Run: 2026-02-19-01KHTXPKNJTDJTW2WA5MV063D5

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Duration:
1m 18s
Cost:
$0.077080
Provider:
Amazon Bedrock

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You are an expert fiction writer. Always keep the following rules in mind: - Write in past tense and use General English spelling, grammar, and colloquialisms/slang. - Write in active voice - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. - Avoid adverbs and cliches and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Convey events and story through dialogue. - Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. - Skip "he/she said said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech - Avoid mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or add unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Reduce indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" When writing text: - NEVER conclude the scene on your own, follow the beat instructions very closely. - NEVER end with foreshadowing. - NEVER write further than what I prompt you with. - AVOID imagining possible endings, NEVER deviate from the instructions. - STOP EARLY if the continuation contains what was required in the instructions. You do not need to fill out the full amount of words possible.
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4418" name="Nyx" aliases="Nyx, the Shadow, Nightwhisper" pronouns="they/them" species="Shade" storyRole="Wild Card"> <eyeColor>faintly glowing violet</eyeColor> <height>approximately 6'2" in solid form</height> <age>ageless</age> <form>humanoid silhouette of living shadow, can shift between solid and incorporeal</form> <voice>sounds like a whisper carried on the wind</voice> <description>A being of living shadow, existing between the mortal plane and the spaces between realms.</description> <backstory>Nyx was once a human sorcerer named Aldric who became trapped between realms during a failed summoning ritual in 1643. They now exist as a Shade, bound to the mortal plane but able to slip between shadows.</backstory> </character> <character id="4424" name="Isolde Varga" aliases="Isolde, the Seer" pronouns="she/her" species="Half-Fae" storyRole="Oracle"> <eyeColor>pale lavender</eyeColor> <hair>silver, reaching her waist</hair> <height>5'5"</height> <age>300 years old</age> <appearance>ethereal, ageless</appearance> <speech>speaks in riddles</speech> <footprints>leaves no footprints when she walks</footprints> <compulsion>cannot lie (Fae compulsion) but can mislead</compulsion> <description>A Half-Fae seer exiled from the Fae Courts for sharing visions with mortals.</description> <backstory>She now lives in a hidden grove in Richmond Park, offering cryptic prophecies to those who seek her out.</backstory> </character> <location id="853" name="Dymas (Gluttony)" aliases="Dymas, gluttony, Dymasian" realm="Hel" sin="Gluttony"> <ruler>Prince Belphegor</ruler> <skyColor>warm amber</skyColor> <description>A place of excess and indulgence. Sprawling vineyards, orchards, and gardens provide exotic ingredients for master chefs — often helbound souls contracted from Earth. Grand feasts and culinary competitions are common.</description> </location> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> <item id="2006" name="Fae-Forged Blade" aliases="the Fae blade, Isolde's gift" type="Weapon" origin="The Fae Courts"> <material>moonsilver</material> <shape>slender, leaf-shaped dagger</shape> <temperature>always cold to the touch</temperature> <glow>faintly luminescent in moonlight</glow> <power>can cut through magical wards; particularly effective against demons</power> <givenTo>given to Aurora by Isolde as a gift</givenTo> <description>A weapon of the Fae Courts, rare and highly coveted.</description> </item> <lore id="7001" name="The Veil" aliases="the Veil, the Barrier, the Boundary" category="Cosmology"> <solsticeEffect>weakens during the winter solstice, strengthens during the summer solstice</solsticeEffect> <appearance>faint shimmering distortion visible only to those with supernatural sight</appearance> <monitoring>rift points (tears in the Veil) are monitored by the Wardens</monitoring> <description>The Veil is the metaphysical barrier separating Earth from Hel and the Fae Realms.</description> </lore> </codex> Continue the story using the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the fantasy genre. A small group enters an ancient, otherworldly place for the first time. The environment is alien and wondrous. Describe their exploration — what they see, hear, and feel as they move deeper. Include moments of discovery, unease, and wonder. Let the world-building emerge through the characters' experience rather than exposition. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters, setting, and lore. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
The air changed before the light did. One step they walked through Richmond Park's damp November chill, dead leaves crunching underfoot, breath fogging in pale clouds. The next, the cold vanished. Not gradually — it simply stopped existing, replaced by a stillness so complete that Rory's ears rang with the absence of London's hum. She paused between two oaks whose trunks had grown together in a twisted arch. The bark wasn't bark anymore. It had the grain and texture of stone, ancient and grey-green with lichen, and from somewhere beyond it came a scent like honey and crushed thyme and something else underneath, something mineral and old. "Don't stop in the threshold." Nyx's voice reached her the way it always did — not quite from behind, not quite from beside, more like it rose from the ground beneath her feet. She stepped through. The grove opened like a held breath released. Wildflowers carpeted the clearing in colors that belonged to no season Rory recognized. Deep violet crocuses tangled with summer poppies. Snowdrops pushed through beds of lavender that shouldn't have been blooming. The grass between them was the vivid impossible green of a place that had never known frost, and it bent without sound beneath her boots. "Jesus," she whispered. Behind her, Nyx slipped through the stone arch like ink poured through a crack. Their form solidified as they crossed — shoulders, the suggestion of a jaw, those violet points of light where eyes belonged. They surveyed the grove the way a cat surveys an unfamiliar room: utterly still, absorbing everything. "The standing stones," they said. "Count them." Rory looked. Arranged in a rough circle at the clearing's edge, half-hidden by the riot of flowers, stood columns of the same petrified oak. She counted. Seven. Eight. She squinted at what might have been a ninth, mostly swallowed by ivy. "Nine? Maybe eight and a half." "There were seven when this place was made." Nyx drifted forward, their shadow-form rippling at the edges where the grove's strange ambient light touched them. "The grove is growing." "Growing into what?" Nyx didn't answer. They rarely did when the answer was something Rory wouldn't like. She pressed deeper. The pendant at her throat — the Heartstone, that thumbnail-sized crimson mystery — lay dormant against her collarbone, its usual faint warmth absent. Whatever this place was, it wasn't Hel. The pendant knew the difference. She touched it once, a reflex she'd developed over the past weeks, and let her hand fall. The clearing was larger than it should have been. From outside, the arch had seemed to open onto a space no bigger than a tennis court. But she'd been walking for what felt like two full minutes and the standing stones on the far side hadn't grown any closer. The light helped nothing — it came from everywhere and nowhere, warm and directionless, as though the sky itself were a lamp. She looked up. No sun. No clouds. Just a pale gold wash that faded to silver at the edges, like the inside of an oyster shell. "Time's wrong here," Rory said. She didn't know how she knew. Something in the way her pulse felt — too slow, or too fast, she couldn't tell which. Like her body's internal clock had been picked up and set down facing the wrong direction. "Time isn't wrong." Nyx's whisper carried a note of correction. "Time is honest here. It's honest everywhere else too. The two honesties simply disagree." "Helpful." A sound reached her — not birdsong, but close. A single sustained note, high and clear, like someone running a wet finger around the rim of a crystal glass. It came from ahead, where the wildflowers grew tallest and a silver birch stood alone in what might have been the grove's center. Rory reached for the Fae blade at her hip. The moonsilver dagger sat in a leather sheath Isolde had provided — old leather, soft as cloth, with no buckle or clasp. The blade simply stayed put until you needed it and then it was in your hand, cold as creek water. She didn't draw it. But her fingers rested on the hilt, and the metal's chill seeped through the leather and into her skin. "Something's here," she said. "Many things are here." Nyx had gone translucent, their edges bleeding into the ambient light. "Most of them are the grove itself." "And the rest?" The crystal note pulsed. Rory felt it in her molars, in the small bones of her wrists. The crescent scar on her left wrist tingled — phantom sensation, the kind that came before a storm or an argument or, apparently, before walking into the heart of a place that existed between worlds. She kept moving. The birch tree resolved as she approached. Its bark was white as bleached bone, and its leaves — she stopped walking. Its leaves were silver. Not metaphorically silver, not the pale green that poets called silver. Actual silver, thin as foil, catching the sourceless light and throwing it back in fragments that danced across the grass. Each leaf chimed faintly against its neighbors when a breeze that Rory couldn't feel moved through the canopy. That was the sound. Not a single note but thousands, layered so precisely they blurred into one. "Don't touch the tree." Rory pulled back a hand she didn't remember extending. "Why?" Nyx materialized beside her, more solid than she'd seen them in the grove so far. The violet glow of their eyes had brightened. "Because it will remember you. And what the tree remembers, the Fae Courts remember. And you are not ready to be remembered by them." The leaves shivered. A cascade of silver sound washed over them both, and for a moment Rory swore she heard a voice inside it — a woman's voice, not speaking words but shaping the edges of them, like someone forming letters in wet clay. She understood nothing. She understood that she was not meant to understand. Not yet. She took a step back. Then another. "Smart," Nyx said. "Terrified." "Same thing, sometimes." They circled the birch at a distance of ten paces. The wildflowers here were different — white blooms she had no name for, with petals that curled inward as she passed, as though shy or defensive. The grass beneath them was threaded with something that caught the light. She crouched. Thin filaments ran through the soil just below the surface, visible through the sparse turf. They pulsed with a faint blue-white luminescence, branching and reconnecting like capillaries. Like veins. The grove had a circulatory system. "It's alive," Rory said. "The whole place. Not just alive like plants are alive. Alive like — " "Like a body. Yes." Nyx hovered at her shoulder. "The Fae do not build their spaces. They grow them. This grove is Isolde's, and it is as much a part of her as her hands or her sight." Rory thought of Isolde — that silver waterfall of hair, those pale lavender eyes that looked at you and through you simultaneously, the way she walked without leaving footprints. She'd given Rory the blade and a set of directions to the grove and nothing else. No warnings. No guidance beyond find the birch, wait there. But Isolde couldn't lie. That was the Fae compulsion, burned into her blood. She could mislead, could dance around the truth until it was dizzy, but the words themselves always held. So when she'd said the grove is safe for you, she'd meant it. Whatever safe meant to a three-hundred-year-old exile who spoke in riddles. "Where is she?" Rory straightened. The luminous veins pulsed once, brighter, as though responding to the question. "Close." Nyx tilted their head — that strange birdlike gesture they made when listening to sounds beyond mortal range. "She's been here the entire time. Watching." "Watching from where?" Nyx extended one shadow-wrought arm toward the standing stones on the clearing's far edge. Rory looked. Between two of the petrified oaks, the air shimmered. Not heat-haze — something more deliberate, more architectural. A distortion with edges. It rippled like a curtain, and through its folds she caught fragments: a deeper green, a colder light, the impression of vast distance compressed into a sliver. The Veil. She was looking at the Veil. The Heartstone pendant flared — not warm, not the way it pulsed near Hel portals, but cold. A sharp bite of cold that spread from her collarbone down her sternum. She gasped and pressed her palm flat against it. "It shouldn't be doing that." Nyx had gone rigid, their form compressed to its densest state, almost fully human in silhouette. "The pendant responds to Hel. Not to the Fae Realms." "Well, someone should tell the pendant that." The cold deepened. Through the crimson stone she felt something — a pull, a tug, as though a thread attached to her ribs had been given a single sharp yank. It came from the shimmer between the stones. From whatever lay beyond. "Nyx." "I feel it." "What is it?" "Something that shouldn't be there." Their voice had lost its usual detachment. For the first time since Rory had known them — if known was the right word for a creature of living shadow who appeared uninvited and stayed out of what seemed like either boredom or obligation — Nyx sounded unsettled. "The Fae Realms and Hel do not overlap. They repel each other the way oil repels water. If the pendant is reacting to something beyond the Veil in a Fae-touched space — " "Then something from Hel is bleeding through." The silver birch erupted in sound. Every leaf chimed at once, a wall of crystal noise that hit Rory's chest like a physical blow. The white flowers snapped shut. The luminous veins in the soil blazed bright enough to cast shadows — her shadow, Nyx's shadow, and a third that belonged to nothing visible. Rory drew the Fae blade. It left the sheath with no resistance, no sound, just sudden weight in her hand and cold that numbed her fingers to the second knuckle. The moonsilver edge caught the grove's strange light and threw it back as something sharper, something that cut the air itself. In its glow she saw the third shadow move. It was shaped wrong. Too many angles, joints that bent in directions joints shouldn't. It slid across the grass toward the shimmering Veil point between the stones. "It's trying to get through," Rory breathed. Nyx was already moving — flowing across the clearing like spilled oil, shadow reaching for shadow. They intercepted the shape six feet from the stones, and for one frozen instant the grove went silent. No chiming. No pulse from the veins beneath the earth. Just Nyx, wrapped around something that thrashed and twisted in their grip, and the Veil shuddering between the standing stones like a struck drum. Then a voice — Isolde's voice, unmistakable, that tone like a bell rung underwater — cut through from everywhere at once. "Hold it. Do not let it reach the boundary." Rory tightened her grip on the blade and ran.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags15
adverbTagCount0
adverbTags(empty)
dialogueSentences41
tagDensity0.366
leniency0.732
rawRatio0
effectiveRatio0
94.57% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1841
totalAiIsmAdverbs2
found
0
adverb"utterly"
count1
1
adverb"precisely"
count1
highlights
0"utterly"
1"precisely"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
51.11% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1841
totalAiIsms18
found
0
word"chill"
count2
1
word"warmth"
count1
2
word"pulse"
count2
3
word"whisper"
count1
4
word"crystal"
count3
5
word"pulsed"
count4
6
word"resolved"
count1
7
word"dance"
count1
8
word"shimmered"
count1
9
word"unsettled"
count1
10
word"weight"
count1
highlights
0"chill"
1"warmth"
2"pulse"
3"whisper"
4"crystal"
5"pulsed"
6"resolved"
7"dance"
8"shimmered"
9"unsettled"
10"weight"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches0
maxInWindow0
found(empty)
highlights(empty)
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences138
matches(empty)
100.00% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount0
hedgeCount1
narrationSentences138
filterMatches(empty)
hedgeMatches
0"seemed to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences164
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen40
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1858
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions18
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
83.33% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions55
wordCount1604
uniqueNames11
maxNameDensity1.25
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity2.5
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
Richmond1
Park1
November1
Rory20
London1
Nyx16
Heartstone2
Hel2
Fae3
Isolde4
Veil4
persons
0"November"
1"Rory"
2"Nyx"
3"Isolde"
places
0"Richmond"
1"Park"
2"London"
3"Hel"
4"Veil"
globalScore0.877
windowScore0.833
42.47% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences93
glossingSentenceCount4
matches
0"not quite from behind, not quite from beside, more like it rose from the ground beneath her feet"
1"not quite from beside, more like it rose from the ground beneath her feet"
2"felt like two full minutes and the stan"
3"n argument or, apparently, before walking int"
4"as though responding to the question"
0.00% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches5
per1kWords2.691
wordCount1858
matches
0"not birdsong, but close"
1"Not a single note but thousands, layered so precisely they blurred into one"
2"not speaking words but shaping the edges of them, like someone forming letters in w"
3"not warm, not the way it pulsed near Hel portals, but cold"
4"not the way it pulsed near Hel portals, but cold"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount1
totalSentences164
matches
0"understood that she"
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs64
mean29.03
std25.02
cv0.862
sampleLengths
054
153
25
331
48
556
63
751
87
941
106
1129
123
1314
1455
1597
1644
1724
181
1952
2074
214
2222
233
2452
253
2674
2717
284
2910
3047
3158
327
333
341
353
3650
3735
3818
3938
4055
4155
4217
4326
443
4564
468
4739
4831
497
95.09% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount4
totalSentences138
matches
0"been picked"
1"was threaded"
2"been given"
3"was shaped"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount1
totalVerbs250
matches
0"was looking"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount24
semicolonCount0
flaggedSentences21
totalSentences164
ratio0.128
matches
0"Not gradually — it simply stopped existing, replaced by a stillness so complete that Rory's ears rang with the absence of London's hum."
1"Nyx's voice reached her the way it always did — not quite from behind, not quite from beside, more like it rose from the ground beneath her feet."
2"Their form solidified as they crossed — shoulders, the suggestion of a jaw, those violet points of light where eyes belonged."
3"The pendant at her throat — the Heartstone, that thumbnail-sized crimson mystery — lay dormant against her collarbone, its usual faint warmth absent."
4"The light helped nothing — it came from everywhere and nowhere, warm and directionless, as though the sky itself were a lamp."
5"Something in the way her pulse felt — too slow, or too fast, she couldn't tell which."
6"A sound reached her — not birdsong, but close."
7"The moonsilver dagger sat in a leather sheath Isolde had provided — old leather, soft as cloth, with no buckle or clasp."
8"The crescent scar on her left wrist tingled — phantom sensation, the kind that came before a storm or an argument or, apparently, before walking into the heart of a place that existed between worlds."
9"Its bark was white as bleached bone, and its leaves — she stopped walking."
10"A cascade of silver sound washed over them both, and for a moment Rory swore she heard a voice inside it — a woman's voice, not speaking words but shaping the edges of them, like someone forming letters in wet clay."
11"The wildflowers here were different — white blooms she had no name for, with petals that curled inward as she passed, as though shy or defensive."
12"Rory thought of Isolde — that silver waterfall of hair, those pale lavender eyes that looked at you and through you simultaneously, the way she walked without leaving footprints."
13"\"Close.\" Nyx tilted their head — that strange birdlike gesture they made when listening to sounds beyond mortal range."
14"Not heat-haze — something more deliberate, more architectural."
15"The Heartstone pendant flared — not warm, not the way it pulsed near Hel portals, but cold."
16"Through the crimson stone she felt something — a pull, a tug, as though a thread attached to her ribs had been given a single sharp yank."
17"For the first time since Rory had known them — if known was the right word for a creature of living shadow who appeared uninvited and stayed out of what seemed like either boredom or obligation — Nyx sounded unsettled."
18"The luminous veins in the soil blazed bright enough to cast shadows — her shadow, Nyx's shadow, and a third that belonged to nothing visible."
19"Nyx was already moving — flowing across the clearing like spilled oil, shadow reaching for shadow."
20"Then a voice — Isolde's voice, unmistakable, that tone like a bell rung underwater — cut through from everywhere at once."
88.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1590
adjectiveStacks2
stackExamples
0"lay dormant against her"
1"faint blue-white luminescence,"
adverbCount57
adverbRatio0.035849056603773584
lyAdverbCount12
lyAdverbRatio0.007547169811320755
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences164
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences164
mean11.33
std8.74
cv0.771
sampleLengths
07
119
25
323
414
55
634
75
828
93
108
1113
127
1311
1425
153
1614
1721
1816
195
202
212
2222
232
241
251
2613
276
2825
294
303
313
3211
333
3423
357
365
3717
389
3917
4023
4122
423
432
442
4519
465
476
4817
4916
54.27% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats11
diversityRatio0.36585365853658536
totalSentences164
uniqueOpeners60
100.00% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount4
totalSentences116
matches
0"Just a pale gold wash"
1"Too many angles, joints that"
2"Just Nyx, wrapped around something"
3"Then a voice — Isolde's"
ratio0.034
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount32
totalSentences116
matches
0"She paused between two oaks"
1"It had the grain and"
2"She stepped through."
3"Their form solidified as they"
4"They surveyed the grove the"
5"She squinted at what might"
6"They rarely did when the"
7"She pressed deeper."
8"She touched it once, a"
9"She looked up."
10"She didn't know how she"
11"It came from ahead, where"
12"She didn't draw it."
13"She kept moving."
14"Its bark was white as"
15"Its leaves were silver."
16"She understood nothing."
17"She understood that she was"
18"She took a step back."
19"They circled the birch at"
ratio0.276
76.38% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount89
totalSentences116
matches
0"The air changed before the"
1"The next, the cold vanished."
2"She paused between two oaks"
3"The bark wasn't bark anymore."
4"It had the grain and"
5"Nyx's voice reached her the"
6"She stepped through."
7"The grove opened like a"
8"Wildflowers carpeted the clearing in"
9"Snowdrops pushed through beds of"
10"The grass between them was"
11"Their form solidified as they"
12"They surveyed the grove the"
13"She squinted at what might"
14"Nyx drifted forward, their shadow-form"
15"Nyx didn't answer."
16"They rarely did when the"
17"She pressed deeper."
18"The pendant at her throat"
19"Whatever this place was, it"
ratio0.767
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences116
matches(empty)
ratio0
40.82% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences63
technicalSentenceCount9
matches
0"The grass between them was the vivid impossible green of a place that had never known frost, and it bent without sound beneath her boots."
1"The light helped nothing — it came from everywhere and nowhere, warm and directionless, as though the sky itself were a lamp."
2"Just a pale gold wash that faded to silver at the edges, like the inside of an oyster shell."
3"The wildflowers here were different — white blooms she had no name for, with petals that curled inward as she passed, as though shy or defensive."
4"Whatever safe meant to a three-hundred-year-old exile who spoke in riddles."
5"The luminous veins pulsed once, brighter, as though responding to the question."
6"For the first time since Rory had known them — if known was the right word for a creature of living shadow who appeared uninvited and stayed out of what seemed …"
7"The moonsilver edge caught the grove's strange light and threw it back as something sharper, something that cut the air itself."
8"Just Nyx, wrapped around something that thrashed and twisted in their grip, and the Veil shuddering between the standing stones like a struck drum."
91.67% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags15
uselessAdditionCount1
matches
0"Nyx had, their edges bleeding into the ambient light"
100.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags7
fancyCount2
fancyTags
0"she whispered (whisper)"
1"Rory breathed (breathe)"
dialogueSentences41
tagDensity0.171
leniency0.341
rawRatio0.286
effectiveRatio0.098
80.5904%