Run: 2026-02-19-01KHTXREXB66CXB467HWW1R3HC

Run Details

Duration:
22.5s
Cost:
$0.008752
Provider:
Google AI Studio

Model input

System
You are an expert fiction writer. Always keep the following rules in mind: - Write in past tense and use General English spelling, grammar, and colloquialisms/slang. - Write in active voice - Always follow the "show, don't tell" principle. - Avoid adverbs and cliches and overused/commonly used phrases. Aim for fresh and original descriptions. - Convey events and story through dialogue. - Mix short, punchy sentences with long, descriptive ones. Drop fill words to add variety. - Skip "he/she said said" dialogue tags and convey people's actions or face expressions through their speech - Avoid mushy dialog and descriptions, have dialogue always continue the action, never stall or add unnecessary fluff. Vary the descriptions to not repeat yourself. - Put dialogue on its own paragraph to separate scene and action. - Reduce indicators of uncertainty like "trying" or "maybe" When writing text: - NEVER conclude the scene on your own, follow the beat instructions very closely. - NEVER end with foreshadowing. - NEVER write further than what I prompt you with. - AVOID imagining possible endings, NEVER deviate from the instructions. - STOP EARLY if the continuation contains what was required in the instructions. You do not need to fill out the full amount of words possible.
User/Human
Take into account the following glossary of characters/locations/items/lore... when writing your response: <codex> <character id="4412" name="Aurora Carter" aliases="Rory, Laila, Aurora, Carter, Malphora" pronouns="she/her" species="Human" storyRole="Protagonist"> <eyeColor>bright blue</eyeColor> <hair>straight shoulder-length black</hair> <height>5'6"</height> <age>25</age> <scar>small crescent-shaped scar on her left wrist from a childhood accident</scar> <description>Aurora, referred to by her friends as Rory, is cool-headed, intelligent, and known for quick out-of-the-box thinking.</description> <backstory>Born in Cardiff to an Irish barrister father (Brendan Carter) and Welsh teacher mother (Jennifer Carter née Ellis), Rory reluctantly pursued Pre-Law at Cardiff University. She fled to London at the behest of her childhood friend Eva after leaving an abusive ex named Evan. By day, Rory works part-time as a delivery person for Yu-Fei Cheung's Golden Empress restaurant. She lives in a flat above Silas' bar.</backstory> </character> <character id="4418" name="Nyx" aliases="Nyx, the Shadow, Nightwhisper" pronouns="they/them" species="Shade" storyRole="Wild Card"> <eyeColor>faintly glowing violet</eyeColor> <height>approximately 6'2" in solid form</height> <age>ageless</age> <form>humanoid silhouette of living shadow, can shift between solid and incorporeal</form> <voice>sounds like a whisper carried on the wind</voice> <description>A being of living shadow, existing between the mortal plane and the spaces between realms.</description> <backstory>Nyx was once a human sorcerer named Aldric who became trapped between realms during a failed summoning ritual in 1643. They now exist as a Shade, bound to the mortal plane but able to slip between shadows.</backstory> </character> <character id="4424" name="Isolde Varga" aliases="Isolde, the Seer" pronouns="she/her" species="Half-Fae" storyRole="Oracle"> <eyeColor>pale lavender</eyeColor> <hair>silver, reaching her waist</hair> <height>5'5"</height> <age>300 years old</age> <appearance>ethereal, ageless</appearance> <speech>speaks in riddles</speech> <footprints>leaves no footprints when she walks</footprints> <compulsion>cannot lie (Fae compulsion) but can mislead</compulsion> <description>A Half-Fae seer exiled from the Fae Courts for sharing visions with mortals.</description> <backstory>She now lives in a hidden grove in Richmond Park, offering cryptic prophecies to those who seek her out.</backstory> </character> <location id="853" name="Dymas (Gluttony)" aliases="Dymas, gluttony, Dymasian" realm="Hel" sin="Gluttony"> <ruler>Prince Belphegor</ruler> <skyColor>warm amber</skyColor> <description>A place of excess and indulgence. Sprawling vineyards, orchards, and gardens provide exotic ingredients for master chefs — often helbound souls contracted from Earth. Grand feasts and culinary competitions are common.</description> </location> <location id="861" name="The Fae Grove" aliases="Isolde's grove, Richmond grove, the Grove" realm="Earth (Fae-touched)"> <parkLocation>Richmond Park</parkLocation> <standingStones>ancient oak standing stones mark the boundary</standingStones> <timeBehavior>time moves differently — an hour inside can be minutes or days outside</timeBehavior> <flora>wildflowers bloom year-round</flora> <description>A hidden clearing that exists in a pocket between Earth and the Fae realm.</description> </location> <item id="2001" name="Heartstone Pendant" aliases="the pendant, Heartstone" type="Artifact" origin="Dymas"> <gemstoneColor>deep crimson</gemstoneColor> <chainMaterial>silver chain</chainMaterial> <size>roughly the size of a thumbnail</size> <behavior>pulses faintly with warmth when near a Hel portal</behavior> <glow>faint inner glow</glow> <description>Given to Aurora by an unknown benefactor.</description> </item> <item id="2006" name="Fae-Forged Blade" aliases="the Fae blade, Isolde's gift" type="Weapon" origin="The Fae Courts"> <material>moonsilver</material> <shape>slender, leaf-shaped dagger</shape> <temperature>always cold to the touch</temperature> <glow>faintly luminescent in moonlight</glow> <power>can cut through magical wards; particularly effective against demons</power> <givenTo>given to Aurora by Isolde as a gift</givenTo> <description>A weapon of the Fae Courts, rare and highly coveted.</description> </item> <lore id="7001" name="The Veil" aliases="the Veil, the Barrier, the Boundary" category="Cosmology"> <solsticeEffect>weakens during the winter solstice, strengthens during the summer solstice</solsticeEffect> <appearance>faint shimmering distortion visible only to those with supernatural sight</appearance> <monitoring>rift points (tears in the Veil) are monitored by the Wardens</monitoring> <description>The Veil is the metaphysical barrier separating Earth from Hel and the Fae Realms.</description> </lore> </codex> Continue the story using the following instructions: <instructions> Write a fully fleshed out scene of at least 1000 words in the fantasy genre. A small group enters an ancient, otherworldly place for the first time. The environment is alien and wondrous. Describe their exploration — what they see, hear, and feel as they move deeper. Include moments of discovery, unease, and wonder. Let the world-building emerge through the characters' experience rather than exposition. Use the codex entries above as your world reference for characters, setting, and lore. Only include the prose of the scene without any markdown or commentary. </instructions>

Model response

AI
Amber light thicket through the canopy, thick as honey. Rory stepped through the ring of standing stones, her boots sinking into moss that felt more like velvet than vegetation. The transition hit her like a change in atmospheric pressure; her ears popped, and the hum of London traffic vanished. In its place, a heavy, fragrant silence settled over the clearing. "The air tastes like nectar." Rory brushed a stray strand of black hair from her face. She adjusted the strap of her delivery bag, her fingers grazing the silver chain of the Heartstone Pendant beneath her shirt. The crimson gem throbbed against her collarbone, a rhythmic heat that matched her own pulse. Beside her, a humanoid silhouette rippled. Nyx moved with a fluid, terrifying grace, their form bleeding into the elongated shadows of the ancient oaks. Violet light flickered within the void of their face, scanning the perimeter. "Time does not breathe here, Aurora Carter. It waits." The whisper scraped against the air, dry as parchment. Nyx drifted forward, their feet never quite depressing the wildflowers that carpeted the forest floor. These blooms defied the season, their petals shimmering with iridescent oils and shifting colors—pulsing from bruised plum to electric gold as the party moved past. Isolde Varga led the way. The Half-Fae walked with a spine of steel, her waist-length silver hair trailing behind her like a comet’s tail. She didn't look back to see if they followed. She knew they would. The Grove didn't permit a reversal of will once the threshold crumbled. "Watch the shadows," Isolde warned. Her voice lacked the weight of human vocal cords, ringing like crystal struck by silver. "They have eyes in the Dymasian borderlands, and the Gluttony Prince keeps a long leash on his hounds." Rory gripped the hilt of the moonsilver dagger tucked into her belt. The Fae-Forged Blade felt like a shard of ice against her hip, a constant, biting reminder of the stakes. As they delved deeper into the pocket dimension, the trees changed. The gnarled bark of the oaks gave way to translucent, crystalline trunks. Inside the wood, sap flowed like liquid gold, thick and sluggish. Rory reached out, her fingers hovering an inch from a trunk. "It’s warm." "Life is a feast in the realms of excess," Isolde said, pausing beneath a weeping willow whose branches consisted of spun silver silk. "Prince Belphegor does not allow his gardens to wither. Every leaf is a calculated indulgence." A low, guttural vibration groaned through the earth. Rory froze. It wasn't a tremor, but a sound—a deep, resonant bass note that made her teeth ache. Far ahead, the amber sky fractured. A shimmering distortion hung in the air, a ripple in the fabric of the world that made the trees behind it look like they were underwater. "The Veil," Rory whispered. "A thinning patch," Nyx clarified, their violet eyes glowing brighter. The Shade drifted toward a patch of thorns that bled thick, sweet-smelling resin. "The scent of Dymas is heavy now. Sugared rot and overripe peaches." Rory smelled it then. The air grew cloying, heavy enough to coat the back of her throat. It wasn't the fresh, earthy scent of Richmond Park anymore. This was the smell of a kitchen after a week of decadence—fermenting fruit, burnt caramel, and something metallic, like blood hidden under spices. They crested a small rise and the Grove opened into a vast, sunken amphitheater of stone and glass. In the center, a fountain bubbled, but it didn't spout water. Dark, viscous wine cascaded over tiers of white marble, staining the stone a permanent, regal purple. Around the fountain, the grass had been replaced by a carpet of succulents that looked like clusters of glass grapes. "Is this where he comes?" Rory asked, her voice hushed. Isolde turned, her pale lavender eyes catching the amber light. "The Prince of Gluttony does not walk. He is carried. But his influence... his influence eats the world from the inside out." Rory stepped toward the fountain, drawn by the mesmerizing rhythm of the wine. As she approached, the Heartstone Pendant began to burn. Not the gentle warmth of a warning, but a searing, insistent heat. She gasped, clutching at her chest. "Rory?" Nyx was at her shoulder in a blur of darkness. The Shade’s presence brought a sudden, hollow cold that battled the heat of the stone. "It’s reacting to the portal," Rory hissed through gritted teeth. She looked at the fountain. The wine wasn't just falling; it was swirling into a vortex at the base of the marble basin. The shimmering distortion she’d seen earlier wasn't above them—it was right there, anchored in the liquid. "The Gateway to Dymas," Isolde said, her expression unreadable. "A place where every desire is granted, and every soul is a dish to be served." Rory pulled the pendant out from under her shirt. The crimson stone glowed with an internal, angry light, casting long, distorted shadows across her face. The crescent-shaped scar on her wrist felt tight, a phantom itch from a life she’d tried to leave behind in Cardiff. She felt small in the face of the ancient stones and the ageless Shade, a delivery girl caught in a war between cosmic appetites. "We shouldn't be here," Rory said, the realization hitting her like a physical blow. "This isn't a clearing. It’s a larder." The ground groaned again, louder this time. From the edges of the crystalline forest, the shadows began to detach themselves—not like Nyx, who was a solid entity, but like ink bleeding into water. The "hounds" Isolde mentioned were formless, shifting masses of teeth and hunger, drawn by the heat of the Heartstone and the scent of mortal blood. Nyx’s form expanded, their silhouette sharpening into a jagged, lethal edge. "The Prince’s guests have arrived for the first course." Rory drew the moonsilver blade. The metal caught the amber light and refracted it into a cold, blue gleam. The temperature around the dagger dropped further, frosting the tips of the glass-like succulents at her feet. "Tell me how to close it," Rory commanded, her voice regaining the cool edge that had seen her through the streets of London and the nightmares of her past. Isolde didn't move. She watched the ink-black hounds circle the perimeter of the fountain, her silver hair shimmering as the wind began to howl through the trees. "Closure is a human concept, Aurora. Here, there is only consumption or escape." A hound leaped. It was a blur of matted fur and too many eyes, its jaw unhinging to reveal rows of needle-like teeth that glowed with a faint, sickly green luminescence. Rory didn't think. She pivoted, the leaf-shaped blade cutting a shimmering arc through the air. The moonsilver met the beast’s throat. There was no resistance, no bone or gristle; the blade sliced through the demon’s essence like a hot wire through wax. The creature didn't scream. It dissolved into a puddle of foul-smelling sludge that hissed against the marble. "One," Nyx whispered, their shadow-claws elongating as they intercepted another three hounds in a flurry of violet strikes. Rory stood her ground by the fountain, the Heartstone Pendant now thrumming with a vibration so intense she could feel it in her molars. The wine-vortex spun faster, the scent of spirits and sugar becoming overwhelming. She looked into the depths of the swirling liquid and saw images shifting beneath the surface—grand banquet halls draped in gold, tables groaning under the weight of impossible feasts, and the distorted faces of souls whose eyes were wide with a hunger that could never be filled. "The pendant is the key," Rory shouted over the rising roar of the portal. "It’s not just a sensor, is it?" Isolde finally looked at her, a small, cryptic smile touching her lips. "A key is also a lock, if one knows which way to turn it." More hounds emerged from the crystalline trees, their growls sounding like the grinding of stones. The amber sky began to darken, the warm light being swallowed by the yawning void of the Dymasian gate. The flowers at Rory’s feet began to wilt, their iridescent oils turning black and rancid as the Prince’s realm bled into the Grove. Nyx was a whirlwind of shadow, a frantic dance of violet and black that kept the worst of the pack at bay, but they were being pushed back toward the fountain. "Choose, Aurora," Nyx called out, their voice straining as a hound’s claws raked through their incorporeal form. "The threshold is breaking!" Rory looked at the Heartstone. She looked at the silver dagger. The cold of the blade and the heat of the stone fought for dominance in her hands. She stepped onto the rim of the fountain, the stained wine splashing over her boots. The liquid felt oily and thick, pulling at her feet with a gravity that didn't belong to Earth. She plunged her hand into the vortex, the pendant gripped tight in her fist. The world tilted. The amber sky vanished, replaced by a searing, blinding crimson. The sound of the forest was killed by the roar of a thousand hungry mouths. Rory felt the Heartstone buckle, the gemstone pulsating so violently it felt like it might shatter. "Not today," she hissed, her fingers locking around the silver chain. The energy of the portal surged up her arm, a wave of pure, unadulterated gluttony that threatened to drown her mind in visions of excess. She saw her father’s face, her mother’s classroom, the cold eyes of Evan—everything she’d ever wanted or feared, served up on a silver platter. She drove the moonsilver blade into the marble of the fountain, using it as an anchor. The cold of the Fae metal surged through her other arm, meeting the heat of the Hel-stone in her chest. The clash sent a shockwave of silver and red light rippling outward. The hounds disintegrated instantly. The crystalline trees shattered, showering the clearing in a rain of glass shards. Nyx was thrown back, their shadow-form flickering wildly before stabilizing. The wine in the fountain erupted upward in a geyser of purple froth, then suddenly vanished. The vortex collapsed with a sound like a vacuum seal being broken. Rory fell forward, her knees hitting the marble as the oppressive heat of Dymas retreated, leaving behind only the cold, sharp scent of the Fae Grove. Silence returned, but it was a wounded silence. The clearing was decimated. The iridescent wildflowers were gone, replaced by gray ash. The amber light of the sky had faded to a dull, bruised twilight. Rory pulled her hand from the basin. The Heartstone Pendant was dark, its inner glow extinguished for the moment. Her moonsilver blade remained wedged in the marble, humming with a low, dying frequency. Isolde stepped through the wreckage, her silver hair untouched by the ash, her feet leaving no mark on the ruined ground. She looked down at Rory, her pale eyes reflecting the fading light. "The Prince will remember that taste," the Seer said softly. "You have denied him a seat at his own table." Rory stood up shaking. She wiped a smudge of wine from her cheek, her blue eyes hard. "I’m not on the menu." Nyx drifted back to her side, their form reconstituted but dim. "The Veil is mending, but the scar remains. This place is no longer hidden." Rory looked around at the broken glass trees and the silent standing stones. The wonder of the Grove had been stripped away, revealing the raw, dangerous machinery of the realms beneath. She reached for the hilt of her dagger and yanked it from the stone. "Then we don't stay," Rory said. "We move." The Heartstone gave a single, faint pulse against her skin—a cold, lingering reminder that some hungers were never truly sated.
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Evaluation details

Result Evaluator Details Meta Data
100.00% Adverbs in dialogue tags
Target: ≤10% dialogue tags with adverbs
totalTags16
adverbTagCount1
adverbTags
0"the Seer said softly [softly]"
dialogueSentences35
tagDensity0.457
leniency0.914
rawRatio0.063
effectiveRatio0.057
92.47% AI-ism adverb frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism adverbs (58 tracked)
wordCount1992
totalAiIsmAdverbs3
found
0
adverb"suddenly"
count1
1
adverb"softly"
count1
2
adverb"truly"
count1
highlights
0"suddenly"
1"softly"
2"truly"
100.00% AI-ism character names
Target: 0 AI-default names (17 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
100.00% AI-ism location names
Target: 0 AI-default location names (33 tracked, −20% each)
codexExemptions(empty)
found(empty)
0.00% AI-ism word frequency
Target: <2% AI-ism words (290 tracked)
wordCount1992
totalAiIsms41
found
0
word"velvet"
count1
1
word"silence"
count3
2
word"throbbed"
count1
3
word"rhythmic"
count1
4
word"pulse"
count2
5
word"flickered"
count1
6
word"scanning"
count1
7
word"whisper"
count1
8
word"electric"
count1
9
word"weight"
count2
10
word"crystal"
count1
11
word"reminder"
count2
12
word"delved"
count1
13
word"crystalline"
count4
14
word"silk"
count1
15
word"calculated"
count1
16
word"fractured"
count1
17
word"marble"
count6
18
word"warmth"
count1
19
word"searing"
count2
20
word"unreadable"
count1
21
word"desire"
count1
22
word"could feel"
count1
23
word"depths"
count1
24
word"dance"
count1
25
word"shattered"
count1
26
word"oppressive"
count1
highlights
0"velvet"
1"silence"
2"throbbed"
3"rhythmic"
4"pulse"
5"flickered"
6"scanning"
7"whisper"
8"electric"
9"weight"
10"crystal"
11"reminder"
12"delved"
13"crystalline"
14"silk"
15"calculated"
16"fractured"
17"marble"
18"warmth"
19"searing"
20"unreadable"
21"desire"
22"could feel"
23"depths"
24"dance"
25"shattered"
26"oppressive"
100.00% Cliché density
Target: ≤1 cliche(s) per 800-word window
totalCliches1
maxInWindow1
found
0
label"hung in the air"
count1
highlights
0"hung in the air"
100.00% Emotion telling (show vs. tell)
Target: ≤3% sentences with emotion telling
emotionTells0
narrationSentences130
matches(empty)
65.93% Filter word density
Target: ≤3% sentences with filter/hedge words
filterCount1
hedgeCount6
narrationSentences130
filterMatches
0"look"
hedgeMatches
0"began to"
1"tried to"
100.00% Gibberish response detection
Target: ≤1% gibberish-like sentences (hard fail if a sentence exceeds 800 words)
analyzedSentences149
gibberishSentences0
adjustedGibberishSentences0
longSentenceCount0
runOnParagraphCount0
giantParagraphCount0
wordSaladCount0
repetitionLoopCount0
controlTokenCount0
maxSentenceWordsSeen48
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Markdown formatting overuse
Target: ≤5% words in markdown formatting
markdownSpans0
markdownWords0
totalWords1972
ratio0
matches(empty)
100.00% Missing dialogue indicators (quotation marks)
Target: ≤10% speech attributions without quotation marks
totalAttributions17
unquotedAttributions0
matches(empty)
74.64% Name drop frequency
Target: ≤1.0 per-name mentions per 100 words
totalMentions86
wordCount1725
uniqueNames23
maxNameDensity1.51
worstName"Rory"
maxWindowNameDensity2.5
worstWindowName"Rory"
discoveredNames
London2
Heartstone8
Pendant4
Varga1
Half-Fae1
Grove5
Fae-Forged1
Blade1
Nyx11
Shade3
Richmond1
Park1
Isolde9
Rory26
Cardiff1
Dymasian1
Prince1
Earth1
Evan1
Fae4
Hel-stone1
Dymas1
Seer1
persons
0"Pendant"
1"Varga"
2"Half-Fae"
3"Blade"
4"Nyx"
5"Shade"
6"Isolde"
7"Rory"
8"Prince"
9"Evan"
10"Dymas"
11"Seer"
places
0"London"
1"Grove"
2"Richmond"
3"Park"
4"Cardiff"
5"Earth"
6"Fae"
globalScore0.746
windowScore0.833
80.56% Narrator intent-glossing
Target: ≤2% narration sentences with intent-glossing patterns
analyzedSentences108
glossingSentenceCount3
matches
0"felt like a shard of ice against her hi"
1"looked like clusters of glass grapes"
2"felt like it might shatter"
98.58% "Not X but Y" pattern overuse
Target: ≤1 "not X but Y" per 1000 words
totalMatches2
per1kWords1.014
wordCount1972
matches
0"Not the gentle warmth of a warning, but a searing, insistent heat"
1"not like Nyx, who was a solid entity, but like ink bleeding into water"
100.00% Overuse of "that" (subordinate clause padding)
Target: ≤2% sentences with "that" clauses
thatCount0
totalSentences149
matches(empty)
100.00% Paragraph length variance
Target: CV ≥0.5 for paragraph word counts
totalParagraphs58
mean34
std19.61
cv0.577
sampleLengths
060
15
247
336
49
549
649
738
865
911
102
1138
1258
134
1435
1550
1665
1710
1832
1940
201
2125
2249
2325
2470
2521
2658
2720
2836
2929
3027
3113
3273
3317
3418
3583
3621
3726
3857
3931
4021
4161
4214
4344
4411
4549
4648
4727
4854
4934
83.67% Passive voice overuse
Target: ≤2% passive sentences
passiveCount8
totalSentences130
matches
0"been replaced"
1"being swallowed"
2"being pushed"
3"was killed"
4"was thrown"
5"was decimated"
6"were gone"
7"been stripped"
100.00% Past progressive (was/were + -ing) overuse
Target: ≤2% past progressive verbs
pastProgressiveCount1
totalVerbs275
matches
0"was swirling"
0.00% Em-dash & semicolon overuse
Target: ≤2% sentences with em-dashes/semicolons
emDashCount8
semicolonCount3
flaggedSentences11
totalSentences149
ratio0.074
matches
0"The transition hit her like a change in atmospheric pressure; her ears popped, and the hum of London traffic vanished."
1"These blooms defied the season, their petals shimmering with iridescent oils and shifting colors—pulsing from bruised plum to electric gold as the party moved past."
2"It wasn't a tremor, but a sound—a deep, resonant bass note that made her teeth ache."
3"This was the smell of a kitchen after a week of decadence—fermenting fruit, burnt caramel, and something metallic, like blood hidden under spices."
4"The wine wasn't just falling; it was swirling into a vortex at the base of the marble basin."
5"The shimmering distortion she’d seen earlier wasn't above them—it was right there, anchored in the liquid."
6"From the edges of the crystalline forest, the shadows began to detach themselves—not like Nyx, who was a solid entity, but like ink bleeding into water."
7"There was no resistance, no bone or gristle; the blade sliced through the demon’s essence like a hot wire through wax."
8"She looked into the depths of the swirling liquid and saw images shifting beneath the surface—grand banquet halls draped in gold, tables groaning under the weight of impossible feasts, and the distorted faces of souls whose eyes were wide with a hunger that could never be filled."
9"She saw her father’s face, her mother’s classroom, the cold eyes of Evan—everything she’d ever wanted or feared, served up on a silver platter."
10"The Heartstone gave a single, faint pulse against her skin—a cold, lingering reminder that some hungers were never truly sated."
94.00% Purple prose (modifier overload)
Target: <4% adverbs, <2% -ly adverbs, no adj stacking
wordCount1745
adjectiveStacks1
stackExamples
0"faint, sickly green luminescence."
adverbCount37
adverbRatio0.021203438395415473
lyAdverbCount10
lyAdverbRatio0.0057306590257879654
100.00% Repeated phrase echo
Target: ≤20% sentences with echoes (window: 2)
totalSentences149
echoCount0
echoWords(empty)
100.00% Sentence length variance
Target: CV ≥0.4 for sentence word counts
totalSentences149
mean13.23
std7.08
cv0.535
sampleLengths
09
120
220
311
45
511
621
715
86
918
1012
119
129
1315
1425
155
1619
179
184
1912
205
2115
2218
2312
2419
2511
2612
2711
2811
292
3023
3115
328
332
3416
356
3626
374
3810
3913
4012
414
4213
4310
4423
4518
4611
4716
4820
4910
39.26% Sentence opener variety
Target: ≥60% unique sentence openers
consecutiveRepeats16
diversityRatio0.2550335570469799
totalSentences149
uniqueOpeners38
52.91% Adverb-first sentence starts
Target: ≥3% sentences starting with an adverb
adverbCount2
totalSentences126
matches
0"Dark, viscous wine cascaded over"
1"More hounds emerged from the"
ratio0.016
100.00% Pronoun-first sentence starts
Target: ≤30% sentences starting with a pronoun
pronounCount25
totalSentences126
matches
0"She adjusted the strap of"
1"She didn't look back to"
2"She knew they would."
3"Her voice lacked the weight"
4"It wasn't a tremor, but"
5"It wasn't the fresh, earthy"
6"They crested a small rise"
7"She gasped, clutching at her"
8"She looked at the fountain."
9"She felt small in the"
10"She watched the ink-black hounds"
11"It was a blur of"
12"She pivoted, the leaf-shaped blade"
13"It dissolved into a puddle"
14"She looked into the depths"
15"She looked at the silver"
16"She stepped onto the rim"
17"She plunged her hand into"
18"she hissed, her fingers locking"
19"She saw her father’s face,"
ratio0.198
11.59% Subject-first sentence starts
Target: ≤72% sentences starting with a subject
subjectCount113
totalSentences126
matches
0"Amber light thicket through the"
1"Rory stepped through the ring"
2"The transition hit her like"
3"Rory brushed a stray strand"
4"She adjusted the strap of"
5"The crimson gem throbbed against"
6"Nyx moved with a fluid,"
7"Violet light flickered within the"
8"The whisper scraped against the"
9"Nyx drifted forward, their feet"
10"These blooms defied the season,"
11"Isolde Varga led the way."
12"The Half-Fae walked with a"
13"She didn't look back to"
14"She knew they would."
15"The Grove didn't permit a"
16"Her voice lacked the weight"
17"Rory gripped the hilt of"
18"The Fae-Forged Blade felt like"
19"The gnarled bark of the"
ratio0.897
0.00% Subordinate conjunction sentence starts
Target: ≥2% sentences starting with a subordinating conjunction
subConjCount0
totalSentences126
matches(empty)
ratio0
40.82% Technical jargon density
Target: ≤6% sentences with technical-jargon patterns
analyzedSentences84
technicalSentenceCount12
matches
0"Rory stepped through the ring of standing stones, her boots sinking into moss that felt more like velvet than vegetation."
1"The crimson gem throbbed against her collarbone, a rhythmic heat that matched her own pulse."
2"Nyx drifted forward, their feet never quite depressing the wildflowers that carpeted the forest floor."
3"These blooms defied the season, their petals shimmering with iridescent oils and shifting colors—pulsing from bruised plum to electric gold as the party moved p…"
4"A shimmering distortion hung in the air, a ripple in the fabric of the world that made the trees behind it look like they were underwater."
5"The Shade drifted toward a patch of thorns that bled thick, sweet-smelling resin."
6"Around the fountain, the grass had been replaced by a carpet of succulents that looked like clusters of glass grapes."
7"From the edges of the crystalline forest, the shadows began to detach themselves—not like Nyx, who was a solid entity, but like ink bleeding into water."
8"It was a blur of matted fur and too many eyes, its jaw unhinging to reveal rows of needle-like teeth that glowed with a faint, sickly green luminescence."
9"It dissolved into a puddle of foul-smelling sludge that hissed against the marble."
10"She looked into the depths of the swirling liquid and saw images shifting beneath the surface—grand banquet halls draped in gold, tables groaning under the weig…"
11"Rory fell forward, her knees hitting the marble as the oppressive heat of Dymas retreated, leaving behind only the cold, sharp scent of the Fae Grove."
0.00% Useless dialogue additions
Target: ≤5% dialogue tags with trailing filler fragments
totalTags16
uselessAdditionCount5
matches
0"Nyx clarified, their violet eyes glowing brighter"
1"Rory asked, her voice hushed"
2"Isolde said, her expression unreadable"
3"Rory said, the realization hitting her like a physical blow"
4"she hissed, her fingers locking around the silver chain"
0.00% Dialogue tag variety (said vs. fancy)
Target: ≤10% fancy dialogue tags
totalTags15
fancyCount9
fancyTags
0"Isolde warned (warn)"
1"Rory whispered (whisper)"
2"Nyx clarified (clarify)"
3"Rory hissed (hiss)"
4"The Isolde mentioned (mention)"
5"Nyx whispered (whisper)"
6"Rory shouted (shout)"
7"Nyx called out (call out)"
8"she hissed (hiss)"
dialogueSentences35
tagDensity0.429
leniency0.857
rawRatio0.6
effectiveRatio0.514
71.1474%