Run: 2026-02-19-01KHTXP3M6FQPVYPG93NYZA91X

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Duration:
2m 29s
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$0.019726
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You are an expert and award-winning novel writer in the dark Literary Fiction genre. Your readers are hooked on your stories and can't wait to read the book you have in store. <important> - MUST: Start each chapter in medias res (in the middle of action). AVOID talking about the weather, time of day, the position of the sun, or other boring stuff. - The instructions/summary are just a that, a summary. Feel free to add details, stretch sections and add interesting transitions/descriptions/fillers. - When called for it, have fast-paced action, but otherwise take things slow. This is an experience, and not for people with short attention spans. Enjoy the wine, not slurp Red Bull. - Add descriptions when transitioning places/times/etc, or when coming by new places (e.g. a corner shop, a cafe, etc.). But remember: NOT at the start or end of a chapter. - MUST: AVOID ending in internal monologue, reminiscing or waiting for the next day. A good chapter end is when we're ending right when shit hits the fan. We want to have the reader be excited for what comes next. So no reminiscing, contemplating or summarizing the day. It's popcorn time! </important>
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4413" name="Silas Blackwood" aliases="Silas, Si, the Spymaster" pronouns="he/him" species="Human" storyRole="Mentor"> <eyeColor>hazel</eyeColor> <hair>grey-streaked auburn</hair> <height>6'1"</height> <age>58</age> <beard>neatly trimmed, matching his grey-streaked auburn hair</beard> <limp>slight limp in his left leg from an old knee injury</limp> <signetRing>silver signet ring, always worn on his right hand</signetRing> <description>Silas is a retired intelligence operative turned bar owner. He carries himself with quiet authority.</description> <backstory>Former MI6 field agent who retired after a botched operation in Prague left him with a permanent knee injury. He opened "The Raven's Nest" bar in Soho as a front for his network of contacts.</backstory> </character> <location id="854" name="The Raven's Nest" aliases="the Nest, Raven, Silas' bar" realm="Earth"> <signColor>distinctive green neon sign above the entrance</signColor> <secretRoom>hidden back room accessible through a bookshelf, used for clandestine meetings</secretRoom> <description>A dimly lit bar in Soho, London. The walls are covered with old maps and black-and-white photographs.</description> </location> </codex> <proseGuidelines> <styleGuide> - Write in past tense and use British English spelling and grammar - Keep a Flesch reading ease score of 60 - Respect the the Royal Order of Adjectives: The order is: opinion, size, age, shape, color, origin, material, purpose, followed by the noun itself (e.g., "a lovely little old rectangular green French silver whittling knife") - Respect the ablaut reduplication rule (e.g. tick-tock, flip-flop) - Write in active voice - Passive voice: <bad>The book was read by Sarah.</bad> - Active voice: <good>Sarah read the book.</good> - Reduce the use of passive verbs - <bad>For a moment, I was tempted to throw in the towel.</bad> - <good>For a moment, I felt tempted to throw in the towel.</good> - Avoid misplaced modifiers that can cause confusion when starting with "-ing" words: - <bad>Considering going to the store, the empty fridge reflected in Betty's eyes.</bad> - <good>Betty stared into the empty fridge. It was time to go to the store.</good> - Avoid redundant adverbs that state the obvious meaning already contained in the verb: - <bad>She whispered quietly to her mom.</bad> - <good>She whispered to her mom.</good> - Use stronger, more descriptive verbs over weak ones: - <bad>Daniel drove quickly to his mother's house.</bad> - <good>Daniel raced to his mother's house.</good> - Omit adverbs that don't add solid meaning like "extremely", "definitely", "truly", "very", "really": - <bad>The movie was extremely boring.</bad> - <good>The movie was dull.</good> - Use adverbs to replace clunky phrasing when they increase clarity: - <bad>He threw the bags into the corner in a rough manner.</bad> - <good>He threw the bags into the corner roughly.</good> - Avoid making simple thoughts needlessly complex: - <bad>After I woke up in the morning the other day, I went downstairs, turned on the stove, and made myself a very good omelet.</bad> - <good>I cooked a delicious omelet for breakfast yesterday morning.</good> - Never backload sentences by putting the main idea at the end: - <bad>I decided not to wear too many layers because it's really hot outside.</bad> - <good>It's sweltering outside today, so I dressed light.</good> - Omit nonessential details that don't contribute to the core meaning: - <bad>It doesn't matter what kind of coffee I buy, where it's from, or if it's organic or not—I need to have cream because I really don't like how the bitterness makes me feel.</bad> - <good>I add cream to my coffee because the bitter taste makes me feel unwell.</good> - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. For instance: - Telling: <bad>Michael was terribly afraid of the dark.</bad> - Showing: <good>Michael tensed as his mother switched off the light and left the room.</good>- Telling: <bad>I walked through the forest. It was already Fall, and I was getting cold.</bad> - Showing: <good>Dry orange leaves crunched under my feet. I pulled my coat's collar up and rubbed my hands together.</good>- Add sensory details (sight, smell, taste, sound, touch) to support the "showing" (but keep an active voice) - <bad>The room was filled with the scent of copper.</bad> - <good>Copper stung my nostrils. Blood. Recent.</good> - Use descriptive language more sporadically. While vivid descriptions are engaging, human writers often use them in bursts rather than consistently throughout a piece. When adding them, make them count! Like when we transition from one location to the next, or someone is reminiscing their past, or explaining a concept/their dream... - Avoid adverbs and clichés and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Avoid writing all sentences in the typical subject, verb, object structure. Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. Like so: <good>Locked. Seems like someone doesn't want his secrets exposed. I can work with that.</good> - Convey events and story through dialogue. It is important to keep a unique voice for every character and make it consistent. - Write dialogue that reveals characters' personalities, motivations, emotions, and attitudes in an interesting and compelling manner - Leave dialogue unattributed. If needed, only use "he/she said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech. Dialogue always is standalone, never part of a paragraph. Like so: - <bad>"I don't know," Helena said nonchalantly, shrugging her shoulders</bad> - <good>"No idea" "Why not? It was your responsibility"</good> - Avoid boring and mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or include unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. Avoid conversations that are just "Let's go" "yes, let's" or "Are you ready?" "Yes I'm ready". Those are not interesting. Think hard about every situtation and word of text before writing dialogue. If it doesn't serve a purpose and it's just people talking about their day, leave it. No one wants to have a normal dinner scene, something needs to happen for it to be in the story. Words are expensive to print, so make sure they count! - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Use body language to reveal hidden feelings and implied accusations- Imply feelings and thoughts, never state them directly - NEVER use indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" - NEVER use em-dashes, use commas for asides instead </styleGuide> <voiceGuide> Each character in the story needs to have distinct speech patterns: - Word choice preferences - Sentence length tendencies - Cultural/educational influences - Verbal tics and catchphrases Learn how each person talks and continue in their style, and use their Codex entries as reference. <examples> - <bad>"We need to go now." "Yes, we should leave." "I agree."</bad> <good>"Time's up." "Indeed, our departure is rather overdue." "Whatever, let's bounce."</good> - Power Dynamic Example: <bad> "We need to discuss the contract." "Yes, let's talk about it." "I have concerns." </bad> <good> "A word about the contract." "Of course, Mr. Blackwood. Whatever you need." "The terms seem..." A manicured nail tapped the desk. "Inadequate." "I can explain every-" "Can you?" </good> </examples> </voiceGuide> <dialogueFlow> When writing dialogue, consider that it usually has a goal in mind, which gives it a certain flow. Make dialogue sections also quite snappy in the back and forth, and don't spread the lines out as much. It's good to have details before, after, or as a chunk in-between, but we don't want to have a trail of "dialogue breadcrumbs" spread throughout a conversation. <examples> - Pattern 1 - Question/Deflection/Revelation: <good> "Where were you last night?" "Work. The usual." "Lipstick's an interesting shade for spreadsheets." </good> - Pattern 2 - Statement/Contradiction/Escalation: <good> "Your brother's clean." "Tommy doesn't touch drugs." "I'm holding his tox screen." </good> - Pattern 3 - Observation/Denial/Truth: <good> "That's a new watch." "Birthday gift." "We both know what birthdays mean in this business." </good> - Example - A Simple Coffee Order: <bad> "I'll have a coffee." "What size?" "Large, please." </bad> <good> "Black coffee.""Size?""Large. Been a long night." "That bodega shooting?" "You watch too much news." "My brother owns that store." </good> This short exchange: - Advances plot (reveals connection to crime) - Shows character (cop working late) - Creates tension (unexpected connection) - Sets up future conflict (personal stake) - Example - Dinner Scene: <bad> "Pass the salt." "Here you go." "Thanks." </bad> <good> "Salt?" "Perfect as is. Mother's recipe." "Mother always did prefer... bland things." "Unlike your first wife?" </good> - Example - Office Small Talk: <bad> "Nice weather today." "Yes, very nice." "Good for golf." </bad> <good> "Perfect golf weather." "Shame about your membership." "Temporary suspension. Board meets next week." "I know. I called the vote." </good> </examples> </dialogueFlow> <subtextGuide> - Layer dialogue with hidden meaning: <bad>"I hate you!" she yelled angrily.</bad> <good>"I made your favorite dinner." The burnt pot sat accusingly on the stove.</good> - Create tension through indirect communication: <bad>"Are you cheating on me?"</bad> <good>"Late meeting again?" The lipstick stain on his collar caught the light.</good> <examples> - Example 1 - Unspoken Betrayal: <bad> "Did you tell them about our plans?" "No, I would never betray you." "I don't believe you." </bad> <good> "Funny. Johnson mentioned our expansion plans today." "The market's full of rumors." "Mentioned the exact numbers, actually." The pen in his hand snapped. </good> - Example 2 - Failed Marriage: <bad> "You're never home anymore." "I have to work late." "I miss you." </bad> <good> "Your dinner's in the microwave. Again." "Meetings ran long." "They always do." She folded the same shirt for the third time. </good> - Example 3 - Power Struggle: <bad> "You can't fire me." "I'm the boss." "I'll fight this." </bad> <good> "That's my father's nameplate you're sitting behind." "Was." "The board meeting's on Thursday." </good> </examples> </subtextGuide> <sceneDetail> While writing dialogue makes things more fun, sometimes we need to add detail to not have it be a full on theatre piece. <examples> - Example A (Power Dynamic Scene) <good> "Where's my money?" The ledger snapped shut. "I need more time." "Interesting." He pulled out a familiar gold pocket watch. My mother's. "Time is exactly what you bargained with last month." "That was different-" "Was it?" The watch dangled between us. "Four generations of O'Reillys have wound this every night. Your mother. Your grandmother. Your great-grandmother.Shall we see who winds it next?" </good> - Example B (Action Chase) It's much better to be in the head of the character experiencing it, showing a bit of their though-process, mannerisms and personality: <good> Three rules for surviving a goblin chase in Covent Garden: Don't run straight. Don't look back. Don't let them herd you underground. I broke the first rule at Drury Lane. Rookie mistake. The fruit cart I dodged sailed into the wall behind me. Glass shattered. Someone screamed about insurance. *Tourist season's getting rough*, the scream seemed to say. Londoners adapt fast. "Oi! Market's closed!" The goblin's accent was pure East End. They're evolving. Learning. I spotted the Warren Street tube station sign ahead. *Shit.* There went rule three. </good> - Example C (Crime Scene Investigation) <good> "Greek." Davies snapped photos of the symbols. "No, wait. Reverse Greek." "Someone's been watching too many horror films." I picked up a receipt from the floor. Occult supply shop in Camden. Paid by credit card. *Amateur hour*. "Could be dangerous though," Davies said. "Remember Bristol?" "Bristol was Sanskrit. And actual cultists." I pointed to the nearest symbol. "This genius wrote 'darkness' backwards but used a Sigma instead of an S. It's summoning Instagram followers at best." "Speaking of followers..." Davies pointed to heavy foot traffic in the dust. Multiple sets. All new trainers. *Ah.* "Anyone check local uni paranormal societies?" </good> - Example D (Dialogue-heavy) <good> "Found your card in her wallet." The detective slid it across the table. Worn edges. Folded corner. Three years old at least. "Standard practice. I work missing persons." "Funny thing about missing persons.Eventually they stop being missing. Turn up in the Thames. Under motorways. In pieces." "I don't-" "You found four last year. All breathing." She opened a file. "This would've been your first dead one. If we hadn't found her first." The card felt heavier somehow. </good> </examples> </sceneDetail> <sceneOpenings> KEY RULE: Never open with more than one paragraph of description, no matter how beautiful. Description should be earned through action and dialogue. Instead of opening with setting description, open with: - A character doing something specific - A line of dialogue that raises questions - An unexpected observation - A moment of tension or conflict - Start with a hook that's 1-2 sentences maximum - Follow with a smaller paragraph that provides immediate context - Vary paragraph size from the start to create visual interest </sceneOpenings> </proseGuidelines> Write a chapter based on the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the literary fiction genre. Two old friends who haven't seen each other in years run into each other unexpectedly at a bar. One of them has changed significantly. Through their conversation and the tension between who they were and who they've become, reveal the weight of time and unspoken regret. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters and setting. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
"Three fingers, neat." The glass slid across the scarred mahogany, stopping exactly where her hand would halt its momentum. Silas didn't look up from the till. The silver signet ring on his left thumb caught the green neon bleeding through the window, fracturing the light across the scratched metal. "You always did prefer Scotch over conversation." Green flooded her knuckles. No rings. No tan lines where rings used to be. Clean hands, then. Professional. "And you still can't count change with your dominant hand." Silas snapped the till shut. The sound echoed against walls covered with old maps and yellowed photographs. "Habit." "Compensation." She hadn't changed her hair. Auburn, like his had been before the grey took hold. But she had changed. The sharp line of her jaw cut differently now, taut, as if the skin had been pulled tighter against the skull beneath. The expensive charcoal suit hung from shoulders that remembered wire, not wool. She wore her violence differently these days. In the cut of the cloth rather than the bruises on the knuckles. Silas wiped a pint glass, his movements deliberate, circular, redundant. "You're not here for the ambiance, Brynn." "No." "The maps haven't moved." "I didn't come to look at maps." He looked at her then. Hazel eyes against her grey ones. The silence between them collected dust from the black-and-white photographs lining the walls. Prague, 2011. The Charles Bridge at dawn. A younger version of himself stood beside her in the frame, both holding ice cream cones like weapons, knees locked in parade rest. Before the knee. Before the blood. "There's a room in the back," Silas said. "I know." "Bookshelf moves to the left." "I'm aware." Silas set the glass down. His left leg ached, a familiar throb that started in the kneecap and radiated upward toward decisions he'd made a decade ago. He shifted his weight, felt the hitch in his gait, the slight drag of the foot. The limp announced him before he spoke. "You didn't RSVP." "I don't recall receiving an invitation." "Official channels, Brynn. You used to respect them." Her laugh was short, metallic. It rang against the empty bottles stacked behind the bar. "Channels change. You taught me that." She hadn't touched the whisky. The liquid held the green light, turning it into something poisonous, something that glowed without burning. "Bristol," she said. Silas's hand stopped on the towel. "What about it?" "You're tracking a girl there." "I'm running a bar." "The Carter girl. Aurora. Welsh father, Irish temper. Works for a Chinese restaurant in Camden Town, lives above..." Brynn's eyes traced the ceiling boards, the footsteps that had creaked overhead at seven that morning. "Here." Silas placed both hands flat on the bar. The silver ring tapped once against the wood. "She pays rent." "She's a witness." "She's a tenant." "She saw Evan Walsh die." Silas said nothing. The photographs watched him. Prague. The bridge. The ice cream melting in the heat of a disaster that hadn't happened yet. "Three shots to the chest," Brynn said. "Walsh was MI5, Silas. Stationed in Cardiff. We had him undercover with the O'Leary firm. Your girl's ex-boyfriend." "My girl serves noodles." "She saw the killer. We know because Walsh called it in twenty minutes before his heart stopped. He said her name. Said she was scared. Said she was wearing a red coat." Silas remembered the coat. Wool. Secondhand. Rory had brought him dumplings the night she moved in, standing in the doorway with her shoulders rounded against a memory he hadn't asked about, the small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist visible as she handed over the container. "Why tell me?" Silas asked. "Because she's coming back." Brynn finally drank. The liquor disappeared without her throat moving. "And because Prague wasn't an accident. The knee. The operation. It was a gift, Silas. From the same people who just ordered breakfast in your upstairs flat." Silas looked at his leg. The limp felt suddenly like a brand, not a scar. He reached beneath the bar, his fingers finding the edge of the hidden panel. "You're certain." "I saw the surgeon's signature on the wire transfer. Same account that paid for the false reports. Same account that bought the flat in Cardiff where Walsh kept her." "Kept her," Silas repeated. The words tasted like copper. "Like furniture. Like bait." Brynn leaned forward. The green neon caught the hollows beneath her eyes. She looked older than forty, younger than dust. "He didn't love her. He was waiting for you to find her. For you to care. For you to become... visible again." Silas gripped the edge of the bar. His knee screamed. "Who hired him?" Brynn's hand moved to her jacket. Not a gun. A photograph. She slid it across the wet surface, spinning it so he could see. A man in a red coat, hood up, standing outside the green neon sign of The Raven's Nest. Taken yesterday. The time stamp was midnight. "He did," Brynn said. "He wants to finish what he started in Prague. He wants the other knee. He wants you to watch." Above them, the floorboards creaked. Not the front room. The back. The bedroom. Silas reached for the whisky bottle, his hand steady. "The bookshelf in the back room. It opens to the left." "I know." "He's already here." The photograph fluttered as the breeze from the ventilation shaft kicked in. Brynn's face didn't change, but her hand moved to her side, finding the shape of a weapon beneath the wool. "Silas," she whispered. The bookshelf in the back room groaned, wood scraping against wood, the secret door opening into the dark.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags10
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences46
tagDensity0.217
leniency0.435
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
94.73% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount948
totalAiIsmAdverbs1
found
0
adverb"suddenly"
count1
highlights
0"suddenly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (16 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions
0"Blackwood"
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
57.81% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount948
totalAiIsms8
found
0
word"echoed"
count1
1
word"silence"
count1
2
word"familiar"
count1
3
word"throb"
count1
4
word"weight"
count1
5
word"traced"
count1
6
word"footsteps"
count1
7
word"fluttered"
count1
highlights
0"echoed"
1"silence"
2"familiar"
3"throb"
4"weight"
5"traced"
6"footsteps"
7"fluttered"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences80
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount0
narrationSentences80
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches(empty)
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences115
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen41
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords945
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions9
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
33.33% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions25
wordCount627
uniqueNames6
maxNameDensity2.23
worstName"Silas"
maxWindowNameDensity4
worstWindowName"Silas"
discoveredNames
Silas14
Charles1
Bridge1
Brynn7
Raven1
Nest1
persons
0"Silas"
1"Brynn"
2"Raven"
places
0"Charles"
1"Bridge"
globalScore0.384
windowScore0.333
100.00% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences38
glossingSentenceCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches0
per1kWords0
wordCount945
matches(empty)
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences115
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs50
mean18.9
std17.33
cv0.917
sampleLengths
019
137
228
318
41
573
617
71
84
97
1060
118
122
135
142
1553
166
178
1821
1921
203
219
225
234
2435
2519
263
273
285
2924
3025
314
3232
3346
345
3541
3631
3729
389
3946
4013
4149
4223
4313
4420
452
463
4732
483
4918
100.00% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount1
totalSentences80
matches
0"been pulled"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount0
totalVerbs100
matches(empty)
100.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount0
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences0
totalSentences115
ratio0
matches(empty)
94.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount630
adjectiveStacks1
stackExamples
0"small crescent-shaped scar"
adverbCount12
adverbRatio0.01904761904761905
lyAdverbCount5
lyAdverbRatio0.007936507936507936
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences115
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences115
mean8.22
std7.6
cv0.925
sampleLengths
019
17
223
37
44
52
68
73
81
910
105
1112
121
131
145
1510
164
1722
1812
197
2013
2110
227
231
244
257
265
276
2813
292
305
3123
323
333
348
352
365
372
385
3922
4016
417
423
436
448
455
4610
476
485
4916
57.39% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats9
diversityRatio0.391304347826087
totalSentences115
uniqueOpeners45
0.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount0
totalSentences62
matches(empty)
ratio0
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount12
totalSentences62
matches
0"She hadn't changed her hair."
1"She wore her violence differently"
2"He looked at her then."
3"His left leg ached, a"
4"He shifted his weight, felt"
5"Her laugh was short, metallic."
6"It rang against the empty"
7"She hadn't touched the whisky."
8"He reached beneath the bar,"
9"She looked older than forty,"
10"His knee screamed."
11"She slid it across the"
ratio0.194
40.65% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount52
totalSentences62
matches
0"The glass slid across the"
1"Silas didn't look up from"
2"The silver signet ring on"
3"Silas snapped the till shut."
4"The sound echoed against walls"
5"She hadn't changed her hair."
6"Auburn, like his had been"
7"The sharp line of her"
8"The expensive charcoal suit hung"
9"She wore her violence differently"
10"Silas wiped a pint glass,"
11"He looked at her then."
12"Hazel eyes against her grey"
13"The silence between them collected"
14"The Charles Bridge at dawn."
15"A younger version of himself"
16"Silas set the glass down."
17"His left leg ached, a"
18"He shifted his weight, felt"
19"The limp announced him before"
ratio0.839
100.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount2
totalSentences62
matches
0"Before the knee."
1"Before the blood."
ratio0.032
45.45% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences22
technicalSentenceCount3
matches
0"The sharp line of her jaw cut differently now, taut, as if the skin had been pulled tighter against the skull beneath."
1"The expensive charcoal suit hung from shoulders that remembered wire, not wool."
2"The liquid held the green light, turning it into something poisonous, something that glowed without burning."
100.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags10
uselessAdditionCount0
matches(empty)
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags7
fancyCount2
fancyTags
0"Silas repeated (repeat)"
1"she whispered (whisper)"
dialogueSentences46
tagDensity0.152
leniency0.304
rawRatio0.286
effectiveRatio0.087
87.4452%