do. "So," Niamh said. "Delivery driver." "Delivery person." "Delivery person. And you live—" "Upstairs." Rory pointed at the ceiling. "The bloke who owns this place rents me the flat above it." Niamh looked around the bar as if seeing it for the first time. The maps. The photographs. The bookshelf against the far wall that was, if you knew where to push, not a bookshelf at all. She took it in with the eye of someone trained to assess rooms. "It suits you," she said, and it was the first thing she'd said that sounded entirely like the person Rory had known. "Don't do that." "Do what?" "Sound like yourself. It makes this harder." Niamh's hands went still on the table. She looked at Rory with an expression that had no calculation in it, no layers, no Brussels polish. Just the raw, uncomfortable thing underneath. "I'm sorry I left the way I did. I'm sorry I never called. I'm sorry the version of me you're looking at isn't the version you lost, and I'm sorry I can't undo the parts of the last seven years that made me into this." She gestured at herself — the blazer, the short hair, the painted nails. "I don't know if I like her either, most days." The door opened. A gust of wet air swept through the bar. Silas limped out from the back hallway, his silver signet ring catching the light as he reached for the takeaway bag on the counter. He glanced at Rory, then at Niamh, then back at Rory with an expression that communicated, in the economical way of someone who'd spent decades reading rooms for a living, that he understood something was happening and he would be elsewhere. He took the bag and limped back into the shadows without a word. Rory turned the pint glass in her hands. The scar on her wrist caught the neon glow filtering through the window, a pale half-moon against her skin. "I'm not the same person either," she said. "I don't know if you've noticed." "I noticed the second I saw you. You sit with your back to the wall now." Rory looked at her. Niamh looked back. "Tell me about the person you're not anymore," Niamh said. "And I'll tell you about mine. And maybe that's all tonight is. Two strangers comparing ghosts." Rory pushed her empty glass to the edge of the table and signaled Jamie for another round.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags14
adverbTagCount1
adverbTags
0"Rory gestured vaguely [vaguely]"
dialogueSentences64
tagDensity0.219
leniency0.438
rawRatio0.071
effectiveRatio0.031
90.74% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount2160
totalAiIsmAdverbs4
found
0
adverb"slightly"
count2
1
adverb"very"
count1
2
adverb"quickly"
count1
highlights
0"slightly"
1"very"
2"quickly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (16 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
0"Blackwood"
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
83.80% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount2160
totalAiIsms7
found
0
word"flickered"
count1
1
word"stomach"
count1
2
word"flicker"
count1
3
word"calculate"
count1
4
word"silence"
count1
5
word"measured"
count1
6
word"weight"
count1
highlights
0"flickered"
1"stomach"
2"flicker"
3"calculate"
4"silence"
5"measured"
6"weight"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences138
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount1
narrationSentences138
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences188
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen78
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans3
markdownWords13
totalWords2164
ratio0.006
matches
0"u alive?"
1"Sorry for the Irish exit lol."
2"Sorry for the Irish exit."
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions19
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
50.00% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions83
wordCount1597
uniqueNames21
maxNameDensity1.75
worstName"Niamh"
maxWindowNameDensity3.5
worstWindowName"Niamh"
discoveredNames
Raven1
Nest1
Yu-Fei1
Jamie5
Guinness1
Wednesday2
Indian1
Ocean1
Silas3
Eva2
Niamh28
Sullivan1
Rory27
Cardiff1
Cathays1
Brussels2
Irish1
Greek1
Street1
Soho1
Silence1
persons
0"Raven"
1"Yu-Fei"
2"Jamie"
3"Silas"
4"Eva"
5"Niamh"
6"Sullivan"
7"Rory"
8"Irish"
places
0"Indian"
1"Ocean"
2"Cardiff"
3"Cathays"
4"Brussels"
5"Greek"
6"Street"
7"Soho"
globalScore0.623
windowScore0.5
36.36% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences88
glossingSentenceCount4
matches
0"quite read"
1"Jamie, who had apparently discovered how to s"
2"quite a laugh"
3"as if seeing it for the first time"
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches1
per1kWords0.462
wordCount2164
matches
0"not much, but enough to notice"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences188
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs85
mean25.46
std26.19
cv1.029
sampleLengths
060
119
237
370
493
570
67
747
83
997
107
1136
1282
1371
1413
1565
163
1782
1810
193
2026
216
223
232
243
2530
264
275
289
2922
302
3129
3210
336
3435
3545
363
373
3810
3932
403
416
423
4363
4454
456
462
4726
487
4910
97.64% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount3
totalSentences138
matches
0"were heeled"
1"were gone"
2"were painted"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount3
totalVerbs265
matches
0"was talking"
1"was tasting"
2"was happening"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount14
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences11
totalSentences188
ratio0.059
matches
0"The bartender — a narrow-faced kid named Jamie who'd started three weeks ago and still couldn't pour a Guinness without panicking — jerked his chin toward the back."
1"She pulled a pint glass from the rack behind the bar — Jamie had given up protesting this weeks ago — and tilted it under the tap."
2"She took her pint to a corner booth and sat with her back against the wall — a habit she'd picked up without noticing, one that Silas had pointed out to her once with a look she couldn't quite read."
3"She knew that laugh the way she knew the crescent scar on her left wrist — by feel, without looking, the shape of it pressed into some deep layer of muscle memory."
4"Auburn hair — no, darker, closer to chestnut now, cropped short where it used to fall past her shoulder blades."
5"She could finish her drink in the back room — she had the code for the bookshelf panel — and wait until Niamh settled her tab and walked back into whatever chrome-and-glass life had brought her to Soho on a Wednesday evening."
6"Niamh's face opened like a door flung wide, and then just as quickly something shuttered behind it — a flicker of calculation, of adjustment, that Rory had never seen before."
7"Her face was thinner, the cheekbones more pronounced, and she wore makeup now — not much, but enough to notice."
8"Not judgmentally — or if it was judgment, she'd gotten skilled enough to bury it beneath three or four layers of something warmer."
9"Silas called it her barrister gene — the inherited ability to answer a question without answering it."
10"\"I'm sorry I left the way I did. I'm sorry I never called. I'm sorry the version of me you're looking at isn't the version you lost, and I'm sorry I can't undo the parts of the last seven years that made me into this.\" She gestured at herself — the blazer, the short hair, the painted nails."
100.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1598
adjectiveStacks0
stackExamples(empty)
adverbCount36
adverbRatio0.02252816020025031
lyAdverbCount10
lyAdverbRatio0.006257822277847309
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences188
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences188
mean11.51
std11.24
cv0.976
sampleLengths
023
137
211
38
428
59
612
75
83
923
1027
117
129
1311
1429
159
1628
1740
185
196
2019
217
222
232
2411
2532
263
279
2820
2922
3019
3111
3216
333
344
3512
3624
372
389
3941
408
4110
4212
433
445
4521
4642
4713
484
494
40.43% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats18
diversityRatio0.2872340425531915
totalSentences188
uniqueOpeners54
28.01% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount1
totalSentences119
matches
0"Just the raw, uncomfortable thing"
ratio0.008
98.99% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount36
totalSentences119
matches
0"she called out, sliding the"
1"Her calves ached."
2"She'd earned a drink and"
3"She pulled a pint glass"
4"She could close her eyes"
5"She took her pint to"
6"She pulled out her phone."
7"She knew that laugh the"
8"She wore a charcoal blazer"
9"She sat very still."
10"She said something Rory couldn't"
11"She'd sent a text to"
12"She could leave."
13"Her jacket was on the"
14"She could finish her drink"
15"She was already off the"
16"Her shoes were heeled and"
17"Her face was thinner, the"
18"She set her wine on"
19"It came out harder than"
ratio0.303
18.82% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount105
totalSentences119
matches
0"The green neon sign buzzed"
1"Rory pushed through the door"
2"she called out, sliding the"
3"The bartender — a narrow-faced"
4"Rory peeled off her rain"
5"The delivery shift was done."
6"Her calves ached."
7"She'd earned a drink and"
8"She pulled a pint glass"
9"The bar was half-full for"
10"A couple argued in low"
11"The old maps on the"
12"Rory had memorized most of"
13"She could close her eyes"
14"She took her pint to"
15"She pulled out her phone."
16"A text from Eva: *u"
17"That was when she heard"
18"A single note of genuine"
19"She knew that laugh the"
ratio0.882
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences119
matches(empty)
ratio0
40.82% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences56
technicalSentenceCount8
matches
0"The green neon sign buzzed and flickered against the wet pavement, throwing sickly light across puddles that hadn't been there an hour ago."
1"The bartender — a narrow-faced kid named Jamie who'd started three weeks ago and still couldn't pour a Guinness without panicking — jerked his chin toward the b…"
2"She wore a charcoal blazer that fit her like money, and she held her wine glass by the stem, which was new."
3"She set her wine on the table with exaggerated care, as if it were evidence of something."
4"She thought about one of those tight, clever deflections she was good at, the ones that made people laugh and moved the conversation sideways."
5"The bookshelf against the far wall that was, if you knew where to push, not a bookshelf at all."
6"She looked at Rory with an expression that had no calculation in it, no layers, no Brussels polish."
7"He glanced at Rory, then at Niamh, then back at Rory with an expression that communicated, in the economical way of someone who'd spent decades reading rooms fo…"
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags14
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags10
fancyCount2
fancyTags
0"she called out (call out)"
1"Niamh repeated (repeat)"
dialogueSentences64
tagDensity0.156
leniency0.313
rawRatio0.2
effectiveRatio0.063
79.5201%